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Pilgrimage
by David Chase (davidchase@rogers.com)

Rated: R   Genre: Drama   User Review: ***1/2
An FBI agent tracking a killer cross country. A troubled young man hitches the wrong ride. A self-proclaimed man of God receives unwanted visitors. They are all on a Pilgrimage, but no one will be the same when it is over. This has been revised from 156 pages to 123 pages. Any feedback is appreciated.


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FADE IN:

INT. CONVENIENCE STORE - DAY
                                                            
An eerie silence is broken by HEAVY BREATHING, then an
ANGUISHED CRY.
                                                            
JOSEPH, an early 20's white male, crouches behind a display
by the front counter. He cautiously pokes his head out for a
better look.
                                                            
Bloodsoaked bodies lie around the store, some dead, others
dying. Some CRY OUT for help. Something bad has gone down.
                                                            
A sudden YELL echoes through the store. It is a man's voice,
loud and commanding.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
C'mon out! You can't win this! Put
down your gun! It's your only
chance of walking out of here!
                                                            
The man is crouching, moving toward the far end of the front
of the store, gun drawn, face unseen.
                                                            
There is a turned over display, and a barely discernible
figure huddling behind it. The man calls out again as he
approaches the figure.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Last chance! There's nowhere else
to go!
                                                            
Joseph hesitates, uncertainty on his face, which turns to
determination. He steadies himself for action.
                                                            
                                         FADE TO BLACK
                                                            
AGAINST BLACK
                                                            
SUPER: ONE WEEK EARLIER
                                                            
 
EXT. HIGHWAY - DAY
                                                            
Joseph, alone, walks along the edge of a highway, somewhere
in the mid-west. The summer sun has just risen. He is
dressed in jeans and a faded brown leather jacket, and
carries a backpack. His baby face would allow him to pass
for a teenager.
                                                            

2.

Reaching into his bag, he takes out a bottle of water and
drinks. A car approaches. Joseph takes a sign out of his
bag. It says "MISSOURI".
                                                            
The car passes without slowing, leaving Joseph relegated to
more walking.
                                                            
 
EXT. HIGHWAY - DAY
                                                            
The car comes to a 4-way intersection, where it takes a
right turn.
                                                            
Straight through the intersection, a short distance ahead,
is a roadside diner/convenience store. The sign outside says
"HENDERSON'S QUIK MART".
                                                            
 
INT. HENDERSON'S QUIK MART - DAY
                                                            
Inside the store is pretty much what you would expect to
find in any rural convenience store. There is also a lunch
counter against one wall, with a swinging door leading to
the kitchen.
                                                            
Seated on a stool at the counter is SEAN COLEMAN, white
male, somewhere around 35 years old. He is clean cut,
casually dressed, and a little over average height. He
absently stirs a cup of coffee.
                                                            
A young girl of maybe 17 stands behind the register,
watching him. There is mascara running from her eyes, and
she trembles slightly.
                                                            
Sean absently takes a sip from his cup before turning his
attention to her.
                                                            
                       SEAN
So, where was I?
                                                            
He thinks for a second.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Oh, I remember.
                                                            
Sean walks to the front counter, and paces back and forth in
front of it a couple of times.
                                                            
                       SEAN
What's your name?
                                                            
She doesn't answer, a look of fear in her eyes. Sean takes
her hand, and softens his tone.
                                                            

3.

                       SEAN
I know you're scared, but I
promise, I won't hurt you.
                                                            
The girl hesitates before whispering a reply.
                                                            
                       ANGELA
It's Angela.
                                                            
Sean lets go of her hand and smiles
                                                            
                       SEAN
There, that wasn't so hard, was
it? That's a pretty name, Angela.
So, Angela, what do you think just
happened here?
                                                            
                       ANGELA
I don't know.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Well, let me tell you. This is a
lesson, and it's going to help you
keep the one thing that is most
important to you in the whole
world. Do you know what that thing
is?
                                                            
Angela shakes her head "no".
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (grinning)
It's your soul! Of course that's
the most important thing. Where
would you be without your soul?
                                                            
                       ANGELA
      (timidly)
Dead?
                                                            
                       SEAN
Bingo! That's right, you might as
well be dead. Dead like our friend
Earl over there.
                                                            
Sean looks in the direction of the coffee counter, where a
stocky man, dressed in trucker attire, is slumped on the
floor. A plate of food still sits on the counter above him.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Isn't that right Earl? That is his
name, isn't it? I thought that's
what you called him.
                                                            

4.

Angela nods.
                                                            
                       SEAN
It's a shame, you know. He seemed
like a nice guy.
                                                            
                       ANGELA
He is.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Sure. And I could tell he liked
you. Really liked you, if you know
what I mean.
                                                            
Angela looks at him, confused.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Come on. Even a fool could see
the way he looked at you. Lusting
after a girl your age. Disgusting.
                                                            
Sean bends down and lifts up Earl's left hand.
                                                            
                       SEAN
And if that weren't bad enough,
he's married. You think Mrs. Earl
would have married him if she knew
he liked chasing after little
girls?
                                                            
                       ANGELA
      (quietly)
It's Mrs. Morrison.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Pardon?
                                                            
                       ANGELA
His wife. Her name is Mrs.
Morrison, not Mrs. Earl.
                                                            
Sean acknowledges her sentiment with a smirk.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Of course. And the fact remains,
here he is, a loyal and loving
husband, lusting after a girl
of…what are you, all of sixteen?
                                                            
                       ANGELA
Seventeen.
                                                            
She looks away immediately, ashamed of answering.
                                                            

5.

                       SEAN
Seventeen. Why, you're almost a
woman now. I guess you're old
enough to understand why this had
to be done. I'm going to share
some words I read, not too awful
long ago.
                                                            
Sean clears his throat before continuing.
                                                            
                       SEAN
"For if you live after the flesh,
you shall die, but if you through
the spirit do mortify the deeds of
the body, you shall live."
                                                            
Angela looks at him, confused.
                                                            
                       SEAN
That's from Romans 8:13. But I
suspect that you knew that
already.
                                                            
                       ANGELA
How...
                                                            
Sean walks to her, and as he puts his hand out, she
flinches. He stops short, then carefully pulls out the cross
she wears around her neck.
                                                            
                       SEAN
I could tell once I spotted you.
It's sort of a gift I have. I knew
you were a believer. Just like me.
                                                            
                       ANGELA
I...
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (interrupting)
And being a believer, you can
appreciate how fitting those words
are. Take Earl. He's the one who
was lusting, after the flesh.
Namely yours. But there's more to
it, and that's where you come in.
                                                            
Angela watches him cautiously.
                                                            
                       SEAN
"If you through the spirit do
mortify the deeds of the body, you
shall live". That's you all right.
                                                            

6.

Angela's expression changes to puzzled.
                                                            
                       SEAN
You rejected his advances, and
made him ashamed while doing it. I
watched it. You put him in his
place very nicely. I thought to
myself, that one's a firecracker
                                                            
                       ANGELA
We were playing. He's been
coming here for years. We always
carry on like that.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Oh, come on girl! I know you're
not that naive. I've seen men like
him, and they're all the same.
Goddamn sinners.
                                                            
Sean goes back to stand by Earl's body.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Lucky for him, I happened along
just in time to save him.
                                                            
Sean waits for a rebuttal, but none comes.
                                                            
                       SEAN
So that pretty much sums up Earl.
But there's still your friend in
the kitchen. I didn't quite catch
his name?
                                                            
Angela doesn't say anything.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Uh, darlin', that's your cue to
tell me his name.
                                                            
                       ANGELA
It's Rene.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Rene. Perfect. Real man's name.
Which makes the word pretty ironic
in this case. Ready? "If a man
also lie with
mankind, as he lie with a woman,
both of them have committed an
abomination: they shall surely be
put to death."
                                                            

7.

Again, she looks at him with a puzzled expression.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Leviticus 20:13. You think your
friend Rene in there ever read
that passage?
                                                            
                       ANGELA
What are you getting at?
                                                            
                       SEAN
Don't pretend you didn't know your
friend Rene is as queer as a three
dollar bill.
                                                            
From O/S comes a loud CRASH. Sean looks toward the kitchen.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Well, well.
                                                            
Sean goes to where he was sitting, moves his coat from the
stool, and picks up a handgun that was placed underneath it.
As he begins walking toward the entrance to the kitchen,
Angela, sensing what is going to happen, rushes to block his
way. She manages to get between him and the kitchen door.
                                                            
                       SEAN
What are you doing?
                                                            
                       ANGELA
You don't need to go in there.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Get out of the way.
                                                            
She doesn't move.
                                                            
                       SEAN
You know I'm gonna get in there.
                                                            
                       ANGELA
      (shaking)
Come on, you made your point.
Please.
                                                            
Sean, suddenly enraged, pushes her down to the floor.
                                                            
                       SEAN
You think I came here to make a
point! Haven't you listened to a
word I said!
                                                            

8.

Angela can only huddle on the floor, sobbing violently. Sean
enters the kitchen.
                                                            
A moment goes by, followed by two loud GUNSHOTS, O/S. Angela
begins crying uncontrollably.
                                                            
Sean returns from the kitchen, carrying his gun at his side.
He hunches down beside Angela.
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (comforting)
Okay, that's enough now. You don't
have to cry anymore. You want to
know why?
                                                            
She doesn't answer, but her crying subsides slightly.
                                                            
                       SEAN
That's better. The reason you
don't have to cry can be found in
the Book of Job: "How many are
mine iniquities and sins? Make me
to know my transgressions and
Sins."
                                                            
Sean looks around.
                                                            
                       SEAN
I've done my part to make those
two sinners aware. But here is the
best part, I think you might like
it: "If thou return to the
Almighty, thou shall be built up,
thou shall put away iniquity."
                                                            
A smile comes across Sean's face, and he leans in toward
Angela.
                                                            
                       SEAN
You see? I've given them another
chance. Now that they know how
they've sinned they can face our
maker with a clear conscience. And
that, dear girl, is a wonderful
gift.
                                                            
Sean pauses for a moment, allowing his words to sink in.
Satisfied, he picks up his coat and walks to the door,
turning back for just a moment.
                                                            

9.

                       SEAN
I want you to remember what I've
told you here today. The rest is
up to you. Stay on the right path.
                                                            
He turns to go, then stops short once more.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Because I'd hate to have to come
back and continue this lesson.
                                                            
His point made, he turns once and for all and leaves the
store. Angela stays huddled on the floor, trembling
slightly.
                                                            
 
EXT. PARKING LOT - DAY
                                                            
Sean, whistling a gospel tune, opens the trunk of his car,
tosses his gun in, and closes it.
                                                            
 
INT. CAR - DAY
                                                            
Sean, driving down the highway, listens to gospel on the
radio and absently hums along.
                                                            
After driving for a few minutes, he sees a hitchhiker
holding a sign that says "MISSOURI". It is Joseph.
                                                            
He pulls over to the side of the road, grinning as he speaks
out loud to himself.
                                                            
                       SEAN
More sheep for the flock.
                                                            
 
INT. CAR - DAY
                                                            
Sean, still humming, looks over at Joseph seated beside him,
holding his pack in his lap.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Joseph, right? You don't mind, do
you, Joseph?
                                                            
Joseph reacts as if he has just been awakened from sleep.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
No, not at all.
                                                            
Sean hums along for a few moments more.
                                                            

10.

                       SEAN
Some people don't care for gospel.
                                                            
Joseph looks out the side window, then back at Sean.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
No, it's cool. I kind of like it.
                                                            
He looks out the side window again. Sean allows a small
smile when he isn't looking.
                                                            
                       SEAN
I wouldn't be offended. Your
friends probably
wouldn't think it's cool.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
      (vacantly)
I wouldn't care what they think.
                                                            
                       SEAN
That's good. Don't let anyone tell
you what to think.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
I don't have very many friends, so
it's not really a problem anyway.
                                                            
"I Saw The Light" comes on the radio. Sean quietly sings
along with it for a few bars.
                                                            
                       SEAN
So, where you headed in Missouri?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Branson. I'm going to see my
girlfriend.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Oh? Long distance relationship?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Sort of. We had a fight, and…
                                                            
Joseph hesitates for a moment, not sure if he should share
too much.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Go on. You can tell me about your
girl, or you can listen to me
sing. Your choice.
                                                            

11.

                       JOSEPH
Her name's Julie. She's singing
backup in a gospel show in
Branson.
                                                            
                       SEAN
No kidding. Which show?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Brother Caine's revival. You might
have seen him on TV.
                                                            
                       SEAN
That's great. We're going to the
same place. I'm going to see
Brother Caine.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Okay. All right.
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (grinning)
And here I thought I was gonna
have to talk to myself for the
whole trip.
                                                            
Joseph watches the scenery out the window for a moment.
                                                            
                       SEAN
So, what was the fight about?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
      (caught off guard)
What?
                                                            
                       SEAN
You said you had a fight with your
girlfriend. What was it about?
                                                            
Joseph considers it a moment before answering.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
She wanted to go away and be in
the show. I didn't think it was a
good idea. She went anyway.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Can't tell a woman what to do.
You're young, though, we can
forgive it.
                                                            

12.

                       JOSEPH
Don't get me wrong, it's not that
I don't want her singing in the
show. It's just that Julie is
still young, and…
                                                            
He hesitates.
                                                            
                       SEAN
And what?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
She's naive. She doesn't know what
kind of people are out there, just
waiting to take advantage of her.
                                                            
                       SEAN
And you do?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
      (distantly)
I...know what people are capable
of. People you trust.
                                                            
Joseph turns away, looking back out the window again.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Well, at any rate, I think it's
noble what you're doing.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Really?
                                                            
                       SEAN
Sure. I can tell you care about
her. Most girls would be flattered
to know that their guy would do
this for them. Don't ever let
anyone tell you different.
                                                            
Joseph considers it.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
      (confidently)
You're right, they would be. Hell,
yeah.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Hell, yeah. Alleluia!
                                                            
Sean goes back to singing along with the gospel song playing
on the radio.
                                                            
 

13.

INT. CONCERT HALL - DAY
                                                            
The stage is in semi-darkness, but it is clear that a show
is preparing to start. There is a buzz of anticipation
coming from the audience. Houselights are on low,
illuminating those in attendance to the bare minimum.
                                                            
Two female singers, one black, one white, hum in tune to the
music. Both are attractive and no more than 20.
                                                            
A voice comes over the public address, speaking to those
assembled.
                                                            
                       ANNOUNCER (o/s)
For from within, out of the heart
of men, proceed evil thoughts,
adulteries, fornications, murders,
thefts… all these evil things come
from within, and defile the
man.
                                                            
There is a pause, and the buzz in the crowd intensifies as
the assembled consider the words.
                                                            
                       ANNOUNCER (o/s)
And brothers and sisters, who
among us has not committed
these sins, either in our actions,
or in our hearts?
                                                            
The murmurs in the crowd become a bit more audible, some in
agreement with the word.
                                                            
                       ANNOUNCER (o/s)
Amen, brothers and sisters. None
of us, that's who. And who on this
earth can claim to understand,
without himself having
walked on the wrong side of the
Lord?
                                                            
More murmurs from the crowd.
                                                            
                       ANNOUNCER (o/s)
No one among us, that's who.
Brothers and sisters, the Lord
knows we're all sinners.
                                                            
                       AUDIENCE
Amen!
                                                            

14.

                       ANNOUNCER
Who better to spread his word than
someone who's walked the walk.
                                                            
The girls continue to him along with the gospel music.
                                                            
                       ANNOUNCER (o/s)
Did the Lord Jesus shun the
prostitutes?
                                                            
The audience replies in unison.
                                                            
                       AUDIENCE
No!
                                                            
                       ANNOUNCER (o/s)
And did Jesus shun the thieves and
the tax collectors?
                                                            
                       AUDIENCE
No!
                                                            
Another light slowly begins to illuminate a silhouette on
the stage, standing behind the curtain.
                                                            
                       ANNOUNCER (o/s)
And will he ever shun any of us?
                                                            
                       AUDIENCE
No!
                                                            
The responses grow louder each time, and the music's tempo
gradually increases.
                                                            
                       ANNOUNCER (o/s)
Brothers and sisters, put your
hands together…for Brother Caine!
                                                            
                       CAINE
      (exuberantly)
Can I have a hallelujah!
                                                            
                       AUDIENCE
Hallelujah!
                                                            
Caine looks every bit the part of the commercial
televangelist: white suit, jet black hair, a tan that would
make George Hamilton jealous, and a "trust me" smile.
                                                            
Caine struts his stuff to the front of the stage, getting
close enough to shake hands with those who have left their
seats to crowd up front. He is a man of his people.
                                                            

15.

