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BULLYCIDE
by vito jennette (tf3411@yahoo.com)

Rated: R   Genre: Drama   User Review: ***1/2
Even one instance can cripple a young mind into a wall of despair. When a suicidal teens cries are finally heard, he seeks guidance to face his Tormentor head on!


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BULLYCIDE

FADE IN:

INT. EISENHOWER HIGH SCHOOL - ADVANCED PHYSICS - DAY
                                                            
Mr.Jacobs (50) Overweight, African-American, with greyish
hair, and a handle bar mustache is writing formulas on the
chalk board, The whole class seems confused by his teaching
methods. Kids are seated at tables of two, Ryan Mohammad
(17) is a baby faced, skinny, weak looking teen with strait
shaggy dark hair and horn rimmed glasses. The boy has an
insecure, troubled look of incurable hopelessness in his
eyes. He is seated next to Kelly (17) a beautiful, curvy,
green eyed girl, with golden blonde locks, and gorgeous
dimples that shine.
                                                            
                       MR. JACOBS
Okay class, here's an easy one for
you. Which terms corresponding to
a given configuration have the
lowest energy?
                                                            
Kelly and Ryan both raise their hands.
                                                            
                       MR. JACOBS
Ryan.
                                                            
                       RYAN
The level with the largest
multiplicity has the lowest
energy?
                                                            
Kelly quickly throws her hand back in the air.
                                                            
                       MR. JACOBS
You don't sound so sure. Kelly, do
you agree?
                                                            
                       KELLY
For a given multiplicity, the
level with the largest value of L
has the lowest energy.
                                                            
Kelly glances at Ryan sitting next to her and gives a brief
flirtatious smile.
                                                            
A boy from the back of the room throws a crumbled up piece
of paper hitting Ryan in the back of the head.
                                                            
KIDS LAUGHING (S.O.)
HAHAHAHHAHA!
                                                            

2.

Mr. Jacobs stops and points at the boy briefly as if he is
daring the teen to try it again.

The teacher then gives Ryan and Kelly his complete
attention.
                                                            
                       MR. JACOBS
Actually you're both right,the
level with the largest has the
lowest. Nice job guys. Identical
particals, anyone?
                                                            
Ryan turns to look at who threw something at him, then
quickly turns back around after making eye contact. Ryan
waits... turns back around noticing the boy still staring
at him.
                                                            
BELL RINGS! (S.O.)
                                                            
                       MR. JACOBS (More)
      (YELLING OVER BELL)
NO TWO IDENTICAL FERMIONS CAN HAVE
EXACTLY THE SAME SET OF QUANTUM
NUMBERS PEOPLE! I'LL SEE YOU ALL
TOMORROW.
                                                            
The class quickly closes their books in relief the long
school day is finally over, everyone exits the classroom.
                                                            
 
INT. EISENHOWER HIGH SCHOOL - DAY
                                                            
This is not a wealthy school by any means, signs and banners
cover the halls, above door frames, and pasted along the
lockers congratulating Tommy "The Phenom" Gibson for his
second State Wrestling Championship in as many years.
                                                            
The hallway packed tightly with Teenagers, letting out of
class, walking to their lockers, preparing to go home for
the day. Teenagers flow out the exits into the parking lot
to their cars, and buses. Chatting with one another laughing
joking, and telling stories. Tommy Gibson,(18) an African
American muscle bound kid wearing his lettered jacket
proudly covered with Varsity patches and first prize
wrestling medals pinned to the chest.Kids are patting
him on the back, giving him high five, congratulating
him as they pass him at his locker.
                                                            
With everything going on, classmates make a conscious
effort clear a path as three students walk toward Tommy.
Ryan has his nose buried in a book never noticing the
three teens, innocently bumping into the shortest of the
three. Ryan looks up to apologize.
                                                            

3.

Ryan tucks his books under his left arm, puts his glasses
back in place, and extends his free hand to greet his fellow
classmates.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Sorry man. I didn't see you there,
I'm Ryan.
                                                            
The intimidating boy knocks Ryan's books to the floor, never
stopping on their way to Tommy's locker.
                                                            
Tommy slams his locker shut, walks through the crowded
hallway and outside the school.
                                                            
 
EXT. OUTSIDE SCHOOL - DAY
                                                            
Tommy walking toward his car, parked directly across the
street. Tommy turns to see Ellery Marrol(17) a extremley
lengthy kid, with athletic build, long blonde goatee, shaved
head, and a sleeveless shirt. Walking along side him is his
two friends Jeremy Sapp and Cash Carlyle both wearing silver
and black fighting wolves dojo T-shirts.
                                                            
                       TOMMY
      (Nods and smiles)
Ellery, guys.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (antagonizing
       smirk)
Now Tommy, you don't think that
wrestling crap could actually help
you in a real fight?
                                                            
                       TOMMY
Fight? No, not at all Ellery.
                                                            
Tommy turns red but his fear holds back his anger.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
That's not how I see it Tommy.
Everyone patting you on the ass!
It looks to me like you think
you're the big man on campus.
                                                            
Kids begin to circle around the boys, everyone desperate to
get a peek of the altercation.
                                                            
                       TOMMY
It's not like that...
                                                            

4.

                       ELLERY (More)
It looks to me like you have
everyone fooled with your little
wrestling match and your gay
leotards!
                                                            
Jeremy and Cash stand just behind Ellery sizing up the
crowd, waiting to attack anything that moves.
                                                            
                       TOMMY
Hey man, I got no problem with
you. What ever I did, I'm sorry.
                                                            
Ellery leans over and whispers into Tommy's ear.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (whispers)
Scholarship or not, you're still
just another stupid nigger.
                                                            
Suddenly Tommy shoots for Ellery's legs, Ellery responds
with superior skills by trapping Tom's arm, and digging his
fingers in Tommy's eyes.
                                                            
Without retracting his hand from Tommy's face, Ellery
smiles at the audience as he slams a palm-heel strike up
into his chin, then rakes his finger nails down the boys
face, Ellery steps behind the wrestler gouging his eyes
and bites the top of his ear, then finishes by stepping
back and shoving Tommy's head against the drivers side
door of his car! Tommy falls to the cement pavement.
                                                            
The frightened audience is disgusted by Ellerys actions, but
no one dares to speak up.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (Provoking)
PEOPLE, THIS IS YOUR CHAMPION? A
WRESTLER. THERE IS ONLY ONE
CHAMPION AT THIS SCHOOL!
                                                            
Tommy is on his back holding his ear in pain, trying to stop
the flow of blood. Ellery jumps on top of Tommy, mounting
his legs over the neck and stomach. Ellery secures Tommy's
wrist between his legs and against his chest, leans back
pulling the straitened arm and pushing with his legs until
Tommy's arm snaps from the force of the arm bar.
                                                            
Ellery tears the medals off Tommy's varsity jacket pocketing
them, then walking off followed by his two friends.
                                                            
A man in a nearby house watches carefully through his plate
glass window.
                                                            

5.

Ryan runs to the aid of the stranger, holding him
protectively in his arms, as he lies motionless on his back.
                                                            
                       RYAN
You're going to be okay, I called
an ambulance.
                                                            
Ellery looks back at Ryan and grins, the two lock eyes as
the three keep moving to their car.
                                                            
 
INT. EISENHOWER HIGH SCHOOL PRINCIPAL'S OFFICE - DAY
                                                            
Office looks like a hobby shop covered in shelves, with wall
to wall Model cars, boats, Motorcycles, and Airplanes.
                                                            
Principal Brandon Whitley (30's) Sandy brown hair,freckled
faced, coffee stained teeth with braces, wearing a blue
sweater vest, and golden tie sits behind his cherry wood
desk, putting together a plastic model replica car of KITT
from the Knight Rider. Sitting in front of him is Gym
teacher, and wrestling Coach, Mr.Evens (late 40's) Rather
large caucasian, wearing a Baseball cap and jogging sweat
suit, with a whistle hanging from his neck.
                                                            
Principal Whitley carefully crazy glues a tire onto the
model car.
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
Coach, I don't know what you
expect me to do here. The incident
took place off school grounds,
(pause) I realize Tommy was your
best wrestler, but my hands are
tied. There's just nothing I can
do.
                                                            
Coach is a bit fidgety, and bothered by not getting the full
attention he believes is deserved.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
Best wrestler? He has a full ride
to U of M next season and he's
sitting in a hospital bed with a
broken arm, fractured skull,and he
can't see out of his left eye!
This kid has more talent then any
wrestler I've ever been around,
and this Ellery boy dismantled him
like a toy! You're not a bit
confused about how?
                                                            

6.

