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The 8 - Chapter 1: The tragic story of Chronic
by Larry Zaffuto (lightsout1089@comcast.net)

Rated: R   Genre: Horror   User Review: ***
Purgatory comes in the form of a bus. It's bus driver, Sam, being the guardian of space between Heaven and Hell. (Episode #1) An elderly bar owner's terrifying secret is revealed when he comes between a prostitute and her extremely violent pimp.


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THE 8 - CHAPTER 1: THE TRAGIC STORY OF
CHRONIC


FADE IN:

EXT. A CITY STREET. - DAY
                                                            
Shots of a busy inner city. Cut to a thin white female named
CANDY, scurrying up the street towards our POV. She looks
disheveled and beaten. Holding her hand is a fragile pale
child named CHRISTOPHER. He struggles to keep up with
Candy's pace.
                                                            
She sees a bar and hurries them into it. The bar is eerily
dark, but is illuminated for a brief moment when Candy and
Christopher enter the bar. They move toward the bar and
Candy notices that it is empty with the exception of one
patron, a disheveled black male named JUNIOR, and an elderly
white male bartender named CHARLIE. Candy and Christopher
sit in a booth across from the bar. Charlie walks around
from behind the bar and over to her booth.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
I'm sorry young lady, you can't
have a child in here.
                                                            
                       CANDY
Please, sir. We just needed a
place to warm up a bit...
                                                            
Candy pauses for a moment, then begins to search through her
purse for money. The bag accidentally falls to the floor,
dumping out it's contents. It is a mixture of loose change,
narcotic paraphernalia and condoms.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
      (Bending down to
       pick up Candy's
       things.)
Let me help you with that...
                                                            
Embarrassed, Candy crotches down quickly before Charlie can
help.
                                                            
                       CANDY
No...I, I can get it. I'll leave.
It's not a problem. I just needed
a minute to rest my feet...
                                                            

2.

She quickly collects her things and stuff them back into her
purse. As she finishes, she interrupted by men coming into
the front door. Charlie turns to see six men enter the bar
in their biker colors.
                                                            
                       RICO
      (glancing around
       the bar)
Look at this shit-hole.
                                                            
Rico glares at Charlie for a moment, then flicks his
cigarette on the ground. He turns and sees Candy who has
managed to hide under the table. Rico grins, walks over and
violently kicks the table aside. Candy cowers underneath.
Rico reaches down and grabs her by her hair.
                                                            
                       CANDY
Rico, baby, I'm sorry. I just
needed a little time away.
                                                            
Without hesitation, Rico backhands Candy across the face.
Then he reaches down and grabs her by the hair again and
tosses her into a booth.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
Hey buddy, why don't you give her
a break?
                                                            
Rico stops in his tracks and then slowly turns and walks
towards the bar.
                                                            
                       RICO
What was that, Grandpa. I didn't
quite hear you. Did you say give
her a break.
                                                            
                       JUNIOR
      (Talking to
       Charlie.)
This is none of our business,
Charlie. Just let it go.
                                                            
                       RICO
Listen to your friend, Charlie.
Now get us a round of beers.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
Tell you what. If you let the lady
go on her way, I'll get all you
fellas a beer...on the house.
                                                            
Rico pauses a moment and chuckles. Then he pulls out a .357
magnum handgun and points it in Charlie's face.
                                                            

3.

                       JUNIOR
      (Talking to Rico.)
Please, sir! He's just an senile
old man...
                                                            
Georgie, a huge lumbering giant of a man, suddenly comes up
from behind Junior and gets him in a choke hold, lifting
Junior out of his seat. Within a few moments, Junior is out
cold.
                                                            
                       RICO
I'll tell you what, gramps...you
keep bringing us beers every 10
minutes and I might let you live.
Hell, I might even let you get a
poke here in a little bit. Whadda
ya say?
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
I don't want any trouble,
mister...
                                                            
Rico sticks the gun over Charlies lips and his finger over
his own.
                                                            
                       RICO
SSSSHHH. I don't want to here ya
talk anymore, old man. I just want
to see you shake your head "yes".
                                                            