As the crowd cheers him on, Caine half walks, half dances
his way back to the middle of the stage. The volume of the
music drops slightly.
                                                            
                       CAINE
My God, this is one terrific
audience!
                                                            
The roar of the crowd drowns out the music.
                                                            
                       CAINE
I mean it. I can feel it. Do you
know what it is?
                                                            
The crowd has quieted some.
                                                            
                       CAINE
It's the love you're sending me.
                                                            
The audience cheers, and cries of "we love you, Caine", can
be heard.
                                                            
                       CAINE
Yeah, you know what I mean. I can
feel so much love right now. I
mean, it's not fair. One person
feeling so much love. But don't
worry, I'm sending it right back
to you.
                                                            
The crowd roars again in approval. Caine passes JULIE, the
young white singer, and smiles at her. She smiles back.
                                                            
                       CAINE
And yet, brothers and sisters,
somethin's troubling me. All of
this love, love sent by the Lord,
and still, there's someone here
who's not worthy.
                                                            
The audience, falling further and further under his spell,
calms somewhat. Cries of "no" and "who is it" ring out.
                                                            
                       CAINE
I know what you're thinking, the
Lord's love knows no bounds. But I
can't help it. There's someone
here, someone so wicked, I can't
believe the Lord would still love
him.
                                                            
The audience is eating out of his hands now. "Tell us who"
and "God will love him" are the order of the day.
                                                            

16.

                       CAINE
      (raising his hands)
You really want to help this
sinner?
                                                            
The audience roars in a resounding "yes".
                                                            
                       CAINE
Then let the sinner be shown for
who he truly is!
                                                            
As he bows his head in shame, the spotlight shines directly
on Caine himself. The audience goes ballistic, eating up the
spectacle.
                                                            
 
INT. HENDERSON'S QUIK MART - DAY
                                                            
The store is now a crime scene, complete with yellow tape,
forensics, and crime scene photographers.
                                                            
Two officers are discussing what's gone down.
                                                            
                       OFFICER 1
…from New York, I think. They say
he's part of a special task force.
Feds.
                                                            
                       OFFICER 2
I heard he knows the guy, that
they've been going
back and forth for a while now.
                                                            
                       OFFICER 1
You really think so?
                                                            
                       OFFICER 2
Fucked if I know. He can have
whatever piece
he wants of this clusterfuck.
                                                            
                       OFFICER 1
      (chuckling)
Amen to that. I'd take a piece of
that, though.
                                                            
The officer makes a slight motion toward ALISON HANLEY,
early-30's, attractive with a body to match.
                                                            
Alison catches the slight gesture the officer has made,and
starts in his direction.
                                                            

17.

                       OFFICER 1
      (looking away)
Oh shit, here she comes.
                                                            
                       ALISON
If you two have a moment, there's
a crowd starting to form outside.
I don't want anyone getting
inside.
                                                            
                       OFFICER 2
No problem, m'am. We're on it.
                                                            
Alison watches as the officers depart, discreetly making
gestures between them. She shakes her head and turns away.
Her attention turns to a table near the wall.
                                                            
MICHAEL WESTPHAL, black, early 30's, sits at the table
talking to Angela. He is well dressed, sporting a shaved
head and has innocent good looks.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I know this is hard for you, but
if there's anything else you can
tell me, anything at all.
                                                            
                       ANGELA
      (raspy)
No, I'm sorry. It...it all
happened so fast. Like I said, I
was talking to Earl, and the next
thing I knew someone started
shooting.
                                                            
FLASHBACK
                                                            
Michael is standing in a convenience store. A shot rings
out, followed by a scream. Everything moves in slow motion.
He begins to move as another scream echoes.
                                                            
PRESENT
                                                            
Michael, still seated across from Angela, flinches as the
sound of a gunshot rings out in his memory.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
It's okay. You're a brave girl,
you know.
                                                            
Michael looks up and sees Alison watching. He turns his
attention back to Angela.
                                                            

18.

                       MICHAEL
Anyway, if you think of anything
else, feel free to call me, day or
night. My cell number's on there.
                                                            
He hands her his card.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I've gotta get going. I'll send
one of the officers in to see you.
He can arrange for you to speak to
someone. You know, if you need to
talk.
                                                            
Michael starts to get up
                                                            
                       ANGELA
Agent Westphal?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Yeah?
                                                            
                       ANGELA
Do you think he'll come back?
                                                            
There is just the slightest hesitation before Michael
replies.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
No, you don't have to worry about
that. We'll get him.
                                                            
 
INT. CAR - DAY
                                                            
Michael drives while Alison sits in the passenger seat,
looking out the window. A few moments of silence passes
between them.
                                                            
                       ALISON
You get anything new out of that
girl?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
No, same as the rest. General
description, similar MO. Not much
useful.
                                                            
Alison looks at him sharply.
                                                            
                       ALISON
So, we're still doing this, huh?
                                                            

19.

                       MICHAEL
Doing what?
                                                            
                       ALISON
Don't be stupid, Michael. You know
exactly what I'm talking about.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
This is about me questioning that
girl back there.
                                                            
                       ALISON
It's about you questioning every
witness since this thing started.
In case you've forgotten, we're
still partners.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Come on, Alison...
                                                            
                       ALISON
      (interrupting)
Last time I checked, I have
exactly as many years experience
as you, which means I've
questioned exactly as many
witnesses as you.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Fair enough.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Just don't treat me like a rookie,
okay?
                                                            
Michael nods in acceptance. Alison, satisfied, goes back to
looking out the window. After a few moments, she speaks,
still looking out the window.
                                                            
                       ALISON
When's the last time you spoke to
Dr. Wexler?
                                                            
Michael flinches again, just like before, as a gunshot rings
out in his memory.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
      (distant)
I don't know. A while.
                                                            
                       ALISON
It might help if you give him a
call.
                                                            

20.

                       MICHAEL
Don't worry about it. I'm fine.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Because there's nothing to be
ashamed with in talking...
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
      (cutting her off)
Can we please drop it about Dr.
Wexler. Please.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Okay, okay.
                                                            
Alison hesitates for a moment.
                                                            
                       ALISON
It's just that you helped me
whenever I've needed it. I'd like
to be able to do the same for you.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
      (sighs)
I know. Sorry.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Don't worry about it. Just do me a
favor, okay?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Sure.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Don't shut me out. We've been
friends too long.
                                                            
 
INT. OFFICE - DAY
                                                            
An ornately decorated home office. The BOSS sits behind a
large oak desk, talking quietly into the phone, face unseen.
                                                            
Two well dressed men, WILLIAM (white) and LEE (chinese),
late 20's, stand facing the desk, talking quietly.
                                                            
                       WILLIAM
No way, Lee. I don't care what
type of fictitious situation you
try conjure up, it wouldn't go
down that way.
                                                            

21.

                       LEE
And I say it would. Look, you get
them out of a ring and into the
real world, and it's lights out
for Ali.
                                                            
                       WILLIAM
You're out of your fuckin' mind.
Ali has taken shots from Foreman,
Frazier, guys who pack a wallop.
                                                            
                       LEE
With their fists.
                                                            
                       WILLIAM
I don't care if Norris comes at
him with a fuckin' crowbar, Ali
floats like a butterfly and stings
like a bee. Norris'd never hit
him.
                                                            
                       LEE
How can you say that if you've
never seen Ali dodge hands and
feet? You ever see how fast Norris
is? This one time on Walker, Texas
Ranger…
                                                            
The Boss cups his hand over the receiver and barks at them
in annoyance.
                                                            
                       BOSS
Will you two shut the fuck up for
five seconds!
                                                            
They stop talking, waiting for the Boss to continue his
conversation. After a few moments, they start again.
                                                            
                       LEE
What about Ali vs. Bruce Lee?
                                                            
                       WILLIAM
Okay, that one would be a tough
call.
                                                            
The Boss hangs up the phone. He shuffles through some papers
on his desk. William and Lee stand in patient silence,
waiting for further instruction.
                                                            
                       BOSS
I have a good one for you boys.
Looks like it's road trip time.
                                                            

22.

                       LEE
Cool. Where to?
                                                            
                       BOSS
You're gonna love this. Branson.
                                                            
                       WILLIAM
Branson? Wheres that, like,
Missouri or something?
                                                            
                       LEE
Well done, Rain Man. Do you also
know your multiplication tables?
                                                            
                       WILLIAM
      (angrily)
Fuck you, combo number five. I'll
drag your ass out of here so fast…
                                                            
Lee begins barking at William in Chinese. William argues
back, also in Chinese. The Boss slams his hand down on the
desk, breaking up the argument immediately.
                                                            
                       BOSS
I swear to Christ, it's like I'm
running a Goddamn daycare around
here.
                                                            
                       WILLIAM
Sorry.
                                                            
                       LEE
Sorry, Boss.
                                                            
                       BOSS
Now listen up. This guy owes us a
lot of money, and I'm starting to
think he isn't going to pay. We
need him to realize the
seriousness of his debt.
                                                            
The Boss hands them each a Manila envelope. William opens
his and removes a photograph.
                                                            
                       WILLIAM
Hey, I recognize this guy.
Brother…
                                                            
He snaps his fingers a couple of times, looking for the
answer.
                                                            
                       LEE
Caine.
                                                            

23.

                       WILLIAM
Yeah, that's him. Televangelist.
This is the guy who owes you
money?
                                                            
                       BOSS
Not just me. He's in hock with
some
other big players. Takes a lot of
money to put on his kind of show.
Frankly, he'll be lucky if we get
to him first.
                                                            
Lee studies the photo for a moment, then looks up at the
Boss.
                                                            
                       LEE
How do you want it handled?
                                                            
                       BOSS
Bring him back here, if he'll
come.
                                                            
                       LEE
And if he doesn't want to?
                                                            
There is silence as they wait for an answer. None comes.
Satisfied that they have all the answer they need, William
and Lee turn and walk toward the door.
                                                            
                       LEE
Okay, what about Jackie Chan?
                                                            
                       WILLIAM
Nah, he's a glorified stuntman.
                                                            
                       BOSS
      (calling out)
You knuckleheads have work to do!
                                                            
As they disappear from site, he calls out once more.
                                                            
                       BOSS
And Rocky Marciano would'a thumped
all them bums!
                                                            
 
INT. BACKSTAGE - DAY
                                                            
Julie makes her way through the backstage area of the
concert hall. She passes various performers and workers,
nodding and smiling at people she knows.
                                                            

24.

As she turns a corner, she is almost run over by another
girl. The girl is about the same age as her, and is also
very pretty. It is clear that she has been crying.
                                                            
                       JULIE
Trudy?
                                                            
                       TRUDY
Julie, I…I'm sorry…
                                                            
She has to stop herself, as the tears are starting to come
again.
                                                            
                       JULIE
What is it? Did something happen?
                                                            
Trudy looks for a moment as though she may open up, and then
just as quickly she breaks down again.
                                                            
                       TRUDY
I'm sorry, I can't…I'm so sorry…
                                                            
Trudy rushes off before Julie can stop her.
                                                            
                       JULIE
Trudy!
                                                            
 
INT. DRESSING ROOM - DAY
                                                            
Brother Caine sits in a chair in his dressing room, facing a
large vanity with an equally large mirror. He wears a white
smock covering him and most of the chair.
                                                            
A female HAIR STYLIST is putting finishing touches on his
do. She looks up as there is a KNOCK on the door. Caine
motions for her to answer it.
                                                            
In the mirror, Caine sees Julie being let into the room. She
approaches.
                                                            
                       CAINE
      (to stylist)
Could you excuse us, please?
                                                            
The woman nods and shows herself out, closing the door
behind her.
                                                            
Caine removes the smock and gets up. He takes a moment to
fuss with his hair in the mirror. Julie watches silently as
he does so. Finally, he turns his attention to her.
                                                            

25.

                       CAINE
Julie, dear. Thanks for coming. I
hope I didn't interrupt anything?
                                                            
                       JULIE
      (smiling)
No, it's fine. Just rehearsing a
bit.
                                                            
                       CAINE
Good, good. Practice makes
perfect.
                                                            
                       JULIE
I just ran into Trudy in the hall.
                                                            
                       CAINE
Yes. About that. She's the reason
I called you in here. Trudy will
be leaving us, effective
immediately.
                                                            
                       JULIE
      (concerned)
Is everything okay?
                                                            
                       CAINE
Oh, she's fine. Just homesick, I'm
afraid. Poor girl misses her
family.
                                                            
                       JULIE
She's going back home?
                                                            
                       CAINE
Yes, today as a matter of fact.
                                                            
Caine begins looking through some suits hanging on a rack.
                                                            
                       CAINE
Which brings us to you. Trudy's
departure leaves an opening for a
lead singer. Most of these girls
are young, and they need guidance.
Wouldn't you agree?
                                                            
Julie nods.
                                                            
                       CAINE
Anyway, you've been impressing me
since day one. I sense something
special in you. Something we can
build on.
                                                            

26.

Caine smiles at Julie. She manages an uncomfortable
half-smile in return.
                                                            
                       CAINE
So if you're interested, the job
is yours.
                                                            
Julie's demeanor suddenly brightens, as if the realization
has just hit her.
                                                            
                       JULIE
      (beaming)
Of course. Absolutely.
                                                            
                       CAINE
      (smiling)
Well, then, it's settled. You've
made me very happy. Spreading the
message, it's a difficult job.
Even I need a little help
sometimes.
                                                            
                       JULIE
Don't worry, you can count on me.
                                                            
As they speak, Caine gradually gets closer and closer to
her.
                                                            
                       CAINE
Good. Trudy was a big help, too.
We were like a little team of our
own, really.
                                                            
Caine is uncomfortably close now, and Julie's demeanor
changes again to reflect it, but she remains in place.
                                                            
                       CAINE
And now it's you and me. We're the
team now. And I can't wait to
start working even closer with
you.
                                                            
Caine grins while Julie squirms uncomfortably. She manages a
bit of a smile.
                                                            
Caine's grin disappears suddenly, and he abruptly turns
away, the moment gone. He returns to his rack of clothes.
                                                            
                       CAINE
All right, then. Back to work.
Lots of people counting on us.
                                                            

27.

Julie waits a moment, unsure if she should say anything.
Finally, she leaves.
                                                            
 
INT. HOTEL LOUNGE - NIGHT
                                                            
Michael and Alison sit at a table in the hotel lounge, notes
and case files laid out in front of them.
                                                            
Michael takes a long drink from his beer and then sets it
down on the table.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I really hate the whack jobs.
                                                            
                       ALISON
      (surprised)
Really? You think this guy fits
the category?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Don't you? He seems pretty out
there to me. What is it with these
crazy religious types, anyway?
                                                            
                       ALISON
I don't know. I'm not convinced
he's as crazy as you think. It's
strange, the way he's been
operating, the route he's taken.
It's almost...regimented. I can't
put my finger on it.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
You think there's method to his
madness?
                                                            
                       ALISON
Here, look.
                                                            
Alison pulls a map in front of her and begins making marks
on it.
                                                            
                       ALISON
I don't think his route is random
at all. I think he's headed
somewhere specific.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Yeah, but where?
                                                            

28.

As Alison considers it, the waitress arrives. Michael lifts
his bottle and motions at Alison's glass. The waitress takes
the cue and leaves to get refills.
                                                            
                       ALISON
So how are your parents?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
They're fine.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Have you seen them lately?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
It's been a while. Why?
                                                            
                       ALISON
Oh, no reason. I was just thinking
about your mom the other day. I've
been meaning to give her a call,
that's all.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Yeah, right.
                                                            
                       ALISON
What? I like your mom.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
That's not what you're getting at.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Really? So what am I getting at?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
You're trying to handle me. What,
did Travers ask you to keep an eye
on me? Are you going to be telling
me to call Dr. Wexler again?
                                                            
                       ALISON
No, it's not that at all.
                                                            
Michael eyes her suspiciously. She looks away.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I knew it. You don't trust me at
all.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Of course I trust you. But you
have to see where Travers is
coming from. You haven't spoken
about what happened, not to
            (MORE)

29.

                       ALISON (cont'd)
Wexler, not Travers. Not even to
me.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I've spoken about it. I've given
statements, depositions...
                                                            
                       ALISON
      (interrupting)
But you haven't really talked
about it. God, Michael, you went
through something most people
could never imagine, and I have no
idea how you feel.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
You don't want to know how I'm
feeling. Trust me on that.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Look, I'm not trying to
psychoanalyze you or anything like
that. I care about you. Why won't
you let me help you?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
You want to help me? Help me catch
this guy. That's all I care about
right now.
                                                            
                       ALISON
I know, and that scares me a
little.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Then how about you change the
subject, huh?
                                                            
                       ALISON
Because I want to help. God, you
won't even talk to me anymore.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
You wanna talk? Then why haven't
you told me about you and Brett?
                                                            
                       ALISON
      (hesitant)
It's...personal.
                                                            

30.

                       MICHAEL
Bullshit. Nothing's personal
anymore. Everything's on the
table.
                                                            
                       ALISON
I just don't want to talk about
it. It's got nothing to do with
us, or this case.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
So you got dumped. Big deal. You
can't even talk about that?
                                                            
                       ALISON
Do you have to put it that way?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Is there a better way to put it?
How about kicked to the curb?
                                                            
As soon as he says it, it's clear Michael regrets it.
Alison's eyes well up for a moment, before she regains
composure.
                                                            
Alison gets up abruptly and storms out. Michael stands up in
an attempt to stop her.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Allie...
                                                            
Before he can pursue, the waitress returns with drinks.
Michael can only stand there, embarrassed.
                                                            
 
INT. HOTEL HALLWAY - NIGHT
                                                            
Michael slowly walks down the hall toward his hotel room. He
stops in front of the door, and pauses for a moment. He
looks at the door across the hall, before finally going into
his room.
                                                            
 
INT. HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Alison sits on the edge of her bed holding a cell phone. She
looks at it for a few moments, as if deciding whether to
dial or not. A tear runs down her face. After a moment, she
drops the phone on the bed beside her.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Dammit.
                                                            

31.