                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
Look Coach, I'm sorry. I have
sixteen...
                                                            
A teenage girl walks into Principal Whitley's office,
handing him a sheet of paper.
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY (cont'd)
Make that seventeen eye witnesses
that all state in their incident
reports Tommy went after Ellery
first. By quote "shooting for his
legs" end quote. And Ellery
defended himself. If Tommy's
parents choose to file a police
report, it would be the only way
Ellery could be punished.
                                                            
Coach reaches over the desk, grabbing the model car out from
under the Principal's nose, moving it over on the other side
of the desk, demanding attention.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
This boy and his fighting wolves
karate club prey on the weak, and
use fear, intimidation, and
violence to scare the shit out of
every student in this school. Now
he almost kills one and you're
telling me you didn't see this
coming?
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
Yes, if you ask me he went too
far, but in the eyes of the law it
was still self defense.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
Mr. Whitley, do you have any idea
what the number one cause for
suicide is?
                                                            
Principal Whitley slides open his desk drawer, pulling out a
thermos, and placing it on top of the desk.
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
Depression?
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
Yeah depression. And bullies
picking on, and assaulting other
already insecure teenagers causes
depression, and depression leads
            (MORE)

7.

                       COACH EVENS (cont'd)
to suicide or worse!
                                                            
Whitley unscrews the top, and pours hot soup into the
cup/lid.
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
Worse, Coach?
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
Eighty five percent of all school
related shootings is the direct
result of kids being picked on or
bullied. SO YEAH, MUCH WORSE,
COLUMBINE WORSE!
                                                            
Whitley smiles and takes a sip of his soup.
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
      (Clears throat)
                                                            
Whitley dumps his soup back into the thermos tightening the
lid firmly.
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
I think you're over reacting
coach. Over my years as acting
Principal I've learned these
things have a way of working
themselves out.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
      (Defiant)
...And that's been what three
whole years now!
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
      (uses authority)
Four now, Coach!
                                                            
Coach visibly angry springs out of his seat flinging his
chair back under the desk.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
When this happens again, the blood
is on YOUR HANDS NEXT TIME, NOT
MINE!
                                                            
Coach Evens storms out of the office slamming the door
behind him with all of his might.
                                                            
 

8.

INT. EISENHOWER HIGH SCHOOL - HALLWAY - DAY
                                                            
Ryan hangs his coat in his locker, then buries his face
inside looking for his first period book.
                                                            
Cash Carlyle (19) a tall, spiky haired kid, wearing a
fighting wolves karate shirt that is too small for his
huge frame, both arms are covered with sleeves of tattoo's.
Jeremy Sapp (17) has a fearsome scowl, bleach blonde hair,
and a swagger of a boy who demands attention. They approach
Ryan's locker.
                                                            
Ryan shuts his locker door to discover the two boys
hovering over him, He recognizes them from yesterday's
attack immediately.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Hey guys what up?
                                                            
                       CASH
You dawg.
                                                            
Cash reaches for Ryans glasses, Ryan lurches back.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Me? What do you mean?
                                                            
                       JEREMY
      (intense/ deranged)
You tell us hero. You're the one
who came running to Tommy's aid
yesterday, like his little BITCH.
                                                            
Ellery sneaks up behind Ryan pressing his chest
against Ryan's back, nudging him closer to Jeremy.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Look guys it was nice talking to
you, I'm going to be late for
class so I guess I'll see you
later then.
                                                            
Ryan tries walking away, Cash steps in front of him knocking
his books to the floor. A crowd begins to form around the
boys.
                                                            
Cash clinches his fist so tight his knuckes turn white.
                                                            
                       CASH
Is that what you are, Tommy's
little bitch! Huh dawg?
                                                            
Jeremy shoves Ryan.
                                                            

9.

                       JEREMY
      (Infuriated
       lunatic)
HEY! HE'S TALKING TO YOU FAGGOT!
                                                            
Ryan turns briefly watching Ellery but nervously keeping an
eye on all three.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (Smiling)
Calm down dude, we're all friends
here. The thing I can't seem to
figure out though, is after YOU
called 911, the police showed up
at our houses? That means someone
had to of given them our names.
Now what kind of friend would do
something like that, huh Ryan? YOU
FUCKING CAMEL JOCKEY!
                                                            
                       RYAN
I don't even know you guys,so how
could I have given them your
names? What ever problems you have
with Tommy is your business, not
mine.
                                                            
Ryan attemps to walk away but Cash blocks his path.
                                                            
                       CASH
That's where your wrong SNITCH!
You made it your business when you
called the cops worm!
                                                            
Cash throws a strait right cross at Ryan's jaw.
                                                            
Ryan instinctively slips the cross then ducks as Cash throws
a powerful left hook just missing Ryan's head.
                                                            
Jeremy quickly fires a kick catching him hard to the back of
Ryan's leg just behind the knee, sweeping his feet out from
underneath him.
                                                            
Coach Evens pushes his way through the crowd, then jumps in
between the three grabbing Cash and Jeremy by the collar.
                                                            
Ryan lands on his back, the fall knocks the wind out from
him. His head bounces off the floor.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
      (directed at Ryan)
You alright son?
                                                            

10.

                       RYAN
      (suffering)
I've been better.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
What was that?
                                                            
                       RYAN
I'll be alright sir, I'm kinda
used to it.
                                                            
Coach's paws are locked behind the collars of Jeremy and
Cash, pushing them toward the office, Ellery walks just
ahead.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
We'll see what Principal Whitley
has to say about all this, you too
Ellery lets go now!
                                                            
Ryan picks himself and his books from the floor, then tags a
ways behind.
                                                            
 
INT. PRINCIPAL WHITLEY'S OFFICE - DAY
                                                            
Principal Whitley sits behind his desk, in front of him
sits Ryan Zaluski,a slumped back Cash Carlyle,and noticeably
irritated Jeremy Sapp. Just behind them stands Coach Evens
and Ellery Marrol.
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
So Ryan, what exactly went on
today?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Nothing sir, this is all just one
big misunderstanding.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
MISUNDERSTANDING? Ryan they were
going to tear you to shreds!
                                                            
Cash and Jeremy both hold back their obnoxious smirks,
                                                            
                       ELLERY
Actually Principal Whitley, Ryan
here must have tripped on his shoe
lace or maybe slipped on water
that wasn't properly mopped up,
that's when everyone circled
around us, out of concern for
Ryan's safety. Luckily Jeremy,
Cash and Myself were present to
            (MORE)

11.

                       ELLERY (cont'd)
help him up. That's when Coach
showed up and assaulted Jeremy and
Cash by grabbing them by the back
of the necks.
                                                            
Coach with a look of sickness and pure disgust, runs his
hand down his face.
                                                            
                       ELLERY (cont'd)
I'm not (Looks at Coach and
smiles) exactly sure of state
laws, but I don't think he is
allowed to touch a student.
Correct me if I'm wrong Principal
Whitley, but I believe that could
lead to some sort of class action
lawsuit against the board of
education, sir?
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
WHAT LIKE YOU ASSAULTED TOMMY! OR
HOW YOU SEEM TO BULLY AND HARASS
GOOD KIDS LIKE RYAN HERE! YOU
DON'T WANT ME TO SHOW YOU ASSAULT,
YOU LITTLE PUNK!
                                                            
Ellery looks at Coach like he's a joke, and shakes his head.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (Entertained by
       the offer)
I wish you would oldman!
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
Just calm down now Coach, and wait
a second. Lets sort this thing
out. Ryan, Is what Ellery said the
truth?
                                                            
Folds his hand on his lap, looks over at Ellery then back.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Yes sir it is.
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
You boys get to class now.
                                                            
Jeremy, Cash, and Ellery give Coach Evens looks of
amusement, and a pat on the back as they leave the
office. Ryan avoids eye contact as he passes.
                                                            
Coach Evens shuts the door, and sits down.
                                                            

12.

                                         CUT TO BEHIND DOOR
                                                            
Ellery presses his nose against Ryan's intimidating him.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (BEHIND THE DOOR)
Listen you little HOMO, this is
far from over.
                                                            
Ryan stands confused after bailing Ellery out.
                                                            
                                         CUT TO OFFICE
                                                            
Coach Evens removes his hat placing it on the desk, exposing
his bald head.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
All due respect sir. Those kids
are sadistic bastards, who are
amused so easily through kids like
Ryan's torment and pain.
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
      (Beat)
Ryan said...
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
      (Beat)
Ryan said that out of fear and
fear alone! To him it's saving his
own ass, nothing more.
                                                            
Coach puts his hat back on his head, gets up and opens the
door.
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
And Coach, for future notice
please refrain yourself from
touching and threatening any of
the students.
                                                            
Coach leaves the room.
                                                            
 
INT. LUNCHROOM - DAY
                                                            
Typical lunchroom tables filled with clicks mostly minority
dissent, all mixed in with jocks, cheerleaders, goths,
nerds, preps, heavy metals, criminals, gang members and red
eyed stoner teens all socializing and eating their lunches
together without eating together. Ryan walks over to an
empty table to eat alone, he pulls out his chair and goes to
sit.
                                                            

13.

