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Everything I Know About Love
by martin boogaard (marty0378@yahoo.com)

Rated: R   Genre: Comedy   User Review: ***1/2
Three best friends help each other through relationship problems.


This screenplay is copyrighted to its author. All rights reserved. This screenplay may not be used or reproduced without the express written permission of the author.



INT. MARTY'S KITCHEN - DAY
                                                            
MARTY is standing at an oversized kitchen island pouring a
bowl of cereal. There is a living room two steps lower than
the kitchen in the background. Gary comes into kitchen from
the door leading to the formal dining room and pulls a
bottle of Grey Goose from the freezer. Gary adds a few ice
cubes before returning the bottle and closing the freezer
door. Gary gets a gallon of orange juice from the fridge,
adds a splash to his drink, and returns the juice to the
fridge.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Want some cereal?
                                                            
                       GARY
I decided not to eat cereal
anymore
                                                            
                       MARTY
You're not on some crazy diet or
some shit like that, are ya?
                                                            
                       GARY
      (taking a large
       sip)
I'm just not gonna support these
assholes when all they're doin' is
cheating little kids outta their
prizes.
                                                            
                       MARTY
What are you talkin' about, they
still have prizes.
                                                            
                       GARY
      (grabbing cereal
       box)
No they don't! Look at this, you
have to mail in three coupons, pay
four dollars shipping and
handling, and wait four to six
weeks just for a 25 cent toy.
                                                            

2.

                       MARTY
Why does this bother you?
                                                            
                       GARY
Because they're cheating these
little kids. Cereal's twice as
expensive as it used to be and
they want us to pay extra for the
one thing that made it worth
eating in the first place?
                                                            
                       MARTY
So you refuse to go out of your
way to help the homeless or
starving or anyone with a terminal
disease, but if some spoiled brat
doesn't get his decoder ring, you
take it upon yourself to boycott
the breakfast industry?
                                                            
                       GARY
Yeah, well, I like kids.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Where do you get this shit?
                                                            
                       GARY
T.V. Last night I saw a movie
about aliens coming to Earth to
steal our virgins.
                                                            
                       MARTY
I thought you were smart enough
not to believe in that shit.
                                                            
                       GARY
What, aliens?
                                                            
                       MARTY
No, virgins.
                                                            
                       GARY
Now you don't believe in vigins?
What are you, in denial?
                                                            

3.

                       MARTY
Funny. I just happen to believe
everyone is born a whore and it's
only a matter of time before their
nature catches up with them.
                                                            
                       GARY
And you say you're not bitter.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Look who's talking shit. Do I even
need to say her name?
                                                            
                       GARY
I'm not bitter; I'm in mourning.
                                                            
 
INT. MARTY'S KITCHEN - NIGHT
                                                            
Marty and Gary are drinking when Kurt comes in. A bottle of
Crown Royal is on the table. Kurt is upset and puts ice in a
glass before he sits down at the table.
                                                            
                       KURT
You'll never guess what happened
to me last night.
                                                            
                       GARY
You lost your virginity.
                                                            
                       KURT
Fuck you. Where was I?
                                                            
                       GARY
You had just lost your virginity.
                                                            
                       KURT
Even better. Kim told me she
wanted to see other people.
                                                            
                       MARTY
So what. You were finished with
her anyway.
                                                            

4.

                       KURT
Yeah, but she didn't know that.
Besides, she told me at Madigens.
                                                            
                       GARY
At a bar? That's ruthless man.
                                                            
                       MARTY
What a sick bitch. Now every time
you go there you'll remember this
shit. She ruined the place for
you.
                                                            
                       KURT
I know. And what's this see other
people bullshit? You don't say
that unless you already have
someone very specific in mind,
right?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Not only that but all she's doin'
by making it official is telling
you that she's going to fuck
somebody else and you can't do
shit about it. You have to forget
her.
                                                            
                       KURT
I already did.
                                                            
                       GARY
      (giving Kurt the
       thumbs up)
Good for you. Well done.
                                                            
                       KURT
Yeah, but now it's back to jerking
off.
                                                            
                       GARY
So what? I've been jerking off in
the shower for so long that I get
a hard-on every time it rains.
                                                            
 

5.

INT. MARTY'S KITCHEN - NIGHT
                                                            
Gary is passed out, his head resting on the island, hand
still wrapped around his glass. Marty and Kurt are still
drinking, a bucket of ice and a bottle of Crown Royal
between them.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Forget about her. She wasn't
anything special anyway.
                                                            
                       KURT
That's the point. No matter who
you're with, it sucks to get
dumped. It means that that person,
no matter how imperfect they are,
is telling you,"You're not good
enough for me."
                                                            
Marty pours another inch of Crown over the melting ice in
his and Kurt's glasses.
                                                            
                       KURT
      (leaning back in
       his chair)
Let me tell you my stupid whore
theory. It goes like this: every
girl is either stupid or a whore
and usually both. What you have to
do is find one in the middle of
the pack in both categories.
Unless you get lucky, that's the
best you're gonna do.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Do you ever get lonely? I mean, do
you ever want more? Something
that'll last? Love?
                                                            
                       KURT
Not really. It's not that I'm
running away from it or anything.
But after seeing what you and Gary
went through, I say what's the
rush. I figure I'll know when I'm
in love, until then, I'll have fun
            (MORE)

6.

                       KURT (cont'd)
looking for it.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You should come to Mass with me. I
can introduce you to some nice
Catholic girls.
                                                            
                       KURT
I already know all the Catholic
girls. Biblically. Anyway, Let's
get Gary up and head to the bar.
                                                            
 
INT. MICK'S - NIGHT
                                                            
Mick's is an old New Orleans home converted into a bar.
There is a pool table in the middle of the main room,
flanked by an L-shaped bar that dominates two walls. Two
steps lead to a back room. The decorations and beer signs on
the walls are older than most of the patrons. A poster
advertising a beer and a haircut for ten dollars, Wednesdays
only, has a place of prominence over the table where
customers can help themselves to free hot dogs.

The bar is full of twenty-somethings. Marty leaves the bar
with a pitcher and returns to a table where Gary is sitting
alone.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Where's Kurt?
                                                            
                       GARY
He followed some chick to the back
bar. She's probably ready to have
his kids by now, he's been back
there a whole five minutes.
                                                            
                       MARTY
He sure doesn't waste time.
                                                            
                       GARY
Is it me or can he pick up anyone?
                                                            

7.

                       MARTY
He's got that whole pretty
boy-asshole thing goin' for him...
                                                            
Marty is distracted by a girl coming in the door.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Kellan's here.
                                                            
                       GARY
Great. So much for boy's night
out.
                                                            
Kellan sits next to Marty and gives him a kiss.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Hey, Gary.
                                                            
Gary gives Kellan the guy nod and concentrates on his beer.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You want something to drink?
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Crown and Seven? Thanks.
                                                            
Marty squeezes into a two stool opening to order Kellan's
drink.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
So, got your eyes on anyone
special?
                                                            
                       GARY
Not really. I'm just here to hang
out with my friends and have a few
drinks.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
C'mon, Gary. You're a good-looking
guy. I bet you could hook up with
anyone here if you tried.
                                                            
                       GARY
Drop it, okay?
                                                            

8.

                       KELLAN
I was just trying to-
                                                            
                       GARY
I know. It's nice of you, really.
But I don't need a cheerleader, so
why don't you mind your own
business and worry about kissing
Marty's ass more than you already
do.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
You're such an asshole.
                                                            
                       GARY
Whatever.
                                                            
Gary Gets up and takes an empty stool next to Marty.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Let me guess; Kellan said
something nice and you went into
asshole mode.
                                                            
                       GARY
Sorry. That chick bugs me. She's
always so happy.
                                                            
                       MARTY
That's because I know how to lay
the pipe.
                                                            
                       GARY
Well, tell her I'm sorry.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You should tell her yourself.
                                                            
                       GARY
I'm not that drunk yet.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Just chill, okay?
                                                            
                       GARY
No problem.
                                                            

9.

The bartender slides a rocks glass across the bar to Marty.
Marty takes the glass and heads back to Kellan. A beautiful,
slim brunette slips into Marty's empty stool before anyone
else can.
                                                            
                       GARY
Hi.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Hello.
                                                            
                       GARY
I'm Gary.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Sarah.
                                                            
                       GARY
I know.
                                                            
                       SARAH
You know? How do you know? We've
never met before, Have we?
                                                            
                       GARY
Do you believe in fate, Sarah?
                                                            
                       SARAH
Fate? I'm not sure I understand.
                                                            
                       GARY
Fate. Destiny.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Not really, why?
                                                            
                       GARY
I didn't believe in any of that
stuff either until a few nights
go. Then I had a conversation that
changed my life.
                                                            
                       SARAH
What happened?
                                                            

10.

                       GARY
It was late and I was drunk and
kind of lonely, so I decided to
call one of those phone sex lines.
                                                            
                       SARAH
      (laughing)
And how does that involve me?
                                                            
                       GARY
I'm getting to that. As I said, I
was pretty drunk and I misdialed.
Instead of phone sex, I called Ms.
Cleo.
She told me that I was a great guy
but lonely, which is the truth by
the way, so I decided to give her
a shot. That's when she mentioned
you.
                                                            
                       SARAH
      (skeptically)
She mentioned me by name?
                                                            
                       GARY
Not exactly. She told me that I
would meet the woman I would spend
the rest of my life with this
week. She said that the woman
would be beautiful, smart, and her
name would start with an 'S'.
                                                            
                       SARAH
And you just figured that I was
the one as soon as I sat down,huh?
                                                            
                       GARY
Well, I could tell you were
beautiful just by looking. Then
there was the fact that you chose
to sit by me to order your drink,
so I knew you were smart. Two out
of three, I thought the odds were
pretty good that you were the one.
                                                            

11.

                       SARAH
      (starting to enjoy
       Gary's line)
Okay, so here I am. What else
should I know?
                                                            
                       GARY
Just that we're going to have a
child together soon.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Really?
                                                            
                       GARY
Yep. That's why I figure we should
make plans to see each other
again. We're going to be having
sex and I don't do that with just
anyone.
                                                            
Cut to: Marty and Kellan at the table. Marty's back is to
the bar.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Look at that. Gary's been talking
to that girl since you came back
and she hasn't slapped him yet.
                                                            
Marty turns and looks.
                                                            
                       MARTY
That's good shit, right there.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Why don't you give him your keys
so we can leave?
                                                            
                       MARTY
You sleeping over?
                                                            
                       KELLAN
If it doesn't cramp your style.
                                                            

12.

                       MARTY
I might have to call a few girls
up and reschedule, but I think we
can work something out.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
That's what I like about you,
Marty, you're a dreamer.
                                                            
Marty walks to the back bar and finds Kurt holding court,
entertaining a half dozen girls. Marty unobtrusively leans
in to talk to Kurt.
                                                            
                       MARTY
I'm leaving with Kellan; make sure
superboy gets home okay.
                                                            
                       KURT
He's not going with you?
                                                            
                       MARTY
You'll never believe it, he's
talking to some chick.
                                                            
                       KURT
You're right: I don't believe it.
                                                            
Cut to: Gary and Sarah at a table, empty glasses in front of
them.
                                                            
                       GARY
Let me tell you what I'm trying to
do.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I think I know.
                                                            
                       GARY
I'm trying to stop you from making
the biggest mistake of your life.
                                                            
                       SARAH
And what would that be?
                                                            
                       GARY
Leaving here without me.
                                                            

13.

                       SARAH
I'm only in town for the weekend
and I'm not looking for a
one-night stand or a long-distance
relationship. Sorry.
                                                            
                       GARY
So am I, Now you may never know
true happiness. I wish you luck
though.
                                                            
Sarah heads for the back bar. Gary orders another beer.
                                                            
Cut to: Kurt coming from back bar. Gary is back at a table
and has empty bottles and shot glasses covering the table.
                                                            
                       KURT
I hear you were doing okay, huh?
                                                            
                       GARY
I thought so but she's only in
town for a few day's. Can't get
involved, all that shit.
                                                            
                       KURT
Since when don't tourists put out.
                                                            
                       GARY
Who knows?
                                                            
                       KURT
Fuck it, let's get some Taco Bell.
                                                            
 
INT. GARY'S BEDROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Gary is trying to sleep but hears Marty and Kellan having
sex.
Gary turns on lamp, pulls a bottle of Jim Beam from his
nightstand drawer, and adds some to Taco Bell cup. Gary
silently toasts the wall he shares with Marty before taking
a sip.
                                                            

14.

                       GARY
      (wincing with
       disgust)
Ugh, flat Pepsi.
                                                            
Gary adds more alcohol to cup.
                                                            
 
INT. GARY'S BEDROOM - DAY
                                                            
Gary is sleeping tangled in his blanket, still dressed. A
nearly empty bottle of Jim Beam is sitting next to a Taco
Bell cup on Gary's nightstand. The alarm clock says 3
o'clock p.m. when Kurt walks in.
                                                            
                       KURT
Wake up, sunshine, I've got good
news for you.
                                                            
                       GARY
      (pulling covers
       over his head)
Let me sleep.
                                                            
                       KURT
I guess you don't want to know
about the date you have next
weekend.
                                                            
                       GARY
What the are you talking about?
                                                            
                       KURT
I hooked you up with Jane's
sister.
                                                            
                       GARY
Who the fuck is Jane?
                                                            
                       KURT
The chick I met last night.
                                                            
                       GARY
You called her already?
                                                            

15.

                       KURT
Swingers was a great movie, but
this is real life. The sooner I
call, the sooner I fuck.
                                                            
                       GARY
I'm not going. Call her back and
tell her I can't make it.
                                                            
                       KURT
Yeah. What am I supposed to say?
                                                            
                       GARY
I dunno. Tell her I have a date
with your mom; she should believe
that.
                                                            
                       KURT
No way. Besides, you owe me.
                                                            
                       GARY
For what?
                                                            
                       KURT
That time I let you and Amanda use
my parents bed and y'all broke it.
                                                            
                       GARY
Shit, I'll go. Now get the fuck
out.
                                                            
Kurt walks out with a smile on his face.
                                                            
                       GARY
      (throwing blanket
       off himself)
And she better be hot!
                                                            
 
INT. MARTY'S LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Marty and Kellan are watching a movie when Gary comes down
the two steps from the kitchen.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You nervous about tonight?
                                                            

16.

                       GARY
What's tonight?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Like you're gonna forget your
first date since Amanda.
                                                            
                       GARY
It's not a date.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Then what is it?
                                                            
                       GARY
It's a favor for Kurt. Sure, if I
can slip her a stiff one, I will.
Beyond that, I'm not interested.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Then why'd you shave?
                                                            
Gary can't think of an answer so he leaves the living room.
Marty and Kellan hear the door close when Gary leaves the
house a minute later.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
You shouldn't have teased him
tonight. This is a big night. I'm
sure he's nervous.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Maybe, but I don't think it's too
big a deal. Kurt'll be there to
keep everything smooth, and then
we'll be at the bar when they're
done eating. Safety in numbers.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Just try to be more sensitive.
                                                            
Marty gives Kellan an "are you serious" look. Kellan Laughs.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Forget sensitive, try being quiet.
                                                            
 

17.