She wipes her face with her sleeve, then gets up and walks
to the bathroom, closing the door behind her.
                                                            
 
INT. HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Michael sits on the edge of his bed. The only light is from
the TV, but he is not watching it. He holds a glass in his
hand, staring blankly ahead. In his other hand is a very
small pair of children's sneakers.
                                                            
The program on TV depicts a crime in progress. There is a
gunshot, and a woman screams.
                                                            
Michael flinches at the sound, then suddenly gets up and
goes to the minibar. He opens it and roots through the small
bottles of alcohol inside.
                                                            
FLASHBACK
                                                            
Michael is in a corner store, looking for something down one
of the aisles. He glances toward an attractive woman and
smiles. She smiles back at him. A young boy runs up to him.
                                                            
                       BOY
Daddy!
                                                            
PRESENT
                                                            
Michael pulls out a handful of bottles from the bar. He
unscrews the cap on one and holds it over his glass.
                                                            
A gunshot rings through his head, and he lurches forward,
spilling the alcohol on the table. He grabs the edge of the
table to steady himself.
                                                            
FLASHBACK
                                                            
Michael runs to the front of the store in time to see the
woman lying on the floor. A man, face unseen, stands over
her holding a gun. The man turns and aims at Michael,
squeezing off a SHOT. Michael goes down.
                                                            
PRESENT
                                                            
Michael manages to get another bottle open. He doesn't
bother with a glass, opting instead to drink it straight
from the bottle. He winces as the liquor goes down.
                                                            

32.

FLASHBACK
                                                            
Michael, lying on the floor, is unable to move. The man
stands over him, face still unseen. Michael looks, and sees
the feet of second, smaller body lying on the floor. He
can't see the rest of the body, but he sees enough.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
No!
                                                            
PRESENT
                                                            
Michael stumbles to his suitcase on the floor. He withdraws
a bottle of pills and leans back against the bed.
                                                            
Popping the cap off, Michael downs some pills with another
drink, wincing as it goes down. He glances at the TV.
                                                            
A man on the TV flashes a badge.
                                                            
                       TV FED
FBI! Freeze!
                                                            
Michael's head slumps to the side, and his hand drops to the
floor, spilling pills onto the carpet.
                                                            
 
INT. HOTEL HALLWAY - NIGHT
                                                            
Michael exits his room, barefoot and carrying an ice bucket.
His eyes are glazed over, and he staggers slightly.
                                                            
He passes a young couple. They glance at him and then
quickly look away.
                                                            
                       GIRL
      (whispering)
That guy looks totally baked.
                                                            
Michael, oblivious to the comment, continues walking.
                                                            
 
INT. ROADHOUSE - NIGHT
                                                            
Sean and Joseph are sitting in a roadside bar, having a
drink, while a various assortment of patrons listens to the
band play cover tunes.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Look around you. What do you see?
                                                            
Joseph looks around as the band finishes their rendition of
"Jumpin' Jack Flash" and switches to "Hotel California".
                                                            

33.

                       JOSEPH
      (shrugging)
I don't know. A bunch of people in
a bar?
                                                            
                       SEAN
Okay, but look closer.
                                                            
As he follows him around the bar, Joseph begins to see what
Sean sees.
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (pointing)
What do you see there?
                                                            
A group of young guys, probably around the same age as
Joseph, are carrying on at a table across the room.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Looks like some college guys
blowing off steam.
                                                            
Sean points toward a pair of truckers, having a close
conversation with a suggestively dressed woman.
                                                            
                       SEAN
And what do you see there?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
I don't like to judge.
                                                            
                       SEAN
You're right, "Judge not, lest ye
be judged". Still, you know what I
see?
                                                            
Joseph shrugs his shoulders.
                                                            
                       SEAN
I see opportunity. Opportunity to
save people who don't even know
they need saving.
                                                            
Sean takes a drink, as Joseph looks around.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
I see what you mean. When you know
what to look for, it's not that
hard.
                                                            

34.

                       SEAN
Of course not. Finding people who
need saved is the easy part.
Actually saving them, well...
                                                            
Sean looks toward the bouncers.
                                                            
                       SEAN
What do you think would happen if
I just up and started trying to
spread the word right here and
now?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
People wouldn't listen.
                                                            
                       SEAN
That's right. Actually, they'd
listen for the ten seconds or so
that it would take to throw us out
of here, and then they wouldn't
hear anything after slamming the
door behind us.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
So, why come here at all?
                                                            
                       SEAN
For two reasons. Jesus didn't walk
with the so-called good people. He
walked with the prostitutes and
criminals. How can you help people
if you don't even know who you're
helping, or what you're helping
them from?
                                                            
As Sean speaks, he watches the truck driver and the woman
get up and start toward the door.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
And what's the second reason?
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (grinning)
Even Jesus drank the wine once in
a while. Nothing wrong with
tipping a glass.
                                                            
Joseph nods in agreement, and takes another drink.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
On that note, I've gotta go to the
little boy's room.
                                                            

35.

As Joseph gets up and walks away from the table, Sean's eyes
are on the trucker and the woman, going in the opposite
direction, out the door.
                                                            
 
INT. WASHROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Joseph is finishing up doing his business at the urinal in
the men's room. He zips up and goes to the sink.
                                                            
 
EXT. PARKING LOT - NIGHT
                                                            
Sean leaves the bar and walks into the parking lot. He sees
the trucker and the woman walking toward where the big rigs
are parked. He slowly follows.
                                                            
 
INT. ROADHOUSE - NIGHT
                                                            
Joseph arrives back at the table, only to find Sean already
gone. He looks around curiously, then heads toward the door.
                                                            
 
EXT. PARKING LOT - NIGHT
                                                            
Sean watches as the trucker and the woman disappear between
two big rigs. As he approaches, he draws his gun from inside
his coat.
                                                            
Sean passes a rig, and fails to notice another trucker up on
the running boards of his truck, inspecting his rig. This
one catches a glance of Sean passing by with gun in hand.
                                                            
The trucker climbs down off of the rig, careful not to let
Sean see him.
                                                            
 
EXT. ROADHOUSE - NIGHT
                                                            
Joseph stands in the parking lot just outside the exit to
the bar. He looks around, trying to locate Sean.
                                                            
 
EXT. PARKING LOT - NIGHT
                                                            
Sean finds the trucker and the woman in the confined space
between the two rigs. The trucker is standing with his pants
down and his eyes closed, as the woman, crouched down,
performs oral sex on him. They aren't aware of Sean closing
in, gun in hand.
                                                            

36.

Meanwhile, Trucker #2, having eluded Sean, sneaks up from
behind carrying a crowbar.
                                                            
Sean raises his gun to fire, but before he can pull the
trigger, Trucker #2 slams the crowbar down across his back.
Sean stumbles forward from the impact, and his gun goes
sliding across the ground under the truck.
                                                            
Trucker #1 and the woman look up, startled. Trucker #2 puts
his arms up to let them know he is on their side.
                                                            
                       TRUCKER #2
I caught this son of a bitch
sneaking up.
I think he was gonna rob you.
                                                            
Trucker #1, after pulling his pants up, walks over to Sean,
who is down on all fours.
                                                            
                       TRUCKER #1
Is that true, boy? You were gonna
rob us?
                                                            
He kicks Sean hard in the stomach. Sean rolls over on his
back, groaning.
                                                            
The woman comes over to join the fray.
                                                            
                       ROADHOUSE WOMAN
Hit the bastard again!
                                                            
Sean is trying to get back up when Trucker #1 punches him
across the face. He falls back down on the ground.
                                                            
                       TRUCKER #1
Mind if I borrow that?
                                                            
Trucker #2 looks down at the crowbar in his hand, and then
hands it over to Trucker #1.
                                                            
                       TRUCKER #2
Be my guest.
                                                            
Trucker #1 positions himself over Sean, who is once again
attempting to get back up.
                                                            
                       TRUCKER #1
Sweet dreams, fucker.
                                                            
He raises the crowbar over his head, preparing to strike.
Before he can follow through, a SHOT rings out, stopping
him.
                                                            

37.

Joseph, looking confused and nervous, is pointing Sean's gun
at them.
                                                            
The truckers and the woman slowly back up. Sean, down on
bended knee, wipes blood from his lip. He smiles at Joseph,
before standing up.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
What's going on, Sean?
                                                            
Joseph, holding the gun out in front of him, is visibly
shaking. Sean walks to him.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Nothing. Just a little
misunderstanding.
                                                            
Sean slowly reaches out and takes the gun from him.
                                                            
                       TRUCKER #1
Don't listen to him, kid. He's
trying to…
                                                            
Sean turns quickly and points the gun in his direction,
silencing him.
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (to Joseph)
I told you, there were people who
wouldn't want to accept the Word.
No one said it would be easy.
                                                            
Joseph watches the group huddled in front of him.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Here, why don't you go start the
car. I'm gonna straighten things
out with these nice people, make
sure they know it was just a
misunderstanding.
                                                            
He hands Joseph his keys.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Okay. Sure.
                                                            
Sean watches as Joseph walks into the distance, back toward
the bar. Satisfied, he turns his attention back to the
group.
                                                            
                       SEAN
As I said, this was just a little
misunderstanding.
                                                            

38.

He raises his gun toward them.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Thing is, it's not between you and
me, it's between you and God. But
I'll tell you what, how about you
clear it up with him yourselves.
                                                            
Sean steps in between the trucks, out of view. Bright
FLASHES accompany three GUNSHOTS.
                                                            
 
EXT. PARKING LOT - NIGHT
                                                            
Sean approaches the already running car and gets in.
                                                            
 
INT. CAR - NIGHT
                                                            
Sean places the car in drive and slowly pulls out of the
parking lot. Joseph sits silently beside him, looking down
at the floor.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Hey, you okay over there?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
      (quietly)
Yeah, I'm fine.
                                                            
Sean nods, keeping his eyes on the road.
                                                            
                       SEAN
You sure you're okay?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
I don't like violence. I'm sorry.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Don't worry about it. No one...
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
When they were beating on you back
there...All I could think about
was my father.
                                                            
Sean waits for him to continue, but he stays silent a moment
longer.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Feel like talking about it?
                                                            

39.

                       JOSEPH
He drank a lot. And he used to hit
us. Mostly my mom.
                                                            
Joseph's eyes get wide.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Can you pull over, please?
                                                            
Sean doesn't even question it. He pulls over, and Joseph is
out of the car before it even comes to a complete stop.
Joseph leans over by the back of the car and vomits.
                                                            
Sean immediately gets out and goes to stand by him. He
places a hand on Joseph's back for support. Joseph stays
bent over, coughing.
                                                            
                       SEAN
That's it, let it out. It's okay.
                                                            
 
INT. EXAMINING ROOM - DAY
                                                            
A single overhead light illuminates the examining table, but
little else, leaving the room in murky shadows. There is a
cold, antiseptic feel to the room.
                                                            
A woman, probably in her late forties, stands behind the
table, dressed in a medical smock typical of a forensics
examiner. A body lies on the table, covered in a sheet.
                                                            
Two DETECTIVES enter the room, a male and a female, both
dressed in low key business suits. They approach the table.
                                                            
                       GUY DETECTIVE
Okay, Alice, what do you have for
us?
                                                            
ALICE, the examiner, waits until they are close enough to
follow her narrative.
                                                            
                       ALICE
Jane Doe, found out in the river.
                                                            
                       GIRL DETECTIVE
How long was she in the water?
                                                            
                       ALICE
From the condition of the body,
the amount of
water intake, about three days.
                                                            

40.

                       GUY DETECTIVE
Any idea why she didn't wash up on
shore?
                                                            
                       ALICE
Yeah, look here.
                                                            
She pulls the sheet up, revealing puffy ankles and feet.
There are signs of bruising around the ankles.
                                                            
                       GUY DETECTIVE
She was weighted down.
                                                            
                       ALICE
Yeah, and it was a fluke that she
was found at all. A diver doing
work on an underwater line spotted
her.
                                                            
                       GIRL DETECTIVE
Can we get an ID on her?
                                                            
                       ALICE
I'll run fingerprints, dental.
                                                            
                       GUY DETECTIVE
Let's have a look.
                                                            
Alice pulls the sheet down, exposing the face. The girl
lying on the table is Trudy.
                                                            
                       GUY DETECTIVE
Pretty girl.
                                                            
                       GIRL DETECTIVE
What's the cause of death?
                                                            
                       ALICE
Blunt trauma to the back of the
skull. She was
dead before she hit the water.
                                                            
                       GUY DETECTIVE
Probably didn't feel much.
                                                            
There is a moment of silence, perhaps in respect for the
deceased.
                                                            
                       GIRL DETECTIVE
Okay, we'll get started as soon as
we get your report.
                                                            
Alice stops them as they prepare to leave.
                                                            

41.

                       ALICE
There's one more thing you should
know.
                                                            
They pause for a moment in expectation.
                                                            
                       ALICE
She was pregnant.
                                                            
The two detectives look at one another with mild surprise.
                                                            
                       GIRL DETECTIVE
Looks like we may have motive.
                                                            
                       GUY DETECTIVE
Yep. Thanks, Alice.
                                                            
They turn and head out the door. Alice nods, then goes back
to work.
                                                            
 
INT. BACKSTAGE - DAY
                                                            
Julie stands backstage, taking a break from rehearsal. She
looks and sees Caine standing, away from everyone, talking
closely with one of the other singers.
                                                            
Caine says something, making the girl laugh. They are
inappropriately close, and Caine playfully strokes her hair.
                                                            
A stage hand approaches and whispers something in Caine's
ear. Caine is obviously annoyed by the intrusion, lashing
out angrily at the man. The man retreats, and Caine turns
back to the girl as if nothing happened.
                                                            
Julie watches in disbelief for another moment, and Caine
catches her watching. She turns away immediately.
                                                            
 
INT. HOTEL ROOM - DAY
                                                            
Michael, still in the same hotel room, is getting dressed.
He has his pants on, but is shirtless, revealing an
athlete's muscular build. He hears a KNOCK at the door.
                                                            
Michael opens the door a crack, and is surprised to see
Alison. He opens the door all the way and motions her in.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Hey, come on in.
                                                            
Alison enters the room. Michael walks toward the bathroom,
while Alison walks toward the bed.
                                                            

42.

                       MICHAEL
I'll just be a minute or two.
                                                            
Michael enters the bathroom, leaving the door open a crack.
Alison sits at the edge of the bed.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Don't worry, take your time.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
      (calling out)
Hey, I'm sorry I was so hard on
you last night.
                                                            
                       ALISON
It's okay. I guess it's just this
case, it's taking a toll.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Yeah, it's pretty rough.
                                                            
Alison moves her foot slightly, and the look on her face
indicates that she feels something. Reaching down, she
discreetly pulls out the pill bottle dropped by Michael.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I was thinking about getting some
breakfast. What do you think?
                                                            
Alison studies the bottle for a moment. She doesn't look up
as she replies.
                                                            
                       ALISON
      (absently)
Yeah, sounds good.
                                                            
Alison puts the bottle in her pocket and gets up.
                                                            
                       ALISON
I'll meet you down there, I've
gotta make a call.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Okay.
                                                            
 
INT. HOTEL RESTAURANT - DAY
                                                            
Alison sits at a table facing the door, giving her a view of
everyone coming and going. She talks on her cell phone.
                                                            

43.

                       ALISON
      (into phone)
...he just won't open up. And it's
not just me, he won't talk to
anyone.
                                                            
DR. WEXLER's disembodied voice speaks over the phone.
                                                            
                       WEXLER
      (on phone)
We pretty much expected that.
You're just gonna have to give it
time, and whatever you do, don't
try to force it. He'll only close
up more.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Yeah, he's pretty stubborn.
                                                            
Alison hesitates.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Can I ask you something else, Dr.
Wexler?
                                                            
                       WEXLER
Of course.
                                                            
                       ALISON
What if he's not...taking care of
himself?
                                                            
                       WEXLER
Well, his health is of utmost
importance. What makes you think
he's ignoring it?
                                                            
Alison pauses as she looks at the pill bottle once more,
before placing it back in her pocket.
                                                            
                       ALISON
No reason. Forget it. I'm just
worried about him, that's all.
                                                            
                       WEXLER
We all are, but frankly, I'm just
as worried about you.
                                                            
                       ALISON
You don't have to worry about me,
I'm fine.
                                                            

44.

                       WEXLER
I know you're strong, but I have
to admit I was initially opposed
to you going along with him on
this one, considering your history
and all.
                                                            
FLASHBACK
                                                            
Alison stands in a semi-dark room, her back turned and eyes
closed.
                                                            
A hand slowly makes it's way to her shoulders, caressing
them. Alison appears to be enjoying it.
                                                            
A figure comes into view behind her. The figure leans in,
kissing her on the neck, revealing himself as Michael.
                                                            
PRESENT
                                                            
                       ALISON
Well, that's more like ancient
history now. I just want to make
sure he doesn't hurt himself, or
anyone else.
                                                            
                       WEXLER
I know, and that's why I gave in.
Regardless of whatever else I can
say, you two have been close for a
long time, so maybe you're the one
he'll eventually open up to.
                                                            
Alison notices Michael walking into the restaurant.
                                                            
                       ALISON
I hope you're right. Thanks, Doc.
                                                            
                       WEXLER
Take care.
                                                            
Michael pulls up a chair just as Alison hangs up and puts
the phone back in her pocket.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Sorry to keep you waiting. I'm
starved.
                                                            
Alison simply smiles in response.
                                                            
 

45.

