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Pill Popper (Third draft)
by Bertrand Pare (bertty80@gmail.com)

Rated: R   Genre: Organized Crime   User Review: **
Short film. Easy read I promise! I need input.Is this thing worth making at all?


This screenplay is copyrighted to its author. All rights reserved. This screenplay may not be used or reproduced without the express written permission of the author.



FADE IN:

INT. LOCAL VEGAS DIVE BAR - DAY
                                                            
SANDY (M/20's)is scrawny and strung out but good looking and
seems to be the more charismatic of the two.

KELLEN (M/20's)is significantly bigger and is much more
stoic. He doesn't speak much, but whenever he does it's
surprisingly eloquent for such a huge and dopey looking guy.

Kellen sits at the bar watching TV. He's itchy as hell.

Outside, Sandy is at a phone booth. Hangs up, walks into the
bar and gives Kellen the "thumbs up".
                                                            
MONTAGE THROUGH THE STREETS OF THE "OTHER" VEGAS
                                                            
(In slow-motion.)
                                                            
SANDY and KELLEN both seem to be riding motorcycles through
town, only to reveal they are riding bicycles on the streets
of Las Vegas.

The montage of their journey begins in the shadier parts of
town and ends up in a nicer, yet generic and plain, upscale
neighborhood of Vegas.
                                                            
 
INT. BRETT'S HOUSE, BEDROOM - DAY
                                                            
Sandy and Kellen lie on the bed. BIG BRETT (30's) is
counting pills out of his big stash in the other room. BIG
BRETT is super buff and intense, UFC type. A little red eyed
and strung out from being on a coke binge.
                                                            
                       BIG BRETT
There's a big drought right now.
Nobody has these. I mean nobody.
I've been getting 25 bucks a pop.
Its not enough to save my upside
down mortgage but whatever. So
let's just all party like it's
1999. Cos my place is worth the
same as it was back in '99. Who
always takes care of you? huh? Who
always takes care of you two
homos?
                                                            
                       SANDY
You do, Big Brett.
                                                            

2.

Big Brett has a baggy with about 20 pills in it. He teases
them with the bag keeping it just out of reach then throws
it at Kellen.
                                                            
                       BIG BRETT
Got what you need? Happy? Happy?
                                                            
                       SANDY
      (Looking at the
       baggy)
Ya.
                                                            
                       BIG BRETT
Good, now take care of this....
                                                            
Big Brett in one swift Chippendale's stripper-like move
takes his pants off.

Both Sandy and Kellen look unenthusiastic. This is not their
thing, they obviously do it for the drugs.

Kellen takes out his gum and puts it on his soda can next to
the bed.
                                                            
(Time jump)
                                                            
The shot remains still for a moment and Kellen reaches back
into frame to get his gum.
                                                            
 
INT. BEDROOM, A BIT LATER. - NIGHT
                                                            
Kellen puts the gum back into his mouth while putting his
shirt on.
                                                            
Sandy and Kellen are putting their clothes back on. They
want to get the hell out of there.
                                                            
Big Brett jumps off the bed, all sweaty, and puts his pants
back on.
                                                            
                       SANDY
Alright Big Brett, nice doing
business with you. Sayonara.
                                                            
                       BIG BRETT
You guys want my whole stash? I've
got uppers, downers, morphine,
oxycotten, the whole kit and
kaboodle.
                                                            
                       SANDY
uh. ok.
                                                            

3.

                       BIG BRETT
Resell it, crush it, snort it,
bedazzle t-shirts with it. I don't
care what you do with it.
                                                            
                       SANDY
I can think of a few things to do
with it.
                                                            
                       BIG BRETT
Yeah? On a scale of 1 to 10. How
bad you want it?
                                                            
                       SANDY
Ummm, 11ish.
                                                            
                       BIG BRETT
Yeah?
                                                            
                       SANDY
What's the catch?
                                                            
                       BIG BRETT
I want you to kill my wife.
                                                            
Sandy suddenly turns all business like the good street
hussler that he is...
                                                            
                       SANDY
We want your whole stash. For
real. Every piece.
                                                            
                       BIG BRETT
Ok.
                                                            
                       SANDY
And some serious cash money.
                                                            
                       BIG BRETT
How much?
                                                            
                       SANDY
A thousand.
                                                            
                       BIG BRETT
Dollars? You drive a hard bargain.
Deal.
                                                            
                       SANDY
And we want half the pills now and
half the cash upfront.
                                                            
                                         QUICK CUT:
                                                            

4.