After a moment, Charlie slowly nods his head.
                                                            
                       RICO
Good. (motioning to Junior on the
ground) When he wakes up, he can
help you.
                                                            
Charlie gives Rico a searing glare. Then turns to retrieve
the beers. Rico turns and motions to Pork chop, another one
of the bikers.
                                                            
                       RICO
Pork chop, go lock the front door.
I think we'll have a private party
with our old friend, Candy.
                                                            
Pork chop jumps up and locks the door. Georgie walks up and
taps Rico on the shoulder.
                                                            
                       RICO
      (turning to
       Georgie)
What now?
                                                            

4.

Georgie points down at his genitals.
                                                            
                       RICO
For fucks sake, Georgie your a big
boy now. You don't need to ask me
to use the bathroom...just go use
it.
                                                            
After a few moments, Charlie walks over with the beers. Just
before Charlie walks away, a warning from Rico.
                                                            
                       RICO
Hey Charlie, I know this is a
rough part of town. I'm sure you
have a piece somewhere back there.
Just remember, we're all packing
too. Don't be a hero...you'll
never make it outta this bar
alive.
                                                            
Charlie just turns and heads back behind the bar. Junior
begins to wake up. He slowly stands up.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
      (handing junior a
       beer and a shot
       of whiskey)
You okay there Junior? Here's
something to help get your senses
back.
                                                            
Junior stumbles back to the bar and downs the shot, then
takes a swig of the beer.
                                                            
                       JUNIOR
I appreciate the drinks, Charlie,
but I think I'm gonna move on
along.
                                                            
                       RICO
Turn your ass right back around
and take a seat, basshead.
Nobody's leaving until I say.
                                                            
Junior turns back around and takes a seat. Cut to Rico at
the table with all his biker buddies and Candy. Candy looks
petrified, but has a swig of the beer Rico bought her. Rico
Picks up a chair turns it around and sits backward on it.
Right directly in front.
                                                            

5.

                       RICO
      (turning back
       towards Candy)
So Candy, longtime no see.
                                                            
                       CANDY
      (trying to muster
       up a fake smile)
Hey baby...sorry I haven't called.
I just needed a break.
                                                            
                       RICO
      (grinning)
A break? Like a vacation?
                                                            
                       CANDY
Yeah...eh, kinda. Just a little
time off. To get my head on
straight.
                                                            
                       RICO
      (looking at the
       other bikers,
       chuckling)
Well fuck, Candy. Why didn't you
just tell me that.
                                                            
                       CANDY
      (looking down now)
I thought you'd be...
                                                            
Before Candy can get another word in, Rico quickly picks up
her still full, beer bottle off the table and smashes her
over the head with it. Beer flies everywhere, even on Pork
Chop. Candy falls off her sit and onto the ground. She is
covered in beer and a cut on her head begins to bleed.
                                                            
                       PORK CHOP
      (standing up)
What the hell, man?
                                                            
Rico jumps up into Pork Chops face.
                                                            
                       RICO
      (noise to noise
       with Pork Chop)
You got something to say, fat
fuck?
                                                            
                       CANDY
      (hesitating a
       moment)
No...no bro, I'm good.
                                                            

6.

Pork chop sits back down.
                                                            
                       RICO
      (turning back
       towards the bar)
One of you assholes grab a towel
and come clean Pork Chop off.
                                                            
Rico turns his attention back onto Candy.
                                                            
                       RICO
      (leaning over
       Candy)
Sorry for interrupting you, Candy.
You were saying you thought I'd
be...What? Mad? I don't get mad
sweetheart. Like the old saying
goes, I don't get mad, I get even.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
Don't you think she's had enough?
                                                            
 
INT. CAMBODIAN JUNGLE - DAY
                                                            
                                         BEGIN SEQUENCE BACK
IN TIME - 1969
VIETNAM WAR /
SOMEWHERE NEAR THE
NORTHERN BORDER OF
CAMBODIA.
                                                            