EXT. PARKING LOT - DAY
                                                            
C/U on the face of Trucker #1 from earlier, his face pale
and his eyes closed, followed by the snap of a camera shot.
                                                            
Michael and Alison are investigating the crime scene as a
photographer gets pictures.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
What are the odds?
                                                            
                       ALISON
What, that our guy strikes again,
and we're staying in a hotel
fifteen minutes away?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
So you think it's our guy again?
                                                            
                       ALISON
Probably, except...
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Except what?
                                                            
                       ALISON
He's been leaving a witness in
most cases. Someone to relay what
he's had to say. I don't know,
like he needs...
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
An audience?
                                                            
                       ALISON
It's possible.
                                                            
Michael stands.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
So we're this close when it goes
down. Where's he heading?
                                                            
                       ALISON
And who's his audience now?
                                                            
Michael raises his eyebrows, considering the point.
                                                            
 
INT. CAR - DAY
                                                            
Joseph looks out the window as he and Sean drive along the
highway. Gospel music plays on the radio.
                                                            

46.

                       JOSEPH
How much longer do you think?
                                                            
                       SEAN
Oh, probably a day or so. I'm
taking the scenic route. No hurry.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
That's cool.
                                                            
A few moments of silence pass.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
So, you married or something?
                                                            
                       SEAN
No.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Girlfriend?
                                                            
                       SEAN
No. I did, but...not anymore. She
was taken from me.
                                                            
Joseph watches him closely for a moment, waiting for more.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Sorry, I didn't mean to pry.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Don't worry about it.
                                                            
As quickly as it darkened, Sean's mood brightens again.
                                                            
                       SEAN
How about we turn the radio up and
enjoy this ride?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Sounds good to me.
                                                            
 
INT. CONCERT HALL - DAY
                                                            
A series of intercuts between Joseph entering the hall and
Julie's dressing room.
                                                            
Joseph enters a back hallway, light from outside streaming
through the closing door.
                                                            
Julie stands in her dressing room. A pair of hands reaches
up from behind, slowly removing her robe.
                                                            

47.

Joseph continues walking down the hallway.
                                                            
Julie stand in place while the man behind her runs his hands
over her and kisses her on the neck and shoulders.
                                                            
Joseph arrives at a door. He reaches out cautiously,
preparing to enter.
                                                            
Julie continues to enjoy the attention she is receiving. The
door slowly opens, revealing Joseph standing just outside
the doorway.
                                                            
Joseph stares, dumbfounded, at the scene he has walked in
on. Frozen in place, he can only look on in disbelief.
                                                            
Julie looks up casually to see Joseph watching her. She
makes no effort to stop or to cover up. Slowly, the figure
behind her emerges. It is Brother Caine. Caine locks eyes
with Joseph, slowly allowing a smile to form on his face.
                                                            
Joseph, suddenly able to react, reaches out, as if in an
attempt to pull Julie away. Before he can do it, the door
loudly SLAMS in his face.
                                                            
 
EXT. CAR - NIGHT
                                                            
Joseph awakes with a start from the dream, breathing heavy.
It is dark out, and Sean is nowhere to be seen.
                                                            
He leans his head back, closes his eyes, and exhales deeply.
Suddenly, there is another loud BANG, this one for real. He
sits up quickly.
                                                            
Cautiously, Joseph gets out of the car. They are parked on a
nearly deserted side street. A small tributary from the
river flows close by.
                                                            
Looking up, Joseph sees a sign that says "North Street
Foods". Below it is the qualifier "Specializing in Middle
East Recipes".
                                                            
He strains, listening for some clue as to what is going on.
Gradually, he hears a murmur of voices.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
      (cautiously)
Sean?
                                                            
Receiving no reply, Joseph slowly enters a door at the rear
of the building that is unlocked.
                                                            
 

48.

INT. HOUSE - NIGHT
                                                            
Joseph enters the house carefully, following the dark
hallway to the living room. He can still hear the faint
voices.
                                                            
A faint light in the living room allows him to see Sean, gun
in hand, holding a family at bay.
                                                            
The family members are all of Arab descent. The father
stands protectively in front of his wife and young daughter.
His mother and brother also huddle close.
                                                            
Sean senses Joseph's approach, but keeps his attention on
the family.
                                                            
                       SEAN
I'm glad you're here to see this.
                                                            
As Joseph comes closer, the family head looks toward him
with an expression of pleading on his face.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
      (cautiously)
Sean, what's going on here?
                                                            
Sean doesn't turn his attention from the family.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Take a seat, and I'll tell you.
                                                            
Joseph slowly moves to a sofa almost directly behind Sean,
but he doesn't sit.
                                                            
                       SEAN
The lessons never end, you know.
One minute, you're driving along,
minding your own business, and
then, next thing you know, BAM!
                                                            
Everyone in the room jumps as Sean puts extra emphasis into
it.
                                                            
                       SEAN
It's right there in front of you,
like a sign. You know
what the sign said this time?
                                                            
No one answers.
                                                            
                       SEAN
I'll tell you what it said. It
said, "Eastern Specialty Foods".
                                                            

49.

Sean begins to laugh, and for a moment, it appears as though
he is expecting everyone to join him in his laughter. It
quickly fades.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Eastern specialty foods. Don't
that beat all. I have a better
sign than that. How about, "Den of
Sin". You think that's a better
fit?
                                                            
He turns his attention to Joseph.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Whadda ya think? Would that make a
good marquee?
                                                            
Joseph eyes him closely, but can find no reply.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Well, I'll tell you why it would.
Anyone here familiar with the ten
commandments? Anyone?
                                                            
Again, no reply.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Commandment number one, "Thou
shalt have no God before me". No
God before me. Pretty clear, don't
you think. And what do you think I
find when I walk in here?
                                                            
Sean reaches over to a side table close to him, and picks up
a book lying there. It is a copy of the Qur'an.
                                                            
                       SEAN
This. A book of lies. Everything
that goes against everything the
commandments state as law. Tell
me something, Joseph, what happens
to people who break the law in
this country?
                                                            
He turns his attention, and his gun, in Joseph's direction.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
They're…punished?
                                                            
As soon as he says it, he realizes it is the wrong thing to
say.
                                                            

50.

                       SEAN
Yeah, that's right. They're
punished. So tell me, why
should violating God's law be any
different?
                                                            
The father of the family can restrain himself no longer.
                                                            
                       FATHER
      (pleading)
No! Please! We are not violating
God's law!
                                                            
Sean immediately redirects his gun in the man's direction.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Not violating God's law? Are you
saying I'm stupid? Are you?
                                                            
The man takes a more defensive posture in front of his
family, but does not answer.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Because last time I checked, I
could count. And since the first
commandment is the first one I
come to, I should be able to
figure out if you're violating
that one at least. Let's see.
"Thou shalt have no other Gods
before me". Should we have a look
in this book?
                                                            
Sean holds up the copy of the Qur'an.
                                                            
                       SEAN
How about it? Last time I checked,
my God and savior Jesus Christ.
Funny, I don't see him anywhere in
here.
                                                            
Sean throws the book in Joseph's direction. Joseph catches
it, then looks at Sean with a confused expression on his
face.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Go ahead, take a look. Find the
passage where it says Jesus
Christ is our Lord and Savior.
                                                            
Joseph eyes him curiously, but does not open the book. Sean
barely gives it a moment.
                                                            

51.

                       SEAN
Yeah, just as I thought. It's
empty. Completely empty.
                                                            
Sean cocks the hammer on the gun he is holding. The father
of the family cringes, then looks in Joseph's direction,
pleading with him.
                                                            
                       FATHER
Please, you have to reason with
him.
                                                            
Sean appears to take exception to this.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Reason? Are you kidding me? Where
is the reason in flying a plane
full of innocent people into a
building?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Sean, come on…
                                                            
Sean turns quickly and points the gun at Joseph.
                                                            
                       SEAN
What? Are you saying I'm wrong?
I'd hate to think that I've been
wasting my time with you.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Will you stop pointing that gun at
me. I know what you're saying, but
these people are not killers, look
at them.
                                                            
                       FATHER
Yes! Yes! Listen to him. Please!
We are not evil people. We love
all people, just like you. Our God
says so, just like yours.
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (chuckling)
Just like me. That's really funny.
                                                            
Sean suddenly explodes in a fury. He grabs the man by the
hair and pulls him close, pressing his gun against the back
of the man's head.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Get down on your knees!
                                                            

52.

The man's wife screams, and the brother makes a move to try
to help. Sean swings his gun in their direction.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Don't move! Don't even think about
it!
                                                            
Joseph steps in, attempting to defuse the situation.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Sean, you've gotta stop…
                                                            
Sean reacts by shoving him back. Joseph stumbles and lands
on the couch. Sean turns in his direction.
                                                            
                       SEAN
I'm not even close to kidding
here. You stay out of
my way on this, or so help me…
                                                            
Joseph appears to consider his next move, but then sits
back, reluctantly allowing Sean to continue.
                                                            
Sean turns his attention back to the father, who is now
kneeling before him.
                                                            
                       SEAN
I'm going to show you something,
and I want
you to pay close attention.
                                                            
Sean unbuttons his shirt and lifts his undershirt, exposing
his midsection.
                                                            
There is a collective gasp in the room.
                                                            
A series of scars runs vertically along Sean's chest and
stomach. He slowly turns so that everyone in the room can
see them.
                                                            
Joseph appears frozen as he looks, unable to take his eyes
off of Sean. Sean holds his position in front of Joseph for
an extra moment, allowing him to take it all in.
                                                            
 
INT. HOUSE - NIGHT
                                                            
As Sean puts on his display, he is oblivious to the extra
set of eyes watching him. A young boy of no more than 7 or 8
sits huddled in a closet, peeking through the barely open
door.
                                                            
 

53.

INT. HOUSE - NIGHT
                                                            
Sean covers himself back up. He holds his gun at the back of
the father's head.
                                                            
                       SEAN
So tell me now, is this the love
that you've been talking about?
The love that your "God" claims to
profess?
                                                            
Sean waits a moment, giving the man a moment to think about
it.
                                                            
                       FATHER
Please...
                                                            
                       SEAN
Because when I was strapped down
to that chair, and they cut me
with a razor, I wasn't feeling a
lot of love. We went there to free
them from a dictator, to free
people we didn't even know, and
how did they repay us?
                                                            
Sean looks in Joseph's direction.
                                                            
                       SEAN
I watched a young kid, no older
than you, take a bullet in the
back of his head while he knelt on
the floor, pleading for his life.
Does that sound like a fitting
death for a soldier?
                                                            
Sean turns his attention once more to the father.
                                                            
                       SEAN
What do you think? How does dying
on your knees sound?
                                                            
                       FATHER
Please, I beg you…
                                                            
                       SEAN
No, that doesn't work anymore. The
second you waged war on us, you
gave up that right. Only God can
show you mercy now.
                                                            

54.

                       JOSEPH
Sean, this is going too far, man.
You have to let…
                                                            
                       SEAN
Because that's what it is, now.
It's war. And you've gotta chose
which side you're on.
                                                            
Sean pushed the gun harder against the back of the man's
head, but keeps his eyes trained on Joseph.
                                                            
                       SEAN
So which is it?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Don't do this.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Time to take a stand.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
I'm not going to help you kill
these people! This is insane!
                                                            
                       SEAN
Chose your side!
                                                            
Joseph hesitates, wanting to do something but not sure what.
Having given him a moment to act, Sean turns his attention
away from Joseph and back to the father kneeling in front of
him. He closes his eyes and begins to speak.
                                                            
                       SEAN
"And yea, though I walk through
the valley of the shadow of death,
no evil shall I fear."
                                                            
Realization of what is about to happen dawns on Joseph, but
it is too late.
                                                            
Outside, the street is still silent. The silence is
shattered by a GUNSHOT, followed by several more.
                                                            
 
EXT. STREET - NIGHT
                                                            
Sean, whistling quietly as he walks, approaches the car.
Things are still quiet on the outside.
                                                            
Joseph, hands on the hood, leans over the front of the car,
breathing heavily and muttering to himself.
                                                            

55.

                       JOSEPH
      (distressed)
Oh man...oh Jesus...this isn't
happening...it's a dream, I just
have to wake up...
                                                            
Sean approaches, putting his hand out to comfort Joseph.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Take it easy, partner, it's...
                                                            
Joseph pulls away suddenly.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Don't touch me!
                                                            
Sean backs down.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
What the fuck happened in there?
                                                            
                       SEAN
What do you want me to say?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Tell me I didn't just watch you
kill an entire family! I imagined
the whole thing, right?
                                                            
Joseph paces for a moment, seemingly confused and mumbling
to himself.
                                                            
                       SEAN
No, you saw what you saw. Is that
what you want to hear?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
      (frantically)
It can't be this way! Please! Tell
me this isn't what we do!
                                                            
                       SEAN
Just relax. First of all, you
didn't do anything...
                                                            
Joseph doesn't wait for him to finish, opting instead to
open the car door and retrieve his backpack.
                                                            
                       SEAN
What are you doing?
                                                            

56.

                       JOSEPH
I'm getting away from you, that's
what I'm doing.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Fair enough. But let me finish
what I was saying. You didn't do
anything.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
So?
                                                            
                       SEAN
So, why not? That's what I wanna
know. You didn't even try to stop
me. How come?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
I...
                                                            
Joseph has no answer.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Yeah, just what I thought. It's
easy to criticize, but given the
chance to actually do something,
and you're just like everyone
else.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
You had a gun!
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (smirking)
Oh, yeah, I forgot about that.
                                                            
He approaches Joseph, holding his gun out in front of him.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Here, take it.
                                                            
Joseph looks at him in confusion.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Take it!
                                                            
Joseph reluctantly takes the gun.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Now you've got no excuses. What
are you gonna do?
                                                            
Joseph looks down at the gun in his hand.
                                                            

57.

                       SEAN
Here, I'll make it easy.
                                                            
Sean kneels down in front of him.
                                                            
                       SEAN
It's up to you now. I'm on my
knees, just like that man in
there. You hold all the cards. Do
what you think's right.
                                                            
Joseph hesitates for a moment, before putting the gun up to
Sean's forehead. A moment passes. Sean, sensing the
hesitation, closes his eyes. Joseph agonizes, squeezing the
gun in his hand. He trembles slightly, and a tear runs down
his cheek. Another moment passes, and the gun drops to
Joseph's side. Sean opens his eyes.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Atta boy.
                                                            
Sean stands, taking the gun from him.
                                                            
Joseph relinquishes the gun. They lock eyes for a moment,
but the moment passes. Joseph immediately starts to walk
away.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Joe, where are you going?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
      (defiantly)
Away from you.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Get back in the car.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Why? So I can watch you shoot more
innocent people?
                                                            
                       SEAN
They're not innocent, and we both
know it. Now get in the car!
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
No! I don't know if you noticed,
but you can't tell me what to do.
You're not my father.
                                                            

58.

                       SEAN
You're goddamn right. Because if I
was you're father, you'd know
which side you're on.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Excuse me?
                                                            
                       SEAN
You heard me. I know you can chose
between right and wrong, so why
can't you pick a side?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
      (unsure)
I know right from wrong...
                                                            
                       SEAN
And you just stood there and let
me kill them. So you're either a
coward, or you think I'm right.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
I'm not a coward.
                                                            
                       SEAN
I didn't think so.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
I...
                                                            
                       SEAN
I just don't think your father
finished what he started.
                                                            
Joseph's eyes widen, and he looks ready to respond, but
nothing comes out.
                                                            
                       SEAN
I mean, what's the point of
beating you like that, if it
doesn't make you fight back?
                                                            
Joseph suddenly lunges, but Sean moves out of the way,
grabbing him in a hold.
                                                            
                       SEAN
That's what I wanted to see!
                                                            
Sean drags him to the side of the road, where the bank leads
to the water. Sean throws him down to the water.
                                                            

59.

Joseph immediately tries to get up after hitting the water,
but Sean is upon him, grabbing him in the hold again.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Your father's only part of the
problem. You haven't given
yourself up completely yet, have
you?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
What are you talking about?
                                                            
                       SEAN
You've gotta give it all up. Your
past, your father, all of it. Give
yourself up to the light.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
What...
                                                            
Before he can finish, Sean shoves him down under the water,
holding him there.
                                                            
                       SEAN
The water will wash it all away.
Water washes everything clean.
                                                            
From underwater, all sound from above is muffled. All Joseph
can see is a hazy figure standing above him.
                                                            
Sean suddenly pulls Joseph out of the water. Joseph coughs
and spits water water.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Do you reject Satan, and all his
empty promises?
                                                            
Joseph, still reeling from being submerged, is unable to
reply. Sean plunges him beneath the water again.
                                                            
Joseph hears the same muffled sound and sees the outline of
Sean standing over him. Then, over top of the noise, a voice
from Joseph's memory rings out in his head.
                                                            
                       JOE'S FATHER (o/s)
You're nothing but a goddamn
disappointment.
                                                            
Sean lifts him out of the water again.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Do you reject Satan, and all his
empty promises?
                                                            

60.