Brett hands them a huge ziplock filled with at least a 1000
white pills.
                                                            
                       SANDY
That's half?
                                                            
Big Brett gives him a big smile. Sandy looks back at Kellen.
They've hit the jackpot.
                                                            
 
EXT. HOME DEPOT - NIGHT
                                                            
The boys walk into Home Depot.
                                                            
                       SANDY (voice over.)
We'll need money for supplies too.
                                                            
Kellen and Sandy scan the aisles of Home Depot. They look
over at saws, power tools, solvents...
                                                            
                       BIG BRETT (voice over.)
You got it. My wife comes in from
her night shift around 9am. All I
ask is that you don't make a mess.
I want her to disappear.
Completely. No trace. And I don't
want to know the details. I want
to come home and have her missing.
Maybe set off the alarm before you
leave, that way I come home and
the cops are already here and I
make a scene and they believe me.
I took High School drama, I can
pull it off. Your job is to not
leave a fucking trace. Ya got me?
Don't fuck it up. Just call me
from a payphone once you get out
and far enough.
                                                            
 
INT. BEDROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Sandy and Kellen pop some pills.

Sandy and Kellen are taping down plastic drop cloth
everywhere in the bedroom.
                                                            
 
INT. THE TWO ARE IN THE WALK-IN CLOSET - DAY
                                                            
The guys are in the closet ready to ambush. They have
unpulled down pantyhose on their heads and are ready for
action.
                                                            

5.

                       KELLEN
You think we got a good deal
Sandy?
                                                            
                       SANDY
I think we got a great friggin
deal. Are you kidding?
                                                            
                       KELLEN
I dunno, you could have added the
stipulation that we get an
unlimited supply and we don't have
to bone down with Big Brett ever
again.
                                                            
                       SANDY
oh, you wanna do the negotiating
next time? Fine by me. All I know
is... Where you going?
                                                            
                       KELLEN
I gotta pee.
                                                            
                       SANDY
You can't. What about the ambush?
                                                            
                       KELLEN
Gotta go. Now.
                                                            
Kellen walks out of the walk-in closet.
                                                            
                       SANDY
Could I at least see some friggin'
hustle?
                                                            
Kellen deliberately walks slowly out.
                                                            
 
INT. LIVINGROOM - DAY
                                                            
KRYSTAL (F/20's or 30's) comes home after her shift from the
Casino. She's blonde and buxom with big Vegas hair but
obviously is a pretty girl. She walks in with her arms full
of groceries and a cell phone on her ear.
                                                            
                       KRYSTAL
You think we haven't tried that
yet? ... I've had to go back to
work. That's a load of S. This is
not what I signed up for... All
I'm asking for is a few grand for
the month... Unless I start
sucking D's in alleys, I don't see
how Brett is going to keep our
            (MORE)

6.

                       KRYSTAL (cont'd)
house. We're gonna to be on the
street. All I'm asking for is a
few grand for the month..... Fine,
great. Don't give it to me. I hope
you're happy you F-ing hag when
I'm going to be sucking D's and
taking it in the A for a living. F
U Gramma.
                                                            
From her grocery bag she takes a swig of vodka and in one
mouthfull eats a twinkie.
                                                            
She decides to start heading toward the bedroom. (camera
follows in one long take from the moment she walked in,
talks to her grandma and walks to her bedroom))
                                                            
 
INT. BEDROOM - DAY
                                                            
She walks into her bedroom as she's trying to get her name
tag off her jacket.

She stops dead in her tracks as she realizes she's walking
on top of plastic. She looks around the room to see
everything has been covered in clear plastic drop cloth.
                                                            
                       KRYSTAL
What the F?
                                                            
She turns around and Kellen and Sandy are standing there
with pantyhose on their heads and with NAIL GUNS in hand.