Ellery moves the chair out from underneath Ryan, he falls
crashing to the floor, landing painfully hard on his bottom.
                                                            
The entire lunchroom erupts in laughter as one. Ryan is
humiliated, he looks up at Ellery, Jeremy, and Cash laughing
and pointing at him.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
Oh sorry about that douche bag, I
didn't realize this seat was
taken.
                                                            
Ryan stands.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I can't take this anymore.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
What chu call me faggot?
                                                            
Ellery shoves Ryan.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (Loathing)
What you can't take a joke? Tell
you what, we'll see how much you
can take after school terrorist!
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (low - spirited)
I'm so sick of this shit!
                                                            
Jeremy heaves a open mustard packet, it sticks to Ryan's
white shirt.
                                                            
Cash burst out in a ridiculing laugh.
                                                            
Ryan marches passed other entertained students and exits the
cafeteria, headed for the library to eat in peace and quiet.
                                                            
 
INT. LIBRARY - DAY
                                                            
Ryan sits at a table in the empty library next to a window.
                                                            
Eating his bagged lunch, staring out the glass, day dreaming
with a look of despair written all over his face.
                                                            
 
EXT. OUTSIDE EISENHOWER HIGH SCHOOL - DAY
                                                            
Ryan exits the school through the empty parking lot,
hitting the long narrow sidewalk that leads several

14.

blocks to his home under bright sunshine, enclosed
by a long brick divider wall to his right, that isolates
the school from half abandoned neighboring crack,
and whore houses of the rugged Detroit community.
He passes telephone pole, after telephone pole with
promotional fight pictures of Ellery and his upcoming
bout stapled to them. A duffel bag hangs over his right
shoulder.
                                                            
A tricked-out red convertible cruises down the two
lane urban avenue with it's top open, inside sits
Ellery in the passenger seat, Jeremy sits just behind,
with Cash controlling the wheel. The sports car quickly
veers off the point of destination promptly parking a few
yards ahead of Ryan along side the curb.
                                                            
A man is glaring from directly across the street.
                                                            
Ellery takes a huge hit from a blunt before stamping it in
the ash tray.
                                                            
The three boys jump out and surround Ryan.
                                                            
Ellery exhales the smoke into Ryans face.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Now what? Everyone knows you can
kick my ass so whats the point?
                                                            
With scowling eyes as red as the eyes of demons.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
You just don't get it do you
RETARD! If you would have just
minded your own fucking business,
none of this shit would be
happening, But you had to be the
hero! Well hero, no good deed goes
undone MOTHER FUCKER! And now
you're gonna pay.
                                                            
Jeremy spits on the side of Ryan's face.
                                                            
Ryan wipes his face clean with the sleeve of his jacket.
                                                            
                       JEREMY
      (boiling)
Those were some smooth moves you
displayed in the hallway earlier
geek, NOW IT'S TIME TO TAKE YOUR
BEATING LIKE A MAN!
LETS FIND OUT HOW GOOD YOUR
DEFENSE REALLY IS PUNK!
                                                            

15.

                       CASH
More like lucky dawg.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (Pissed/Intrigued)
SHUT UP CASH! JEREMY GET'EM!
                                                            
Jeremy throws a series of combinations.
                                                            
Ryan ducks and dodges all of them.
                                                            
Ryan surrenders putting his open hands just above his head.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Lets just end this, I have some
money you can have it!
                                                            
Ellery restraining Jeremy by the chest, then pushing him
aside. He cracks his neck, hands at his sides, begins
bouncing on his toes.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
It's not about money you fucking
arab, it's about respect!
                                                            
Ellery throws a lightning fast roundhouse kick, followed by
a spinning back fist both landing almost simultaneously to
Ryan's eye, instantly exploding on impact.
                                                            
Ryan is unconscious before hitting the ground. The Fighting
Wolves congratulate each other, jump back in their car, and
drive off.
                                                            
Ryan awakes spread out bloodied, beaten, and confused.
                                                            
He picks his self up and makes his way home.
                                                            
 
INT. RYAN'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
                                                            
Ryan's eye is swollen shut, with a laceration over the same
brow. He is staring at the computer screen with a look of
disbelief, on the screen is a website dedicated to people
who hate Ryan Mohammad. His mother Gail (40) wearing a
waitress uniform and bus pass around her neck, comes in the
door after a long day of work, he quickly turns the monitor
off and sits on the couch, crossing his arms.
                                                            
Ryan's mom softly places her hands over Ryan's ears.
                                                            

16.

                       GAIL
      (very concerned)
Oh my baby, what happened to your
face? who did this to you?
                                                            
Ryan fends off his mothers affection, holding back his
own emotions, trying to scramble away into his bedroom,
his mother steps in front of him blocking the hallway.
                                                            
                       RYAN
NOTHING MOM, JUST LEAVE ME ALONE!
                                                            
The strong single mother struggles mightily to keep herself
together.
                                                            
                       GAIL
You have to tell me the truth, I
need to know what's happening in
your life. Who hurt you?
                                                            
She grabs His hand, he pulls it away!
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (Beat)
NOTHING HAPPENED MOM, I FELL!
                                                            
She paces the floor then heads for the telephone.
                                                            
                       GAIL
That's it, I'm gonna have a talk
with your principal to make sure
this doesn't happen again.
                                                            
Picks up the phone begins to turn the rotary...then hangs
up.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (Beat)
It's not going to help, it didn't
happen on school grounds.
                                                            
Starts dialing on the rotary again.
                                                            
                       GAIL
Then I'll call the police. Just
tell me, who did this to you?
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (long pause)
It's only going to make things
worse, you don't know these guys.
                                                            

17.

Hangs up the phone, then rushes to her sons side looking for
the answer.
                                                            
                       GAIL
I didn't move us away from your
abusive father so you could
continue taking beatings!
                                                            
Ryan snatches up a picture from the coffee table, breaking
it against a wall, His mother is overwhelmed by his actions.
                                                            
                       RYAN
IT'S NO DIFFERENT THEN ANY OTHER
PLACE MOM! Sacramento, Seattle,
Columbus, Detroit everywhere we
go. I don't know whats wrong with
me, why can't I ever make any
friends? Everywhere we go it's the
same shit, it's not just dad.
Everyone hates me! They never even
give me a chance! My life sucks,
I'M TIRED OF GETTING MY ASS
KICKED!
                                                            
Her emotions begin to get the best of her.
                                                            
                       GAIL
Oh baby, there's nothing wrong
with you?
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (welling up)
Everyday I wake up go to school,
if you want to call it that, and
deal with the FUCKING loneliness
that surrounds my life, and come
home to nothing, alone, feeling
sorry for myself. I'M PATHETIC!
TELL ME HOW YOU WOULD FEEL WAKING
UP EVERY DAY WISHING IT WOULD BE
YOUR LAST?
                                                            
Ryan's Mom wraps her loving arms around her son, holding him
like a baby.
                                                            
                       GAIL
      (crying)
Honey? I had no idea. I'm so, so
sorry! I'll talk to my boss, I'll
make sure I'm home more, we'll
spend more time together. I don't
want you to hurt anymore.
                                                            
 

18.

INT. ADVANCED PHYSICS - FRI - DAY
                                                            
Mr.Jacobs is motionless behind his desk reading a home
and garden magazine. The rest of the class is sitting
quietly taking a quiz, Ryan and Kelly finish early.
                                                            
Kelly leans over to her right into Ryans ear.
                                                            
                       KELLY
      (whispering)
So Ryan, what happened to your
eye? It looks painful, does it
hurt?
                                                            
Ryan embarrassed back by the question, massages the back of
his neck.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (whispering/ lie)
It's a funny story actually I was
working on my moms car, you know
the carburetor was acting up. So
I'm wrenching away and the damn
thing slips off the nut, jerks
back and hits me square in the
eye. It's a little sore but I'm
alright.
                                                            
                       KELLY
      (flirting)
Oh is that all? I thought maybe
someone might have kicked your ass
or something.
                                                            
SHhhhh.
                                                            
                       RYAN
No, nope, not me. If there's any
ass kickin' going on it wouldn't
be on me.
                                                            
A paper airplane hits Ryan in the shoulder.
                                                            
                       KELLY
So where you from?
                                                            
Ryan turns to look behind him, but quickly turns back around
when a rather mean looking classmate snarls at him.
                                                            
                       RYAN
What do you mean like originally
or now? If you mean now I live
just a few ---
                                                            

19.