Again, Joseph hesitates, and again Sean plunges him under
the water.
                                                            
Joseph looks up from under the water. Time seems to slow
down, and everything becomes almost dreamy.
                                                            
FLASHBACK
                                                            
Joseph, as a young child, stands silently trembling. His
father seems to tower over him. The man has a mean look, and
when he speaks, there is a slight slur in his voice. He is
unshaven, and wears a white wife-beater undershirt. On the
table beside him is an almost empty bottle of whisky.
                                                            
                       JOE'S FATHER
Did you hear me? I said you're a
disappointment. A failure!
                                                            
Joseph flinches at the sound of his father's voice. The man
comes closer, removing his belt.
                                                            
                       JOE'S FATHER
You're no better than a bad dog.
Well, I'll show you how to take
care of a dog.
                                                            
Joseph winces as the man raises his hand, brandishing his
belt. There is a loud THWACK sound as it makes contact.
                                                            
PRESENT
                                                            
Joseph comes violently out of the water, coinciding with the
sound of the belt. Sean is still there, holding him upright.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Do you reject Satan...
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Yes!
                                                            
Sean is startled by the sudden response. They fall silent
and look at one another for a moment. Joseph, trembling in
the cold, has tears running down his face. Slowly, he drops
to his knees, looking up at Sean. Water covers him almost to
his neck.
                                                            
Sean reaches out and places his hand on top of Joseph's
head.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Are you with me?
                                                            

61.

                       JOSEPH
Yes.
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (smiling)
Good. Then let's get started.
                                                            
 
INT. CRIME SCENE - DAY
                                                            
The living room is now a crime scene, as police, Forensics,
photographers, and emergency workers go about their
business. The bodies are being loaded onto gurneys.
                                                            
Michael stands in the hallway that leads to the living room,
speaking to a FEMALE FIELD AGENT.
                                                            
                       FEMALE AGENT
...hid in the closet during the
whole thing. Poor kid.
                                                            
She glances over her shoulder. The young boy who had been
hiding in the closet is sitting in another room, being
consoled by a compassionate looking woman.
                                                            
                       FEMALE AGENT
Social Services are with him now.
They'll try to find out if there
are any living relatives here.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Were you able to get much from
him?
                                                            
                       FEMALE AGENT
Quite a bit, yeah. His English is
perfect, I'd say he was born here.
He didn't get a good look at the
shooter, but he heard pretty much
everything.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
And?
                                                            
                       FEMALE AGENT
I think it was your guy. I read
the files, and it matches. Lots of
preaching, says he's doing God's
work. God, I hate these cases. I
can just see it now. "The Angel of
Death". The press is probably
having a field day by now.
                                                            

62.

                       MICHAEL
I hear you. Can you get me a full
report?
                                                            
                       FEMALE AGENT
Sure. Oh, something else you'll
want to know.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
What's that?
                                                            
                       FEMALE AGENT
Kid thinks the shooter wasn't
alone.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
      (dumbfounded)
Excuse me?
                                                            
                       FEMALE AGENT
Yeah, I thought you'd say that. He
couldn't see anyone, but he says
there was definitely a different
voice he didn't recognize. He
thinks the other person left
before the shooting started.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Okay, thanks. Get me that report?
                                                            
                       FEMALE AGENT
You got it.
                                                            
They part company. Michael approaches Alison, who is
kneeling beside a body still lying on the floor.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
The kid's with Social Services.
He's told us pretty
much everything he can right now.
                                                            
                       ALISON
      (sniffling)
How is he?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
He seems okay. Maybe he'll be able
to tell us more once he's had some
time with the counselor.
                                                            

63.

                       ALISON
      (annoyed)
I mean, how's he doing
emotionally?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Sorry, I thought you meant...
                                                            
                       ALISON
Well, don't just think.
                                                            
She storms out.
                                                            
 
INT. STORE - DAY
                                                            
Alison, fuming, walks down the hall and enters the
storefront area where a few people are congregated. She
passes a couple of MALE AGENTS as she heads out the door.
                                                            
                       MALE AGENT 1
What's up her ass?
                                                            
                       MALE AGENT 2
I'm guessing it's not Westphal. At
least, not anymore. Maybe that's
why she's so pissed.
                                                            
They both start to chuckle at the joke. It is cut short when
they notice Michael making a bee line toward them.
                                                            
                       MALE AGENT 2
Oh, sh...
                                                            
Michael tackles the man, and they fall to the ground. Chaos
ensues, with everyone assembled moving to separate them.
Agent 1 holds Agent 2 back, while Michael is restrained by
two other men.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
You don't talk about her like
that! You hear me! You do not
disrespect her...
                                                            
Alison rushes back inside.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Michael! Michael, look at me!
                                                            
Michael struggles for a second before focusing on Alison.
They lock eyes, and he immediately begins to relent.
                                                            

64.

                       ALISON
Go outside and calm yourself down.
Please.
                                                            
Michael nods, and is released by the men holding him. He
walks to the door without looking at anyone and exits.
                                                            
Alison watches him go before heading out herself. As she
passes the offending agent, she gives him a look, causing
the embarrassed man to look away.
                                                            
 
EXT. OUTSIDE STORE - DAY
                                                            
Alison walks to the car, where Michael is standing waiting
for her.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Get in the car.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Where are we going?
                                                            
Alison is already opening the driver's door and getting in.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Just get in.
                                                            
Michael hesitates, before getting in.
                                                            
 
EXT. PARK - DAY
                                                            
The car rolls to a stop beside a local park. No one is
around as it is still early.
                                                            
Alison gets out and starts walking across the grass. She
seems to be almost muttering to herself.
                                                            
Michael slowly gets out, watching Alison as she moves
further away from him. He decides to pursue after a moment.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Hey, wait up.
                                                            
Alison stops as Michael approaches, but she keeps her back
to him.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
What's gotten into you?
                                                            
                       ALISON
What's gotten into me?
                                                            

65.

She turns to face him.
                                                            
                       ALISON
I should be asking you that. What
was that all about back there?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Are you kidding me? Did you hear
what that asshole said about you?
                                                            
                       ALISON
Of course I heard it. And it
pissed me off, too, but I wasn't
going to tear someone's head off
for it.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Hey, I was just trying to help.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Well, I don't need your help,
thank you very much. I need you to
talk to me.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I've already told you, it's not
open for discussion.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Well, you better open it. After
everything we've been through, I
can't believe you won't let me in.
I am the one person you should
trust above anyone else.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I never said I needed help.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Is that so?
                                                            
Alison reaches into her pocket and pulls out the pill bottle
from Michael's room. She tosses it to him.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Can you explain this?
                                                            
Michael looks at the bottle, but has nothing to say.
                                                            
                       ALISON
You've got two choices. You start
being straight with me, or I
report this, and you're done with
this case. And I don't care if you
            (MORE)

66.

                       ALISON (cont'd)
are the only one who can ID this
guy.
                                                            
A moment passes between them. Then, out of nowhere, Michael
starts to laugh. Alison begins to look annoyed.
                                                            
                       ALISON
What the hell's so funny?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
What you just said, about me
ID'ing the guy. It's too funny.
                                                            
                       ALISON
What is?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I don't know what he looks like.
                                                            
Alison is speechless. Michael continues to laugh.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I can't remember a fuckin' thing
about him. It's hilarious. Don't
you get it?
                                                            
Alison watches him laughing for another moment before
finally speaking.
                                                            
                       ALISON
      (quietly)
We're finished.
                                                            
Michael abruptly stops laughing as he watches her walk away.
                                                            
 
EXT. PARK - DAY
                                                            
Alison stands by the car, smoking a cigarette, as Michael
approaches.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I thought you quit.
                                                            
Alison takes one more drag before throwing the butt on the
ground and stamping it out.
                                                            
                       ALISON
I did.
                                                            
Michael reaches out and hands her something. She takes it in
her hand. It is a pill bottle. She looks at it, then at him.
                                                            

67.

Michael leans against the car.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
It was movie night. That's why I
was at the store that night.
                                                            
                       ALISON
What? You wanna talk now?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
That's what I'm doing, so shut up
and listen.
                                                            
Alison nods.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
It was movie night, and we all
went together to pick the movie.
                                                            
 
INT. CONVENIENCE STORE - NIGHT
                                                            
FLASHBACK
                                                            
Michael looks at the movie selection in the store, as a
young boy, JORDAN, runs around. The boy runs by the front
counter where an attractive African American woman, KEISHA,
talks to the clerk in a friendly manner.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL (V/O)
I was looking at the movies, and
Keisha was showing the ring to the
clerk. She was so happy that I
finally popped the question.
                                                            
Jordan runs back toward Michael. He passes a man who has his
back to him.
                                                            
Keisha shows the clerk the ring, and the woman laughs and
takes her hand to get a better look.
                                                            
The man cocks his head in the direction of the front
counter, listening to the conversation.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL (V/O)
I guess the guy put two and two
together, figured we weren't
married yet, and that
Jordan...Jordan was our son. And
he didn't like that.
                                                            
Michael picks up a movie and looks it over. Suddenly, a SHOT
rings out.
                                                            

68.

                       MICHAEL (V/O)
I heard the first shot, and I
thought I imagined it. Until I
heard the clerk screaming.
                                                            
Michael looks down, realizing his son is no longer beside
him. Everything seems to move in slow motion now. He mouths
the word "Jordan", then begins running toward the front of
the store. More shots ring out.
                                                            
Michael's view of the front of the store is blocked by the
store shelves. As he rounds the corner, he sees Keisha lying
on the floor, not moving. He also sees a pair of feet,
sticking out from just behind a store display, attached to a
body lying just out of sight. The feet are small.
                                                            
 
EXT. PARK - DAY
                                                            
Michael still stands leaning against the car, head bowed. He
doesn't speak for a moment.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I never thought about how small
Jordan's feet were. They just
seemed so tiny, sticking out like
that.
                                                            
Michael stops talking for a moment. Alison has tears running
down her face.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Anyway, there I was, caught
completely off guard...
                                                            
 
INT. STORE - NIGHT
                                                            
FLASHBACK
                                                            
An anguished look comes over Michael's face as he sees his
son and fiancee lying on the floor.
                                                            
A figure moves just out of his field of vision. As he turns
his head, all he sees is a gun being raised in his
direction.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL (V/O)
I always thought I was fast. But
that night, I swear my feet were
nailed to the floor. I heard the
shot, and I just stood there.
                                                            

69.

Michael takes the shot in the chest. It propels him
backward, into a store display. He crashes to the floor,
goods spraying out in all directions.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL (V/O)
We've all done the drills with the
flack vests. Multiply that by
about a thousand, and that's what
it feels like to get hit with a
live round. There's a pain...it's
unimaginable. And then everything
goes numb.
                                                            
Michael, lying on the floor, makes a wheezing sound. He
coughs, spitting up blood. Unable to raise his head, all he
can see is a pair of legs walking toward him.
                                                            
The figure comes to a stop, standing over him. Michael tries
to look up, but all he sees is a gun directed at him.
Another shot rings out, and everything goes black.
                                                            
 
EXT. PARK - DAY
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Next thing I knew, I woke up in
the hospital, and saw you sitting
there.
                                                            
Michael looks at Alison, who is wiping tears from her cheek.
                                                            
                       ALISON
You were out for three days
following your surgery.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Yeah.
                                                            
Michael reflects on it for a moment.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Anyway, I needed the pills at
first for the pain. But after it
went away...
                                                            
                       ALISON
Some pain doesn't go away.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Yeah. Look, I can't tell you what
to do. If you want to turn me in,
it's your call.
                                                            

70.

Alison eyes him closely for a moment.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Can I trust you that there'll be
no more pills? No drugs of any
kind?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Scout's honor.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Okay. Now what are we gonna do
about ID'ing this guy?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I'll know him when I see him, I'm
sure of it. I just have to get
close.
                                                            
                       ALISON
I hope you're right.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
And don't worry, I won't do
anything reckless.
                                                            
                       ALISON
That's all I ask.
                                                            
Michael hesitates a moment before continuing.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
And I'm sorry about what I said
about you and Brett. It was out of
line.
                                                            
                       ALISON
      (absently)
Yeah.
                                                            
Alison becomes quiet for a moment. Michael watches her
closely. She turns to face him.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Did you freak out at that guy back
there because of what he said? Or
was it because he knows about us?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I'm pretty sure what happened
between us is one of the worst
kept secrets in Bureau history.
                                                            

71.

                       ALISON
Yeah, you're probably right.
                                                            
Alison stands beside him again.
                                                            
                       ALISON
But there's something I need to
ask, and I know we said we'd never
talk about it again.
                                                            
She takes a breath before continuing.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Why did you sleep with me that
night?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
You were right, you don't want
to be bringing this up again.
                                                            
                       ALISON
No, Michael, I do want to bring it
up. Do you have any idea how I
felt when you left that morning?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I really don't want to get into
this.
                                                            
                       ALISON
I was hurt, and it was because of
you. I know you always thought of
me as one of the guys, but I never
thought you'd hurt me the way you
did.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
That was six years ago. Can we
please move on?
                                                            
                       ALISON
No. You owe me an explanation.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I owe you?
                                                            
                       ALISON
Yes, you do. I've stayed quiet all
this time, listening to people
whisper behind our backs, and I've
never said a word. Do you know
why? I respected your wishes, and
now I want you to respect mine.
                                                            

72.

                       MICHAEL
That's what you want, huh?
                                                            
                       ALISON
Yes, it is.
                                                            
He eyes her closely for a moment.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
All right. Two things happened
right around that time. You
remember John Abner?
                                                            
                       ALISON
Yeah, the letter bomb guy. I was
there when they took him in.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
And you got shot in the process.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Grazed. It was barely a flesh
wound.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Do you have any idea how much that
scared me?
                                                            
                       ALISON
Really?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
What did you expect? You're the
closest person in the world to
me. Of course I was scared. All I
could think about was how my life
would look without you in it.
                                                            
                       ALISON
And how did it look?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
It looked empty. I realized that…I
don't know, you and I…
                                                            
Michael stops, looking away for a moment.
                                                            
                       ALISON
What? What did you realize?
                                                            
Michael sighs heavily, still hesitating.
                                                            

73.

                       ALISON
Michael, please tell me...
                                                            
He turns around abruptly to face her, cutting her off.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I realized just how much I was
in love with you.
                                                            
Caught completely off guard, she has no response.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Is that what you wanted to hear?
                                                            
                       ALISON
I…I don't know what to say.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
You don't have to say anything. I
had my chance, and I missed it.
That's the way it happens
sometimes.
                                                            
                       ALISON
But you could have…
                                                            
She stops herself before saying anything else. They stand,
silently, looking away from each other. After a moment,
Alison looks at him, as if something has occurred to her.
                                                            
                       ALISON
What was the other thing?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Huh?
                                                            
                       ALISON
You said two things happened. What
was the other thing?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Keisha found out she was pregnant.
                                                            
Alison starts to speak, but Michael cuts her off.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
And no, we weren't together at
that point. We hadn't spoken in a
while, and I don't think we
would've gotten back together
otherwise.
                                                            

74.

                       ALISON
Did you love her?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I grew to love her, just as I'm
sure she had to do the same with
me. But were we in love at that
point? Honestly, no.
                                                            
                       ALISON
So why go back to her? You
could've been involved with your
son without being involved with
her.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
My dad bailed on me. I swore I
wouldn't do that to my son.
                                                            
                       ALISON
I guess I can't fault you for
that.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I tried to do the right thing, I
really did. And it still didn't
matter.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Of course it mattered. The only
thing you can do is what you think
is right. You can't blame yourself
for what happened.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
You think I blame myself?
                                                            
                       ALISON
I don't know. Do you?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
You wanna know who I really blame?
I blame God.
                                                            
                       ALISON
What?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Yeah, that's right. I went to
Keisha with only half a heart,
because I was still in love with
someone else, and God has been
punishing me for it ever since.
                                                            

75.

                       ALISON
Michael, you know that's not…
                                                            
Michael cuts her off, becoming visibly angry.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
God took my son, because of
something I did. How is that fair?
I laid in that hospital bed for
weeks, cursing him with everything
I had. I don't just blame God, I
hate him.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Think about what you're saying.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I've been thinking, Goddammit!
I've been thinking for six months.
I kept telling myself it would get
better, but you know what? It
hasn't. God turned his back on me,
and there's not a damn thing I can
do about it now.
                                                            
Michael is so angry he is shaking. Alison watches him, not
sure if she should say something. He turns away from her.
                                                            
After a few moments, Alison walks up behind him and puts her
arms around him. He continues staring straight ahead, but
now appears on the verge of tears.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
      (quietly)
I just wanted to be a good father.
                                                            
Alison continues to hold him, as they stand quietly in the
morning sun.
                                                            
 
INT. VAN - DAY
                                                            
William and Lee are in their van, driving the strip in
Branson, Missouri. They look around at the various marquees
and billboards.
                                                            
                       LEE
So what's with this Branson place,
anyway?
                                                            
                       WILLIAM
My dad says it's like Las Vegas,
if it were run by Ned Flanders.
                                                            

76.