Paratroopers floating down from the sky in a strong wind.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
      (V.O.)
...Our drop zone was suppose to be
right along Cambodia's southern
border. Strong winds and
miscalculation blew us to far
north. We were spread out about 2
miles apart, which in turn made us
sitting ducks. We were dropping
smack-dab inside a North
Vietnamese stronghold...
                                                            
A small village in the Cambodian jungle. 10 American POW's
are being marched into the village at gunpoint by Cambodian
refugees. People yell in a unrecognizable foreign dialect as
the POW's are thrown, one by one, into crude bamboo prison
cells. A young Charlie O'Rourke is tossed into a bamboo cage
with a dirt covered floor.
                                                            

7.

                       CHARLIE
      (V.O.)
...Those that weren't killed when
they touched down were rounded up
and brought to the village of
Myachung. We were separated and
thrown into bamboo cages.
                                                            
The heavy jungle brush blocks visibility to everything, but
a small trail and an old concrete statue of a gargoyle. It
sits a top an old cement pillar. The pillar stands
approximately 5 or 6 feet up the trail from the front of the
cage. The pillar leans noticeably to the left, giving the
illusion of the gargoyle peeking around the brush to keep a
watchful upon the prison's new resident.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
      (V.O.)
This is where I spent the greater
part of seven years. I was
periodically interrogated and
tortured and eventually started to
lose my will to live. But a
strange thing happened. There were
so many things I wanted to tell my
family. Since they were half way
around the world from me, I told
it to the only audience I had. An
old, turn of the century gargoyle
statue...
                                                            
Cut to different scenes showing age progression, bonding
between Charlie and the gargoyle statue.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
      (V.O.)
...What began as a menacing
concrete beast, turn into an
overly attentive friend. Who cares
if he stared at me non stop for
seven years. The fact is that he
never left my side...
                                                            
Charlie hears gunfire and looks up to see guards walking
towards his cage. Cut to Charlie being led to the middle of
camp and his hands tied behind his back. It is a large field
lined with decapitated human heads impaled on large wooden
posts. Charlie looks around horrified as he is forced to his
knees by one of the camp guards.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
...Even when the gunfire started.
I wasn't sure what it was until
they marched me out into the
            (MORE)

8.

                       CHARLIE (cont'd)
middle of camp. They tied my hands
behind my back, blindfolded me and
put me on my knees. It was then
that I had realized that the
gunfire I had heard over the past
few days was the sound of my
fellow American soldiers being
executed. And now, it was my turn.
                                                            
A man who appears to be of higher ranking approaches
Charlie. He is a NORTH VIETNAM COLONEL and he appears to be
in charge of the prisoner camp. He yells in a foreign
language to the other guards. The guards immediately set
down their rifles and pull machetes from their belts. The
Colonel then turns to address Charlie, speaking in English.
                                                            
                       NORTH VIETNAMESE COLONEL
      (In broken
       English.)
This field is lined with the heads
of your fellow countrymen. Our
enemies. We believe that by
keeping the head of our enemies,
we inherit their souls, thus their
spiritual energy. Making us
superior soldiers. When I tell
you, you run into jungle before my
men catch you and add your head to
our collection. If you make it to
jungle, you go free. Fifty feet to
freedom. Fifty feet separates life
and death. Fifty feet.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
...Those final two words rang in
my head for what seemed to be
hours. Fifty feet. In actuality,
it was only a few minutes. As I
waited there on my knees, I began
to think about the only two things
in this world I cared deeply
about. I said my goodbyes to my
daughter, then thanked the only
friend I had for the past seven
years. That old concrete gargoyle.
The thought brought a brief smile
to my face, but suddenly the camp
grew quiet. I knew it was time.
                                                            
                       NORTH VIETNAMESE COLONEL
Go American! Run for your life!
                                                            

9.