She flirtatiously touches Ryans arm.
                                                            
                       KELLY (chuckles)
      (whispering)
--- I mean originally! Wow not
only cute, but smart too.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Lost Springs, Wyoming. The
smallest town in America. 2,000
total people!
                                                            
Ryan begins putting all his school supplies in his trapper
keeper.
                                                            
                       KELLY
      (delighted)
What like big people small world
or something!
                                                            
                       RYAN
Yeah? Fourth school in five years,
so it's been a while since I've
been home.
                                                            
                       KELLY
So why wander the land so much
over the past five years? Are you
and your folks pioneers, on the
run or something?
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (holds back his
       laughs.)
DAMN! You are extremely nosy, has
anyone ever told you that? Well,
It's me and my mom and we move
where the work is, and because of
the shitty economy the work is
not.
                                                            
Ryan points at all the school buses parked outside the
window.
                                                            
                       RYAN
You see that?
                                                            
Kelly looks real hard outside with a look of uncertainty
                                                            
                       KELLY
      (Beat)
See what?
                                                            

20.

                       RYAN
(Laughs) The moving van is out
front waiting for me now!
                                                            
Kelly playfully smacks his shoulder.
                                                            
Spit balls hit Ryan in the back of the head, he never
flinches brushing the back of his head with his hand.
                                                            
BELL RINGS!
                                                            
Everyone springs up and out of class.
                                                            
 
INT. HALLWAY - DAY
                                                            
Ryan casually turns to his left toward his locker, he spots
The Fighting Wolves. Then turns around and goes in the other
direction.
                                                            
                       KELLY
Hey did you forget where your
locker is silly?
                                                            
Keeps a close eye on bullies.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (watching close)
Na, No, go ahead, I gotta use the
rest room. I'll catch up with you
later.
                                                            
 
INT. LAVATORY - DAY
                                                            
Ryan hides in locked stall on top of toilet.
                                                            
Ryan steps down from toilet, unlocks door, opens it, then
goes over to the sink turning on the water, takes his
glasses off his head folding them and putting them in his
shirt pocket. He gets a hand full of water, splashing his
face.

Ryan straightens up and looks directly at his reflection in
the mirror as it stares back.
                                                            
His reflection is silent and motionless for a few seconds.
                                                            
Ryans P.O.V. ;
                                                            
The reflection of himself comes to life and begins screaming
with pure hatred reciting all the negative tauntings that
his less than supportive overbearing abussive father, past,

21.

and present bullies and his own ensecureties of himself have
verbaly branded and emotionally assulted into his suicidal
head over the years of torment.
                                                            
                       MIRROR
WHAT THE FUCK IS WRONG WITH YOU,
YOU'RE SUCH A FUCKING NOBODY
LOSER, LOOK AT YOU, YOU'RE A
FUCKING RETARDED COWARD, EVERYONE
KNOWS YOU'RE JUST A SELF LOATHING
PATHETIC LOSER!(Crying) THAT'S WHY
EVERYONE HATES YOU, THAT'S WHY YOU
HAVE NO FRIENDS, KELLY JUST FEELS
SORRY FOR YOU FAGGOT!NO ONE WILL
MISS YOU, JUST FUCKING SPARE
EVERYONE THE FUCKING DRAMA AND PUT
A BULLET IN YOUR GOD DAMN LOSER
HEAD!
                                                            
Ryan falls to his knees, realizes he is having a nervous
breakdown.

He begins crying hysterically.
                                                            
Minutes pass before he starts gathering some composure.

Ryan wipes away the tears, looks at his wrist watch, opens
the main door, peeking his head out, the hallways are empty.
                                                            
 
INT. RYAN'S LOCKER - DAY
                                                            
Ryan opens his locker completely cleaning it out, putting
all his papers and pencils in his duffel bag, and all six
books under his left arm.
                                                            
He puts his glasses back on his face, slams the door shut
and cautiously departs the building.
                                                            
 
EXT. OUTSIDE SCHOOL - FRI - DAY
                                                            
Ryan begins to make his way home on the sidewalk along the
brick wall when he spots Cash's tricked-out red convertible
against the curb, Ellery, Cash and Jeremy are taking turns
swigging from a liquor bottle.
                                                            
Ryan quivers as he approaches the car, keeping his distance,
and a careful eye on all three boys as he pretends to pass
without seeing them.
                                                            
The drunken wolves climb out of the open convertible top.
                                                            

22.

Cash knocks all six of Ryan's books to the dirt.
                                                            
                       CASH
If it aint the rat.
                                                            
Jeremy takes a hit off his cigarette, then flicks it hitting
Ryan in the face.
                                                            
Ryan in a state of panic, and terror - stricken dashes off
into a sprint, Jeremy gives chase tackling him from behind,
forcefully picking the frightened boy up from the cement,
then shoving him into Cash, who holds him up firmly around
the back of the neck.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (sinister smile)
HEY TOWEL HEAD, YOU MISS ME!
                                                            
                       JEREMY
      (hysterical)
ENOUGH WITH THE BULLSHIT ELLERY!
                                                            
Jeremy grabs the distressed boy by the hair.
                                                            
                       JEREMY
      (raging)
I'M GONNA FUCKING KILL YOU, YOU
BITCH ASS MOTHER FUCKER!
                                                            
Jeremy side kicks Ryan in the stomach, then dances on his
toes.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (SCREAMS IN PAIN)
AWWW!
                                                            
Ellery leans his face arrogantly down level with Ryan's
panicked face.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
What was that osama? You want
more, no problem bro!
                                                            
Ellery throws a lightning fast high kick to Ryan's jaw, his
head snaps back hard, knocking his glasses off his face, his
body goes limp, but Cash holds him up.
                                                            
Jeremy fires multiple times with uppercuts landing solidly
to Ryan's rib cage.
                                                            
His face wet with tears, a webbing of saliva, and blood
between his lips, and open mouth as he gasp for air.
                                                            

23.

A thick ribbon of blood falling from his mouth.
                                                            
Cash lets him drop, Ryan curls up into a ball finding no
comfort on the ground while the three boys unload powerful
kicks to his body, his head is pitched between the cement
and viscous stomps.
                                                            
                       CASH
You aint shit, now are ya' dawg!
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (crying)
PLEASE STOP! I'M SORRY, I'M SORRY,
I'M SORRY, I'M SORRY!
                                                            
A Caucasian man, fourtyish, thicknecked, broken-nosed,
muscular, with massive arms, dark hair, and an expression
of absolute murder comes high tailing it from across the
street holding a wooden baseball bat, wildly swooping it,
hitting Cash in the arm. The boys retreat to their car,
and quickly flee the scene.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (DRIVING OFF)
LATER HOMO!
                                                            
The Man drops the bat, and squats to his knees helping Ryan.
                                                            
                       MAN
HEY KID, CAN YOU HEAR ME? YOU
ALRIGHT?
                                                            
                       RYAN
AWW shit, yeah I'm alright.
                                                            
                       MAN
Can you move? can you get up?
                                                            
                       RYAN
I think so?
                                                            
The man assist Ryan to his feet, then crouches down,
grabbing his dirty glasses, offering them to him.
                                                            
Ryan puts them on his face.
                                                            
The man picks up all of Ryan's books volunteering half.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I guess it's my own fault for not
finding another way home.
                                                            

24.

                       MAN
No, it's not your fault. You live
far from here? I'll help you with
your books.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (huge smile)
No, a couple blocks, maybe.
                                                            
                       JIM
So you got a name kid? I'm Jim.
                                                            
Jim puts out his hand to shake. Ryan has a look of gratitude
written all over his face.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (genuine)
I'm Ryan. Thanks for everything,
those guys just won't quit? I
don't even know what I did to them
to deserve this every day.
                                                            
They shake hands.
                                                            
Jim is what you call an old-school, take no shit kind
of guy; He is well known in the community and gets along
with just about everyone he meets. He can never turn it
off always illustrating his point, lecturing and teaching
is his greatest passion.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (Confused, has
       never seen such a
       look in someones
       eyes)
No one deserves to be treated like
that. You know something kid, it's
time you stand up for yourself and
fight back. I've been watching you
over the past month and I gotta
tell you, your defense is good, as
good as I've seen. You got a back
ground in fighting?
                                                            
Ryan becomes a bit jittery.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Thanks I think?(embarrassed) You
see my dad, he used to hit on me
and my mom, A LOT! After a while,
I just developed a tolerance for
pain, then It got to the point
where I pretty much could see the
shot coming before it ever even
            (MORE)

25.

                       RYAN (cont'd)
got to me. Every school I've been,
I always end up someones target? I
figured if they can't hit me, they
will grow tired of trying. But
that Ellery kid is different, he
has like supernatural speed or
something, I can't read him?
                                                            
The two walk the endless sidewalk on the way to Ryan's home.
                                                            
                       JIM
Look Ryan, I've been training
fighters on and off for 20 years
and those things you just
mentioned are the only two things
you can't teach. That's all god
given, you can't teach god given
ability.
                                                            
Ryan stops to tie his shoe lace.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (looks up at Jim)
What do you mean, getting my ass
whipped?
                                                            
                       JIM
No,The exact opposite. Look here,
I can teach a kid like Ellery to
be the best offensive fighter in
the world right, but if he can't
take or dodge a punch the fight
will be over before it even
starts. That's why they call it
self-DEFENSE and not self-
OFFENSE! Get it?
                                                            
Ryan stands, and takes his house key out of his pocket.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I think so. Well this is it, my
apartment. It was really nice to
meet you Jim. And thanks.
                                                            
Ryan unlocks and opens his front door.
                                                            
                       JIM
Look Ryan, no one should have to
go through this shit day in and
day out. What would you say if I
told you I could help you protect
yourself, you know teach you few
tricks so maybe you can put your
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26.