KELLEN starts SHOOTING a first round. The nails come out in
a continual spurt. Yet, somehow, Krystal stands there
intact.

The nails seem to have all missed her. Krystal lets out a
SHRIEK yet stands in place there terrified. By chance, and
not by skill, he shoots her RIGHT IN THE TRACHEA and STOPS
HER MID SCREAM.

On the other hand, SANDY's gun doesn't seem to want to
shoot.

KRYSTAL FALLS TO HER KNEES shocked that she can't make a
noise. Kellen walks up. SHE PUTS HER HAND UP and Kellen
SHOOTS A NAIL THROUGH HER HAND.

Sandy is futzing around with his gun and is looking straight
down the barrel as all of this is going on, still trying to
make his nail gun work.


7.

Krystal is trying to slip away on all fours. Kellen takes
the opportunity to SHOOTS HER SEVERAL TIMES IN THE BACK OF
THE HEAD, right in the brain stem. She crumbles to the
ground.

Kellen zips up his pants and closes off his belt buckle from
rushing out of the bathroom.

Sandy with gun in hand looks at the dead body. Silence. ALL
OF A SUDDEN his nail gun goes off and rapid fires..
                                                            
                       SANDY
Oh Snap!
                                                            
 
INT. THE BEDROOM LATER - DAY
                                                            
 
INT. MONTAGE - DAY
                                                            
-The guys unwrap brand new saws.

-They move her body to the middle of the room.

-They both pop pills.

-The blood on the plastic trickles across the plastic as we
hear sawing noises in the background.
                                                            
Sandy is in the kitchen inspecting the double ovens.
                                                            
 
INT. KITCHEN - DAY
                                                            
-The two drag plastic drop cloth filled with body parts to
the kitchen.

-They open the two huge ovens in the kitchen.

-They slam them shut and push the "SELF CLEAN" button.
                                                            
 
INT. BEDROOM - DAY
                                                            
Kellen lies on the plastic covered bed as SANDY is cleaning
finger prints off the door knobs.
                                                            
                       SANDY
You know what's a good movie?
                                                            
                       KELLEN
What?
                                                            

8.

                       SANDY
"Point Break".
                                                            
                       KELLEN
Yeah. Absolutely. If the only
other movie in existence is
"C.H.U.D.".
                                                            
Kellen gets up.
                                                            
                       SANDY
Where you going?
                                                            
                       KELLEN
I have dry mouth.
                                                            
 
INT. KITCHEN/HALLWAY - DAY
                                                            
Kellen is on the way to the kitchen.
                                                            
He stops dead in his tracks. The CLEANING LADY is in the
kitchen washing the sink.
                                                            
He stands there for a moment not knowing what to do. The
cleaning lady, not even looking up, starts:
                                                            
                       CLEANING LADY
Someone left the oven on self
cleaning with something in it. I'm
waiting for the smoke to go away.
                                                            
Kellen approaches the sink where she is.
                                                            
She looks up, surprised...
                                                            
                       CLEANING LADY
Oh, um, you friend of Mr and Mrs
Barnes?
                                                            
Kellen pours himself a drink of water and takes a slow swig.
He scans the kitchen to assess what he could do next.
                                                            
                       KELLEN
Yes.
                                                            
The oven rings. The self cleaning cycle is over.
                                                            
The cleaning lady reaches over to open the oven...
                                                            
 

9.

INT. BEDROOM - DAY
                                                            
From the bedroom Sandy hears a HORRIBLE SHRIEK. In his dopey
haze he slowly gets up to go check and see, slightly
annoyed.
                                                            
 
INT. KITCHEN - DAY
                                                            
Kellen stands over the DEAD BODY of the cleaning lady. He
has a BUTCHER KNIFE in hand. A blood spurt runs across the
kitchen floor and all over the pantry. She's still alive,
but barely. Making gurgling noises.
                                                            
                       KELLEN
I made a mess.
                                                            
 
INT. KITCHEN. - DAY
                                                            
They start their process over again, this time everything is
a little HAZY AND OUT OF FOCUS. Too many drugs by now.
                                                            
Clear plastic is layed out on the floor.