EXT. ZEA'S PARKING LOT - NIGHT
                                                            
Gary and Kurt are finishing beers as they get out of Kurt's
car at Zea's.
                                                            
                       GARY
If this chick isn't hot, you're
getting corn-holed at the end of
the night.
                                                            
                       KURT
She's hot, don't worry.
                                                            
                       GARY
Why would I worry? I'm not even
interested.
                                                            
                       KURT
Then why'd you shave?
                                                            
                       GARY
You know what? Fuck you and Marty
both.
                                                            
Kurt laughs as he and Gary walk in restaurant.
                                                            
 
INT. ZEA'S - NIGHT
                                                            
Zea is a small restaurant, tastefully decorated, with tables
taking up the center of the floor and booths running along
the exterior walls. Gary sees Jane in a booth, facing the
entrance. As Gary and Kurt near the booth, Gary sees that
the girl waiting on the blind side of the booth is Sarah.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Any good phone calls lately?
                                                            
                       GARY
Is this some sort of joke?
                                                            
                       KURT
No, this is Jane's sister.
                                                            
                       GARY
This is the bitch from Mick's
                                                            

18.

                       KURT
Let me explain.
                                                            
                       SARAH
      (speaking up)
I'm not a bitch.
                                                            
                       GARY
You flirt with me pretty
convincingly for a good two hours
and then tell me you can't give me
your number because I'm from here,
which seems to be something we
have in common, and you expect me
not to think you're a bitch?
                                                            
                       KURT
Let her explain.
                                                            
Gary nods to Sarah to go ahead and talk.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I'm sorry, really. I talked to you
for two hours because I thought
you were awesome. That's why I'm
here tonight. When Kurt saw me
talking to you and then found out
I was Jane's sister, he set this
whole thing up. As for me blowing
you off, I'm not the kind of girl
that goes home with guys I just
met. Especially when they're as
drunk as you were.
                                                            
                       GARY
So you think I'm awesome?
                                                            
Everyone smiles and the tension disappears. Gary and Kurt
slide into the booth.
                                                            
                       KURT
Since you two already know each
other, Gary, this is Jane and vice
versa.
                                                            

19.

                       GARY
Charmed.
                                                            
                       JANE
Likewise.
                                                            
 
INT. ZEA'S - NIGHT
                                                            
Food is being cleared away from the table.
Everyone is more relaxed as they enjoy some drinks.
                                                            
                       KURT
Gary didn't want to come tonight.
He thought I'd have him
babysitting some fat chick.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I might be a bitch but at least
I'm thin.
                                                            
                       GARY
You have to understand, I sorta
had a blind date once and let's
just say it wasn't love at first
sight.
                                                            
                       JANE
What happened?
                                                            
                       GARY
There was this guy in my P.E.
class in high school and we were
friendly. I used to make fun of
him alot and he decided to get me
back.
So we're sitting in class one day
and he tells me he knows this
chick he thinks I'd like and best
of all, she puts out. Me, being
the romantic I am, immediately
call her up. She tells me she's
about five six, 105 pounds, blond
and blue, and looks like Barbie.
I'm thinking I can't lose when she
tells me she wants to meet me,
right?
            (MORE)

20.

                       GARY (cont'd)
Wrong. My friend Marty drives me
out to LaPlace to meet this girl.
We knock on the door and someone
yells come in. We go in and
there's a little troll on the
sofa. I asked her if Missy was
there, she said she was Missy.
Marty started laughing and walked
out. I looked at her, all five
feet, 180 pounds, and followed
Marty right out the door.
                                                            
                       JANE
You probably hurt her feelings.
                                                            
                       GARY
Think of what she did to me. An
immpresionable young romantic
suddenly hit with the cold hard
fact of womanly deciet. I could've
been scarred for life.
                                                            
                       KURT
Imagine how ugly you'd be then.
                                                            
 
EXT. THE MILL - NIGHT
                                                            
The Mill is a small wooden building nestled in an industrial
park.
The small parking lot is full and cars are parked in parking
lots of adjacent businesses that are closed. Marty's Land
Rover pulls into a spot across the street from the bar.
Marty and Kellan get out and head toward the Mill.
                                                            
 
INT. THE MILL - NIGHT
                                                            
The Mill is all wood on the inside. A long bar runs down the
left hand wall. Two pool tables occupy the empty space at
the back of the building. The walls are decorated in an
eclectic, kitschy style. Marty, Kellan, Kurt, and Jane are
at a table. Gary and Sarah are at the bar ordering drinks.
                                                            

21.

                       MARTY
      (to Kurt)
So he really likes her, huh?
                                                            
                       KURT
Pretty amazing, isn't it?
                                                            
                       JANE
What's so amazing about someone
liking my sister?
                                                            
                       KELLAN
The most extensive conversation
Gary's had with a female in the
six months I've known him was when
he told the drive thru girl at
Wendy's that she was too ugly to
touch his food.
                                                            
                       JANE
He doesn't even talk to his mom?
                                                            
                       KURT
She died when he was in High
School.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
      (to Jane)
Why don't y'all come over to the
house tomorrow? We can barbque or
something.
                                                            
                       JANE
That sounds like fun.
                                                            
                       MARTY
By all means; I guess we're
celebrating our moving in
together.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Don't be an asshole, Marty.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Sorry, dear. Sometimes I can't
help myself.
                                                            

22.

                       KELLAN
I know, but I love you anyway.
                                                            
 
INT. THE MORNING CALL - NIGHT
                                                            
The morning call is a 24 hour beignet and coffee shop. It is
a small place with small tables crammed together tightly.
Gary and Sarah are still out together, long after everyone
else has gone home. They are enjoying beignets and hot
chocolate. The shop is about half empty.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I'm telling you, The New Kids On
The Block were good dancers.
                                                            
                       GARY
Just my luck. I finally meet a
nice girl and our budding romance
is destroyed by a debate on boy
bands. Face it, they sucked.
                                                            
                       SARAH
If they sucked so much, how did
they manage to earn more than a
billion dollars?
                                                            
                       GARY
The music, I can't explain. The
reason everyone thought they were
good dancers is because they were
synchronized. Anybody can look
good doing anything if he's got
five guys backing him up.
Look, I have no dancing ability at
all so I made up my own dance
called the Honkey Shuffle. I look
absolutely ridiculous doing this
dance but I promise you that if I
had five guys backing me up, I
could dig in my ass and look good
doing it.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Show me.
                                                            

23.

                       GARY
What, dig in my ass?
                                                            
                       SARAH
No, stupid, do the honkey shuffle.
                                                            
                       GARY
Here, now?
                                                            
                       SARAH
Unless you're too much of a pussy.
                                                            
Gary gets up and does the honkey shuffle, the whitest, most
akward dance ever, to bafflement of other customers.
                                                            
                       SARAH
You're right, you looked like an
idiot.
                                                            
                       GARY
You shouldn't have doubted me; I
know a lot about dancing.
                                                            
                       SARAH
It shows.
                                                            
 
EXT. COLONIAL CLUB GOLF COURSE - NIGHT
                                                            
Gary and Sarah are walking hand in hand down the green,
enjoying the deserted, immaculately landscaped privacy of a
nighttime golf course.
                                                            
                       SARAH
This is your favorite place to
come and relax, huh?
                                                            
                       GARY
Yeah. Me and a friend used to come
here almost every night when we
were in high school.
                                                            
                       SARAH
What happened to your friend?
                                                            

24.

                       GARY
I wish I knew. We just lost touch.
                                                            
                       SARAH
What are your parents like?
                                                            
                       GARY
They died.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I'm sorry.
                                                            
                       GARY
Don't be, it was a long time ago.
Wanna see the lovers' tree?
                                                            
                       SARAH
And what exactly is that?
                                                            
                       GARY
It's a place where young lovers
are supposed to go to declare
their undying love for one
another.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Then what, they live happily ever
after?
                                                            
                       GARY
Of course not; but it never fails
to get a guy laid.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Oh, really?
                                                            
                       GARY
Really. I think we should check
that out.
                                                            
 
INT. MONTAGE - DAY
                                                            
Gary and Sarah, alone together at the French Market,
shopping. At the Aquarium of the Americas. At the Audubon
Zoo. Picnicking under the giant oak tree at The Fly. Hanging

25.

out with Kurt and Jane at bars. Having dinner parties at
Marty's house with the whole group.
                                                            
 
INT. THE MILL - NIGHT
                                                            
All three couples are sitting at a table, drinking and
talking.
Sarah leans over and whispers in Gary's ear.
                                                            
                       GARY
      (standing up)
I've just been informed that I've
had enough to drink.
                                                            
                       SARAH
He's no good to me unconscious.
                                                            
Gary formally shakes Kurt and Marty's hands.
                                                            
                       GARY
Gentlemen, duty calls.
                                                            
Gary and Sarah leave.
                                                            
                       KURT
It's about time she gives it up.
                                                            
                       JANE
That's my sister, asshole.
                                                            
                       KURT
What I meant was, uh, you see,
when two people really love each
other...
                                                            
                       JANE
      (laughing)
Shut up.
                                                            
 
INT. GARY'S BEDROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Sarah pulls the blanket from over her and Gary's heads as
they both try to catch their breath.
                                                            

26.

                       SARAH
Where'd you learn that?
                                                            
                       GARY
Animal planet.
                                                            
 
INT. BALCONY BAR - DAY
                                                            
Gary and Kurt are sitting on on open-air second floor
balcony overlooking Magazine Street, with its collection of
upscale boutique shops, rundown neighborhood bars, and
laid-back New Orleans attitude. Gary and Kurt are looking at
beer menus, trying to decide what to drink.
                                                            
                       KURT
What are you having?
                                                            
                       GARY
I don't know, everything looks
good.
                                                            
                       KURT
Well, it's not too often you get
any. Let's try and drink one of
everything.
                                                            
Kurt gets up and walks through the open french doors to the
bar, gets their beer, and comes back to the table without
leaving Gary's sight.
                                                            
                       GARY
      (toasting)
May the beer be cheap and the
women plentiful.
                                                            
                       KURT
      (returning toast)
And if not, may the women be cheap
and the beer plentiful.
                                                            
Gary and Kurt both take long pulls on their beers.
                                                            
                       GARY
God, I feel like a new man.
                                                            

27.

                       KURT
I've been telling you that jerking
off was no substitute for the real
thing.
                                                            
                       GARY
Like I couldn't tell the
difference. I don't know what was
wrong with me. Half the time all I
want is to be back with Amanda.
The rest of the time I hate her. I
hate myself for hating her. It's
all messed up in my head...
                                                            
                       KURT
I'll tell you the same thing I
told Marty. If all you dwell on
are the bad things that have
happened to you in the past, you
aren't going too have too many
good things happen to you in the
present.
                                                            
                       GARY
So you think Marty's not sitting
there, thinking of what might have
been?
                                                            
                       KURT
Sure he is. He just doesn't let it
stop him from leading a normal
life.
                                                            
                       GARY
Point taken.
                                                            
                       KURT
Look, you got a raw deal with your
family. You didn't let that stop
you from doing everything you
could to make yourself happy.
Amanda screws you over and all the
sudden you lay around feeling
sorry for yourself. Forget that. I
mean, how happy are you right now?
You stop feeling sorry for
yourself, get laid, maybe with
            (MORE)

28.

                       KURT (cont'd)
someone who'll stick around
awhile, everything's better.
                                                            
                       GARY
After the performance I gave last
night, you can believe Sarah's
gonna stick around for quite a
while.
                                                            
                       KURT
      (shaking his head)
Some girls are so easy to impress.
                                                            
 
EXT. SARAH'S CAR - DAY
                                                            
Sarah is stuck at a red light at the corner of Airline and
Central.Sarah sees Kurt's car pull up on the side of the
Sugarbowl Motel, a trashy place known for renting rooms to
prostitutes. Gary gets out of the passenger side door, leans
in to talk to Kurt, then stands, laughing, and shuts the
door. Gary walks around to the front of the building and
disappears into the courtyard. Sarah sits stunned, staring
at the motel. A honk from the car behind her gets Sarah's
attention and she realizes the light is green. Sarah drives
through the intersection, tears in her eyes.
Gary goes into motel with a hooker.
                                                            
 
INT. MARTY'S LIVING ROOM - DAY
                                                            
Marty and Sarah are sitting at opposite ends of the sofa,
talking, when Gary comes in. Gary looks surprised to see
Sarah.
                                                            
                       GARY
Hey. Sarah. I didn't see your car
outside.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I'm parked on the side. Where's
Kurt, I thought y'all were out
drinking.
                                                            

29.

                       GARY
He dropped me off at the cemetery.
We got to talking and I realized
I hadn't been in a while.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Well, I'm glad you're here. I
don't know how long I could've
resisted Marty's charms.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You wouldn't have lasted another
five minutes.
                                                            
                       SARAH
      (getting up)
Who could?
                                                            
Sarah hugs Gary and whispers in his ear.
                                                            
                       SARAH
      (whispering)
Take a ride with me, I have a
surprise for you?
                                                            
                       GARY
      (ushering Sarah
       out the room)
I'll be back later.
                                                            
                       MARTY
      (picking up a book)
Have fun.
                                                            
 
EXT. SARAH'S CAR - DAY
                                                            
Sarah is driving down Carrolton Avenue, past gas stations,
restaurants, fast food places, and side streets of
dilapidated shotgun houses. As Sarah turns onto the
interstate, Gary puts his hand on Sarah's shoulder, which
she shrugs off.
                                                            
                       GARY
Is something wrong?
                                                            

30.

                       SARAH
Why would anything be wrong?
                                                            
                       GARY
I don't know. You seem upset.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Not at all.
                                                            
                       GARY
Well, what's the surprise?
                                                            
                       SARAH
      (yelling and
       crying)
I saw you with that whore on
Airline. Surprise! Was I just so
bad last night that you needed to
go out and get yourself a pro?
                                                            
                       GARY
You don't know what you're talking
about.
                                                            
                       SARAH
So I'm stupid and bad in bed, huh?
                                                            
                       GARY
You're not bad in bed.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Just stupid right?
                                                            
Sarah pulls on shoulder of I-10.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Get out. Get out and don't ever
call me again!
                                                            
Gary gets out and Sarah pulls off before the door is all the
way closed.
Gary watches her go.
                                                            
                       GARY
      (screaming)
Fuck!
                                                            
 

31.

INT. SARAH AND JANE'S APARTMENT - DAY
                                                            
Sarah and Jane are sitting on the sofa, Sarah with her head
buried in Jane's shoulder. Sarah is still crying.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I just don't get it. We dated for
six weeks and he never put any
pressure on me to sleep with him.
Then the day after we spend our
first night together, he gets a
hooker? It just doesn't make any
sense. Do you think there might be
another reason that he was there?
                                                            
                       JANE
I thought Gary was a good guy,
too, sweetie. But I can't think of
one other reason for a guy to go
to the Sugarbowl. I'm so sorry.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Why does this keep happening to
me? Why can't I meet a good guy?
What's wrong with me?
                                                            
                       JANE
There is nothing wrong with you,
Sarah. You're smart, beautiful,
talented... you can eat anything
you want without gaining a pound.
                                                            
Sarah gives Jane a sad but appreciative smile through her
tears.
                                                            
                       JANE
If Gary thinks there's nothing
wrong with paying crackheads for
sex, he's the one with the
problem, not you
                                                            
                       SARAH
What about Kurt?
                                                            

32.