                       JIM (cont'd)
foot up their ass for once.
                                                            
Jim hands Ryan his books.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I'd say, where do I sign!
                                                            
                       JIM
Take a day or two, think about it.
Talk it over with your mother, let
me know.
                                                            
Ryan goes into his apartment shutting the door behind him,
Jim makes his way back home.
                                                            
Ryan opens the door, admiring the man for a few seconds,
then goes back into his apartment.
                                                            
 
EXT. RYAN'S APARTMENT - AM - DAY
                                                            
Sun rays beat down melting the early morning layer of frost
that covers the grass. Buses and cars pass by the government
fixed income apartments filled with kids all on the same
route to school.
                                                            
Ryan shuts, and locks his front door, and reluctantly heads
down the side walk to school.
                                                            
A red tricked-out convertible sports car speeds by at
dangerous a speed, suddenly the tail lights flash red,
and the car comes to a complete halt.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (vanquished)
Fuck me! Not now!
                                                            
The reverse lights come on, and the car drifts closer.
                                                            
Cash puts the shifter in park, and the three get out with
their hands hidden behind their backs.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
What's up sand nigger. About the
other day, maybe we laid it on a
little thick huh?
                                                            
Jeremy flares his nostrils with a psychotic look on his
face.
                                                            

27.

                       CASH
Yeah no hard feelings dawg?
(smiles) I'll bet you were pretty
pissed huh?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Um no?
                                                            
                       ELLERY
YOU ARE NOW PISS ANT!
                                                            
The three boys laugh as they pelt Ryan with water balloons.
                                                            
                       JEREMY
      (mental)
Uhg! FUCK YOU COCKSUCKER!
                                                            
Ryan puts his open hands up shielding his face.
                                                            
The bullies jump back in the car and drive off with
expressions of pride on their faces. Ryan continues
walking miserable to school in the chilling air soaking
wet.
                                                            
 
INT. PHYSICAL EDUCATION - GYM - DAY
                                                            
There is a full basketball court with rims on each side
of the gym, to the left are girls shooting around and
socializing with other girls, next to them are a few
playing a game of H.O.R.S.E with Coach Evens. Across
the gym are the boys playing a three on three half court
pick up game.
                                                            
Ryan is standing off to the side wearing elastic polyester
shorts and a T-shirt, waiting alone and patiently for his
turn to play.
                                                            
Jeremy and some other kids wearing the same elastic
polyester shorts,and Fighting Wolves Karate T-shirts
are sitting on the bleachers laughing, joking with
each other.
                                                            
                       JEREMY
      (Ruthless)
HEY PISS ANT, how did you like the
piss filled balloons this morning.
                                                            
BOYS LAUGHING!
HAHAHAHA!
                                                            

28.

                       JEREMY
      (crazed)
HEY I'M TALKING TO YOU QUEER!
                                                            
A blue Ryan pretends to ignore them, walking further away.
                                                            
Jeremy slowly approaches Ryan from behind, pulling his
shorts and underwear to his ankles, fully exposing Ryan's
penis and testicles.
                                                            
Jeremy puts his right index and baby finger in his mouth
blowing an extremely loud whistle, grabbing the attention
of the entire class.
                                                            
ENTIRE CLASS LAUGHS AND POINTS
HAHAHAHAHHAHAHAA!
                                                            
Ryan in a state of panic pulls his shorts back up, he
runs off to the locker room embarrassed and crying.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
JEREMY! TAKE YOUR ASS TO THE
PRINCIPALS OFFICE NOW!
                                                            
Unnerving silence fills the gym.
                                                            
Jeremy swaggers out of the gym with a stutter step and a
smile, Coach Evens walks into the locker room to check on
Ryan.
                                                            
 
INT. PHYSICAL EDUCATION LOCKER ROOM - DAY
                                                            
Ryan is dressing.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
Ryan, are you okay son?
                                                            
Ryan sits on the long wooden bench style seat.
                                                            
Buries his head between his own knees.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (crying)
I CAN'T TAKE THIS SHIT ANYMORE
COACH! I JUST CAN'T ANYMORE!
                                                            
Coach pats him on the back, then helps him to his feet.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
Don't worry Ryan, I'll have that
little jerk off doing laps till
his legs fall off, and when that
happens the little shit will be
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29.

                       COACH EVENS (cont'd)
wheeling his cripple ass around
the gym until I say he's had
enough!
                                                            
Slams his locker door with pure anger!
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (complete
       devastation)
It's not just this. The look in
his eyes, the hate. They all look
at me like I have a contagious,
incurable disease, that I could
give to them at any moment. DO YOU
HAVE ANY IDEA HOW IT FEELS TO BE
TREATED THIS WAY, NEVER GETTING A
BREAK FROM IT, IT'S TORTURE!
                                                            
Coach Evens slaps Ryan on the shoulder.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
      (Tries humor)
FOR CHRIST SAKES GET A HOLD OF
YOUR SELF BOY! LOOK AT THE GOD
DAMN BRIGHT SIDE OF ALL OF THIS!
                                                            
Ryan looks shocked by Coach's words.
                                                            
                       RYAN
What? bright side, what could you
possibly find good in him
embarrassing me like that?
                                                            
Coach puts his arm around Ryan, shaking him a little.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
      (smirks)
You just gave every girl in class
a sneak peak of the meat market,
and girls talk bud, believe me by
the end of the day, word will
spread so GOD DAMN far you'd think
Earth Wind and Fire were in town
the line will be so long. For you
Ryan, all to ride the Pony express
boy. Trust me, it could be a hell
of a lot worse. This could be an
all boys school, and good luck
with that broke back mountain
shit.
                                                            

30.

The two laugh.
HAHAHAHA!
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
      (smiles)
And if you're that worried about
some god damn disease, for crying
out loud boy, go buy some rubbers.
                                                            
 
INT. PRINCIPAL WHITLEY'S OFFICE - DAY
                                                            
Principal Whitley hunkered behind his desk, Jeremy
stooped down in a chair, chewing on a pen, seated
next to Coach Evens.
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
This is turning into a serious
recurrence Jeremy. Coach, how do
you suggest we handle this?
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
Expulsion for starters if it
continues.
                                                            
Jeremy jumps out of his seat pointing at Coach Evens.
                                                            
                       JEREMY
      (uncontrollable)
WHAT? THIS IS BULLSHIT MAN! I WAS
JUST HAVING SOME FUN WITH THE
DUDE.
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
Watch your mouth son!, and sit
please.
                                                            
Shakes his head in disbelief.
                                                            
                       JEREMY
      (wired)
Fine.
                                                            
Jeremy sits propping his feet up on Mr.Whitley's desk,
The principal glances up at Jeremy and just points at
him.

He immediately takes his feet down.
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
      (challenged)
One month detention, and if you or
your friends go near Ryan or any
other student on or near the
            (MORE)

31.

                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY (cont'd)
premises, I will be forced to take
Coach Evens advice. You're a
senior, how would your parents
react to you being expelled your
last year?
                                                            
Slides down further in his seat, with hands in pockets.
                                                            
Jeremy's nostrils begin to flare, he is noticeably shaking
in rage.
                                                            
                       JEREMY
They'd be pissed.
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
      (directed at
       Jeremy)
They would be upset. Alright, get
back to class Mr. Sapp.
                                                            
Jeremy storms out of office.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
I'm still going to make that kids
life hell in gym.
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
Expected as much. How is Ryan?
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
Fine, for now. I want you to
understand that children who are
bullied at school, are 4x more
likely to show psychotic symptoms.
They don't develop the same coping
skills as other kids, resulting in
murder, suicide, and god knows
what else.
                                                            
                       PRINCIPAL WHITLEY
OK, Coach I get it! If I may sir,
what makes you such an expert on
the topic?
                                                            
Coach reaches in his back pocket pulling a old faded
picture out of his wallet, stares at it briefly then
hands it to Principal Whitley.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
      (emotional)
My brother. He committed suicide
back in 1978. He was 17 years old
and was bullied so bad, he put a
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32.