Charlie springs to his feet and darts for the jungle.
Several moments later the Colonel motions to the guards and
they tear after Charlie with machetes in hand. When Charlie
is about half way to the jungle, the camera cuts to a guard
who steps past the Colonel with rifle in hand. He takes aim
and fires one round. It strikes Charlie in the back of one
of his legs. Charlie falls forward onto his face.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
Argghhh!
                                                            
Charlie tries to roll onto his back, but he is not able to
muster the strength. He braces for the guards assault. The
sounds of gunfire and screaming suddenly fills the air.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
      (V.O.)
As I laid there with a mouth full
of dirt I thought to myself this
is it. I'm going to die in this
dirt field. The guards footsteps
sounded like a stampede
approaching. It was then I thought
to myself I'm not going to die
with my face in the dirt. I'm
going to stare them down when they
take my life.
                                                            
Charlie starts to roll onto his back in agony.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
      (V.O.)
Just then, the enemy soldiers
began to yell and a barrage of
gunfire erupted. Through all of
it, I just kept praying for as
quick and peaceful a death as
possible. It never came. I laid
there until silence filled the air
again. Then, with all the strength
I had left, I rolled onto my back
and tried to look up to see what
had happened, but the dirt in my
eyes clouded my vision.
                                                            
Cut to Charlie squinting as he looks into the sky. An
ominous shadow drifts back and forth over him. Cut to POV
from creature landing in front of Charlie.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
      (V.O.)
My hand restraints were suddenly
cut loose. I sat there for a
moment, and finally started to get
            (MORE)

10.

                       CHARLIE (cont'd)
my vision back. I looked around
for any signs of movement. There
was none. The dirt field I was to
die on was now filled with the
massacred bodies of the guards.
The carnage was devastating. What
ever did this left no survivors,
but me. Then I looked up into the
sunlight and seen a sight that
almost stop my heart. The
silhouette was unmistakable. He
swooped down and landed right in
front of me.
                                                            
The gargoyle POV as it hands Charlie a rifle. Charlie takes
it and using it as a crutch, pulls himself to his feet.
Charlie appears to follows the gargoyle into the jungle.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
      (V.O.)
He led me out of the jungle and
over the border to safety. A
couple weeks later I was back on
U.S. soil...
                                                            
 
INT. INSIDE CHARLIE'S DRINK STOP, DETROIT, MI. - DAY
                                                            
                                         BACK TO PRESENT DAY.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
...It took me a while to realize
he had followed me to the states.
I had been gone so long, My family
thought I was dead. My wife
remarried and my family moved on
without me. I didn't want to
complicate things, so I simply
walked away. It was for the best.
But he's stayed by my side ever
since. He's been like a son to me.
                                                            
Rico starts to chuckle and shakes his head.
                                                            
                       RICO
      (Sarcastically)
Damn, Charlie! You should have
brought some of that opium you
smoked back home with you. You
could of made some extra cash and
cleaned up this shithole.
                                                            

11.

Rico walks over to Candy, still keeping an eye on Charlie
behind the bar.
                                                            
                       RICO
Get up bitch, break time's over.
                                                            
Candy lifts herself to her feet, still looking around for
the creature.
                                                            
                       RICO
      (Yelling, so that
       Georgie can hear
       him.)
Hey Georgie, let's roll!
                                                            
After a few moments, Georgie comes stumbling out of the
restroom with a blank look on his face.
                                                            
                       RICO
What the hell, Georgie. Were you
in there taking a shit?
                                                            
Georgie takes a couple steps forward, then collapses. He
falls forward onto his stomach, revealing a large wound to
the back of his head and neck.
                                                            
                       RICO
What the...Georgie!
                                                            
Rico looks over Georgie, then turns his attention to
Charlie. He walks to the bar with his gun points it at
Charlie's face.
                                                            
                       RICO
I've had enough of your shit, old
man!
                                                            
From behind, Candy attempts to intervene by grabbing his
arm. Rico breaks free and smacks her with the gun. She's
knocked backwards onto the ground. Rico turns back to
Charlie and once again points the gun at him.. This time,
Rico cocks the hammer of the gun back with his thumb.
                                                            
                       RICO
Time to die, Charlie!
                                                            