                       JANE
You better believe I'm going to
talk to him. If Gary has a reason
for Kurt dropping him off there,
I'll find out. If he doesn't,
they're both gonna get it from me.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I'm sorry to cause you and Kurt
problems.
                                                            
                       JANE
Don't worry about. We're just
having some fun in bed. It's not
anything that's gonna last anyway.
Now come on, lets go to Baskin
Robbins. My treat, even if I'm the
one that gets a fat ass.
                                                            
 
INT. MARTY'S KITCHEN - NIGHT
                                                            
Gary and Marty are sitting at the kitchen island drinking.
The island is covered in empty beer bottles.
                                                            
                       GARY
You see why I don't believe in
God?
                                                            
                       MARTY
That's where you misunderstand the
situation. God exists, but you
shouldn't think that His purpose
is to stop you from getting a
steady piece of ass. This is more
likely just some more of that good
luck you can't seem to avoid.
                                                            
                       GARY
Being born to rich and caring
parents, that good luck, right?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Exactly.
                                                            
Gary and Marty laugh at that as Kurt walks into the kitchen.
                                                            

33.

                       KURT
      (pissed off)
What the fuck are you laughing
about?
                                                            
                       GARY
What are you so pissed about?
                                                            
                       KURT
Sarah's devastated and Jane just
spent an hour chewing my ass up
and down because I dropped you off
at the Sugarbowl and couldn't give
her an innocent reason why you'd
be there.
                                                            
                       GARY
First of all, who gives a shit
about Jane? Once you're tired of
her, you aren't gonna talk to her
anymore. And if Sarah thinks that
I was with a hooker, then fuck her
too.
                                                            
Kurt sits in the stool next to Gary's so that they are
facing each other.
                                                            
                       KURT
      (resigned)
That's it? You're gonna throw away
the only thing that's made your
drunk ass happy in I don't know
how long because you don't want to
admit the junkie whore you went to
visit is your mom?
                                                            
Gary's face contorts with anger and he kicks Kurt's stool
over, sending Kurt tumbling to the floor. Before Kurt has a
chance to get up, Gary storms out of the house.
                                                            
                       MARTY
That was tactful.
                                                            
                       KURT
      (getting up)
I guess calling his mom a junkie
whore wasn't the best thing to
            (MORE)

34.

                       KURT (cont'd)
say.
                                                            
                       MARTY
No, but it was the most accurate.
                                                            
 
INT. THE MILL - NIGHT
                                                            
Gary takes a seat at the empty bar. Other than Chris, the
owner, no one else is in the bar. Chris starts pouring an
Abita Amber draft as soon as Gary sits down.
                                                            
                       CHRIS
      (pouring a drink)
Haven't seen you in a couple of
weeks.
                                                            
                       GARY
Haven't been going out too much.
                                                            
                       CHRIS
Kurt and Marty coming or you
drinking by yourself?
                                                            
                       GARY
I'm flying solo tonight. Female
problems, you know?
                                                            
                       CHRIS
I hear that, if it wasn't for
pussy there'd be a price on their
heads.
                                                            
                       GARY
I'll drink to that.
                                                            
                       CHRIS
Wanna talk about it?
                                                            
                       GARY
Not particularly, that's why I'm
here.
                                                            
                       CHRIS
Fair enough.
                                                            

35.

                       GARY
You better start me a tab, I plan
on being here until I can't
remember her name.
                                                            
                       CHRIS
I been there, brother.
                                                            
Marty comes in the door and sits next to Gary. Chris shakes
Marty's hand and pours a second Abita.
                                                            
                       CHRIS
Shit, if y'all are both here to do
some serious drinking, I'll
probably be able to take my cruise
after tonight.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Just keep 'em coming and we'll see
how close you are at closing time.
                                                            
Chris nods and then goes to the other end of the bar to take
a phone call.
                                                            
                       GARY
I didn't think you'd find me this
fast.
                                                            
                       MARTY
If you were trying to hide, coming
to the Mill was probably a
mistake. Besides, we followed you.
                                                            
                       GARY
Where's Kurt?
                                                            
                       MARTY
In the car. We thought I should
make sure you're calm before we
stick you with the tab we're about
to run up.
                                                            
                       GARY
I'll go get him.
                                                            

36.

Gary gets up, taking both his and Marty's beers with him,
and goes outside.
                                                            
 
EXT. THE MILL - NIGHT
                                                            
Kurt is leaning on Marty's SUV when Gary comes outside
carrying two mostly filled Abita drafts. Gary hands one to
Kurt.
                                                            
                       GARY
I'm sorry, man. Must be the Irish
temper.
                                                            
                       KURT
I should've known better than to
say anything about your mom. I
know how sensitive you Micks are
about that shit.
                                                            
                       GARY
Are we cool?
                                                            
                       KURT
Me, yeah. I'm not so sure about
you.
                                                            
                       GARY
You know what I mean, asshole.
                                                            
                       KURT
We're cool, just don't try that
shit again or I'll bend you over
and stuff you so full of German
that your kids'll smell like
sauerkraut.
                                                            
                       GARY
      (laughing)
You're killing me, smalls.
                                                            
 
INT. THE MILL - NIGHT
                                                            
Gary and Kurt come into the bar together. Marty has moved to
a table and has a bottle of Crown, a bucket of ice, and

37.

three rocks glasses on the table. Chris is still on the
phone and just waves to Kurt as he passes. Gary and Kurt
take seats at the table.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You girls finished blowing each
other?
                                                            
                       KURT
Yep, it's your turn.
                                                            
                       MARTY
After another drink or two.
                                                            
                       KURT
      (to Gary)
So, what are you gonna tell Sarah?
                                                            
                       GARY
Not a damn thing, and y'all are
going to do the same thing.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Just tell her the damn truth.
                                                            
                       GARY
I don't want her sympathy.
                                                            
                       KURT
It's not just about not wanting
her to feel sorry for you. You
realize that you're about to break
the heart of the only person who's
made you happy since Amanda left?
                                                            
                       GARY
I don't care. If Sarah really
thinks I'd fuck someone else the
day after we first slept together,
then she never really started to
know me.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Are you sure? You seem pretty
angry. Maybe you should think
about this after you calm down.
                                                            

38.

                       KURT
Marty's right. You're mad because
she caught you in a lie. An
understandable lie, at that. Would
you be this mad if she'd just
asked you what you were doing?
                                                            
                       GARY
Maybe not, but it is what it is.
                                                            
                       KURT
You know this means nothing but
jerking off in your future, right?
                                                            
                       GARY
It'll be just like old times.
                                                            
 
INT. THREE BROTHERS LOUNGE - NIGHT
                                                            
MONTAGE
                                                            
Three Brothers lounge is a small, dark, dirty bar. The
ceiling is low, visibility is provided by a string of
Christmas light strung up behind the bar. The bartender is
an old woman who looks like she couldn't pass muster in a
trailer park. The only other patrons don't look like they
speak English. Gary is drinking alone. The people around
Gary move around and change, but Gary drinking alone stays
constant.
                                                            
 
INT. MARTY'S LIVING ROOM - DAY
                                                            
ONE WEEK LATER
                                                            
Marty and Kellan are laying on the sofa.
Marty's giving her a foot massage while she reads a novel.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
      (closing book)
I ran into Jane yesterday.
                                                            
                       MARTY
And?
                                                            

39.

                       KELLAN
Did you know Gary was having sex
with prostitutes?
                                                            
                       MARTY
He wasn't.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Sarah saw him.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Sarah saw him visiting his mother.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
      (sitting up)
I thought his mom was dead.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Not even close.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Why does he tell everyone that
she's dead?
                                                            
                       MARTY
She reminds him of things he'd
rather forget. And, although he
won't say it, I think he kind of
hates her.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
If he hates her enough to tell
everybody she's dead, why does he
visit her?
                                                            
                       MARTY
I dunno. Because she's the only
relative he has, I guess.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
What'd she do to him?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Gary's mom used to be the perfect
upper middle class mom. June
Cleaver. Then, when we were
thirteen, Gary's dad and little
            (MORE)

40.

                       MARTY (cont'd)
brother died in a car accident.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
I didn't even know Gary had a
brother.
                                                            
                       MARTY
It's not something he likes to
talk about.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
So how'd his mom go from June
Cleaver to selling herself out of
the Sugarbowl?
                                                            
                       MARTY
She started drinking. Then she
stopped doing anything but. By the
time we freshman, she had blown
the life insurance money and had
to sell the house. They moved into
a decent apartment and she kept on
drinking. Then the money from the
house ran out.
She wasn't working, couldn't work.
The only check they had coming in
was Gary's Social Security check.
They moved into a shitty
apartment. Half way through our
senior year, Gary turned eighteen
and the checks stopped coming. His
mom kicked him out and moved to
the Sugarbowl; started charging
money for what she used to give up
for a few drinks.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Gary moved in with you?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Kurt. His mom's a saint. My Dad
was an asshole.
                                                            

41.

                       KELLAN
Wow. Now I know why you said Gary
had more reason to feel sorry for
himself than anyone I know.
                                                            
                       MARTY
How many times have I told you I'm
always right? I don't know why you
can't just accept that.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Why don't you just tell Sarah and
save them both a couple months of
misery?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Because Gary asked me not to.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
That's retarded. I promise you
that if you get him and Sarah back
together, he'll forgive you
anything.
                                                            
                       MARTY
I have a few things I refuse to
do, and getting in the middle of
someones relationship is one of
them.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
He's not gonna call her and he's
just gonna go back to being a huge
asshole.
                                                            
                       MARTY
He's a big boy, Kellan. I can't
tell him what to do.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
If you're not gonna do something,
I will.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Why are you getting in the middle
of this?
                                                            

42.

                       KELLAN
We've been dating for what, six
months? Until Gary started dating
Sarah, he refused to even hold a
civil conversation with me. Since
he's been with her I can actually
see the great person you've been
telling me about all this time.
                                                            
                       MARTY
If you wanna get into this, I'm
not gonna stop you, but don't be
surprised if Gary isn't thrilled.
                                                            
 
INT. THREE BROTHERS LOUNGE - NIGHT
                                                            
Gary is the only person in the bar other than the bartender.
Gary is hunched over his drink and doesn't look up as the
door opens and Sarah comes in. Sarah sits on the stool next
to Gary's, finally causing him to look up.
                                                            
                       GARY
What's a girl like you doing in a
nice place like this?
                                                            
                       SARAH
You can stop trying to be funny
now.
                                                            
                       GARY
If you're not here for the
entertainment, what do you want? I
seem to remember something about
never wanting to see my lying ass
again.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I found out you're a better class
of liar than I thought. I know
about your mom.
                                                            
                       GARY
Marty or Kurt?
                                                            

43.

                       SARAH
Kellan
                                                            
                       GARY
I can't believe Marty told her.
It's none of her business.
                                                            
                       SARAH
It is her business. She's in love
with your best friend and doesn't
want to put up with your
self-pitying ass. She seems to
think I'm a good influence on you.
                                                            
                       GARY
What do you think?
                                                            
                       SARAH
I think if you apologize to me, I
might let you take me to dinner.
                                                            
                       GARY
Why should I apologize, I didn't
do anything wrong.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I hope you don't believe that. You
lied to me from the first night we
met and then got mad at me for
jumping to some very reasonable
conclusions when I saw what I saw.
You fucked up, buddy, and you're
gonna have to kiss a little ass if
you want to leave here with me.
                                                            
                       GARY
So my options are to stay here
alone or leave with you and kiss
your ass?
                                                            
                       SARAH
That's about it.
                                                            
                       GARY
Where do you want to eat?
                                                            

44.

                       SARAH
One more thing.
                                                            
                       GARY
What?
                                                            
                       SARAH
I don't think you should be mad at
Marty for saying anything, but
that's between y'all. I absolutely
forbid you to say anything to
Kellan though.
                                                            
                       GARY
You forbid me?
                                                            
                       SARAH
I can always leave you here.
                                                            
                       GARY
Women.
                                                            
                       SARAH
You know you love us.
                                                            
                       GARY
Only you.
                                                            
 
INT. FAT HARRY'S - DAY
                                                            
TWO YEARS LATER
                                                            
Fat Harry's is a spacious bar with a long boot-shaped bar
along one wall, booths along the other and picnic tables
providing seating in the center. Gary, Kurt, and Marty are
sitting at a table having lunch. Through the open doors,
life passes on St. Charles Avenue.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Two years, huh? I can't believe
she put up with you that long.
                                                            

45.

                       KURT
God bless women who don't know any
better.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You didn't get her another
subscription to Beer across
America, did you?
                                                            
                       KURT
That was a stroke of genius. I
wish I had thought of that.
                                                            
                       GARY
Your idea of buying a present for
a girl is paying for the condoms.
I have class on the other hand.
                                                            
                       KURT
Oh yeah, what'd you get her this
year?
                                                            
Gary pulls a ring case from his pocket, opens it and puts it
on the table.
                                                            
                       KURT
What the fuck is that?
                                                            
                       MARTY
I believe it's commonly referred
to as a ring, Einstein.
                                                            
                       KURT
I know it's a ring, but is it THE
ring?
                                                            
                       GARY
It's the ring. I'm not getting any
younger you know.
                                                            
                       KURT
Neither am I and I'm not getting
married anytime soon.
                                                            
                       GARY
Yeah, but you don't like women.
                                                            

46.

                       KURT
What are you talking about, I love
women.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You love pussy, there's a
difference.
                                                            
                       KURT
Whatever. A toast: May you and
Sarah be as happy as Wally and
June Cleaver.
                                                            
                       GARY
Marty, explain to boy wonder what
was wrong with his toast while I
secure us some more provisions.
                                                            
Gary goes to the bar for another pitcher of beer.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Wally was June's son, dick.
                                                            
                       KURT
You know what I mean. Like I watch
Leave it to Beaver.
                                                            
                       MARTY
And here I thought you knew
everything there was to know about
beaver.
                                                            
Kurt and Marty drain what's left of their glasses.
                                                            
                       KURT
I'm gonna miss the crazy bastard,
that's for sure.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You make it sound like he's gonna
die.
                                                            
                       KURT
You ever meet a married man that
didn't?
                                                            
 

47.

EXT. FAT HARRY'S - DAY
                                                            
Gary, Kurt, and Marty are standing on the little front patio
area in front of Fat Harry's, finishing their conversation.
A streetcar slowly ambles past, overtaking joggers, college
kids, and dog walkers. Marty still has a glass of beer.
                                                            
                       KURT
You nervous?
                                                            
                       GARY
Not really. We're having dinner
after work and she'll have a few
drinks in her before I ask.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You're proposing the same way Kurt
gets laid; get them liquored up
and take advantage of them before
they know what's going on.
                                                            
                       GARY
If it works for him...
                                                            
                       KURT
Well, good luck.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Yeah, man, good luck.
                                                            
                       GARY
Thanks.
                                                            
Gary shakes Kurt and Marty's hands and leaves.
                                                            
                       KURT
What're you doing tonight?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Cooking dinner for Kellan. A
little romance, maybe.
                                                            
                       KURT
Well, I gotta get back to work,
myself. Unlike some of us, I'm not
so rich I can drink all day.
                                                            

48.