                       COACH EVENS (cont'd)
bullet to his head! SO THAT'S WHAT
MAKES ME AN EXPERT SIR!
                                                            
Coach deserts the room leaving his photo behind.
                                                            
 
INT. LIBRARY - LUNCH - DAY
                                                            
Ryan sits at a table alone eating his home prepared lunch
from a brown paper sack, and hastily scribbles in a note
pad.
                                                            
Kelly blissfully drifts into the library, headed toward Ryan
with a smile.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (under his breath)
holy shit Coach was right.
                                                            
She plops down in a chair on the other side of Ryan's
table, putting her books down next to his bagged meal.
                                                            
                       KELLY
      (cheerful)
Because you're new here I'll fill
you in on a little known secret,
This is a library with Thousands
of stories waiting to be read!,
and you're looking out the window
why?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Yeah, you know long day. Kinda
hungry.
                                                            
Takes a bite of his Peanut butter and Jelly sandwich.
                                                            
                       KELLY
F.Y.I. sweetie, most people eat in
the lunchroom and read in the
library. You should try being like
civilized people, it's healthy
livin'.
                                                            
She grabs his bag inspecting the inside then pushes it back
in front of Ryan.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I kinda like eating in the
library, It's peaceful in here.
Besides uncivilized is my middle
name! How about you, you're not
            (MORE)

33.

                       RYAN (cont'd)
eating?
                                                            
She grabs an apple off the table taking a bite.
                                                            
                       KELLY
Nope, big breakfast.(pauses) Do
you smell urine? something smells
like urine.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (Beat)
Urine? No, nope. I don't smell
anything. Anyway, how do you think
you did on that quiz the other
day?
                                                            
Flirtatiously touches his hand.
                                                            
                       KELLY
There's something different about
you today. If I didn't know any
better I'd say you almost look
happy, you're glowing, or blushing
one.
                                                            
Ryan turns beet red with embarrassment.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Blushing, sorry I don't blush.
It's definitely a glow. I'm
glowing because I'm pregnant. You
know how they always say pregnancy
makes you glow? Well I'm pregnant.
                                                            
                       KELLY
      (giggles a bit)
Yah,Yah,Yah, I got it. I didn't
realize you had such a sense of
humor.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Actually I have eleven different
senses, Not just humor.
                                                            
                       KELLY
      (serious/confident)
WOW! Two in a row, I'm impressed.
In case it's ever on a test, I
know you wouldn't want to get ONE
wrong sweetie, God knows what it
could do to the G.P.A., there are
only five senses.
                                                            

34.

                       RYAN
Sorry but there are eleven, what
do you want to bet?
                                                            
                       KELLY
Hmmm. How about dinner?
                                                            
Awkward silence.
                                                            
Ryan nervously adjust his glasses.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Dinner? Wow, yah, okay dinner
sounds great!
                                                            
                       KELLY
Slow down Romeo, you have to name
eleven senses first. Oh and Ryan,
no pressure.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Sight is obvious visual.
Hearing, again obvious auditory.
Smell, olfactory sense.
Taste, gustatory sense.
Touch, the skin sense.
                                                            
Kelly bats her eyelashes and grins.
                                                            
                       KELLY
OK, THAT'S FIVE I WIN!
                                                            
                       RYAN
Let me finish, you didn't let me
finish. Because touch involves
four different nerves, the skin
senses are considered four
different senses.
heat.
cold.
pressure.
pain.
Then you have motion, which is
kinesthetic.
Last but not least, the eleventh
sense is, drum roll please!
balance which is a vestibular
sense.
                                                            
Kelly pretends to yawn.
                                                            

35.

                       KELLY
WOW! I'll call 411 and tell them
you have some interesting
information.
                                                            
Kelly takes out a pen, grabs Ryan's open hand, writing on
it.
                                                            
                       RYAN
What's this?
                                                            
                       KELLY
It's my address, and my phone
number in case you get lost. Don't
be late nine o'clock tonight, my
house dinner with my parents.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Tonight? Your parents?
                                                            
                       KELLY
Yeah, my dad won't let me go out
with any boys without meeting them
first. It's a total drag, but
you'll do fine.
                                                            
Kelly gets up and makes her way out of the library.
                                                            
                       RYAN
WHAT DO YOU MEAN DO FINE? DO FINE?
WHAT LIKE AN INTERVIEW?
                                                            
Kelly waves and smiles as she exits the library.
                                                            
Ryan crumbles up his lunch bag and shoots it like a
basketball at the trash can.
                                                            
He misses.
                                                            
                       RYAN
WHOOOHOOOO!
                                                            
SHHHH...
                                                            
 
EXT. JIM'S HOUSE - DAY
                                                            
The screen door hangs open bolted on by the top hinge
alone. The cement steps crumble as Ryan makes his way
up, Ryan hesitates looking around at the practically
condemned looking home. Ryan takes a deep breath then
knocks on the door.
                                                            

36.

Jim answers wearing a pair of traditional white colored
karate pants and a 1989 Detroit Bad Boys T-shirt.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Hey Jim.
                                                            
Jim takes a swig from his can of Miller lite.
                                                            
                       JIM
What's up kid?
                                                            
                       RYAN
I thought a lot about your
question, talked it over with my
ma, and if your offer still stands
I'd love to learn how to defend
myself. That is if you're still
offering sir.
                                                            
                       JIM
Yeah of course kid, come on in.
                                                            
Jim opens the door fully and lets Ryan in his home.
                                                            
 
INT. JIM'S LIVING ROOM - DAY
                                                            
A huge T.V. sits on a wooden entertainment center, littered
with old papers,unwashed clothing, plastic plates and cups.
In front of it is a blue leather recliner and a side table
with a remote on top. An accumulation of garbage, trash,
unclean bedding and filth covered the floor. The kitchen
sink filled with dirty dishes,a coating of coffee grounds
spread over the counter tops making them invisible, and
empty pizza boxes were stacked to the ceiling.
                                                            
Ryan walks around the room inspecting everything.
                                                            
                       RYAN
WOW! This is disgusting! Do you
even bother shitting in the
toilet, or anywhere near the
bathroom for that matter?
                                                            
Ryan picks up a Playboy magazine from the ground and opens
it.
                                                            
                       JIM
Yeah well, I just fired the maid
kid.
                                                            
Jim snatches the Playboy magazine from Ryan tossing it back
on the floor.
                                                            

37.

                       RYAN
You sure she's not lying dead over
in the corner of your living room,
underneath all this garbage
somewhere?
                                                            
A dog makes it way over to Jim's side.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Holy shit! It's the worlds biggest
rat.
                                                            
Jim scratches the dogs head.
                                                            
                       JIM
You're charming kid, I can't begin
to imagine why someone would want
to kick your ass everyday.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Yeah well if they kill me, what
ever you do don't bury me here.
This is too unsanitary for even
the dead. Your poor maid never had
a chance.
                                                            
Ryan puts his hands deep into his pocket, with his shoulders
shrugged high.
                                                            
                       JIM
You wanna train or talk kid?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Train? What now here?
                                                            
                       JIM
Yeah kid, train. I thought you
said you thought this through?
follow me, the gyms in the
basement.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Alright but I have to be out of
here by seven tonight, I gotta
date.
                                                            
Jim takes another drink, then puts his empty can on the
table.
                                                            
                       JIM
Seven? I don't know what to say,
if you leave here early today, you
better tell your momma not to wait
up, trainings gonna be late
            (MORE)

38.

                       JIM (cont'd)
tomorrow. That's how it works
around here. Okay kid?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Fair enough.
                                                            
                       JIM
Good follow me.
                                                            
Ryan follows behind down the basement steps.
                                                            
 
INT. JIM'S GYM - DAY
                                                            
The basement is immaculate, with weights stacked neatly by
the benches on stands, heavy bags hang from the rafters,
speed bags bolted to the walls, double end bags connected
to the cement floor and overhead beams, medicine balls of
all sizes on the floor, jump ropes hanging from hooks,
gloves, headgear, pads on shelves, mats for wrestling
perfectly rolled lie in the corner, Wing Chung Dummy
at the far end of room, and a giant rings complements
the center of the gym.
                                                            
Pictures hang everywhere of Ellery and Jim together at
tournaments and various other locations.
                                                            
                       RYAN
What the hell are all these
pictures?
                                                            
Ryan continues to move around the work out area gazing in
skeptism, he adjust his glasses waiting for Ellery to pop
out of the shadows and attack him as one big conspiracy
plot.
                                                            
                       JIM
Ellery had more potential than any
kid I ever trained, we won
hundreds of tournaments, he is a
five time, full contact National
Karate Champion.--
                                                            
Ryan pacing the floors studying each photo on the walls
looking terrified finally fully understanding what big
trouble he has gotten himself into.
                                                            
                       JIM
Martial Arts Magazine had him
ranked as the #1 under age fighter
in the world! We were on our way
to the Olympics kid, then he
snapped, assaulting a referee. And
            (MORE)

39.