The cleaning lady's clothes are piled up in the corner.

The two pop pills.

The two are sawing away.

The oven is set to "Self Clean" once again.
                                                            
 
INT. KITCHEN - DAY
                                                            
Kellen and Sandy are both on their hands and knees cleaning
up the mess of blood. They are in the final stages, Sandy is
using a toothbrush to get it out of the marble cracks.
                                                            
The OVEN RINGS. They both look up.
                                                            
 
INT. KITCHEN - DAY
                                                            
-the two are taking the bones out of the oven and placing
them in a garbage bags...

-Sandy is dustbusting the kitchen floor for the crumbs that
have fallen out.
                                                            
 

10.

INT. LOBBY OF HOUSE - DAY
                                                            
The two are heading out with their garbage bags full of soot
and bones over their shoulders.

Behind them, they staged a struggle, as if there was a
burglary and perhaps Krystal caught them.

Sandy presses the emergency button on the alarm system as
they walk out the door.
Kellen has a backpack full of tools.

As they go to exit, the NAIL GUN FALLS OUT of SANDY's bag.

It hits the floor and we hear the SOUND OF FIRING OFF but no
sound of it hitting anything.
                                                            
                       SANDY
Shit! You see it? You see it?
Where'd the nail go?
                                                            
The emergency button is beeping in the background.
                                                            
                       KELLEN
Musta misfired.
                                                            
 
EXT. LAS VEGAS DESERT ROAD - NIGHT
                                                            
The two are riding their bikes with bags over their
shoulders.
                                                            
 
EXT. BEHIND A MALL - NIGHT
                                                            
They dump out their bags into a dumpster behind a seedy
convenience store.
                                                            
 
EXT. PHONE BOOTH - NIGHT
                                                            
Sandy is on the phone with Brett explaining the housekeeper
situation.

Kellen pops a pill in the background and washes it down with
a grape soda.

Sandy seems agitated with Brett yelling at him over the
phone.

Kellen, high as a kite, keeps trying to horse around with
Sandy while he's on the phone in the middle of an obviously
important conversation.
                                                            
 

11.

INT. MOM AND POPS VIDEO STORE - NIGHT
                                                            
The two are perusing DVD's in this seedy Mom and Pop's video
store.
                                                            
Sandy looks at the SECURITY GUARD at the door with
uncertainty.
                                                            
With every other step Kellen emits a SQUISHY, WET SHOE
NOISE.
                                                            
                       SANDY
What about this? I've never seen
this.
                                                            
                       KELLEN
I'm telling you. "Point Break."
                                                            
                       SANDY
Oh now you're all about Point
Break? You ok man?
                                                            
KELLEN looks like Death. He's white as a sheet.
                                                            
Sandy looks down and there's a trail of blood behind Kellen.
                                                            
Sandy gets down on his knees and sees the missing nail from
earlier on sticking out of the back of Kellen's leg.
                                                            
                       SANDY
How many pills did you take
retard?
                                                            
                       KELLEN
I can't feel anything.
                                                            
A WOMAN notices the trail or blood on the floor and starts
SCREAMING. The security guard spots them.

KELLEN CRUMBLES to the ground from the loss of blood...
                                                            
 
EXT. LAS VEGAS - NIGHT
                                                            
MUSIC: AGAIN... THE BLACK ANGELS "BLACK GREASE".
                                                            
MONTAGE: We follow the trail of blood from the video store.

AS DAWN CREEPS UP, THE LIGHT OF DAY REVEALS THE BLOOD TRAIL
GOING TO:

... the phone booth


12.

... the dumpster

... Big Brett's house

... the entry way.

INT. BIG BRETT'S HOUSE- DAY

Two cops are in the doorway looking over this trail of
blood.

Big Brett in the background is pretend crying like a bad
actor.
                                                            


THE END


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From Renone Montanez Date 2/12/2011 1/2
This would only be a twelve minute show.

From ShawnSmith Date 10/28/2010 ***
It is worth making, It sort of reads like a TV show. Make sure you explain more about your characters. I'll give 3 stars for this, you know what your thinking about, just show us what your thinking about.


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