                       MARTY
Life at daddy's company can't be
too bad, you just took a two hour
liquid lunch.
                                                            
                       KURT
And got paid for it.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Call me when you get off, I think
I can squeeze in a few more drinks
before dinner.
                                                            
                       KURT
Will do.
                                                            
Marty walks back into Fat Harry's as Kurt leaves.
                                                            
 
INT. HARAHAN FIRE STATION - DAY
                                                            
The Harahan Fire is a small building, half of which is taken
up by two giant bay doors. The bay doors are open, the
trucks facing Hickory Avenue, for anyone to enter. Gary is
playing cards with three other firemen in a small living
area next to the trucks.
He doesn't see Amanda approach.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
      (hesitantly)
Gary?
                                                            
Gary turns around quickly.
He is obviously shocked speechless.
                                                            
                       GARY
Amanda?
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Can I talk to you?
                                                            
Gary folds his hand and gets up from table.
He and Amanda walk away from table as game starts over.
                                                            

49.

                       AMANDA
      (trying to smile)
Long time, no see, huh?
                                                            
                       GARY
You could say that.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
How have you been?
                                                            
                       GARY
Living, and you?
                                                            
                       AMANDA
I've been okay; finished law
school.
                                                            
                       GARY
How long you been back?
                                                            
                       AMANDA
A few days.
                                                            
Gary is silent for an uncomfortable period of time.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
So, is it everything you wanted?
                                                            
                       GARY
Huh?
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Being a fireman.
                                                            
                       GARY
Yeah, yeah, it's great.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
That's good.
                                                            
Gary is silent again until Amanda has to speak.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Okay. I just wanted to say hello.
I'll talk to you later, Gary.
                                                            

50.

                       GARY
Yeah.
                                                            
Amanda walks away slowly, looking back.
Gary looks after her, dumbfounded.
                                                            
 
EXT. GARY AND SARAH'S PATIO - DAY
                                                            
Gary is sitting on a lawn chair, on a small fenced in patio,
drinking and staring at his fence, which is the only scenery
in three directions. Kurt comes from inside the apartment
with a beer and sits next to Gary.
                                                            
                       KURT
You shouldn't leave your front
door unlocked.
                                                            
                       GARY
      (monotone)
Yeah, any asshole off the street
could walk right in.
                                                            
                       KURT
I stole a beer.
                                                            
                       GARY
Bastard.
                                                            
                       KURT
What's wrong? Sarah didn't say no,
did she?
                                                            
                       GARY
I didn't ask.
                                                            
                       KURT
Pussied out, huh?
                                                            
                       GARY
I saw Amanda yesterday.
                                                            
                       KURT
      (shocked)
Where?
                                                            

51.

                       GARY
At the station. She came in after
lunch.
                                                            
                       KURT
Looking for you?
                                                            
                       GARY
Yup.
                                                            
                       KURT
What'd you do with the ring?
                                                            
                       GARY
I still have it. I left work early
and picked up something else. I'm
so fucked.
                                                            
                       KURT
I agree. It can't be a good sign
when the girl that broke your
heart shows up the same day you're
gonna propose to your new
girlfriend.
                                                            
                       GARY
Aren't you just a ray of optimism.
                                                            
 
EXT. O'HENRY'S - DAY
                                                            
Gary and Amanda are sitting at an outside table, on a
balcony overlooking Carrolton Avenue. Oak trees line the
median, nice houses populate the busy street. Gary and
Amanda are pushing their food around, but not doing much
eating.
                                                            
                       GARY
So what happened?
                                                            
                       AMANDA
When?
                                                            
                       GARY
On a dark and stormy night ten
years ago. When do you think?
                                                            

52.

                       AMANDA
I freaked. We had just finished
our senior year and you were on
your little boys only camping trip
and I found the engagement ring
you bought. I thought, "Oh God,
I've been in a relationship for
over five years and I'm only 22
years old." I knew that I wouldn't
be able to say no, but I wasn't
sure if I wanted to say yes. I
needed time to think.
                                                            
                       GARY
Three years? Without one word?
Just a shitty little note saying
you were sorry, and that you'd
call me when you knew what you
wanted.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
I never meant to do that to you,
Gary. I just needed space. And
then every day it just got harder
to think of facing you after what
I'd done.
                                                            
                       GARY
I was so worried about you.
Wondering what was wrong, where
you were, if I had done something
wrong. And, of course, your
parents were no help.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
They never did like you, did they?
                                                            
                       GARY
Where'd you go?
                                                            
                       AMANDA
California. Stanford.
                                                            
Gary shakes his head in disbelief.
                                                            

53.

                       GARY
You have any boyfriends out there?
                                                            
                       AMANDA
A few.
                                                            
                       GARY
Any serious?
                                                            
                       AMANDA
One, but we wanted different
things in the end.
                                                            
                       GARY
Like what?
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Monogamy. What about you, any
girlfriends?
                                                            
                       GARY
Not for over a year, I kept
waiting for you to come back. I
just had my two year anniversary
last week.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Two years, huh? It feels weird
saying this, but congratulations.
                                                            
                       GARY
So what made you come back now?
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Honestly?
                                                            
                       GARY
No. Lie to me and then kick me in
the nuts.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
I came back to work in my dad's
firm. I wasn't even sure I was
gonna see you.
                                                            

54.

                       GARY
There's an ego boost.
                                                            
 
EXT. PARKING LOT - DAY
                                                            
The parking lot is across the street from O'Henry's and also
serves a strip mall. Amanda is sitting in her BMW, talking
with Gary through rolled down window.
                                                            
                       GARY
I had a good time.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
You sound surprised.
                                                            
                       GARY
I just always thought about seeing
you again and imagined it being a
little more awkward. You know, me
strangling you to death or
something like that.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Since that didn't happen, can I
assume we can do this again?
                                                            
                       GARY
You know where to find me.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Who knows, maybe you can introduce
me to Sarah one day.
                                                            
                       GARY
We'll have to see about that one.
                                                            
 
INT. GARY AND SARAH'S APT. - DAY
                                                            
Gary and Sarah's apartment is a small two bedroom,
tastefully decorated with a woman's touch. Framed posters
from various South Louisiana festivals take up much of the
wall space, along with photos detailing Gary and Sarah's two
happy years together. Gary and Sarah are watching TV, but
Gary is off in dreamland, a subtle smile on his face.
                                                            

55.

                       SARAH
What're you smiling about?
                                                            
                       GARY
I'm not smiling.
                                                            
                       SARAH
You've been smiling like a retard
since you got home from work. Are
you cheating on me?
                                                            
                       GARY
You got me. I've been fucking one
of the ladies from that nursing
home by Winn Dixie. If I had known
senior citizens could be so much
fun, I'd have left you a long time
ago.
                                                            
                       SARAH
What does she have that I don't?
                                                            
                       GARY
She has sex games you couldn't
possibly compete with.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Like what?
                                                            
                       GARY
Besides playing suck the elastic
titty and lick the varicose vein,
nothing taste quite like pussy
that's been aged seventy years in
white cotton panties.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Is that what I tasted on your
breath? I thought you just had bad
Chinese again.
                                                            
 
INT. HARAHAN GYM - DAY
                                                            
Gary, Marty, and Kurt are playing basketball with three
other guys on one half of the court. Another half court game

56.

is taking place across the floor. A few random guys are
sitting in the bleachers waiting to jump into the next game.
Gary's cell phone rings and he stops the game to run over to
the bleachers to answer it, much to the chagrin of everyone
else. After a few seconds of private conversation, Gary
hangs up.
                                                            
                       GARY
I gotta go.
                                                            
                       KURT
Where? We're not finished.
                                                            
                       GARY
I got a date with your sister.
She's an animal in bed.
                                                            
                       KURT
Broke her in good, didn't I?
                                                            
Gary leaves laughing at Kurt's joke.
                                                            
                       KURT
      (to Marty)
You believe this shit?
                                                            
                       MARTY
It is what it is. Get somebody to
take his place.
                                                            
Kurt looks around and points to someone in the bleachers.
                                                            
                       KURT
      (to player)
Hey! Get over here and take my
friend's spot.
                                                            
 
INT. MONTAGE - DAY
                                                            
Gary and Amanda hanging out at her apartment and having
dinner in various restaurants.
                                                            
 

57.

INT. MARTY'S LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Marty and Kellan are cuddled up on Marty's sofa when they
hear the front door open. Marty starts to get up to check
who it is when Jennifer, his twin sister, walks through
kitchen door and stops by the kitchen island.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
Hey bitch, whatcha doin'?
                                                            
Marty and Kellan get up and hug her.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You're a week early.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
I thought I'd surprise you. Hey,
Kellan.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Hey, Jenn.
                                                            
                       MARTY
So, what do you want to do?
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
      (To Marty)
Can you pay for the cab, I don't
have any cash on me. And why don't
you get my luggage and bring it
upstairs for me? I need a drink.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Pay for your cab and carry your
luggage upstairs? You must think
you checked into a hotel.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
That's right, the one with the
best service in town. Now go; the
meter's running.
                                                            
Marty, smiling, goes for the luggage. Kellan and Jennifer
take the two steps down to the wet bar.
                                                            
 

58.

INT. MARTY'S LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Jennifer makes herself a drink at the wet bar as Kellan sits
back down on the couch. Jennifer finishes mixing her drink
and takes a seat next to Kellan, patting her on the leg.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
How's things been down here? I
miss anything good?
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Not too much. Sarah has Gary under
control. Kurt still thinks he's
God's gift to women, and too many
of them still seem to agree. And
Marty; well, Marty doesn't ever
change, does he?
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
No. Marty never changes.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
How've you been?
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
Busy. Between my residency and my
dad trying to tell me how to live
my life, I never have any peace
and quiet.
                                                            
Jenn gets up to make herself another drink.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
They still not talking to each
other? Marty and your Dad, I mean.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
Of course not. If our inheritance
wouldn't have come from our great
grandparents, Marty would've been
disowned long ago.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
What's his problem? It's not like
Marty's hasn't done anything with
his life. He's got two masters
degrees, is still in school, and
            (MORE)

59.

                       KELLAN (cont'd)
gives a lot to charity.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
If you're not a doctor or lawyer
in my dad's family, you don't
really count.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Is that why you decided to be a
doctor?
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
No, I was just lucky that what I
wanted to do happens to be what
everyone in the family expects.
                                                            
Marty comes into the living room and sits next to Kellan on
the sofa.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Go take your shower and get ready,
Jenn. Everyone's coming over for
the welcome home party.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
I didn't really want to go out,
Marty. I'm tired.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You should've taken an earlier
flight. Besides, did you expect
anything else?
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
Of course not. Why should I get to
rest on my vacation?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Rest is for a bunch of yankee
pussies, Jenn. In New Orleans, we
enjoy life.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
How well I remember.
                                                            

60.

                       KELLAN
Welcome home.
                                                            
Jennifer raises her glass as she leaves the living room to
go get ready.
                                                            
 
INT. WINN DIXIE - DAY
                                                            
Gary and Sarah are pushing two baskets filled with liquor,
beer, chips and dips, and party food through the grocery
store.
                                                            
                       SARAH
It's been awhile since we've done
this.
                                                            
                       GARY
Done what?
                                                            
                       SARAH
Spent time together. You've been
so busy picking up the slack at
the training center.
                                                            
Gary and Sarah turn onto new isle and bump into Amanda.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Gary?
                                                            
                       GARY
      (surprised)
Amanda? Uh... Sarah, this is my
ex, Amanda. Amanda, my girlfriend,
Sarah.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I've heard a lot about you. When'd
you move back?
                                                            
                       AMANDA
A few weeks ago.
                                                            

61.

                       SARAH
You should have looked Gary up.
I'm sure you two have some
catching up to do.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
I guess we do.
                                                            
                       GARY
      (uncomfortable)
Yeah, we should probably get
together.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Y'all look like y'all are having a
party.
                                                            
                       GARY
Yeah, it's Marty and Jenn's
birthday.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Tell them I said hello.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Why don't you come to the party
and tell them yourselves?
                                                            
                       AMANDA
If Gary doesn't mind, I'd love to
see everyone again.
                                                            
                       GARY
Why would I mind?
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Great. When and where?
                                                            
                       SARAH
Let me give you the address.
                                                            
Sarah pulls a pen and scrap of paper from her purse and
writes Marty's address on it. She hands it to Amanda.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
I'll see y'all there.
                                                            

62.

Amanda and Gary give each other an awkward hug before Amanda
pushes her basket past Gary and Sarah. Gary and Sarah move
on, Sarah looking over her shoulder briefly, looking after
Amanda.
                                                            
                       SARAH
She seemed nice.
                                                            
                       GARY
Not as nice as you.
                                                            
                       SARAH
What's that mean?
                                                            
                       GARY
It means you were really nice to
my ex-girlfriend.
                                                            
                       SARAH
You think I had ulterior motives
for inviting her?
                                                            
                       GARY
Just making a statement.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Let me make one: she still loves
you.
                                                            
                       GARY
I'm a lovable guy.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Do you still feel something for
her?
                                                            
                       GARY
You shouldn't have invited her if
you're gonna get jealous.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I'm not jealous, I'm curious. Now
quit avoiding the question; do you
still feel something for Amanda?
                                                            

63.

                       GARY
Yes. I still feel something for
her, mostly down around my zipper.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Be serious, Gary.
                                                            
                       GARY
I am. She's hotter than any senior
citizen I know.
                                                            
                       SARAH
If you don't give me a serious
answer, you're gonna be fucking
your hand longer than you care to
imagine.
                                                            
                       GARY
Of course I still feel something
for her. We were together for five
years. You don't think I'm gonna
stop caring for you when I trade
you in for someone younger, do
you?
                                                            
                       SARAH
You're an asshole.
                                                            
                       GARY
But a lovable one, right?
                                                            
                       SARAH
That's what I hear. Mostly from
you, but that's what I hear.
                                                            
 
EXT. MARTY'S BACK PATIO - DAY
                                                            
Marty's back yard is completely fenced in and cemented. A
built in pool with a small waterfall takes up a third of the
yard space. A few outdoor table sets are spread generously
across the rest of the yard. Marty and Jennifer are sitting
at one of the tables, a pitcher of margaritas between them,
having drinks.
                                                            

64.

                       MARTY
      (toasting)
Twenty-Five years old.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
And still never had a job. I
couldn't be prouder.
                                                            
                       MARTY
I was born rich for a reason.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
You should do something, Marty.
Teach. You'd be great.
                                                            
                       MARTY
I'm not finished learning.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
You have to do something grownup,
Marty. Why don't you marry Kellan
and start a family?
                                                            
                       MARTY
I'm not ready yet.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
But you always seem ready to drop
anything and anyone at a moments
notice when Toni calls.
                                                            
                       MARTY
That's not fair. Toni's a friend
and she needed me that time.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
Fair enough, I'm tired of telling
you.
                                                            
They both sip their drinks.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You seeing anyone?
                                                            

65.