                       JIM (cont'd)
that was that! He was banned from
competition for life, and earned
his nickname "KARATE'S BAD BOY".
                                                            
Ryan can't believe what he is hearing, he begins massaging
that back of his own neck nervously.
                                                            
                       RYAN
So you trained this Barbarian?
                                                            
Jim takes a black and white photo of a Vietnamese man in a
fighting stance, wearing a Karate Gi off the wall.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (studies the photo)
Lets get something strait kid, I
taught the boy Cuong Nhu Karate
and the same true values my
teacher O-Sensei Ngo Dong taught
me about it's philosophies and
history.
                                                            
Hands the photo of his teacher to Ryan with a look of pride.
                                                            
                       JIM
Ellery decided to strike that
referee on his own! He not only
embarrassed himself, he
embarrassed Cuong Nhu Oriental
Martial Arts as well. His actions
reflected on my teaching that day,
and I don't teach that shit!
                                                            
Ryan looks at the photo and peeks back at Jim who has
a mixed expression of loyalty & betrayal on his face.
Convincing Ryan, his intentions are genuine.
                                                            
                       RYAN
So what happened, you quit
training him after that?
                                                            
Ryan looks at the photo long and hard before putting it back
on the wall.
                                                            
                       JIM
No, he still came for lessons
everyday, then after a while he
disappeared. Later I learned he
trains at The Fighting Wolves MMA
gym, and competes in the cage.
                                                            

40.

Ryan shakes his head as he advances past what seems to be a
museum or shrine of memories for Jim, studying each one with
his eyes.
                                                            
                       RYAN
And let me guess, you disapprove
because it goes against the self
defense rule, morals, and meaning
of Karate?
                                                            
                       JIM
No kid, the disrespectful little
asshole never asked.
                                                            
                       RYAN
He's a first class savage asshole
all the way!
                                                            
Jim claps his hands together.
                                                            
                       JIM
You ready to train now kid? I mean
now that you've seen the pictures
have you said your peace?
                                                            
Ryan nods.
                                                            
Jim starts to take a step, stops and turns to Ryan.
                                                            
                       JIM
I'm gonna tell you strait out kid,
you better not quit on me! If I'm
gonna take the time to train you,
you better not quit until I tell
you to quit or that buzzer sounds.
You understand?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Yes sir.
                                                            
                       JIM
Cause you have a look in your eyes
that says you've already given
up... or your dog died, Not sure
which of the two it is yet, But
it's one of the two. Your dog die
kid?
                                                            
Jim slips off his slippers.

Ryan leans down unties his shoes, taking his socks off and
putting them balled up into the shoes. Placing his glasses
next to his shoes.
                                                            

41.

                       RYAN
No sir. Never had a dog, had a cat
once but I was allergic so --
                                                            
Jim makes his way over to the jump ropes grabbing two.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (Not interested)
-- That's Good kid, grab the jump
rope. Jumping rope will be an
everyday activity. It's a great
cardiovascular work out and helps
with foot work, reflexes, speed,
defense, and reaction. Second, no
more walking to and from school. I
want you to jog, then run, then
sprint. You're gonna have to put
in the road work.- Got it kid?
                                                            
                       RYAN
No problem.
                                                            
                                         CUT TO JUMP ROPES
                                                            
Jim hands Ryan a rope and begins, slow and sloppy often
hitting his ankles. Ryans feet grow heavy.
                                                            
                       JIM
O'Sensei used to run 100mile
marathons.
                                                            
                       RYAN
You're kidding me?
                                                            
                       JIM
No, (smiles) he always said
besides building massive stamina,
if he ever needed to run, nobody
would ever last long enough to
catch him.
                                                            
Ryan smiles and playfully puts his hand on Jims back.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Sounds like a brilliant man.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (Chuckles)
                                                            
Jim skips with his own rope whizzing around him the flow of
it whirling around him sounds like a hive of bees.
                                                            

42.

                       JIM
      (Jumping rope)
PHYSICALLY WE TRAIN TOGETHER,
MENTALLY AND INTELLECTUALLY WE
THINK TOGETHER, EVENTUALLY WE
LEARN, SHARE, AND GROW TOGETHER,
THEN WE WIN OR LOSE TOGETHER. YOU
GOT IT KID?
                                                            
Ryan skips the rope one or twice around before having to
start over again.
                                                            
Fatigue overwhelms him, he takes a deep breath and continues
training.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (heavy breathing)
Yes sir.
                                                            
Jim is skipping rope at a whirl wind speed while looking to
his left at a struggling Ryan.
                                                            
                       JIM
WE DO THINGS AS A TEAM, A FIGHTER
DOESN'T LISTEN TO HIS TEAM WHEN
HE'S IN THAT CAGE, IT COULD BECOME
THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN A KNOCK OUT
AND BEING KNOCKED OUT. YOU GOT IT
KID?
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (panting)
Yes sir.
                                                            
                                         15 MINUTES PASS
                                                            
Ryan desperately gasp for wind...he slowly catches his
breath.
                                                            
                       JIM
GOOD. NOW SLOW YOUR SPEED FOR 30
SECONDS, GET A DRINK, AND WE'LL
WORK ON LATERAL MOVEMENT AROUND
THE RING FOR THREE FIVE MINUTE
ROUNDS, WITH ONE MINUTE BREAKS IN
BETWEEN ROUNDS!
                                                            
They get a drink and move on to the ring.
                                                            
                                         CUT TO RING
                                                            
Jim resets the timer, begins to demonstrate. Ryan proceeds
to do as he's told.
                                                            

43.

                       JIM
      (demonstrates)
Okay kid, follow me. You want to
circle the ring never crossing
your legs like this, pace yourself
always look forward, and keep your
hands up.
                                                            
Jim elegantly circles the ring on his toes, Ryan drenched
in sweat, he struggles slowly behind, legs quivering, and
gasping for air.
                                                            
                       JIM
When I say switch, we go in the
other direction never criss -
crossing your legs. AND STOP
BREATHING WITH YOUR MOUTH WIDE
OPEN! You'll get your jaw broke
breathing like that.--
                                                            
Jim steps in front of Ryan and playfully smacks him on the
side of his open jaw.
                                                            
                       JIM
--Everything in and out of your
nose. And when you throw a punch
or a kick exhale out of your nose
at the same time.--
                                                            
Jim throws another playful smack to Ryans gut.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (Smiles keeps
       demonstrating)
--That'll help in case you miss
and your opponent catches you in
the body. You getting all this
kid?
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (BREATHING HEAVY)
MmHmmm.
                                                            
Ryan is dragging his legs practically falling over his own
feet, just trying to keep up.
                                                            
                       JIM
OKAY SWITCH! REMEMBER, YOU WILL BE
PERFECT IN EVERY ASPECT OF THE
FIGHT, ONLY IF YOU LISTEN TO YOUR
TEAM. GOT IT KID?
                                                            
                                         HORN SOUNDS
                                                            

44.

                       RYAN
      (rantic panting)
Aah Huh.
                                                            
They stop the exercise, Ryan sits, then Lie's on his back.
                                                            
                       JIM
AND TIME!-
                                                            
                       JIM
So what's it like inside school,
they pick on you there too?
                                                            
Leaning back on his elbows.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Same thing, I'm a social out cast
who hides all day, and eats lunch
alone in the library.
                                                            
Jim offers up a friendly smile.
                                                            
                       JIM
It can't be that bad, you said you
got a date right?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Besides you, she's the first
friend I've made in the past Oh
two years?
                                                            
Jim climbs out of the ring grabbing a couple of water
bottles. He climbs back in, handing one to Ryan.
                                                            
                       JIM
Kid, You're not alone. I got a
story for ya. Their was a boy who
had his bike stolen at an early
age, and was tired of being
bullied. So like you, this boy
decided to learn how to defend
himself. You have any idea who
this boy was kid?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Was it you Jim? Is the little boy
in the story you?
                                                            
Takes a drink, then sprays himself in the face.
                                                            

45.

                       JIM
NO IT WASN'T ME KID, IT WAS
MOHAMMAD ALI. THE GREATEST BOXER
OF ALL TIME! EVEN HE WAS BULLIED.
                                                            
That name grabs Ryans attention.
                                                            
                       RYAN
What happened to the bully?
                                                            
                       JIM
EXACTLY, that's exactly my point.
No one knows or gives a shit what
happened to the bully, but
everyone knows what happened to
Ali.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Yeah, he got hit in the head so
many times he can't speak.
                                                            
Jim stands putting his hand out, then helping Ryan to his
feet.
                                                            
                       JIM
You gotta learn to cheer up!
You're depressing the shit out of
me! Happiness isn't by chance,
it's by choice. Now if the pity
party is over, I'll show you some
basics.
                                                            
Ryan climbs out and puts the jump ropes back on their hooks.
                                                            
                                         CUT TO MIRROR
                                                            
Ryan watching in mirror follows every direction.
                                                            
Mimics Jim's every move.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (demonstrates)
Come over here to the mirror, get
in your stance. Okay open your
legs a little more.
                                                            
Jim kicks the insides of Ryans feet spreading out his
stance.
                                                            
                       JIM
Good! Now stay on your toes, it
will give your body more leverage
to shift, and balance your weight.
Balance is the most important
            (MORE)

46.