                       LEE
D'oh!
                                                            
The van slows, turning into a parking lot.
                                                            
 
INT. DRESSING ROOM - DAY
                                                            
Brother Caine, alone in his dressing room, sits reading a
book. He is suddenly disturbed by a loud COMMOTION coming
from outside.
                                                            
                       CAINE
What in blue blazes...
                                                            
The door swings open with a loud CRASH, and a large man
comes spilling into the room. The man crashes into some
boxes piled against the wall, before falling backward onto
the floor.
                                                            
Caine gets up from his chair, but before he can make a move,
Lee and William enter the room.
                                                            
                       CAINE
What have you done to Leonard?
                                                            
                       LEE
Don't worry, he'll be fine. It's
you we're here to see.
                                                            
Lee opens his jacket just far enough to expose his gun in
it's holster. Caine slowly sits back down.
                                                            
                       CAINE
I see.
                                                            
 
INT. STAGE AREA - DAY
                                                            
Julie stands on the theater stage, looking out at the empty
seats. She drinks from a water bottle. WENDY, her singing
partner, approaches.
                                                            
                       WENDY
Hi, Jules.
                                                            
                       JULIE
Hey, Wendy.
                                                            
                       WENDY
Did you hear about Trudy?
                                                            

77.

                       JULIE
No. Why?
                                                            
                       WENDY
She never showed up at home.
                                                            
Julie is suddenly more interested.
                                                            
                       JULIE
What, when she left here? She
never made it?
                                                            
                       WENDY
Yeah, she was supposed to be
taking the bus straight to
Chicago. Her parents haven't seen
or heard from her.
                                                            
                       JULIE
Wow.
                                                            
                       WENDY
I hope nothing's happened to her.
                                                            
FLASHBACK
                                                            
Julie sees Trudy from earlier, running away from her,
crying.
                                                            
Julie also sees Caine from earlier, hitting on the female
singer and lashing out in anger at the stage hand.
                                                            
PRESENT
                                                            
                       JULIE
I'm sure she's fine. Maybe she
just needed some time to herself.
                                                            
                       WENDY
I hope you're right. Anyway, see
you at rehearsal.
                                                            
                       JULIE
Yeah. And let me know if you hear
anything else.
                                                            
                       WENDY
You got it.
                                                            
Wendy departs, leaving Julie with a concerned look on her
face.
                                                            
 

78.

INT. CAR - DAY
                                                            
Joseph looks out the window as Sean drives along a country
road. Sean sees a church a short distance ahead. He slows
the car and pulls in to the church lot.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
How come we're stopping?
                                                            
Sean puts the car in park and turns the engine off.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Gotta speak to someone.
                                                            
 
INT. CHURCH - DAY
                                                            
Sean and Joseph enter the church. Sean looks around.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
What are you...
                                                            
                       SEAN
Shhh...
                                                            
He points to the congregation area of the church. A half
dozen or so worshippers are scattered among the seating,
saying silent prayers.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
      (whispering)
What are you looking for?
                                                            
Sean sees a woman exiting the confessional.
                                                            
                       SEAN
I'll be back in a couple of
minutes.
                                                            
 
INT. CONFESSIONAL - DAY
                                                            
Sean, kneeling down, faces the darkened curtain in front of
him inside the confessional booth. He blesses himself and
speaks to the figure on the other side.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Hello, Father. It's been 21 days
since I've been in to speak to the
Lord.
                                                            
FATHER SHEEN's disembodied voice replies from the other side
of the curtain.
                                                            

79.

                       PRIEST
Only 21 days between confessions.
That's commendable.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Well, I wouldn't really say it's a
confession. I don't feel what I
have to report are sins.
                                                            
                       PRIEST
Oh?
                                                            
A series of intercuts follows, between Sean speaking to the
priest, and Joseph in the church.
                                                            
JOSEPH
                                                            
slowly walks around the church, taking in the religious
imagery. He stops at a bible placed on a stand and begins
flipping through it.
                                                            
SEAN
                                                            
                       SEAN
I needed to come here today. I may
not get another chance.
                                                            
                       PRIEST
Are you going away?
                                                            
                       SEAN
I may be. You see, Father, I
killed a man.
                                                            
Silence.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Actually, I've killed more than
once. But let me start at the
beginning.
                                                            
JOSEPH
                                                            
reads quietly from the bible.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Strengthen, ye, the weak hands.
Say to them of a fearful
heart, be strong, fear not, God
will come with vengeance,
he will come and save you.
                                                            

80.

SEAN
                                                            
                       PRIEST
      (nervously)
What you're telling me...I can't
absolve you. You have to turn
yourself in, and repent.
                                                            
                       SEAN
I'm afraid I can't do that.
                                                            
                       PRIEST
Then I'm sorry, I can't help you.
                                                            
There is a rustling noise as the priest stands up to leave.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Sit down, Father.
                                                            
                       PRIEST
I beg your pardon?
                                                            
Sean forces his gun through the curtain.
                                                            
                       PRIEST
You can't threaten me.
                                                            
                       SEAN
What about those people out there?
                                                            
A moment passes before the priest sits back down.
                                                            
                       PRIEST
Just don't hurt anyone.
                                                            
JOSEPH
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
      (reading)
For behold, the Lord will come
with fire…to render his anger with
fury…by fire and by his sword the
Lord will plead with all flesh,
and the slain of the Lord shall be
many.
                                                            

81.

SEAN
                                                            
                       SEAN
As I said, Father, I'm not here to
confess. God needs to know I'm
doing what he's entrusted me with,
and you are going to pass it on.
That's all I ask. You be the
messenger. Promise me that, and
I'll leave without incident.
                                                            
A silent moment passes.
                                                            
                       PRIEST
Fine. I'll do it for you, as long
as you leave without hurting
anyone.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Fair enough. Thank you, Father.
                                                            
Sean gets up, then hesitates for a moment.
                                                            
                       SEAN
One other thing, Father. Could you
offer me the sacrament of the body
and blood of Christ?
                                                            
                       PRIEST
Please, don't ask me to do that.
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (annoyed)
Fine. Can you at least tell me
where I might find a store around
here?
                                                            
                       PRIEST
Excuse me?
                                                            
                       SEAN
A store, you know, so I can get
some wine. I'll have to get the
body and blood on my own.
                                                            
                       PRIEST
There are stores in town...a few
miles down the highway.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Thanks.
                                                            

82.

JOSEPH
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
And I saw heaven opened, and
behold a white horse, and he that
sat upon him was called Faithful
and True, and in righteousness he
doth judge and make war.
                                                            
He finishes reading, and looks up to see Sean standing
beside him.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Everything cool, partner?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Yeah, fine.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Then let's roll.
                                                            
 
INT. CHURCH - DAY
                                                            
The curtain on the priest's side of the confessional slowly
opens. The priest, a man likely in his early fifties, pokes
his head slowly out and looks around. Cautiously, he makes
his way to the back of the church.
                                                            
 
INT. CHURCH - DAY
                                                            
Michael and Alison sit in a pew at the front of the church.
Father Sheen sits facing them on the steps leading to the
altar. Michael is taking notes.
                                                            
                       PRIEST
I suppose I should have tried to
get a look at him, but I was
worried he might try to hurt
someone.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
No, you did the right thing. Any
chance anyone else saw him, maybe
heard what was going on?
                                                            
                       PRIEST
No, I doubt it.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Did you believe what he was
telling you, Father?
                                                            

83.

                       PRIEST
I don't know. I've heard things in
that confessional that make me
question what people are thinking.
And yes, there are times when I
may have been lied to. But this
man...
      (exhales)
He scared me. Yes, I believe him.
I have no doubt he's done what he
claimed.
                                                            
Sheen bows his head for a moment before continuing.
                                                            
                       PRIEST
When I was younger, I gave last
rites to a man on death row who
had killed his entire family.
                                                            
He looks up.
                                                            
                       PRIEST
I offered to hear his confession,
to which he replied, "I have
nothing to confess". Do you know
why he said that?
                                                            
                       ALISON
Let me guess. God told him to do
it.
                                                            
                       PRIEST
That's right. And you know what?
The hairs on my neck stood up that
day, and they did the same today.
                                                            
They sit in collective silence for a moment.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Okay, well I guess that about
covers it.
                                                            
Michael stands and shakes hands with Father Sheen.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Thanks for your time, Father.
                                                            
                       PRIEST
You're welcome. I just wish I
could have helped more.
                                                            
Alison extends her hand to Father Sheen.
                                                            

84.

                       ALISON
Father.
                                                            
Alison turns to go, but Michael doesn't move.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Actually, would you mind waiting
outside for me? I'd like to speak
to Father Sheen alone.
                                                            
Alison eyes him suspiciously.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
It's personal.
      (to Sheen)
If you don't mind, Father.
                                                            
                       PRIEST
Of course not.
                                                            
Alison nods in approval.
                                                            
                       ALISON
I'll be outside.
                                                            
Michael watches her leave before turning his attention back
to the priest.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I was hoping you might be able to
help me, Father.
                                                            
                       PRIEST
I'll try.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Do you think God punishes people?
Is it possible that when something
really bad happens to someone,
that God is just...evening the
score for something that person
did?
                                                            
Father Sheen eyes him closely for a moment.
                                                            
                       PRIEST
What happened to you, son?
                                                            
 
EXT. CHURCH - DAY
                                                            
Michael exits the church. Alison stands by the car, watching
him as he approaches.
                                                            

85.

                       ALISON
You find what you were looking
for?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Maybe. We'll see.
                                                            
They get in the car and drive away.
                                                            
 
EXT. TOWN - DAY
                                                            
Michael's car slowly rolls down a rural village street.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL (V/O)
Father Sheen said something, about
the guy wanting the sacrament. He
asked him if there were any stores
close by where he could get some
wine.
                                                            
 
EXT. MAIN STREET - DAY
                                                            
The car is now parked by the side of the main street.
Michael and Alison get out. A convenience store is close by,
along with a scattering of small businesses and houses.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
This is probably a long shot, but
at least we can say we checked.
You wanna snoop around out here,
I'll check the store?
                                                            
                       ALISON
Sure. Get me a drink, will you?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Yeah, meet you back here.
                                                            
 
INT. STORE - DAY
                                                            
Michael enters the convenience store. It is your basic all
purpose store, a counter and register at the front, five or
six aisles of goods, and a bank of coolers at the back.
There is also a small enclave to the side with video rental
selections covering the walls.
                                                            
Michael waits in line while the clerk, a middle aged woman,
rings in a sale and chats with the customer.
                                                            

86.

Michael steps to the counter as the customer leaves. The
clerk greets him with a smile, which he returns.
                                                            
                       CLERK
Mornin'.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
How are ya'.
                                                            
                       CLERK
Fine, hon. What can I do for ya?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Well, I'm looking for someone.
Problem is, I don't really know
what he looks like.
                                                            
The clerk eyes him suspiciously.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Yeah, I know, sounds a little
shady. Here.
                                                            
He hands the clerk his card.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
You seen anyone strange around
here lately?
                                                            
The clerk motions toward the bulk of the customers.
                                                            
                       CLERK
      (quietly)
Take your pick.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
      (grinning)
Gotcha.
                                                            
                       CLERK
He's not dangerous, is he?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Nah, just might have some
information we need. Call me if
you see anything out of the
ordinary, would you?
                                                            
                       CLERK
Sure thing.
                                                            
Michael looks around before going to the coolers.
                                                            

87.

Looking through the selection of drinks, Michael fails to
notice the man beside him, also looking in the cooler.
                                                            
Michael closes the cooler door, holding iced coffee in each
hand. He casually glances at the man beside him.
                                                            
FLASHBACK
                                                            
Sean, grinning, standing over Michael, holding a gun.
                                                            
PRESENT
                                                            
Michael's eyes get wide as the realization of who he is
looking at sets in. Sean, for his part, merely smiles, the
same smile from the memory.
                                                            
Chaos ensues. Sean, almost blindingly quick, drops the
bottle in his hand and reaches into his coat. Michael, both
hands full, dives into the closest aisle as a SHOT rings
out.
                                                            
The store customers erupt in a panic, screaming and rushing
for the door
                                                            
Sean fires off several shots in all directions. Michael,
still on the floor, covers his head as items on the shelves
around him explode from gunshots.
                                                            
Michael looks up into surveillance mirror positioned on the
ceiling and sees Sean still standing in front of the cooler.
He fires off a shot in Sean's direction. Sean, realizing he
is in the open, dives for cover.
                                                            
 
EXT. STOREFRONT - DAY
                                                            
Alison, gun drawn, races toward the store as panicked
customers exit.
                                                            
Joseph, from the car, watches anxiously, clutching his
backpack.
                                                            
 
INT. STORE - DAY
                                                            
Alison enters the store in time to see Sean running toward
her. He fires a shot in her direction. She ducks back out,
before reaching in and returning fire.
                                                            
Sean, realizing he is cut off, heads toward the movie
alcove. Alison fires again, causing him to dive behind a
display.
                                                            

88.

Michael looks up and sees Sean in the surveillance mirror.
Slowly, he gets up, hands raised.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Don't shoot, Ali. It's me.
                                                            
Alison nods, giving him the all safe. She glances around,
seeing bodies lying throughout the store.
                                                            
Michael points toward the mirror on the ceiling. Alison sees
Sean behind the display. They begin to inch closer to him.
                                                            
Joseph cautiously enters the store. Alison notices the
movement and turns, gun pointed at him. He raises his hands.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Get out of here! Now!
                                                            
Joseph starts to back up, then crouches down beside the
counter as Alison turns her attention back to Sean.
                                                            
Sean looks up toward the mirror and sees Michael and Alison
closing in.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I know you can see us in the
mirrors. You've got nowhere to go.
There's only two ways this can
end. Throw out your weapon, and
you can walk out of here.
                                                            
Sean appears to weigh his options for a moment. Then,
unexpectedly, he leans over, exposing himself, and fires a
shot in Alison's direction.
                                                            
Alison, with a clear view of where Sean is hiding, is able
to easily duck out of the way. A split second after Sean
fires, Michael returns fire. A box explodes just inches
above Sean's head. Sean retreats, covering his head with
both hands.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
That was a warning. You only get
one. Ball's in your court.
                                                            
A moment passes. Alison takes out her cell phone.
                                                            
Joseph sees her preparing to dial. He hesitates a split
second before springing out from his hiding place.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Don't do that!
                                                            

89.

Michael and Alison turn in unison in Joseph's direction.
                                                            
                       ALISON
I told you to get out of here!
Now!
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
You don't want to make that call.
                                                            
Alison begins to move, but Joseph raises his hand, halting
her.
                                                            
With his other hand, Joseph reaches into his backpack and
withdraws something, holding it up for all to see. It is a
homemade bomb.
                                                            
Alison and Michael look in utter amazement.
                                                            
Sean pokes his head out to see what is happening.
                                                            
Alison slowly lowers her gun in an attempt to diffuse the
situation.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Sir, for your own protection,
don't move.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Don't you move! I'll set this
thing off!
                                                            
                       ALISON
Just relax. No one's going to do
anything.
                                                            
Alison looks toward Michael. In response, he relaxes his
stance.
                                                            
Joseph watches them for a moment, then looks toward where
Sean is hiding.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
You over there, Sean?
                                                            
Slowly, Sean raises his empty hand above his head in a wave
for Joseph to see.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
I'm leaving, and he's coming with
me.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Not gonna happen!
                                                            

90.

Joseph moves his other hand toward a switch on the bomb.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Wait, wait, wait!
      (to Michael)
You take it easy for a second,
goddammit!
                                                            
Alison shows Joseph her hands. Moving slowly, she holsters
her gun and puts her hands up for him to see. Michael
continues to keep his gun raised.
                                                            
                       ALISON
There, now everyone's calm. We can
work this out.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
I'm not leaving without him.
                                                            
                       ALISON
I'm listening. We can talk about
it.
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (calling out)
They're trying to fool you! They
think they're smarter than you!
Don't listen to 'em!
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
There's nothing to talk about.
We're leaving. Now.
                                                            
Joseph, keeping the bomb raised in the air, moves slowly
past Alison. Michael keeps his gun trained on him all the
time.
                                                            
He reaches Sean, who stands up in plain view. Slowly, they
start toward the door.
                                                            
As Sean passes by Alison, he looks toward Michael and
flashes him a smile, before heading out the door.
                                                            
Joseph waits a moment at the door, holding everyone at bay.
He hears a car engine start, waits a moment, then disappears
out of sight.
                                                            
A squeal of tires can be heard. Alison rushes toward the
door. She makes it outside, but Sean's car is already out of
sight.
                                                            
Alison comes back inside, already on her phone calling for
emergency help.
                                                            

91.

Oblivious to the chaos, Michael walks slowly toward the
door. Sirens can be heard in the distance. He kneels down
and picks something up off the floor. It is a pamphlet. His
expression changes as he reads it. He puts it in his pocket
and goes to help Alison.
                                                            
 
EXT. STOREFRONT - DAY
                                                            
The front of the store is now a crime scene, complete with
emergency crews, yellow tape, onlookers and reporters.
                                                            
Alison is speaking to a tall man dressed in a military
uniform. She motions for Michael to join them. He
approaches.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Michael, this is Major Conroy,
he'd like to speak to us.
                                                            
They shake hands.
                                                            
                       CONROY
Pleased to meet you.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Likewise.
                                                            
                       CONROY
Rough scene in there. You okay?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I'm fine.
                                                            
Conroy pauses for a moment, looks around, then reaches into
a large yellow envelope he is holding and withdraws a
photograph. He hands it to Michael.
                                                            
                       CONROY
Recognize this man?
                                                            
C/U on a photo of Sean, in full military dress.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Yeah, that's him. One of yours?
                                                            
                       CONROY
Yes…was. Name's Sean Coleman,
marine, stationed out of Camp
Pendleton. Last deployment was
Baghdad.
                                                            
Michael continues looking at the photo.
                                                            

92.