                       JENNIFER
No time until after my residency,
if then.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Then why do it? You don't need the
money.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
It's not about the money. It's
what I want to do. I can't sit
around and read all day, I'd be
bored to death. Besides, you
already have that market cornered.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Speaking of corners, hold that
thought.
                                                            
Marty gets up and hurries inside. He comes back in a few
seconds with a long, thin package, wrapped in festive paper.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Happy birthday.
                                                            
Jenn unwraps the present, a street sign with her name on it.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
Please tell me you bought this.
                                                            
                       MARTY
What fun is life if you don't do
something illegal every now and
then?
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
You're still retarded.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Let's have a birthday toast. To
mom, for always being there when
we needed her, may she rest in
peace.
                                                            

66.

                       JENNIFER
To the family that disowned you
and the father that approves. Fuck
them.
                                                            
                       MARTY
How can I not drink to that?
                                                            
 
EXT. MARTY'S BACK PATIO - NIGHT
                                                            
About thirty people are in Marty's back yard, having drinks,
mingling. One of Marty's patio tables has been taken over
and covered with party food and snacks. Another table is
covered in liquor bottles, mixers, and plastic cups. A few
ice chests are on the ground next to the the beverage table.
Kurt and Marty are standing by themselves when Amanda walks
through the open side gate. Kurt and Marty just stare as
Amanda walks up to them.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Y'all can close your mouths now.
                                                            
                       KURT
You're about the last person we
expected to see.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
I know how you feel, this is the
last place I expected to be.
                                                            
                       MARTY
How've you been, stranger?
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Pretty good, birthday boy, how
about you?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Can't complain, no one will
listen.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
You've got it bad, huh?
                                                            

67.

                       KURT
He just likes to bitch.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
I remember. Hey, where's Jenn?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Check the kitchen.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
I'll talk to you two later.
                                                            
Amanda walks off to find Jenn.
Gary walks up when she leaves.
                                                            
                       KURT
What the fuck just happened?
                                                            
                       GARY
We ran into her at Winn Dixie and
Sarah invited her.
                                                            
                       KURT
This could turn into some Jerry
Springer shit real easy.
                                                            
 
INT. MARTY'S KITCHEN - NIGHT
                                                            
Jenn and Amanda are standing at the kitchen island, snacking
on party food and catching up. They are alone in the
kitchen.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Our little group turned out pretty
good, huh? You're gonna be a
doctor. Kurt has his family
business.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
You're a lawyer.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Gary's a fireman.
                                                            

68.

                       AMANDA AND JENNIFER
And Marty still doesn't have a
job.
                                                            
Amanda and Jennifer laugh.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
What about Toni?
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
She's an engineer in Phoenix.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Is Marty still...
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
Yep. We got into it about her
earlier today.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Such a shame.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
We better go back to the party. If
we start talking about all the
stupid shit Marty's done we might
never get leave the kitchen.
                                                            
 
INT. MARTY'S BACK PATIO - NIGHT
                                                            
Sarah and Amanda are sitting at the table furthest from the
back door, having drinks alone.
                                                            
                       SARAH
So how'd you meet Gary?
                                                            
                       AMANDA
You don't know?
                                                            
                       SARAH
I think it makes him uncomfortable
to talk about you to me.
                                                            

69.

                       AMANDA
It's a pretty funny story, really.
We were sixteen and Kurt was
dating my cousin Jamie, mostly
just having sex with her, if you
know Kurt.
Well, Kurt was Jamie's escort to
her sweet sixteen and they decided
to set me up with Gary as a
surprise to him. He went and got
another date without telling
anyone so when they picked me and
Jamie up, my date already had
another date. I felt like such a
loser.
We get to the hall and I just sat
on the corner of the stage and
watched everyone dance. I guess it
showed how miserable I was because
Gary asked me to dance. I was so
relieved. Then we get on the dance
floor and Gary starts telling me
about wearing girls underwear and
how good he sounded in the shower
because he wasn't inhibited by
clothes. I thought he was crazy.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Something made you change your
mind.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Jamie and Kurt were always
together. I was always with Jamie,
Gary was always with Kurt. We just
started talking one day and never
wanted to stop.
                                                            
                                         CUT TO:
                                                            
Marty and Gary are standing away from the table, watching
the girls talk.
                                                            

70.

                       GARY
Sarah's pissing me off, man. She
thinks I don't realize she's over
there interrogating Amanda.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Want some help breaking them up?
                                                            
                       GARY
Divide and conquer, brother.
                                                            
Gary and Marty join the girls at the table.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Which one of you wants to make out
with the birthday boy?
                                                            
                       SARAH
I wouldn't mind. Gary passes out
every year and I go to bed
unhappy.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Exactly the answer I was hoping
for. Take a walk with me and let
me show you how a birthday boy is
supposed to act.
                                                            
Gary and Amanda watch Sarah and Marty go inside the house.
                                                            
                       GARY
What's the damage?
                                                            
                       AMANDA
I didn't volunteer anything, only
answered questions.
                                                            
                       GARY
Uh-huh.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Besides, she loves you too much to
pay attention to anything I said.
                                                            
                       GARY
That's very reassuring.
                                                            
 

71.

INT. MARTY'S LIBRARY - NIGHT
                                                            
The room has one wall of books, another is dominated by a
fireplace flanked by two windows. The front wall is one
giant window. The room is comfortably furnished and is a
peaceful place. Marty and Sarah are sitting opposite each
other on matching sofas.
                                                            
                       MARTY
So what's going on out there?
                                                            
                       SARAH
What do you mean?
                                                            
                       MARTY
C'mon. You're obviously sucking up
to Amanda. Why?
                                                            
                       SARAH
I don't know. We've been together
for two years and I still don't
know much about him. He never
talks about himself.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You know more about him than
Amanda. Hearing about shit that
happened to him five, seven, or
ten years ago isn't gonna teach
you anything you don't know.
                                                            
                       SARAH
If it doesn't matter why all the
secrecy?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Nobody wants to dwell on bad
memories. Gary's got alot he'd
like to forget.
                                                            
                       SARAH
You don't think I have to worry
about Amanda, do you?
                                                            

72.

                       MARTY
You have more to worry about from
me.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Amanda said you were pretty wild
back in the day, but she didn't
say anything about you chugging
cock.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Sometimes it's easier than dealing
with you damn females.
                                                            
                       SARAH
You're happy with Kellan, aren't
you?
                                                            
                       MARTY
I've been happy before.
                                                            
                       SARAH
You ever think of settling down,
getting married?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Do you know much about mythology?
                                                            
                       SARAH
No, why?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Venus, a beautiful lady, was the
goddess of love. Juno, a terrible
shrew, was the goddess of
marriage. The two were mortal
enemies.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I hate to hear you talk like that,
you deserve to be happy.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Who knows. Let's get back to the
party. Remember, though, that Gary
doesn't really want to shut you
out. It's just that he'd rather
            (MORE)

73.

                       MARTY (cont'd)
not have to think about some
things.
                                                            
 
INT. GARY AND SARAH'S APT. - NIGHT
                                                            
TWO WEEKS LATER
                                                            
Gary is laying on the sofa, drinking and watching
basketball.
Sarah is wearing a very nice casual outfit, getting ready to
go out.
                                                            
                       SARAH
You're going with me tomorrow,
right?
                                                            
                       GARY
Uh-huh.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Do you know where we're going?
                                                            
                       GARY
What?
                                                            
                       SARAH
I was trying to find out if you
still planned on going to my
parent's house with me tomorrow.
                                                            
                       GARY
If I said I'd go, then I'm going.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Okay. Do you think I should see if
Amanda wants to come hang out?
                                                            
                       GARY
No. I do not think you should
invite Amanda out.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I thought you liked the idea of us
being friends.
                                                            

74.

                       GARY
Friendly. I like the idea of y'all
being friendly.
                                                            
                       SARAH
What's the difference?
                                                            
                       GARY
There's a world of difference
between you two shooting the shit
at a party and you taking her out
just to play twenty questions.
                                                            
                       SARAH
She's back in town and I don't
want her to feel like she can't
hang out with her old friends
because of me.
                                                            
                       GARY
Maybe, but that's not the only
reason.
                                                            
                       SARAH
You know what I think? I think
you're just an insecure little
boy.
                                                            
                       GARY
      (pulling his lower
       eye lid with his
       middle finger)
Wanna check my care meter?
                                                            
                       SARAH
Fuck you, too!
                                                            
Sarah grabs her purse and storms out of the apartment,
slamming the door.
                                                            
                       GARY
Fucking women.
                                                            
Gary watches the game for a second, then grabs his keys and
phone and leaves.
                                                            
 

75.

INT. MICK'S - NIGHT
                                                            
Gary and Kurt are doing shots at the bar. There are only a
few other patrons in the bar.
                                                            
                       GARY
I don't know what to do. It's hard
enough staying away from Amanda as
it is and now Sarah thinks she's
found a new best friend. If I keep
seeing Amanda, something's gonna
happen. The other night at the
party, I felt it there between us.
                                                            
                       KURT
Shit, man, I thought you were
already hitting it. I know you've
been seeing her.
                                                            
                       GARY
      (defensively)
What makes you say that?
                                                            
                       KURT
C'mon. I saw you two at the party.
After all the shit that went down
there's no way you'd be that
comfortable around each other
after one little run in at the
fire station.
                                                            
                       GARY
We've been hanging out lately.
Nothing's happened, but I don't
know for how long. When I'm with
her I forget Sarah even exists.
Then I go home and look at Sarah
and realize how much I love her
and I don't know how I could
forget about her for even one
second of any day.
                                                            
                       KURT
Like I said when you first saw
her: you're fucked. Just remember,
I'm the pimp in this outfit. You
stick to monogamy, it's what
            (MORE)

76.

                       KURT (cont'd)
you're good at.
                                                            
Three guys walk through the door. They spot Gary and Kurt
and head over to drink with them.
                                                            
 
INT. DAIQUIRI STOP - NIGHT
                                                            
The Daiquiri stop is a small, glass fronted bar in a strip
mall. Other than the bar, pool table, and a few video poker
machines, there isn't too much to the place. Sarah, Jane,
Jennifer, and Kellan are having girls night out.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I can't believe Gary's being such
an asshole about Amanda. I thought
he'd want us to be friends.
                                                            
                       JANE
If you ask me, I'd say it's a good
thing that Gary's uncomfortable
around his ex.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
Jane's right. Gary loves you and
I'm sure he wouldn't do anything
to to mess that up, but why tempt
fate?
                                                            
                       SARAH
What do you think, Kellan?
                                                            
                       KELLAN
I don't know if you should be
asking me. I don't really know
what happened between Gary and
Amanda.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Just pretend one of Marty's ex's
started coming back around. Would
you want him telling you that you
were forbidden to talk to her?
                                                            

77.

                       KELLAN
No, but I think you're all missing
the point. It's not whether you
can be friends with Amanda or even
whether Gary'll cheat on you. If
seeing Amanda makes Gary
uncomfortable or sad, you should
respect that. I mean, why cause
the guy you love grief?
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
You might be too smart for Marty.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
I'm a woman; I don't need to be
smarter. I'm wiser.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Maybe I am wrong. I think I'm
going to go home, do a little
kissin' and makin' up.
                                                            
 
INT. MICK'S - NIGHT
                                                            
Gary and Kurt are drinking at a table with the three guys
who approached earlier, Billy, Ricky, and an unidentified
friend.
                                                            
                       BILLY
I remember one time after a dance
we were all partying at the
lakefront and Kurt got caught
pissing in the lake. The cop
says,"What are you doing pissing
in my lake?" Kurt said,"I didn't
know it was your lake."
                                                            
                       KURT
That was Marty.
                                                            
                       RICKY
Oh, hey, Gary, I saw Amanda the
other day. She's hot, dude. You
still hitting that?
                                                            

78.

                       GARY
You know, Ricky, you were stupid
in high school and you're still
stupid. The only reason I ever
tolerated you is because Kurt used
to fuck your sister.
                                                            
Ricky looks at Kurt, confused.
                                                            
                       RICKY
Kelly?
                                                            
                       KURT
It's true. She loves the cock.
                                                            
 
INT. AMANDA'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
                                                            
Amanda is watching TV when someone starts knocking at her
door. Amanda gets off the sofa and opens the door, to
discover Gary, beat up and bleeding, needing her help.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
      (letting Gary in)
What the hell happened to you?
                                                            
                       GARY
Kurt and I ran into some old
friends.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Y'all always were popular.
                                                            
                                         CUT TO:
                                                            
Gary sitting on Amanda's couch with an ice pack over his
rapidly swelling eye.
                                                            
                       GARY
Let's go have a drink.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
You've had enough.
                                                            

79.

                       GARY
You'd be surprised how fast
getting your ass beat sobers you
up.
                                                            
 
EXT. COLONIAL CLUB GOLF COURSE - NIGHT
                                                            
Gary and Amanda are sitting by a pond, holding hands.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
I remember when we used to spend
half our lives here.
                                                            
                       GARY
I miss being here with you, it was
always so perfect.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Not always. Remember when you
overdosed on V.C.R. head cleaner?
                                                            
                       GARY
I just passed out for a few
minutes. The only scary part for
me was seeing how worried you
were.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
I was scared to death. I thought I
was gonna have to watch the guy I
love die.
                                                            
                       GARY
I'm sorry. For that and everything
else.
                                                            
They sit still for a few seconds. Gary leans over and kisses
Amanda. She pulls away after a few seconds.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Not here Gary. Let's not do
anything to take away from from
this place. Take me home.
                                                            
 

80.

INT. AMANDA'S BEDROOM - DAY
                                                            
Amanda's rooms is charmingly appealing in the early morning
light streaming through the bedroom window. Amanda stretches
and opens her eyes when she doesn't feel Gary next to her.
Waking, she spots Gary, with a black eye and split lip,
sitting in her accent chair.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
I thought you left.
                                                            
                       GARY
I want to stay forever.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Don't make promises you can't
keep.
                                                            
                       GARY
I was only saying how I felt.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
I know.
                                                            
Amanda gets up and walks to bathroom door.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
I'm gonna take a shower.
                                                            
Gary is lost in thought and doesn't say anything.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Are you just gonna sit there?
                                                            
                       GARY
A shower. Right.
                                                            
 
INT. AMANDA'S APARTMENT - DAY
                                                            
Gary and Amanda are standing by the front door, both still
wet from the shower.
                                                            
                       GARY
Amanda...
                                                            

81.

                       AMANDA
I know. You're going back to
Sarah.
                                                            
                       GARY
I don't want to.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
You don't know what you want. It's
my fault for waiting so long to
come back for you.
                                                            
                       GARY
Give me a little time to sort
things out. I want to come back
and be with you.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Take your time. I'll be here
waiting. Just make sure you know
what you really want before you
tell Sarah.
                                                            
                       GARY
I never stopped loving you.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Me too.
                                                            
Gary and Amanda kiss passionately
                                                            
                       GARY
I'll be back.
                                                            
Gary opens the door and leaves, shutting it behind himself.
Amanda rests her head on the closed door.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
      (to herself)
I love you.
                                                            
 
INT. GARY AND SARAH'S BEDROOM - DAY
                                                            
Gary finds Sarah sitting on the bed, hugging her knees.
She won't look at Gary as he walks into the room.
                                                            

82.