Before Rico can pull the trigger, something dark flashes
past camera view just behind Rico. It gashes open the back
of both Rico's legs. The pain is searing and causes him to
fire a round into the ceiling. Rico still has the strength
to turn around to see who cut him. The only one behind him
is Candy, who is laying on the ground with a large cut above

12.

her eye. Thinking she was the one who cut him from behind,
Rico stumbles towards her, pointing the gun at her.
                                                            
                       RICO
You're dead, bitch!
                                                            
Once again, just before Rico can shoot the gun, the dark
object flashes across camera view, just in front of Rico
this time. It severs Rico's hand off at the wrist. The hand,
still clutching the gun, falls harmlessly to the floor.
Blood squirts from his wrist as he cries in agony.
                                                            
                       RICO
Arghhhhh!
                                                            
Charlie walks from around the bar and in front of Rico. Rico
is still looking at his bloody stump in shock, as Charlie
bends down and picks up the gun. He pulls the severed hand
off the gun and tosses aside. Charlie clutches the gun and
looks at Rico without an expression. Rico falls to his
knees.
                                                            
                       RICO
Go ahead, old man. Pull the
trigger. You know you want to.
                                                            
Charlie puts the gun to Rico's forehead. Rico closes his
eyes and starts to quiver. Charlie reaches into Rico's
pocket and grabs the wad of cash. Then Charlie takes a step
back and empties the bullets out of the gun. Rico opens his
eyes and looks up at Charlie.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
Young man, I'm not going to kill
you. I left that stuff in Vietnam
40 years ago. That's the good
news...
                                                            
Charlie sets the money and the gun on the bar.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
...Of course, the bad news is that
you have about fifty feet to the
exit. And when he's stalking you,
fifty feet might as well be five
hundred miles.
                                                            
Charlie turns around and helps Candy up and onto a chair.
Then he turns back to Rico and continues.
                                                            

13.

                       CHARLIE
But if you can get out that exit,
your home free. He won't follow
you out....50 FEET.
                                                            
Charlie tosses Rico a bar towel, then turns walks behind the
bar and sets down two shot glasses in front of him. He grabs
a bottle of whiskey off the shelf and fills both glasses. He
downs one of the shots and looks at Rico.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
You might want to get started,
son, before you bleed out.
                                                            
 
INT. INSIDE CHARLIE'S DRINK STOP, DETROIT, MI. - DAY
                                                            
Rico wraps up his bloody stump, then staggers to his feet.
He starts to limp towards the door. Camera view from in
front of Rico shows dark blur fly past the back of Rico's
head. Rico spins around and takes a swing at air with his
good hand. He continues to stumble backwards.
                                                            
                       RICO
Come on you fucker! Show yourself,
God dammit!
                                                            
After a few steps backwards, Rico tumbles over a table. The
table falls onto it's side and several chairs tumble over.
He sits up against the turned over table. After several
moments, Rico looks back at Candy. She is still sitting in a
chair.
                                                            
                       RICO
Candy, baby, can you help daddy
out. I'm sorry, baby. Help me out
here and we're even. I promise.
                                                            
                       CANDY
Even? Are you fucking serious? For
the last five years I've been
beaten, raped, robbed, and hooked
on drugs. All thanks to you...
                                                            
Candy gets up out of her chair and walks over to the bar.
she takes a seat at the bar and grabs the remaining shot of
whiskey and downs it.
                                                            
                       CANDY
... Even? oh yeah, honey. We're
about to be even.
                                                            
Rico gives her a searing glare and starts to stand.
                                                            

14.

                       RICO
When I get outta here, your one
dead bitch!
                                                            
                       CANDY
I guess you know who I'm rooting
for then.
                                                            
                       RICO
Go to hell!
                                                            
                       CANDY
You first.
                                                            
The camera shows the dark blur fly past his right ear,
severing it off. Rico screams, as he falls onto his hand and
knees. After a moment he stumbles to his feet and feels for
his right ear. Then he sees it lying on the ground.
                                                            
                       RICO
Arghhhhh! You motherfucker! I'll
kill you!
                                                            