                       MICHAEL
      (reflectively)
Coleman.
                                                            
                       ALISON
So what happened?
                                                            
                       CONROY
Coleman's unit was ambushed and
taken hostage. When the rescue
team found them, he was the only
one still alive.
                                                            
                       ALISON
God.
                                                            
                       CONROY
Yeah, it was bad. Six guys
executed, Coleman was probably
next. Even so, they tortured him
for a couple of days. Coleman had
to go through three surgeries
before he pulled through.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Guy just won't quit, huh?
                                                            
                       CONROY
You have no idea. Coleman
flatlined during one of his
surgeries. He was nearly
pronounced dead.
                                                            
                       ALISON
So what's his condition now?
Depression? PTSD?
                                                            
                       CONROY
Actually, it's a bit more complex.
We think Coleman believes he saw
God.
                                                            
Michael and Alison look at one another with a WTF
expression.
                                                            
                       CONROY
I know, it sounds crazy, but
Coleman believes...he crossed
over. And now, he's taking his
orders from God.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
So why wasn't he kept under watch?
                                                            

93.

                       CONROY
Half the country believes in God.
We couldn't hold a vet against his
will for believing. Especially not
after all the bad Walter Reed
press.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Great. Is there anything else we
should know?
                                                            
                       CONROY
Actually, there is. Coleman's
fiancee was on the plane that
crashed into the South Tower of
the World Trade Center.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Well, this just keeps getting
better and better.
                                                            
                       ALISON
So, can you help us?
                                                            
                       CONROY
Unfortunately, no. Coleman's a
civilian now, and I'm afraid the
military wants to stay as far away
from this as possible. I shouldn't
even be here.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Well, is there anything you can
suggest we do?
                                                            
Conroy thinks for a moment.
                                                            
                       CONROY
Pray that Coleman slips up.
Otherwise, things could get a lot
bloodier.
                                                            
 
EXT. STOREFRONT - DAY
                                                            
Michael and Alison walk back to where their car is parked
outside the store.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Well, we know who he is. Now if we
only knew where he is.
                                                            

94.

                       MICHAEL
I know where he's going.
                                                            
Michael hands her the pamphlet.
                                                            
                       ALISON
You really think so?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Yeah, why not? Makes about as much
sense as anything else he's done.
                                                            
                       ALISON
So what's he planning?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
That, I haven't figured out yet.
And that's what scares me.
                                                            
 
INT. TICKET LOBBY - DAY
                                                            
Sean and Joseph enter the theater ticket lobby. The lobby
area is huge, with multiple ticket windows, an atrium, and
plenty of space for various booths operated by vendors. Long
lines are already forming, and crowds of people are milling
about.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Man, the lines are getting long.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Which is why I bought my ticket in
advance. You got your ticket yet?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
No, I wasn't really planning on
seeing the show. I just came here
for Julie.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Fair enough. Tell you what, if
you're around after the show, we
can hook up again. I'd like to
meet that girl of yours.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Sounds good. I'll look for you.
                                                            
Sean nods before turning toward the entrances to the
theater. Joseph watches him for a moment and then turns and
heads in the opposite direction.
                                                            
 

95.

EXT. CONCERT HALL - DAY
                                                            
Julie stands in an alley behind the concert hall, talking on
a cell phone. Her eyes are red and swollen.
                                                            
                       JULIE
I don't know, mom...I know, I made
a commitment, but...
                                                            
She listens as her mother speaks.
                                                            
                       JULIE
It is what I want, but things are
different here now. I can't stay
anymore.
                                                            
Another reply.
                                                            
                       JULIE
No, you don't have to worry. I can
get home. I'll tell you all about
it then. Just, please, trust me on
this.
                                                            
She listens again.
                                                            
                       JULIE
Okay. You too.
                                                            
Julie flips her phone shut and places it in her pocket. She
wipes her face before heading back inside.
                                                            
 
INT. TICKET LOBBY - DAY
                                                            
Alison and Michael enter the theater lobby. They see BRIAN
PHILLIPS, a fortyish man in dress pants and a sportcoat,
standing across the lobby speaking to security guards. He is
accompanied by JOHN GALLANT, late 20's and good looking in
his tailored suit. They approach. Brian turns and sees them
coming.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Lieutenant Philips? I'm Michael
Westphal, we spoke earlier. This
is my partner, Alison Hanley.
                                                            
                       BRIAN
Please, call me Brian. This is
Detective John Gallant.
                                                            
They shake hands.
                                                            

96.

                       MICHAEL
Did you get the photo I faxed to
you?
                                                            
                       BRIAN
Yeah, my men have it, and it's
being circulated to security staff
now.
                                                            
                       ALISON
How many plainclothes you got?
                                                            
                       BRIAN
Fifteen scattered around the
building.
                                                            
Michael takes a look at the crowd gathering.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
It's still gonna be a needle in a
haystack with this size crowd.
                                                            
                       BRIAN
Yep. And we also have to be sure
not to cause a panic. Things could
get out of hand real fast.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Agreed. I'm thinking Alison and I
should split up, since we've both
seen him up close. I'll work
inside the theater, she can work
out here.
                                                            
Alison gives Michael a concerned look, but it seems to go
unnoticed.
                                                            
                       BRIAN
Good idea. John, can you work out
here with Agent Hanley?
                                                            
                       JOHN
Sure thing.
                                                            
The group begins to part company. Alison hesitates.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Can I have a word with Agent
Westphal before you go in there?
                                                            
Michael nods at Brian, who acknowledges. Brian walks toward
the entrance, John goes in the opposite direction, leaving
Michael and Alison alone.
                                                            

97.

                       MICHAEL
What's up?
                                                            
                       ALISON
I just want you to...be careful in
there.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Of course.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Seriously. I know what you're
doing. You're trying to protect me
by keeping me out here.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
And what if I am?
                                                            
                       ALISON
You can't protect everyone,
Michael. You're gonna have to
accept that. Keisha didn't stand a
chance, and nothing you could have
done would have changed that.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
So what are you saying?
                                                            
                       ALISON
Protect yourself. Our chances are
a lot better if you do that first.
And let me know if anything
happens.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Believe me, if anything happens,
you'll know.
                                                            
They look at one another for a moment. Alison turns and
heads off toward John. Michael watches her for another
moment before heading toward the theater doors.
                                                            
 
INT. BACKSTAGE - DAY
                                                            
The announcer can be heard in the background warming up the
crowd. Caine appears to be mentally preparing himself to go
on. Lee stands close by, still looking uninterested.
                                                            
Caine, looking out at the capacity crowd, spots William in
the front row.
                                                            

98.

                       CAINE
I see your friend found his seat.
                                                            
                       LEE
Front row?
                                                            
                       CAINE
Of course. I want him to enjoy the
show.
                                                            
                       LEE
He's sitting there in case you get
a stupid idea, like trying to go
out through the crowd.
                                                            
                       CAINE
You wouldn't risk hurting those
innocent people, would you?
                                                            
                       LEE
You better ask yourself that
question before you think of
trying anything. I only agreed to
let you do this show because it's
short notice, and I don't want
anyone getting suspicious.
                                                            
A stage hand walks up and whispers something in Caine's ear.
                                                            
                       CAINE
That's unfortunate. Thank you.
                                                            
The stage hand walks away.
                                                            
                       LEE
What was that all about?
                                                            
                       CAINE
My lead singer just up and quit.
One of the other girls will have
to fill in.
                                                            
                       LEE
      (disinterested)
Yeah, it's a real shame.
                                                            
                       CAINE
What's your problem with me,
anyway?
                                                            
                       LEE
You really wanna know?
                                                            

99.

                       CAINE
Yes, I do.
                                                            
                       LEE
You're a hypocrite. You claim to
stand for peace and love, but you
have no problem condemning anyone
who doesn't believe everything you
tell them to, or if they lead a
different lifestyle than you. And
you prey on people's fears for
profit. How much do you take in
for a show like this anyway?
                                                            
                       CAINE
I do well. But that's not why I do
what I do. I care about people,
which is more than I can say about
you.
                                                            
                       LEE
Yeah, well I may look out for
number 1, but at least I don't put
myself out there as something I'm
not. You, my friend, are a fraud,
a complete fraud. And it'll be my
pleasure watching you go down.
                                                            
                       CAINE
Well, you certainly have me all
figured out. But there's one thing
you didn't count on.
                                                            
                       LEE
Oh? And what would that be?
                                                            
C.U. on Caine's hand reveals a switchblade. The blade
silently pops out.
                                                            
                       CAINE
This dog's bite is just as bad as
his bark.
                                                            
Caine steps in quickly and plunges the knife into Lee,
shoving him back against a wall and covering his mouth at
the same time. Lee tries to struggle, but it is clear that
he is fading fast. Caine stays on him.
                                                            
                       CAINE
      (hissing)
You think you're smarter than me?
Huh? Not so big now, are you?
                                                            

100.

Lee's legs start to give out, and Caine slowly lowers him to
the floor, still staying on top of him.
                                                            
                       CAINE
You can say whatever you want
about me, but no one
disrespects what I give these
people.
                                                            
Lee's eyes roll back as Caine lays him on the floor. He
takes out a handkerchief and wipes the blood from his hand.
                                                            
                       CAINE
Such a waste.
                                                            
With the music building and the background singers warming
up their vocal cords, Caine moves quickly. He drags Lee's
body to the corner and covers him with a pile of tarps and
cloths. As he turns way, his foot catches one of the tarps
and pulls it off slightly. Unaware that Lee's feet are
sticking out, Caine walks to the curtain in time to hear the
announcer bellow out his name.
                                                            
                       ANNOUNCER (O/S)
…Brother Caine!
                                                            
Caine goes through the curtain onto the stage, accompanied
by thunderous applause.
                                                            
 
INT. THEATER - DAY
                                                            
Intercuts between Michael, Alison, and Joseph.
                                                            
As the show begins, Michael slowly makes his way through the
crowd while doing his best to look inconspicuous.
                                                            
Alison, in the lobby area, does the same.
                                                            
Joseph, a short distance away, scans the crowd. Although
they are in close proximity, he and Alison do not see one
another.
                                                            
 
INT. THEATER - DAY
                                                            
Brother Caine is working the audience.
                                                            
                       CAINE
Brothers and sisters, we could
take the easy road. We could stick
to the believers, and leave the
non-believers to their own
            (MORE)

101.

                       CAINE (cont'd)
affairs.
                                                            
William sits in the front row, straining to spot Lee.
                                                            
                       CAINE
But we'd be preachin' to the
choir, wouldn't we? Is that worthy
of good Christians?
                                                            
                       AUDIENCE
No!
                                                            
                       CAINE
Wouldn't the Lord want us to seek
out the non-believers and help
them see the truth?
                                                            
                       AUDIENCE
Yes!
                                                            
                       CAINE
And if there's a non-believer
among us, don't we owe it to him
to help? Can I get an Amen?
                                                            
                       AUDIENCE
Amen!
                                                            
Caine goes to the front of the stage and walks down to the
front row. He stops in front of William.
                                                            
                       CAINE
What's your name son?
                                                            
William looks around uncomfortably as the spotlight falls on
him. The crowd cheers, urging him on.
                                                            
                       CAINE
Don't be afraid. Everyone here
wants to help you.
      (to Audience)
Don't we, brothers and sisters?
                                                            
The crowd roars in reply. Caine holds the microphone out to
William.
                                                            
                       WILLIAM
      (uncomfortably)
Uh...William.
                                                            

102.

                       CAINE
You know what, William? Today's
your lucky day. The Lord wants us
to help you, and that's what we're
gonna do. Why don't you c'mon up
on stage with me?
                                                            
William fidgets as the crowd cheers louder. Caine leans in
close and speaks to him without the microphone.
                                                            
                       CAINE
      (quietly)
I can make this a whole lot more
difficult, boy. Now get your ass
up on that stage.
                                                            
William looks around uncomfortable before slowly standing
up. Caine raises his hands in triumph to thunderous
applause.
                                                            
Michael, standing at the side of the theater, watches the
spectacle with increasing curiosity.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
What the hell?
                                                            
Sean watches from his aisle seat on the other side of the
theater.
                                                            
 
INT. TICKET LOBBY - DAY
                                                            
Julie makes her way through the crowd, heading for the
exits.
                                                            
Joseph, from a short distance away, spots her. He moves
quickly to intercept.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Julie!
                                                            
Julie stops abruptly, looking around.
                                                            
Joseph approaches, motioning to her.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Thank God I found you. I've been
looking everywhere.
                                                            
 

103.

INT. THEATER - DAY
                                                            
William stands awkwardly on the stage, unsure what, if
anything, he should do.
                                                            
                       CAINE
William, the Lord spoke to me just
now. I spotted you sitting there
in the front row, and I thought to
myself, there's someone who
doesn't even know why he's here.
                                                            
Caine looks William in the eye.
                                                            
                       CAINE
I'm gonna help you, William.
      (to audience)
Who wants to help William?
                                                            
More cheers.
                                                            
 
INT. TICKET LOBBY - DAY
                                                            
Julie eyes Joseph suspiciously.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
I came here for you, just like I
said I would.
                                                            
                       JULIE
I'm sorry, do I know you?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
What are you talking about? Its
me, Joseph.
                                                            
Julie looks closely for a moment, as if trying to place him
in her memory.
                                                            
                       JULIE
      (uncertain)
Joseph Waters, from history class?
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Why are you acting like this? I
told you I'd come for you if you
needed me. You don't belong here
with these people.
                                                            
                       JULIE
Joseph, we've never spoken more
than two words. The last time I
saw you was in high school two
            (MORE)

104.

                       JULIE (cont'd)
years ago.
                                                            
A confused look comes over Joseph's face.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
      (confused)
No…that's not the way it is. We
were together...we're supposed to
be together.
                                                            
Julie starts to back away.
                                                            
                       JULIE
Okay, you're really starting to
scare me.
                                                            
Joseph reaches out to her, causing her to flinch.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
No, you don't have to be afraid.
You know I'd never hurt you.
                                                            
                       JULIE
I have to go.
                                                            
As Julie turns to go, Joseph grabs her by the arm.
                                                            
                       JULIE
Let go of me!
                                                            
 
INT. THEATER - DAY
                                                            
William is still looking uncomfortable on stage. Caine
stands close, speaking in a comforting tone.
                                                            
                       CAINE
William, I'm gonna ask you to take
a leap of faith with me, and let
us help you.
                                                            
The audience cheers in support.
                                                            
                       WILLIAM
      (sheepishly)
Uh...I'm good. Really.
                                                            
Caine leans in and speaks quietly, putting his hand over the
microphone.
                                                            

105.

                       CAINE
      (to William)
C'mon, play along. We've got them
right where we want them.
                                                            
Caine turns his attention back to the audience.
                                                            
                       CAINE
He just needs some encouragement,
folks.
                                                            
The audience cheers even louder than before.
                                                            
As Caine soaks it in, William, still looking around
nervously, looks toward an opening in the curtain, and is
able to see behind. His attention is drawn to something.
                                                            
He sees the pile of tarps that are covering Lee's body.
                                                            
 
INT. TICKET LOBBY - DAY
                                                            
People start to take notice as Joseph tries to calm Julie. A
security guard approaches.
                                                            
                       GUARD
Is there a problem here?
                                                            
Joseph lets go of Julie.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
      (stammering)
No...I mean, we're just talking
here...there's no problem.
                                                            
The guard looks at Julie, who is visibly shaken. He steps
between them, putting his hand out to hold Joseph at bay.
                                                            
                       GUARD
Okay, I think you should take a
step back.
                                                            
The guard turns his attention to Julie.
                                                            
                       GUARD
Are you okay, miss?
                                                            
Joseph becomes aware of people around him watching what is
going on. Some are whispering, obviously talking about him.
                                                            

106.

As the guard turns back toward him, Joseph reaches into his
backpack and withdraws a small pipe. He swings it, hitting
the guard across the side of his head. The guard drops to
the floor.
                                                            
Julie shrieks, and the crowd gasps.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
      (to Guard)
I told you we were okay! Why
doesn't anyone listen to me!
                                                            
A large man steps forward. Joseph reaches into his backpack
once more, this time taking out the bomb. He holds it high
for everyone to see.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Everyone get back!
                                                            
A collective scream comes from the crowd.
                                                            
Joseph sets the bomb down and turns back to Julie.
                                                            
                       ALISON (O/S)
FBI! Freeze!
                                                            
Alison stands a few feet away, gun drawn.
                                                            
 
INT. THEATER - DAY
                                                            
William, still looking through the curtain, spots Lee's feet
sticking out from under the tarp. His expression darkens,
his eyes widen, and he turns his attention back to Caine.
                                                            
Caine turns back to face him, and can tell immediately that
something has changed. He pauses very briefly, and they make
eye contact. The noise in the crowd dies down.
                                                            
William begins to reach inside his jacket. Caine covers the
distance between them and grabs William's arm in an attempt
to subdue him.
                                                            
                       CAINE
Security! Help!
                                                            
The place explodes in pandemonium. People are screaming and
rushing from their seats
                                                            
Two big security guards rush onto the stage. William knocks
Caine down onto his back. He goes into action, moving like a
cat. The two security guards don't stand a chance as he
knocks them flat in a barrage of hands and feet.
                                                            

107.