                       GARY
Sarah, baby, you okay?
                                                            
                       SARAH
Don't baby me. Not after spending
the night with Amanda.
                                                            
                       GARY
What are you talking about?
                                                            
                       SARAH
I'm not stupid, Gary. I talked to
Marty and Kurt after you turned
your phone off. You weren't with
either of them.
                                                            
Gary touches her shoulder, trying to get her to look at him.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Don't touch me. You lost that
right last night.
                                                            
                       GARY
This is exactly the same as when
you saw me with my mom and thought
something was going on. You were
wrong then too, remember?
                                                            
                       SARAH
Visiting your mom and spending the
night at your ex's house are not
the same thing, even if your mom
was a whore.
                                                            
Sarah raises her head to look at Gary, realizing she may
have went too far.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I didn't mean...
What happened to your face?
                                                            
                       GARY
Nothing I didn't deserve. Now
would you listen to me a minute?
                                                            

83.

                       SARAH
Okay.
                                                            
                       GARY
I did sleep at Amanda's last
night. Nothing happened, Sarah. I
slept on her sofa.
                                                            
                       SARAH
How can I believe that?
                                                            
                       GARY
Because I'm not telling you as
your boyfriend, who just fucked up
big time, but as your best friend,
who would never do anything to
hurt you.
                                                            
                       SARAH
My best friend was at Amanda's
last night, too.
                                                            
                       GARY
You know how we talked about trust
after the thing with my mom? Now's
the time you have to prove it was
more than talk. I can't prove what
didn't happen. I'm sorry to put
you in this situation, but here we
are.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I love you, Gary, but I don't
think you can make this right.
                                                            
                       GARY
Give me a chance. Go take a shower
and when you get out I'll do my
best to show you that I love you
too much for anything to have
happened.
                                                            
                       SARAH
How?
                                                            

84.

                       GARY
You'll see soon enough.
                                                            
Sarah gets up without a word and heads into the bathroom,
closing the door behind her. Gary waits until he hears the
shower running, then digs her engagement ring from a pair of
socks in his dresser drawer and calls Kurt.
                                                            
                       GARY
      (whispering)
Kurt, I need a favor.
Yeah, I know, I'm already home.
Listen, this is what I need from
you and you have to hurry...
                                                            
 
EXT. AUDOBON PARK - DAY
                                                            
Gary leads Sarah, blindfolded, to a table in the shade of a
giant oak tree.
Kurt leaves when he and Gary see each other.
Two carry-out platters are on the table with a bottle of
champagne and glasses.
                                                            
                       GARY
You can look now.
                                                            
                       SARAH
      (taking off
       blindfold)
This is really nice, Gary, but we
have bigger problems than a picnic
can settle.
                                                            
They sit down.
                                                            
                       GARY
I know.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I don't think you do know. I love
you and if we were having some
other problem, I would fight as
hard as I know how to make us
work.
What I will not do is compete. If
you've got to think about who you
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85.

                       SARAH (cont'd)
want then you don't really want me
and I damn sure don't want you. I
won't have you stay with me for a
few months or even years and then
blame me when you regret not being
with Amanda. I will not play that
game.
                                                            
                       GARY
There never was any choice, it was
always you.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Before you make your decision,
there's something I have to tell
you.
                                                            
                       GARY
Wait. I'm the one who fucked up,
let me go first.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Fair enough.
                                                            
                       GARY
You've meant more to me than
you'll ever know. I love you and
I'm ashamed it took me a night at
Amanda's to make me realize how
much, but it did. I'll never be
able to make you forget this but
I'd like to spend the rest of my
life trying. I've been too scared
to give you this ring for over a
month now, but not anymore. I'm
ready to be your husband, if
you're willing to be my wife.
                                                            
Sarah hides her face in her hands as Gary holds the ring
across the table.
                                                            
                       GARY
Is that a no?
                                                            

86.

                       SARAH
No, it's a yes.
                                                            
Gary comes around the table and hugs Sarah.
                                                            
                       GARY
You had something to tell me?
                                                            
                       SARAH
Remember what you told me the
night we met? About why we had to
get to know each other better?
                                                            
                       GARY
You mean about you having a ...
                                                            
Gary pulls back to make sure she's serious, then hugs her
again.
                                                            
 
EXT. TOP LEVEL OF A PARKING GARAGE - NIGHT
                                                            
Gary and Marty are sitting on lawn chairs in the back of
Gary's truck, which is parked on the top level of the
parking garage of the Doubletree hotel, overlooking Lake
Pontrachain. They have an ice chest full of beer at their
feet.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Okay. Just you and me, what's up?
                                                            
                       GARY
I don't know, man. I love Sarah,
you know I do, but being with
Amanda feels so right. When I'm
not with her, I'm thinking about
her.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You hit it, didn't you?
                                                            
                       GARY
Like a ton of bricks.
                                                            

87.

                       MARTY
Be careful. Sarah's wearing your
ring and having your baby.
                                                            
                       GARY
I know. In my head, I know; in my
heart, I can't decide. Your heart
leads you to some pretty fucked up
places. Places where there can't
be a happy ending. That's where
I'm at now. Nothing I do is gonna
make me completely happy. What
should I do?
                                                            
                       MARTY
You're asking the wrong person.
I'm still in love with a girl that
that turned me down seven years
ago. My life is held hostage by a
girl I never even fucked, much
less dated, and you want advice
from me?
I think that sometimes that's the
hardest thing about being an
adult: accepting that some
questions don't have answers, some
problems don't have solutions, and
no matter how hard you try, you're
never gonna be completely happy.
Look at me. Everyone thinks I have
a perfect life because I have
money but that's not true. I have
one less thing to worry about, but
my life is far from perfect. Happy
is harder than money. Anyone who
says money can buy happiness has
never had any.
                                                            
                       GARY
Remember when you said you loved
Toni so much that you'd drag your
balls through seven acres of
broken glass just to eat the
peanuts out of her shit?
                                                            

88.

                       MARTY
How could I forget?
                                                            
                       GARY
I always remembered that because I
felt the same way about Amanda.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Congratulations. Call Hallmark,
they'll probably want to put that
on a card.
                                                            
                       GARY
You know what I hate? Hollywood. I
hate Hollywood. I've seen a
million movies and every one of
them makes it seem like everyone
falls in love in high school and
lives happily ever after. I mean
what the does anyone know at
seventeen anyway. It's all a
farce. If Hollywood didn't pump
everyone so full of this fairy
tale ending bullshit, then maybe
people wouldn't go around
expecting to meet the love of
their lives in high school.
Relationships are hard enough
without the unrealistic
expectations that are shoved down
our throats from the time we're in
diapers watching Disney movies.
Everything I know about love I
learned from movies and it's
ruined my life.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You done?
                                                            
                       GARY
No. You know who had it right?
Shakesphere. That motherfucker hit
the nail on the head. Two people
fall in love, a bunch of shit goes
wrong, and everybody dies
miserable.
                                                            

89.

                       MARTY
Aren't you full of sunshine? I bet
your beer is half empty, huh?
                                                            
                       GARY
Actually, it's completely empty.
Beer me.
                                                            
                       MARTY
      (Handing Gary a
       beer from the
       cooler)
Sometimes I wonder why we even
bother to fall in love.
                                                            
                       GARY
Because romance suspends logic. If
it didn't; we probably wouldn't
risk it.
                                                            
                       MARTY
That's pretty deep.
                                                            
                       GARY
Yeah. I saw it on an episode of
Joan of Arcadia.
                                                            
                       MARTY
      (skeptically)
You watched Joan of Arcadia?
                                                            
                       GARY
What? You gonna tell me I'm a fag?
                                                            
                       MARTY
No. I watched it, too
                                                            
                       GARY
Really?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Yeah. I guess I missed that
episode.
                                                            
 

90.

INT. MARTY'S LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Jenn and Kellan come in with shopping bags. Jenn checks the
answering machine.
                                                            
                       TONI
      (on answering
       machine)
Marty, it's Toni. I tried calling
you on your birthday but no one
answered. I just wanted to let you
know that Andy and I are finally
calling it quits. We just can't
make it work. I'm coming back
home, maybe for good. I'll give
you a call so we can get together.
I love you, bye.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Who's Toni, an ex-girlfriend?
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
You don't know?
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Uh-uh.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
Her and Marty never dated, but
that's a technicality as far as
Marty's concerned. I hate to be
the one to tell you, but Marty's
gonna run to her.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Why? Who is she?
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
They met in high school and fell
in love. All she talked about to
her friends at Chapppelle was
Marty. When he asked her out
though, she said no. Marty thought
she just needed time so he
resigned himself to just be her
friend. He watched her date every
guy that asked her but him. She
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91.

                       JENNIFER (cont'd)
always dated the biggest losers
and Marty was convinced that she'd
realize it and finally get with
him but she never did. He's asked
her out a couple more times and
she keeps saying no. If she
decides she wants him, she'll get
him.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Is she just leading him on?
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
No, she loves him. It's obvious
when you see them together. For
some reason though, she can't
bring herself to be with him. I
personally think it's because
Marty doesn't want to do anything
with his life but lay around
reading every book he can get his
hands on.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Doesn't he get tired of waiting?
Doesn't he realize that if a girl
is gonna be with someone, it
doesn't take her seven or eight
years to say yes?
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
We've all tried telling him, but
it doesn't do any good.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Why not?
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
I'll give you a perfect example.
Two New Years ago, we were all at
Madigens, partying. Toni shows up
with a group of friends,
completely trashed. When she sees
Marty, she runs, jumps in his arms
and starts giving him some not
very platonic kisses. She's
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92.

                       JENNIFER (cont'd)
telling him and anyone who'll
listen that she loves him more
than life itself.
So she's hanging all over Marty
for a few hours and he's happier
than he's ever been. He thought it
was finally gonna happen for him.
Then, while she's got her arms
around Marty, she leans over and
kisses one of the guys she showed
up with. When they wanted to leave
and Marty asked her to stay, she
left. The next day she claimed she
couldn't remember anything. It
destroyed Marty. He wasn't sober
for five minutes in the next three
months.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
I'm gonna get dumped for this
bitch?
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
'Fraid so.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
Fuck that.
                                                            
Kellan erases Toni's answering machine message.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
You might last after all.
                                                            
 
INT. AMANDA'S APARTMENT - DAY
                                                            
Gary and Amanda are sitting down, talking.
It is very awkward.
                                                            
                       GARY
You know I love you, Mandy. But
she's having my baby. I can't just
walk away from that.
                                                            

93.

                       AMANDA
I get it, Gary. I do have a right
to be a little disappointed
though, don't I?
                                                            
                       GARY
Of course. I'm not as happy as I
should be, either. I'm having a
baby with a girl I love and all I
can think about is you.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
I wish you could stay.
                                                            
                       GARY
Me too. But I'd feel like a piece
of shit if I left Sarah with my
baby on the way.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
I know you would. That's one of
the things I love about you: you
always do the right thing.
                                                            
                       GARY
Not always.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
Don't feel bad about the other
night, Gary. I don't want to think
that anything between us can be
wrong.
                                                            
                       GARY
Tell me what it is then.
                                                            
                       AMANDA
A great good-bye.
                                                            
                       GARY
      (nodding agreement)
I gotta go.
                                                            
Gary stands and leans over Amanda.
He kisses her softly on the lips then the forehead.
                                                            

94.

                       AMANDA
I'll be here if you change your
mind.
                                                            
Gary leaves without saying anything.
Amanda starts to cry after the door closes.
                                                            
 
EXT. MARTY'S BACK PATIO - NIGHT
                                                            
Gary, Kurt, and Marty are drinking at a table.
                                                            
                       KURT
So where're all the females
tonight?
                                                            
                       GARY
At my place. I think they're
already planning the wedding or
something.
                                                            
                       MARTY
So Amanda was cool about it?
                                                            
                       GARY
I think so. I don't know if I can
stay away though.
                                                            
                       KURT
Just tell me you used rubbers when
you fucked her.
                                                            
                       GARY
No, she was on the pill.
                                                            
                       KURT
Oh God! I fell for that a couple
of times and ended up crossing my
fingers.
                                                            
                       GARY
You should learn not to share so
much. Really.
                                                            
                       KURT
Whatever.
                                                            

95.

Gary goes inside to piss.
                                                            
                       KURT
You think he can stay away?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Right now, I don't know. Once
Sarah squeezes out the puppy, I
think he'll be cool.
                                                            
                       GARY
      (coming back
       outside)
You know, sometimes I think we
were wrong for not doing what
Kurt's been doing all these years.
                                                            
                       KURT
What's that?
                                                            
                       GARY
Fuck every hot chick possible and
not worry about relationships.
                                                            
                       KURT
I highly recommend it.
                                                            
                       MARTY
It's too late for you to think
about that anyway. I, on the other
hand, am still a free man.
                                                            
                       KURT
Bitch, please. You're worse than
he is with all this love shit,
you're just quieter about it. Face
it, neither of you are cut out for
what I do. It takes a special
breed of man.
                                                            
                       GARY
Like what, an N'Sync look-a-like?
                                                            
                       KURT
Blow me.
                                                            

96.

Marty's cell phone rings and Marty answers it.
                                                            
                       MARTY
      (voice changes
       after hello)
Hello?
Hey! You're in town?
                                                            
Marty walks into yard for privacy.
                                                            
                       KURT
I know who that is.
                                                            
                       GARY
Too bad, I really liked Kellan.
                                                            
 
INT. ZEA'S - DAY
                                                            
Jenn and Kurt are having lunch.
                                                            
                       KURT
Thanks for coming.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
Just because I won't fuck you
doesn't mean we aren't friends.
                                                            
                       KURT
I know that. It's just new to me.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
      (laughing)
So what's the big deal?
                                                            
                       KURT
Toni called Marty last night,
She's in town, and going through a
divorce.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
I know. Kellan erased a message
from Marty's answering machine a
few nights ago.
                                                            

97.

                       KURT
She's still toast. They're having
dinner together tomorrow night.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
You've got to talk to him.
                                                            
                       KURT
Why me? I haven't come close
enough to love to know what it
looks like.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
That's why you're perfect. You can
approach him in a practical way
instead of an emotional one.
Besides, if you were thinking
about getting me to do it, I tried
last week.
                                                            
                       KURT
Fuck it. What do I say?
                                                            
 
INT. THE MILL - NIGHT
                                                            
Kurt and Marty are sitting at the bar.
                                                            
                       KURT
So, you're having dinner with Toni
tomorrow.
                                                            
                       MARTY
      (shaking head)
Jesus. Do we always have to have
this conversation?
                                                            
                       KURT
How do you know what I'm going to
say?
                                                            
                       MARTY
You're gonna say the same thing as
always, right?
                                                            

98.

                       KURT
What do you think I'm going to
say?
                                                            
                       MARTY
To give up on her. Move on. Get
over it. If I can't be with the
one I love, love the one I'm with.
That shit. Why would you say
anything different, you hate her.
                                                            
                       KURT
How can someone so smart be so
full of shit?
                                                            
                       MARTY
You don't treat her like shit?
                                                            
                       KURT
Well, yeah. But I don't hate her,
I hate how she makes you feel.
Just because Toni won't go out
with you doesn't mean that you're
a worthless person. That's how you
act everytime you think about her.
                                                            
                       MARTY
If I'm so great, why won't she go
out with me?
                                                            
                       KURT
I can't speak for her, but she's
just one person. You've been with
some of the smartest, most
beautiful girls I've ever seen.
Forget about Toni; worry about
Kellan.
                                                            
                       MARTY
I don't know. Toni's just always
been my idea of real happiness,
perfection.
                                                            
                       KURT
Toni is not perfect.
                                                            

99.