Rico reaches down and pulls out a large knife from his boot.
For several moments, the creature toys with Rico. Zipping
around him, as Rico spins around aimlessly trying swipe at
him with the knife. After several moments of this, Rico
becomes tired and frustrated. As he stops to catch his
breath, The dark blur flies by and severs off his remaining
hand. The hand clutching a knife falls and rolls onto the
ground. Rico falls to his knees, once again.
                                                            
                       RICO
Arghhhhh! Fuck!
                                                            
Rico suddenly notices he is close to the door. He glances
around, then quickly tries to stagger towards the door. Just
before getting there, The dark blur flies past him from
behind. It slashes both of Rico's Achilles tendons. Rico
falls forward on to the ground. He is able to turn over onto
his back. He lies there in pain. He turns his head towards
the bar and sees the silhouette of the creature slowly
moving up the aisle towards him. suddenly there is a frantic
pounding on the front door.
                                                            
                       OFFICER YANCEY
      (V.O. from outside
       door.)
Charlie! Hey Charlie are you in
there. Everything o.k.?
                                                            
                       RICO
Help! It's killing me!
                                                            

15.

There are three large thumps on the door. The third thump
breaks the door hinge and the door flies open. A uniform
Police Officer comes in with his gun drawn. It is OFFICER
ELTON YANCEY. He is a veteran beat cop assigned to this
area. He quickly looks around the bar. he takes one step
forward, then notices Rico covered in blood on the floor in
front of him. He crotches to talk to Rico.
                                                            
                       OFFICER YANCEY
Damn! Can you tell me what
happened to you, son?
                                                            
                       RICO
It's trying to kill me.
                                                            
                       OFFICER YANCEY
What's trying to kill you?
                                                            
                       RICO
It's a little monster or
something.
                                                            
                       OFFICER YANCEY
What?
                                                            
Just then, Charlie walks half way up the aisle and sees
Officer Yancey.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
Afternoon, Elton.
                                                            
Officer Yancey looks up to see Charlie.
                                                            
                       OFFICER YANCEY
You alright, Charlie?
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
I'm good. He might need a band aid
or two.
                                                            
POV from the creature as it lands on Officer Yancey
shoulder.
                                                            
                       OFFICER YANCEY
      (Tickling the
       creatures belly.)
Hey Pickles.
                                                            
Rico's eyes grow large as he sees the creature.
                                                            
                       RICO
That's it! Kill it, kill it!
                                                            

16.

Officer Yancey stands up.
                                                            
                       OFFICER YANCEY
Who, Pickles? Oh, I get it. You
messed with his lunch, didn't you?
                                                            
Officer Yancey turns and addresses Charlie.
                                                            
                       OFFICER YANCEY
Hey Charlie, you didn't tell this
guy about about how touchy our
little friend gets about his
pickle?
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
      (Interrupting the
       conversation.)
He was too busy sticking his gun
in my face to listen to me.
                                                            
                       OFFICER YANCEY
Now I see. Tough break, kid. There
are two absolute no-no's here at
Charlie's Drink Stop. You don't
mess Charlie...
                                                            
POV from the creature as Officer Yancey motions to the it.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
...and you don't fuck with his
pickle!
                                                            
Officer Yancey starts to walk towards the bar.
                                                            
                       OFFICER YANCEY
Come to think of it, I don't
recall anyone being stupid enough
to do both.
                                                            
                       RICO
You're a fuckin' cop! Aren't you
going to doing anything?
                                                            
Officer Yancey stops and turns towards Rico.
                                                            
                       OFFICER YANCEY
Different rules in here, kid. You
see out there, I'm the law and I
enforce it! In here, Charlie's the
law...and your finding out the
hard way who enforces that law.
                                                            

17.