Caine begins to scurry away in a half-crawl. William turns
his attention back to him, drawing his gun.
                                                            
Michael is fighting against the crowd to get to the stage.
                                                            
Four plain clothes police officers, also fighting the
exiting crowd, make their way toward the stage.
                                                            
                       COP
Police! Freeze!
                                                            
William instinctively turns his attention, and his gun,
toward the oncoming officers.
                                                            
Caine rolls off the stage, hits the floor, and is up and
running toward the exit with what remains of the crowd.
                                                            
The first officer fires a shot, hitting William in the
shoulder. He staggers backward, before returning fire. The
rest of the officers fire at him, and he is hit a number of
times. He falls backward, crashing to the stage.
                                                            
Sean, seeing that the stage is swarming with police, makes
his way out with the crowd.
                                                            
 
INT. TICKET LOBBY - DAY
                                                            
The noise from inside the theater has reached the lobby.
People are swarming through the exits.
                                                            
Alison turns her attention for a split second. Joseph moves
his free hand, as if reaching for the bomb. Alison sees
this, and squeezes off a round, hitting Joseph in the chest.
Stunned, Joseph staggers backward, drops to one knee, and
then collapses on his side.
                                                            
Julie screams and rushes to him.
                                                            
Alison approaches, gun still held at the ready.
                                                            
 
INT. HALLWAY - DAY
                                                            
Caine goes through a door leading to one of the back
hallways, coming face to face with two THUGS.
                                                            
                       CAINE
What the...
                                                            
Before he can finish his sentence, the first thug hits him
across the side of his face with a gun. Caine falls to the
floor, blacking out.
                                                            

108.

                       THUG 1
Thought you'd get away, didn't
you, you little rat bastard.
                                                            
The second thug grabs Caine under the arm pits and lifts him
up, his feet still dragging behind him.
                                                            
                       THUG 2
Shame about Willie. Guess you
outsmarted him. Too bad he didn't
tell you there were other
interested parties.
                                                            
Caine appears to regain some of his senses and tries to
speak again. Thug 1 hits him in the face.
                                                            
                       THUG 1
Shut up! Save the talk for the big
man. He's got a lot
of questions for you, and he
better like your answers.
                                                            
Caine mumbles incoherently as they drag him toward a door at
the end of the hall.
                                                            
 
INT. THEATER - DAY
                                                            
Michael reaches the stage. The officers are gathered around
William, their guns still at the ready.
                                                            
Michael holds his ID up for them to see as he makes his way
to William.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
FBI! Let me through!
                                                            
The group moves out of his way, allowing Michael to kneel by
the body. He only looks at him for a moment.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
It's not him.
                                                            
A shot rings out from outside. Everyone turns in the
direction it came from.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
      (concerned)
Alison.
                                                            
 

109.

INT. TICKET LOBBY - DAY
                                                            
Julie kneels beside Joseph and cradles his head in her
knees.
                                                            
                       JULIE
      (frantically)
You idiot! What were you thinking!
                                                            
Joseph coughs, his breathing hoarse and bubbling.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
I had to…see you again. I love
you.
                                                            
Alison takes off her coat and covers the wound in Joseph's
chest.
                                                            
                       ALISON
      (to Julie)
Put pressure on this! Press hard!
                                                            
Julie does as told. Joseph coughs again, and blood begins to
trickle from the side of his mouth.
                                                            
Sean, unseen, approaches, witnessing what is happening.
                                                            
Joseph attempts to speak again.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
We were…(cough)…supposed to be
together.
                                                            
                       JULIE
      (crying)
But we don't know each other.
                                                            
                       JOSEPH
Sure…we do. I've loved you…since
the first day I saw you.
                                                            
Alison turns her attention to the bomb, lying on the floor a
few feet away. It is of a crude design, and looks much less
menacing than previously thought. Alison slumps to a sitting
position on the floor.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Gaddammit. It's a fake. Goddammit!
                                                            
Alison turns toward Joseph and Julie. Joseph, his eyes still
open and looking vacantly into space, does not move anymore.
Julie continues to hold his head in her lap, weeping
silently.
                                                            

110.

Alison gets up and goes to Joseph. She kneels by him, and
checks for a pulse. After a moment, she places her hand over
his eyes and gently closes his lids.
                                                            
 
INT. TICKET LOBBY - DAY
                                                            
Michael exits the theater area, fighting his way through the
mob. He spots Alison in the distance and heads in her
direction.
                                                            
Sean, closing in on Alison, sees Michael approaching
quickly. He moves to intercept.
                                                            
 
INT. TICKET LOBBY - DAY
                                                            
Alison and Julie look at one another in silence. Alison
stands up and turns away.
                                                            
Sean takes Alison by surprise, grabbing her around the neck
from behind. He holds his gun to her head.
                                                            
Julie screams, and instinctively covers Joseph.
                                                            
Alison tries to struggle.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Go ahead! Keep fighting!
                                                            
Michael ducks behind a column, out of sight. He looks down
at his gun, and then upward.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
      (quietly)
You've gotta help me on this one.
You owe me.
                                                            
Michael appears suddenly, aiming his gun at Sean.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Let her go, Coleman!
                                                            
Sean points his gun back at Michael, keeping Alison in front
of him.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Don't come any closer!
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
She's not the one you want.
                                                            

111.

                       SEAN
Neither are you. You just keep
getting in my way. How'd you find
me, anyway?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Your friend got sloppy. He dropped
the brochure for the show back at
the store.
                                                            
                       SEAN
And thanks to you, he paid for
that mistake.
                                                            
Michael looks quickly to where Joseph is lying on the floor.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
You brought him into this,
Coleman.
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (angrily)
You don't know anything about it.
That kid didn't deserve what he
got.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Maybe. But Caine's gone. There's
no reason to make this any worse.
                                                            
                       SEAN
What makes you think this has
anything to do with Brother Caine?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
"Thou shalt have no other Gods
before me". Isn't that what what
the first commandment says? Caine
was putting himself off as some
kind of false prophet, wasn't he?
                                                            
                       SEAN
And it made me sick. I don't know
what's worse, that a fraud like
Caine would take advantage of
people like that, or that people
are that easily deceived. Well,
he's not fooling me.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
He's gone, and I doubt he's coming
back. Why don't we just talk this
over?
                                                            

112.

                       SEAN
The time for talk is over. There's
a war being waged, and it's time
to pick a side. I know what side
I'm on. Do you?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
The war you fought is two thousand
miles away. It's time to give it
up.
                                                            
Sean looks suspiciously at Michael.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Yeah, that's right. I know all
about you, Coleman. You were a
good soldier. You wouldn't
endanger innocent lives. How about
it? Why don't you just stand down?
                                                            
Sean eyes him closely. Brian and John appear with a group of
officers.
                                                            
                       SEAN
Get back! I'm not telling you
again!
                                                            
Sean presses his gun against Alison's head again.
                                                            
Michael waves his arms, motioning to the officers.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
For Chrissake, everyone back off!
                                                            
Brian motions for his men to back off.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
There, everything's okay. It's
just you and me now.
                                                            
                       SEAN
You wanna talk? Drop your gun.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Don't do it, Michael.
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (to Alison)
Just keep talking! See what
happens!
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Take it easy! Just relax!
                                                            

113.

Michael puts his hands out where Sean can see them. Slowly,
he lowers his gun to the floor, leaving it there.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
There, just like you wanted. Now
we're just two guys talking.
                                                            
Sean eyes Michael suspiciously. He looks around at the
firepower now assembled, all trained on him.
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (to Alison)
He's not going to just let me walk
out of here, is he?
                                                            
                       ALISON
No, he's not.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Alison, shut up. Don't listen to
her Coleman. We're gonna work this
out.
                                                            
                       SEAN
The two of you better stop playing
with me. I don't like being played
with.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
No one's playing. Just take it
easy.
                                                            
                       SEAN
What'd Conroy tell you, anyway?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
What're you talking about?
                                                            
                       SEAN
You know what I mean. He said I
was a soldier. What else did he
say?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
He said you were good. Better than
this. He also told us about your
fiancee.
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (suspiciously)
He did, huh?
                                                            
Michael looks at Alison, unsure how to proceed.
                                                            

114.

                       MICHAEL
So what do you think, Coleman?
What would she think about this?
                                                            
                       SEAN
You better be careful what you
say.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Why? You think you're the only one
who's lost someone?
                                                            
                       SEAN
      (to Alison)
You better tell him to shut up.
                                                            
                       ALISON
      (uncertain)
Michael?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
You think any of this changes what
happened? She was on the plane,
and you were somewhere else.
                                                            
                       SEAN
I'm warning you...
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
It just kills you, knowing you
couldn't protect her. Doesn't it?
                                                            
                       SEAN
Shut up!
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
How'd it feel to be helpless?
                                                            
Sean, incensed now, points the gun at Michael. As he
squeezes the trigger, Alison suddenly fights back, causing
the shot to miss it's target.
                                                            
Sean continues to struggle with Alison for the gun.
                                                            
Michael rushes to her aid, yelling to the assembled police
officers.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Don't shoot! Don't shoot!
                                                            
Sean shoves Alison to the floor, leveling his gun at her.
                                                            

115.

Before Sean can fire again, Michael collides with him,
taking him down. They struggle, and the gun goes off again.
                                                            
Sean, still holding his gun, shoves Michael off of him and
prepares to shoot.
                                                            
Alison, weapon drawn, fires, hitting Sean. He still manages
to swing his gun around in her direction.
                                                            
Michael, from a prone position on the floor, withdraws a
weapon from a holster on his ankle. He fires at Sean,
hitting him. Sean falls to the floor.
                                                            
Brian yells into a walkie-talkie.
                                                            
                       BRIAN
Man down!
                                                            
He begins to run toward where Michael is lying.
                                                            
Alison rushes to Michael's side. His chest is covered in
blood, and he is barely breathing.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Michael!
                                                            
She rips his shirt open, revealing a gunshot wound. Officers
begin to arrive around her.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Get some help in here!
                                                            
JOHN
                                                            
approaches Sean, who is lying still on the floor. With an
officer covering him, he carefully kicks Sean's gun away.
                                                            
Sean appears to be attempting to speak. John kneels down
beside him, and leans in to hear what he is saying.
                                                            
Sean whispers something, so low that no one besides John can
hear it. He lets out a loud sighing noise and becomes still.
                                                            
John puts his hand on Sean's neck, feeling for a pulse. He
gets up, shaking his head "no". The officer closest him
speaks.
                                                            
                       COP
What'd he say?
                                                            
John looks at Sean's body for a moment.
                                                            

116.

                       JOHN
He said "semper fi".
                                                            
ALISON
                                                            
still kneels by Michael as paramedics work on him. He has an
oxygen mask on his face, and when he talks it is through
very labored breathing.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Stay with me, Michael!
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
You...okay?
                                                            
                       ALISON
Don't worry about me. What the
hell were you thinking?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Couldn't protect...Keisha. Can't
lose...you...
                                                            
Michael coughs, unable to continue.
                                                            
                       ALISON
Hang on!
                                                            
Michael sees the People crowded around him, but the noise
suddenly dies down. A solitary voice speaks to him.
                                                            
                       JORDAN (O/S)
Daddy?
                                                            
Everything around Michael becomes faded, blurring in a
bright white light. He can hear Alison call out to him.
                                                            
                       ALISON (O/S)
Michael!
                                                            
DREAM STATE
                                                            
Michael, lying on the floor, opens his eyes. A short
distance away, he can see paramedics working on someone, and
he sees Alison, frantically trying to help. Despite all of
the activity, all he can hear is a murmur, as if he were
miles away.
                                                            
The voice speaks to him again.
                                                            
                       JORDAN
Hi daddy.
                                                            

117.

Michael turns his head to see a young boy kneeling beside
him. The boy could be a young version of him. Michael looks
at him in disbelief.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Jordan?
                                                            
                       JORDAN
I missed you, daddy.
                                                            
Tears begin to stream down Michael's face. Unable to contain
himself, he grabs the boy and hugs him tightly.
                                                            
                       JORDAN
It's okay, daddy.
                                                            
REALITY
                                                            
Michael, lying on the floor, begins to convulse. The
paramedics react quickly.
                                                            
                       PARAMEDIC
He's going into arrest!
                                                            
Alison moves back, giving them room to perform CPR. She is
crying.
                                                            
DREAM STATE
                                                            
Michael stops hugging his son, but still holds him close. As
the boy smiles at him, Michael sees someone else. A short
distance away, a beautiful young woman smiles at him. He
smiles back at her.
                                                            
                       JORDAN
Can you come with us now, daddy?
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Yeah, I can.
                                                            
Michael gets up, taking the boy by the hand, and walks
toward the woman who is waiting for them.
                                                            
REALITY
                                                            
Alison watches as the paramedics discontinue working on
Michael. They remove the mask from his face. He is lying
completely still.
                                                            
Alison approaches, wiping tears from her face. Everyone
stands quietly, some with their heads bowed in respect.
                                                            
Alison touches Michael's cheek.
                                                            

118.

                       ALISON
I hope you found what you're
looking for.
                                                            
She leans in and kisses him gently on the cheek.
                                                            
                       ALISON
I love you.
                                                            
Alison turns and walks away as the paramedics cover Michael
with a sheet.
                                                            


THE END


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From Kevin Mitchell Date 8/3/2008 ***1/2
Great story, I liked the begining especially, the character Caine was awesome. Again I'm going to say the dialogue at times felt like a rolller coaster. Very dynamic and then suddenly slightly cliche. This was more obvious with the character LEE. He had some great witty lines throughout but also other times it felt like I was reading a completely different character. Keep in mind I've only written 1 screenplay and many tips I've pulled recently have come from reading yours but to be honest I prefered your screenplay Bloodlines to be a better representation of your skills as a screenplay writer. GREAT story this one but select parts of the dialogue kept it back a bit at times.

From Josh Date 6/3/2008 ****
This was a great script. With the ability to weave in and out of multiple story lines involving compelling characters and managing to keep the story flowing without ever dragging (in my opinion)is an impressive piece of work. I would gladly wait in line for this with giddy, schoolgirl-like anticipation. And by the way, Sean Coleman is a badass among badasses, but that goes without saying.

From Mike Quinn Date 5/23/2008 ***
Alright....I finished the script. I think your strongest elements are the story and the action sequences. You have done a great job at creating suspense and moments of intense drama. Plus! The story moves very quickly adding to the tension and the build up which comes in the end. Where I think the script suffers is dialogue. At times you nail it, but more than a few times you trail off of your character's persona or resort to clichés. (“real bastard sometimes.” “I’ll kick your ass.”) For example, there are a few times that I can not see Michael or Alison discoursing the way they do. Or, I have a difficult time believing William would easily fall for Cain or that Lee would allow him to continue the show. (Small stuff there, but nonetheless....) Something else which you should keep in mind while writing is showing instead of telling: I think that some of the conversations between Mike and Alison for example did not need as much explanation. A subtle glance, playing with a token from his dead son...etc could also do the trick. And instead of the flashback scene in the convenience store when Mike finally recognizes Sean, just have them make eye contact. A double take expression and the scene is good to go. Finally, ixnay the scene where Conroy comes in and speaks with Sean. Too much like Rambo. Not necessary. Overall, this story rocks and has a lot of potential. Just tweak the dialogue and refrain from mirroring other stories too much. Good job!!!

From Jeff Helton Date 5/13/2008 ***1/2
Although long, a great story none the less. Good characters, strong and convincing dialouge to go with them. Great job here, keep writing.

From Mike Quinn Date 5/7/2008 ****
I just read the first major scene with Sean and Angela. Excellent! Really it is. I immediately felt like I was in a Cronenberg movie. Much the same vibe as a History of Violence. That scene where William and Leland talk about who's turn it is to get water. They seem like two low key drifters and it is not until William goes to fetch the H2) that you realize they murdered the hotel staff and have actually been on a cross country killing spree. You never see the murders, but the impact and the shock of them still resonate with the viewer. In the same way, you did not concentrate on the actual murders but on the reactions to them and that is what works here. It was a beautiful set up and I can't wait to read the rest of the script. This takes what you did with the MOB hitman to a whole other level.

From Josh Echevarria Date 5/6/2008 ***1/2
This is an amazing script. I absolutely loved it. Everything came together so perfectly. The only problem I found is in the end. What exactly was Sean's goal in going to Brother Caine's event? This is not clearly stated and I was left with that question unanswered. What was the whole ordeal with Joseph and Julie? I didn't quite understand that? I also think that you should make the lake baptismal scene with Sean and Joseph alot more intense. Add more emotion to that scene. Make it more powerful. Also, there seems to be no progressive change in Joseph. He just goes from good to bad. Make it so that it is a process in which he seems to be slowly changing as time continues. This is a really great piece of work. A little revising could make it perfect. Great job.


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