                       MARTY
She's the best person I know.
Eight years and I've never seen
her go out of her way to hurt
anyone. She hasn't ever lied to me
and she's been so great when she
caught me lying to her. I just, I
can't...
                                                            
                       KURT
Answer me this: why are you still
so hung up on this chick?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Honestly? Because I feel cheated.
You remember how in love with me
she was in high school. I feel
like she cheated us both out of
something that could've made us
really happy.
                                                            
                       KURT
I'm not gonna sit here and tell
you not to go after her if that's
what you really want. I just think
you maybe shouldn't break Kellan's
heart until you know for sure that
Toni's changed her mind.
                                                            
                       MARTY
You mean this isn't about not
going after Toni, it's about
Kellan's feelings? Is Kurt really
worried about a girl's feelings?
                                                            
                       KURT
Maybe all that love shit going
around lately is a bad influence
on me. Don't worry though, it's
not gonna happen too often.
                                                            
                       MARTY
I wouldn't have it any other way.
                                                            
 

100.

INT. CHURCH - DAY
                                                            
Guest are seated and the wedding party is walking down the
isle, toward Father Casey. Jane, the Maid of Honor, starts
to walk with Marty. Once the entire wedding party has joined
Gary and Father Casey on the dais, the wedding music starts
and Sarah, accompanied by her dad, starts down the isle.
When Sarah is standing next to Gary, Father Casey nods for
Gary to start.
                                                            
                       GARY
In the name of God, I, Gary
Hopkins, take you, Sarah Reeves,
to be my lawfully wedded wife. To
have and to hold from this day
forward, for better or worse, for
richer or poorer, in sickness and
in health, to love and cherish,
until we are parted by death. This
is my solemn vow.
                                                            
Gary takes Sarah's hand and slips a ring on her finger.
                                                            
                       SARAH
In the name of God, I, Sarah
Reeves, take you, Gary Hopkins, to
be my lawfully wedded husband. To
have and to hold from this day
forward, for better or worse, for
richer or poorer, in sickness and
in health, to love and cherish,
until we are parted by death. This
is my solemn vow.
                                                            
Sarah takes Gary's hand and slips a ring on his finger.
                                                            
                       FATHER CASEY
Now you will feel no rain, for
each of you will be shelter for
the other. Now you will feel no
cold, for each of you will be
warmth to the other. Now there
will be no loneliness, for each of
you will be a companion for the
other. Now you are two persons,
but there is one life before you.
May beauty surround you both in
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101.

                       FATHER CASEY (cont'd)
the journey ahead and through all
the years. May happiness be your
companion and your days together
be good and long upon the Earth.

Treat yourselves and each other
with respect, and remind
yourselves often of what brought
you together. Give the highest
priority to the tenderness,
gentleness, and kindness that your
connection deserves. When
frustration, difficulty, and fear
assail your relationship - as they
threaten all relationships at one
time or another - remember to
focus on what is right between
you, not only the part that seems
wrong. In this way, you can ride
out the storms when clouds hide
the face of the sun in your life.
Remember that even if you lose
sight of it for a moment, the sun
is still there. And if each of you
takes responsibility for the
quality of your life together, it
will be marked by abundance and
delight.
                                                            
Gary and Sarah kiss and then walk down the isle, followed by
the wedding party.
                                                            
 
INT. COLONIAL CLUB MAIN HOUSE - NIGHT
                                                            
Everyone from the wedding are mingling in an elegantly
appointed great room. There are waiters and waitresses
circulating with champagne and hor'dourves. Marty is talking
to Father Casey. Sarah and Gary are being mobbed by friends
and family offering best wishes. Jennifer and Kellan are
talking, Kellan looking nervously across the room to where
Toni is sitting alone. Kurt interrupts Marty's conversation
and hands him a microphone.
                                                            

102.

                       KURT
Time to make the toast, brother.
                                                            
Marty walks over to stand next to Gary and Sarah, tapping to
microphone to get everyone's attention. When the crowd
quiets, Marty starts his speech.
                                                            
                       MARTY
So it's my job to give a toast.
Here we go. A few weeks ago, a
friend asked me how I felt about
marriage. I asked her if she knew
much about mythology. When she
said she didn't, I explained to
her that Venus, a beautiful lady,
was the goddess of love. Juno, a
terrible shrew, was the goddess of
marriage. The two were mortal
enemies.
I didn't see anything wrong with
that point of view, but after
listening to those beautiful vows
and seeing how Gary and Sarah were
looking at each other during the
ceremony, I've come to the
conclusion that maybe this once
the Romans were full of shit. So
raise your glasses to Gary and
Sarah and wish them the luck they
deserve.
                                                            
Everyone drinks to Gary and Sarah.
Gary and Sarah dance their first dance to "I'm in love with
you"
While Gary and Sarah dance, Marty grabs a bottle of
champaign and goes outside. TONI follows. Kellan sees this.
                                                            
                       KELLAN
I don't know why she's even here.
                                                            
                       JENNIFER
Because she's an old friend of
Gary's, and because Marty wanted
her to be here. But you don't have
to worry, she's not going to
change her mind.
                                                            
 

103.

EXT. COLONIAL CLUB MAIN HOUSE - NIGHT
                                                            
Toni comes out to the parking lot to find Marty leaning on
the hood of his car, drinking out of the bottle of champagne
he took from inside.
                                                            
                       TONI
The party's inside.
                                                            
                       MARTY
I just needed some fresh air.
                                                            
Toni leans next to Marty and takes the bottle when Marty
offers it to her. Toni takes a pull and passes the bottle
back.
                                                            
                       TONI
You're girlfriend's scared of me.
                                                            
                       MARTY
She thinks you're gonna steal me
away.
                                                            
                       TONI
Could I?
                                                            
                       MARTY
You know damn well you could,
Toni.
                                                            
                       TONI
Just like that? You'd go in there
and break up with her in the
middle of the reception?
                                                            
                       MARTY
I wouldn't think twice.
                                                            
                       TONI
What makes me so special?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Fuck me if I know. I just know
that everytime you walk into a
room I fall in love all over
again. Everytime I hear your
voice, my heart stops. You're so
            (MORE)

104.

                       MARTY (cont'd)
beautiful that looking at you
literally hurts me. And because no
one's ever looked at me the way
you do and I'm scared that no one
ever will.
                                                            
                       TONI
I don't know what to say, Marty.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Don't say anything, we both know
that we're never gonna get
together. That's probably not a
bad thing.
                                                            
                       TONI
You just said-
                                                            
                       MARTY
I know what I said and I meant it.
But as much as I want to be with
you, and I wouldn't pass up the
chance, I don't think it would
work out.
                                                            
                       TONI
Why not?
                                                            
                       MARTY
It would be too awkward after
everything that's happened. As
great as I think you are, even you
couldn't live up to the image I
have of you in my mind. Besides,
we're different people than we
were and that's who I'm really in
love with, the girl whose front
porch I spent every day on.
                                                            
                       TONI
I know we don't keep in touch like
we used to, but I want you to know
something. Not a day goes by that
I don't think about you and smile.
No matter who I end up with, you,
Marty, are always gonna be my
            (MORE)

105.

                       TONI (cont'd)
first love. I'm sorry things
didn't work out with us, but
you're still a big part of who I
am and I want to thank you for
that because I like who I am.
                                                            
                       MARTY
A day late and a dollar short,
huh? I guess we better go back
inside.
                                                            
                       TONI
Wait.
                                                            
Toni grabs Marty and gives him a very long, passionate kiss.
                                                            
                       MARTY
What was that for?
                                                            
                       TONI
I just wanted to do that once,
something to smile about every
once in a while. Now let's go back
inside.
                                                            
 
INT. COLONIAL CLUB MAIN HOUSE - NIGHT
                                                            
The band is playing a slow song and the dance floor is full
of couples dancing, including Kurt and Jane, who are making
out.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Me and Gary are about to leave if
you want to go say bye to him.
                                                            
                       KURT
      (letting go of
       Jane)
Yeah, thanks. Listen, you take
care, huh?
                                                            
Kurt hugs Sarah before heading off to find Gary.
                                                            

106.

                       SARAH
Y'all looked pretty friendly.
                                                            
                       JANE
We decided to give it one more
shot.
                                                            
                       SARAH
Really?
                                                            
                       JANE
No, But it wouldn't be a wedding
if the Maid of Honor didn't get
her brains fucked out.
                                                            
                       SARAH
So you're just going along with
tradition.
                                                            
                       JANE
Of course.
                                                            
                       JANE
      (Hugging Sarah)
I can't believe my baby sister's
married. You be careful and have
fun. I love you.
                                                            
                       SARAH
I love you too.
                                                            
 
INT. MILL - NIGHT
                                                            
Kurt and Marty are sitting at the end of the bar drinking
Abita draft.
                                                            
                       KURT
I saw Amanda today.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Where at?
                                                            
                       KURT
Her apartment.
                                                            

107.

                       MARTY
What're the odds?
                                                            
                       KURT
She's moving back to California.
                                                            
They both take a few sips of their beers, thinking about
what was just said.
                                                            
                       MARTY
      (seriously)
Are you happy?
                                                            
                       KURT
You know what, I am happy.
                                                            
Marty works on his beer some more.
                                                            
                       KURT
Why?
                                                            
                       MARTY
I was just thinking, you're the
happiest person I know and you've
never been in love and don't want
to be.
                                                            
                       KURT
I saw you and Toni leave the
reception with a bottle. Anything
there?
                                                            
                       MARTY
That's a negative, Ghost Rider.
                                                            
Kurt signals the bartender for two more beers.
                                                            
                       KURT
You don't seem too worried about
it.
                                                            
                       MARTY
Not too much, I guess. I have to
get over her sometime. And I
figure that she deserves more than
a self-loathing drunk, anyway.
                                                            

108.

                       KURT
And Kellan?
                                                            
                       MARTY
      (draining his beer)
One hell of a consolation prize.
                                                            
                       KURT
      (Finishing his own
       beer)
I'll tell her you said that.
                                                            
Kurt stands up as he takes his fresh beer from the
bartender.
                                                            
                       KURT
C'mon, it's time for me to kick
your ass in some pool.
                                                            
                       MARTY
      (walking with Kurt)
Always talking shit.
                                                            
                       KURT
Bitch, who won the last seven
games we played?
                                                            
                       MARTY
Fuck you.
                                                            


FADE OUT.


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From Ron Amaral Date 2/23/2016 ****
Hey thank you for sharing, great writing but you already knew that! Character dialog flows naturally. Think language got toned down cause didn't get an over usage as others have commented. This is surely a Guy’s flick which the market could use more of. Maybe Netflix would pick this up! Finger’s crossed. Agree with a couple of commenters that character’s feel identical just probably cause no character descriptions were available. The other comment is about Amanda's appearance at the fire station just feels implausible. If could would like to suggest two possible scenes that Amanda could be introduced losing the HARAHAN FIRE STATION scene. Honestly didn’t get the vibe that Gary was a fireman. Two possible scenes Amanda could be introduced: First at FAT HARRY’S when Gary leaves could walk right in front of Amanda. Than adjust some of the dialog from HARAHAN FIRE STATION scene to EXT FAT HARRY’S scene. This would probably make for less rewriting and dialog additions. Second would cause a couple of scene deletions and lots of shifting and rewriting. Amanda could be at WINN DIXIE scene Gary and Sarah meets Amanda there. This floors Gary hard by Amanda being back while with Sarah. Gary completely ignores Sarah for several seconds. Sarah waits patiently for Gary to introduce her to Amanda. After several more seconds Amanda can see Sarah and introduce herself to Sarah. Feel this would make Sarah's character more curious of Amanda. This leads to Sarah inviting Amanda to the party which would still fit Sarah’s character. Use the HARAHAN FIRE STATION dialog with WINDD DIXIE scene with some new dialog that would make for great female banter. Which you surely have the knack for. Use dialog of FAT HARRY’S scene with some rewrite added to MARTY’S BACK PATIO scene to just before Marty’s divides and conquers for Gary. Great fun read hope this gets more attention, thanks again.

From Alexander Pacillas Date 2/21/2016 *
Props to you for keeping interested in this, because you lost me about 2 scenes in. I didn't find any of it funny, and there's just too much dialogue right from the start. Very unnatural conversations between characters.

From Jae Date 12/28/2015 ****
I am new to the site, and this was the first Screenplay I read. And I have to say, this took me back to my days when I was in the military running the streets with my two buddies. Two of us were single and 1 was married, about to go thru a divorce. This brought ALL those memories back. DAMN the good times! Great Screenplay!

From Joe Motacek Date 4/26/2013 ***1/2
Hilarious... although I get a little bored in the middle. I hope you get this made into a movie. OHHH and to all the people who didn't like the swearing part F--- YOU! (this will probably get this moderated... even though I inserted the -'s) Grow up. The language makes the characters more raw and relatable. Just because you don't swear in you daily language doesn't mean that other people don't. Some of the jokes made me die laughing. Also my girlfriend would probably hate the part about the guy hittin' that and lying to his future wife about it... but you know what... with out the lie you don't get the happy ending so what are you gonna do right? Great story!

From Crystal Roby Date 10/2/2012 ****
I laugh my a** off all the way through. You should write another screenplay

From Lynda Date 8/5/2012 ****
Very funny screenplay, I liked it very much. I believe it would make a great comedic movie.

From Kelly Engel Date 3/22/2012 0 stars
What? Please show me the nearest exit.

From SE Date 4/14/2011 ***1/2
Like Rachel, first script I have ever completed reading, so well done. Yes there are a lot of bar scenes but that is what creates the characters and personalties. I am an amateur, but your direction and dialogue are great, that alone makes it a very good script and a good reference for beginners like me. Everyone is going to have different opinions and preferences but it will always be a script that is far harder to dislike than to like. Keep it up.

From Ronald Ford III Date 4/9/2011 ***
This is the first script I ever read all the way through....about a year ago...I found it interesting...especially the first ten pages....after that...as far as plot concerns...not the best. However, I'm sure by now...you get that..lol. Anyways, good dialogue and characters...just needed a better story to tell..in my opinion.

From Willem Date 2/7/2011 ***1/2
Maybe this has been asked much earlier but, are you Dutch?

From lana glennie Date 2/6/2011 **1/2
I thought it was clever and realistic, there are some parts that kind of repeated itself with both of the ex's coming back but other then that very well writen.

From abe casarez Date 1/23/2011 **
Just seems like there is a lot of work to be done on the structure. I noticed you started a "Montage" on page 24 continued onto 25 but never ended it with an "End Montage". Stuff like that. Maybe if it was written to Hollywood standards the story would do a better job of getting me interested right away and wanting more but it just didn't.

From Eliezer lopez Date 1/9/2011 ****
there is an awful lot of talking and too many bar scenes..

From Paul Rothbart Date 12/11/2010 *
You have a good premise, and I think your characters speak in a very believable fashion, but there are just too many scenes where people just sit around and talk. It doesn't have a movie feel to it. It also seems like every other scene takes place in a bar. I understand that your characters are parting twenty-somethings, and people like that spend a lot of time in bars, but this would make the film visually redundant. I really like the theme here. I happen to agree completely with your views on love and relationships.