Officer Yancey hold up his left hand. It is missing two
fingers.
                                                            
                       OFFICER YANCEY
See that? I put my hands on
something that didn't belong to me
and I, too learned the hard way. I
learned my lesson, though. And
Pickles and I are better friends
because of it. Pardon the pun, But
you on the other hand...
                                                            
Officer Yancey makes it to the bar and sets his hat down on
the bar.
                                                            
                       OFFICER YANCEY
...I'm guessing this little thing
between you and Pickles isn't
going to end in friendship.
                                                            
Cut to close up of Rico as his eyes widen and horror engulfs
his face. a horrible growl is heard. Cut to POV of the
creature as it flies off of Officer Yancey and onto the
ground in front of Rico. It creeps slowly towards Rico as
Rico tries to crawl away. Then Pickles violently lunges at
Rico. The camera cuts to black as the attack is heard for
several seconds. Then there is silence.
                                                            
 
INT. INSIDE CHARLIE'S DRINK STOP, DETROIT, MI. - DAY
                                                            
                                         TWO WEEKS LATER
                                                            
As the front door opens, light illuminates a familiar dark
bar. Once again inside "Charlie's drink stop". Charlie tends
bar as Candy sits next to Junior at the bar. She is smoking
a cigarette and drinking a cup of coffee. The source of the
sudden light appears. A large rough looking man walks toward
the bar. It is Rico's older brother, TONY. He walks up and
speaks to Charlie.
                                                            
                       TONY
Hey old man, you own this dump?
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
Yes.
                                                            
Tony takes out of a picture and sets on the bar in front of
Charlie.
                                                            
                       TONY
Have you seen this guy around?
He's my brother, Rico. Cops found
his car out front a week ago. Said
            (MORE)

18.

                       TONY (cont'd)
he might have stopped in here.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
I don't recognize him.
                                                            
Tony picks up the picture, turns and shows it to Candy and
Junior.
                                                            
                       TONY
What about you two. You seen him
around?
                                                            
They look at the picture. Candy gets nervous, Shakes her
head, "no" and looks at the ground. Intoxicated, Junior
squints as he looks at the picture.
                                                            
                       JUNIOR
Ahh nope.
                                                            
Tony stares at Candy suspiciously.
                                                            
                       TONY
      (Talking to Candy.)
Hey, Do I know you? Hey, I'm
talking to you!
                                                            
Candy looks extremely nervous, but before she can answer,
Charlie interrupts.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
Hey buddy, that's my daughter your
talking to. She hasn't seen your
brother, so leave her alone.
                                                            
Tony stares at Candy for a few more moments smiles and takes
a seat at the bar.
                                                            
                       TONY
Not a problem, pops. Maybe if I
hang out awhile it might jog
somebody's memory. Get me a beer.
                                                            
Charlie goes to the cooler to get a beer. As he opens it,
The frozen head of Rico can be seen. Charlie grabs a beer.
Tony lights up a cigarette as Charlie sets the beer in front
of him. Tony takes a pull from his cigarette.
                                                            
                       TONY
Got any food in this joint?
                                                            
Charlie pauses a moment as he thinks to himself.
                                                            

19.

                       CHARLIE
You like pickles?
                                                            
 
EXT. A CITY STREET. - NIGHT
                                                            
Fade to black. Cut to Sam's bus pulling up to a bus stop.
Tony sits on the bench at th bus stop. The doors to the bus
open.
                                                            
                       SAM
      (Smiling)
So much for loose ends.
                                                            
                       TONY
Excuse me?
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
Never mind. I hear your looking
for your brother.
                                                            
                       TONY
You know where Rico is?
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
Just dropped him off at home.
                                                            
                       CHARLIE
Take me to him.
                                                            
Sam motions Tony onto the bus. Tony gets on the bus then
walks past Sam on his way to the rear of the bus. cut to
close up of Sam's face as he grins at the camera for a
moment, then closes the bus door, looks forward and drives
off.
                                                            


THE END


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From DRofGOREOLOGY Date 5/13/2009 ***1/2
I really like this story. Nice and solid in it's pacing and direction. I would've given it a 4 but there are a couple scenes of dialogue that read as Charlie but should be Rico. Other than that little minor problem. This would make a decent short film....as long as Charlie is played by Clu Gulagar.

From Jamie Foy Date 5/10/2009 ***
I liked it. Short and sweet. The cop was a good addition and the flashback to Nam was clear and scary (good picture in my head) Well done.


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