From Renone Montanez Date 11/24/2010 ****
Very rich, and is very humorous. Though some of the characters are developed enough, and the story isn't as flowing as other comedies I've read, this is probably the best screenplay I've ever read. You keep everyone thinking of each other, and you have relationships flow greatly, I would love to see this turn into a film. 4 out of 4 stars.

From Matthew French Date 11/9/2010 **
Solid first draft, still needs quite a bit of retooling. Do not listen to the self-proclaimed English masters, not everyone speaks the same and in reality people swear, a lot. It gives the script a much more natural feel to it but may be a bit excessive and unrealistic at certain points. I agree with one commenter that it has a Kevin Smith feel to it, sort of a "Now You Know" movie. In comparison what I think it could use is a more solid sub-story to distract, it seems that it is very black and white, the characters do not grow in anyway or have any personality outside of their relationships. Replace some of the bar scene conversations with Gary talking to the other fireman and add in something driving the story from his perhaps, just a thought.

From Jake Williams Date 7/24/2010 ***1/2
You have the Kevin Smith feel to it. As an avid user of profanity in my screenplays, I like the way you blend yours in. The dialogue kept me in. It wasn't perfect but very seldom is any screenplay a perfect one. I am impressed immensely.

From tionne Date 7/6/2010 **1/2
Well it's not a bad script thats for sure and there was a few things I think that was missing but as a screenwriter/director I wouldn't mind giving this script a shot keep up the good work.

From Richard Date 5/16/2010 ***1/2
I really enjoyed this, a mix of swearing and non swearing would be a slight better in the long run.Rule in thumb, try not to be Quinton Tarintino.

From Jeffrey Date 2/11/2010 **1/2
I like what I read. I like how the main characters play off each other. That's very important to me is reading a script that I can imagine how the film would turn out with the characters playing off each other. You should read my script "Different brothers from the same mother".

From Reed Coverdale Date 1/12/2010 *
I have no idea why this is rated so highly. It is very boring, and I feel that when a movie is really supposed to be a comedy, it should be hilarious. This isn't absolutely funny, and also the swearing just shows you have nothing to write about. My father is an English teacher who has been teacher of the year twice. I have read many scripts, written a few, written books and have had a higher than 100 average in English for years. i know an excellent script when I read one, and this is not.

From Jason Date 1/4/2010 *
Get rid of the language. This isn't very interesting either. Try to find some more interesting plot.

From Paul Drexler Date 12/29/2009 ****
Great fun. It really is like a romantic comedy for guys. I'd get this on DVD.

From Randall Avilez Date 12/22/2009 ****
this was pretty entertaining. very much like a Judd Apatow film. i would like to see the characters fleshed out a little more, Marty and Gary seemed a little too alike in voice. it was very funny, but i think it could be tons better. i could picture Bradley Cooper as Kurt for sure haha. i liked the story and setting. even though the story has been done before i think the characters and their unique world make it interesting. you shouldn't let people get you down about the swearing though it seems as if you've toned it down or something cuase i don't think it's much a problem. Apatow has proven that the audience can identify with slightly vulgar characters so no big deal. good luck with this, i hope you can get it made it's a very good script. cheers friend.

From Vincent Vasquez Date 12/16/2009 ****
I liked it. Kind of a romantic comedy for guys. I couldn't stop reading. I'd watch this movie.

From Jericha Garcia Date 11/23/2009 ***1/2
I really liked it and the curse words added to my liking it. It made the characters more real. Nice job

From Charles Hayes Date 7/24/2009 ***1/2
Hilarious! It's not too often when you laugh as much at a script as you do at some films. That being said, this is not just a comedy IMO. Some great serious moments and dialouge. I'd pay to see this.

From Gregory Thompson Date 7/22/2009 ****
Absoluetly briliant. The dialogue flows very well. One of the best pieces of work I have read. Your script should really be turned into a movie.

From Shannon Date 6/20/2009 ****
I would definitely pay to see this in theaters! Good Luck, Martin!

From Stefania Brandner Date 6/10/2009 ****
I really liked this. Its got humour that id love to see on a big screen!

From jiggy Date 6/2/2009 ***1/2
I liked it, it was funny. Everyone well almost everyone commented on the profanity, and the truth is people really do curse like that. Especially funny people.

From Lynnmarie Johnson Date 5/30/2009 ***
I didn't read into this script that far, but you need more white space. It's like a Quintin Tarantino film, but not really. Good luck.

From J Russell Slack Date 4/18/2009 ****
I forgot that I had commented before on this script, the end of last year, in reference to the profanity. Did you change it (tone it down) at all? Because this time it didn't seem so bad. J Russell Slack

From alexander beck Date 4/10/2009 ***1/2
I think this is just terrific. I laughed the whole way through. As for it not being a typical rom-com: thank God! I just got through watching Made Of Honor with my girlfriend. It wasn't bad and I enjoyed it, but I knew exactly what was going to happen before hand because the same thing always happens. Think Best Friends Wedding or Sweet Home Alabama. Not everyone in this screenplay gets the fairy tale ending and this screenplay is better for it.

From Adam Green Date 4/2/2009 ***1/2
Awesome screenplay! Hilarious! Its refreshing to see funny dialogue and witty exchanges between realistic characters as opposed to just idiots and eccentrics getting in ridiculous slapstick situations. Good title too.

From Daniel Date 3/4/2009 **
Can't figure out how this script ever made it to #1. It has its moments but overall its pretty mediocre. Some of the dialogue is funny but that's about it.

From Don Rice Date 1/17/2009 **1/2
Gratuitous profanity isn't a problem here. The subject matter doesn't concern or appeal to anyone who couldn't laugh at the over-the-top language, so there's no need to cut back on it. However, I feel like the comedic timing is off, and the script seems to be split, from what I've read, between a romance at one time and a comedy at another, but never a romantic-comedy. The laughs are pretty much all reserved for exchanges between characters not interested in each other sexually, and are limited to one liners and short, curse laden rants. The transition between humor and romance should be seamless, and it doesn't seem to be here. There are some good one liners, but they're all sex related and some are more miss than hit. Formatting and story are good, but it needs a polish via a re-write or two.

From rockstarquan94@gmail.com Date 12/13/2008 ***1/2
That script was amazing

From J Russell Slack Date 11/22/2008 ****
I can see that your script is popular. Unfortunately, the gratuitous profanity was too off-putting--kept me from getting past the first page. I think your story will have a much wider potential audience if you tone that aspect down, at least to sparse/occasional rather than plentiful/often offerings.

From Tyler Date 11/2/2008 ***1/2
I thought it was really funny... loved most of it. The exception being the vulgarity. A bit is okay, but when it hits excessive it can be distracting from the comedy part of it and the overall feel of it. But it was brilliant, nonetheless.

From Travis Watters Date 10/3/2008 **
Not bad

From Yvette Date 9/17/2008 ***
Good script! I saw the whole thing in front of me. I saw Josh Radnor as Marty, don't know where that came from ;) It's really good, but I think it'll work better as a sitcom That's the way I see it...

From larry landry Date 8/3/2008 ****
Damn funny! With the exception of the male stripper standing in the wedding, perfect! Can't wait for your next effort.

From Andrew Garza Date 7/27/2008 ****
I enjoyed your script very much. All these people complaining about the language are stupid. I used just as much language, or even more, in my script "The Greenhouse". I liked your dialogue and some of your jokes were very original. Kudos to you. Great script.

From ralph keefer Date 7/22/2008 ****
Love it! Perfect. Its hillarious.

From Pascal Teeuwen Date 7/16/2008 ****
Hi. i can see that your screenplay is very very good! first i wanna know if you can speek dutch. i'm dutch and i wanna make a movie from your screenplay. a lot of greetz, pascal teeuwen

From Robert Casterline Date 7/4/2008 ****
Very good script. I enjoyed reading it. I think this would make a very good movie.

From Eddie Rando Date 5/26/2008 ****
The most entertaining script I've read on here. You also seem to understand the format better than most. Don't worry about the language, a lot of people curse that much. Very Funny, keep up the good work.

From Edgar R. Villasenor Date 5/25/2008 ***
I liked it, didn't mind the profanity, though the sexual jokes were a bit much at times. I can see this as a top independant film. Great job.

From jacobb Date 3/22/2008 **
It's okay I guess. Needs improvement.

From Josh Date 3/17/2008 ****
I'm no professional, and I've only been writing for a little less then a year. But I know for a fact that this is an excellent script. Not only is it hilarious, but it is also has its moments of great poignance. Although the subject matter of the film is quite common, this script hits the nail on the head in getting across the difficulty and confusion of love and life. The characters are well-built and the script gradually reveals background and purpose to them. I think the bad language is fine the way it is. It adds a more realistic touch to the characters. I disagree with GLENN. The characters are actually all very different emotionally altough they are portrayed as very similar in their daily hapits and practices which is a great thing to see. There is a lot of dialogue which is not bad at all. The only think that I can suggest is that there should be a little more stage direction and detail on what is taking place. Kudos. This is an amazing piece of work and I would love to see this as a movie.

From David Muniz Date 2/25/2008 ***
GOOD... BUT LOSE THE CURSING!... I takes away from your skill and you don't need it!

From Nick Hanks Date 2/24/2008 **1/2
I would first like to say that as far as format, you probably have the best understanding of it out of any script that I've read so far on here with the exception of a couple of little things. I think it's safe to say that this is not high-concept which always does better commercially. The problem I had is that it just seemed like another clerks type script full of vulgarity and very forced dialogue. Nothing new is added to the indie genre it is going for. To sum up, it just was very wrought and cliche. I also think that the overuse of profanity really created and imbalance to the tone of the script. I like profanity in a movie just as much as the next guy but there has to be a balance.

From Christopher Harris Date 2/18/2008 ****
I loved this screenplay. I would definately like to shoot something like this when I get out of school.

From David Chase Date 2/2/2008 ***1/2
Loved the dialogue in this script. Intelligent yet witty conversation is hard to come by in comedies these days, so this was very enjoyable. I agree with the comments about this being a good script for an indie. And the language didn't turn me off at all.

From Mike Krumlauf Date 1/10/2008 ****
Very well written, would love to make a film like this sometime in my life. Krumlauf~

From Anthony Snider Date 12/12/2007 ****
hey dont listn to landon. bad language may mean you dont have control, but controlling your language shows fear, which is something your characters dont need. i only read a little but im hooked.

From Chris Date 7/2/2007 ****
I'm new to screenplay writing, but I can clearly tell this is quality writing just by reading it. The swearing was authentic, I thought. In today's society that's how people talk. Nice one. It would make a great movie IMO.

From david towne Date 6/19/2007 ****
Way too smart to see in Hollywood. Maybe you can try to emulate Kevin Smith. Good luck having his kind of sucess.

From Charles Hoover Date 6/2/2007 ****
Great dialouge, very natural. Can't wait to see more from this writer. I don't mind the vulgarity at all.

From Monica Date 5/7/2007 **
I like it. A lot of dialogue though, its a good idea though. I think it'd be a good thing to see.

From Boris Novak Date 1/30/2007 ***
Beginning pages contain too many parentheticals (character direction). Story has some overly verbose "talking-heads" which is often criticized by industry script-readers. The story itself is on the right track and has definite possibilities. With some work, this could be very nice :-)

From Ben K Date 12/10/2006 ***1/2
This is definitely one of the best scripts I've read on here. I went through it with some others and the dialogue is very natural, with very few transitional problems. Often characters can become cluttered in a screenplay of this type, but that was not the case here; each was distinguished well. Congrats. Oh, and forget the comments about the 'bad' language. It works fine.

From Steve Guzman Date 10/18/2006 ***
I really liked it

From Foster Yow Date 9/4/2006 ***1/2
Very funny and very good, however, it does drag in the middle a bit with the same joke playing for a bit too long, however, a great screenplay.

From Vanessa McKinney Date 8/31/2006 ****
Martin its great, Could do without the cussing at the beginning lol but besides that awesome JOB!!!

From jerry coleman Date 8/23/2006 ****
work speaks for itself.

From Andy Kinsey Date 8/23/2006 ****
Easily the funniest screenplay on the sit. I think Glenn was off the mark about everything but the fact that although it is a funny script, I don't really think it's a comedy. Looking forward to reading anything by this author.

From Jason Shanahan Date 8/20/2006 ***1/2
I liked it. The title was decieving but it was surprisingly funny. I think it has alot of good jokes and it is edgey, which i like.

From Glenn Date 3/21/2006 **1/2
I like the whole stoyrline it was great. The swearing was a little out of control and the guys seemed to do nothing more than drink alcohol, when writing characters they need diff idneties, unfortuntly alot of these characters were vey simillar. As for it being a comedy i dont see that, thsi would be more better claffised as a drama.

From ross gelman Date 2/7/2006 ****
I've only read screenplays on this website, but from what I've read, this is the best. Maybe other screenplays will translate well into movies, but this one was enjoyable even in written form, which is not the norm on this website. This is the best I've read.

From john thune Date 2/4/2006 ****
I'm still laughing. One of the funniest things i ever read.

From Blake Morgan Jr. Date 1/26/2006 ****
A lot like Buying the Cow. I loved it!

From Tom Pepper Date 1/22/2006 ***1/2
The ex-girlfriend coming back when she does is pretty implausable, but overall, an excellent comedy with some real poignant moments. I love the scene on top of the parking garage, especially the off the cuff remark about a t.v. show. With a small cast and only a few locations, this is a great project for someone looking to make an indie film.

From Jack Daniels Date 1/19/2006 ***
There aren't any four star screenplays, only four star movies. That being said, I liked this screenplay despite the fact that although it has a cohesive plot, some scenes feel like nothing more than extended one-liners. I've seen the same thing in Poolhall Junkies and Boondock Saints and thought they were both decent movies, so this certainly isn't a lost cause.

From kelsey nicols Date 1/19/2006 ****
Great screenplay. I think if it's funny to read, it'll be great to watch. My favorite thing about this script is the way the female characters are written. I remember being as young as Antha, as jaded as Jane, and my relationship with my brother is very close to the way Marty and Jennifer act toward each other.

From Jon Hall Date 1/18/2006 ****
I was probably only going to give this 3 or 31/2 stars but it deserves better than freedman rates it, though he was right about that Ghetto Man crap. I found the dialouge snappy and witty and except for Kurt's character, you could see characters mature and accept things they didn't before. I don't know about the nasty e-mails but I do know plenty of people that curse just as much, or more, than the characters here. Stay away from r-rated scripts if you are only going to trash it for what made it r-rated in the first place.

From Landon Harris Date 1/12/2006 ***
I voted three because the format and everything was good. What I didn't like was how you had to go and make it a nasty language film. Why? Why not just use another word? It's not funny. Bad language means that you have no control over your mind or your mouth. I only read the first page, just like if I went into a movie theater, I would get up after the first scene and get my money back. Rewrite it and take the nasty mouth junk out.

From S.M. Krause Date 1/5/2006 ****
I like this script a lot. It's a rare exception to the rule that someone can write a good comedic film. No problems with the dialogue, fresh & original. I'd like to see this made into a movie, it'd be worth the admission.

From Steven Silverstone Date 1/2/2006 ***1/2
Reminds me of Clerks, without the single location. I like the dialouge; very playful.


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