                       JIM (cont'd)
thing. You don't have balance
kid--
                                                            
Jim using two fingers pushing Ryan back a few steps.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (Smiles keeps
       demonstrating)
--Forget about defense, I can push
you over. Good! Bend your knees a
bit.
                                                            
Jim walks behind Ryan pushing down on his shoulders to help
Ryan bend his knees.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (demonstrates)
Good! Now put your hands up, keep
your chin glued to your chest, and
your right hand glued to your jaw.
Good! Now tuck your elbows in.
Good! That's to protect your body.
Now show me a jab.
                                                            
Ryan throws a effective jab.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Like this?
                                                            
                       JIM
Good! Again.
                                                            
Another crisp jab.
                                                            
The two work hard step by step in the mirror.
                                                            
                       JIM (cont'd)
      (demonstrates)
Good! Twist your wrist and snap
the jab at the end of the
delivery, like this. Loosen up
until the point of impact, then
shift all your weight in your
extension and step into it. Good!
Now, let your back leg follow the
rest of your body kid. Good! This
is your most important punch in
fighting. It gives you distance,
time to think, react, and set up
your next shot. Try again, this
time double it up.
                                                            

47.

Fires effective double snapping jabs.
                                                            
                       JIM
Good! Now jab, strait right kid.
                                                            
Ryan throws effective jab followed by a sloppy right.
                                                            
Ryan has a hard time getting it right.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (demonstrates)
NO! NO! Strait out. Watch me. 1
bang!, bring it back, 2 bang!,
bring it back. Keep the chin
tucked, legs loose, bring your
hands back glued to your jaw. See
bang, bang!
                                                            
Jim gives example in slow perfect motions
                                                            
Ryan studies Jim's every move.
                                                            
Ryan pivots and moves then throws an effective combination.
They both smile.
                                                            
                       JIM
Good kid, Good! Shifting your
weight means everything kid. What
do you weigh?...
                                                            
                       RYAN
Around 180?
                                                            
                       JIM
Around 180. Imagine if I threw a
180 pound dumbbell as fast as I
could at your head. What would
happen? - It would knock the shit
out of ya' right, Right?
                                                            
Ryan wipes his wet face dry with his shirt.
                                                            
                       RYAN
YEAH, of course.
                                                            
                       JIM
Well by learning how to shift your
weight, and controlling it, you
can deliver a 160 pound fist
behind every shot kid. You follow?
                                                            
                       RYAN
law of physics.
                                                            

48.

Jim points at the buzzer, on his way to a stool.
                                                            
                       JIM
Yes it is. Now practice for three
rounds in the mirror. YOU DON'T
STOP UNTIL THAT BUZZER RINGS ALL
THREE ROUNDS OR I TELL YOU TO
STOP! YOU GOT IT KID?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Yep, no problem.
                                                            
Ryan intensely practices in mirror.
                                                            
                                         BUZZER 3RD TIME.
                                                            
                       JIM
AND TIME!
                                                            
Ryan picks up his arm, glancing at his wrist watch.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (exhausted)
Well It's getting late, I better
get going.
                                                            
Heads for the steps.
                                                            
                       JIM
Remember long day tomorrow, and
don't forget to jog home. If you
want to slay the dragon, we're
gonna have to push your body to
it's limits kid. We got long way
to go, and Ellery ain't gonna
wait.
                                                            
Ryan stops and turns back around for a moment.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Yes sir. and Jim, thanks.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (smiles)
My pleasure Ryan, good work today
kid...And one more thing, keep
this in the back of your mind.
When you're slacking off, or just
taking a break, Ellery at that
same moment, is training to kick
YOUR ASS!
                                                            

49.

Jim walks over the shelves grabbing something wrapped in
plastic. It's too far for Ryan to see without his specs on
his face. Jim tosses it at Ryan, who barely catches it. It's
a new mouth peice.
                                                            
Ryan inspects it, placing it in his pocket.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Thanks.
                                                            
Jim just nods.
                                                            
                       JIM
Ryan.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Yeah?
                                                            
                       JIM
Congrats on the date kid (Smiles)
and good luck.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Thanks.
                                                            
Ryan puts his glasses on his face then socks and shoes back
on his feet, then exits.
                                                            
 
EXT. BUS STOP - NIGHT
                                                            
Ryan is visually freezing cold and drenched in a sweat
covered T-shirt as his breath vaporizes, white particles
of snow come swirling down quickly covering everything
in sight.
                                                            
Petty thieves, junkies, and hookers prowl around the
dimly lit Detroit bus stop glaring at Ryan like fresh
white meat, standing in a never safe enough distance
nervously in the dark awaiting his ride with his mothers
department of public transportation bus pass in hand.

A street bum with a partially smoked cigarette in his
mouth, digs out a half eaten cheeseburger from the
overflown trash can located next to the bus stop sign
Ryan is leaning against when the bus arrives, the doors
open and Ryan steps on like it's a matter of life and
death.
                                                            
 

50.

INT. BUS - NIGHT
                                                            
The doors of the bus close. WHOOSH! Ryan giving a
gentle smile and a nod as he flashes his pass to
the driver while making his way to the closest
available seat, the bus is filled with passengers
of minority decent, women and children, mothers with
babies on their laps, blue collar fathers, homeless
men,shysters,thugs and gangsters,trying not to make
eye contact, he climbs in an open seat pressing his
face against the window as the bus pulls away.
                                                            
 
EXT. BUS STOP - NIGHT
                                                            
Gets off the bus, and begins to make his way down a
extremely busy main shopping boulevard covered in snow,
ice, and slush to a quiet gated community, he is reading
each address on the mailboxes brushing them off as he
wanders by, with every house growing larger as he passes.
                                                            
 
EXT. KELLY'S HOUSE - NIGHT
                                                            
Multi-Million dollar gated community, He strolls by
Expensive luxury cars, and limousines that fill the
freshly snow swept long winding driveway to the top,
passing women in evening gowns, their dates in tuxedos,
and valet men wearing orange vest are parking the $200,000
cars for some formal event at the massive Lake-Sinclair
front angular brick mansion.

Snow is falling fast and covers the ground. Ryan T-shirt
and jeans double checks the address on a piece of paper
stuffed in his pocket, as he shivers from the sub-zero
Great-Lake breeze blasting his sweat drenched body, he
modestly straitens his hair, takes a deep breath, then
pushes the doorbell.
                                                            
Kelly answers in a long gown with her hair done up it a bun.
                                                            
                       KELLY
Oh my god? You must be freezing!
Where is your coat? There is a
winter storm advisory out there,
are you nuts!
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (shivering)
It's not that bad, Can I come in?
                                                            
 

51.

INT. KELLY'S HOUSE - NIGHT
                                                            
Ryan remains motionless and just stares at her beauty for a
moment, then enters the mansion.
                                                            
                       KELLY
HI! I'm glad you could make it, I
had no idea about this dinner
party, and I thought it would be
horrible to wait till you arrived
to find out about your clothes. If
I would have had your phone number
--
                                                            
Giving him a giant hug.
                                                            
                       RYAN
It's not a big deal. I'm used to
being singled out as the freak in
the crowd!(giggles) I just hope
your parents are OK with me
dressing too informal.
                                                            
The mixed aroma of cigarettes and catered food filled
the air, The house is alive with the noise of family,
friends, workers, and guest, the wonderful sound of
strangers chattering, laughing, and having cocktails
replacing their empty wine glasses with full ones as
the help passes by carrying a tray full of wine and
champagne.
                                                            
                       KELLY
They'll love you! Are you sure
your not cold? I could get you one
of my dads sweaters or coats?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Um, Yeah, looking around I'm not
so sure I'm their type? I'll be
alright I'm warming up already.
You think maybe I could get
something to drink though?
                                                            
Ryan and Kelly make their way through the crowd toward the
kitchen.
                                                            
 
INT. KELLY'S KITCHEN - NIGHT
                                                            
Beautiful over sized kitchen, Ryan and Kelly are alone.
                                                            
Kelly opens the fridge.
                                                            

52.

                       KELLY
What are you in the mood for?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Water's fine.
                                                            
Kelly pours Ryan a glass of water handing him the cold
perspiring glass, their fingers gently touch briefly.

Eye contact.


Seconds seem like an eternity.


He drinks slowly leaning his head back against the fridge.
                                                            
Awkward silence.
                                                            
                       KELLY
So have you ever been to Michigan
before moving here?
                                                            
                       RYAN
No, had never really been anywhere
before we started moving around a
lot. It was nice, I knew everyone
since kindergarten and for the
most part everyone got along.
Everywhere else has been nothing
but clicks that refuse to let
anyone outside their little circle
in.
                                                            
Ryan doesn't know what to say, Kelly glances anxiously at
him.
                                                            
                       KELLY
Sounds like your home sick. Moving
must be tough, I would just die if
I had to leave everyone my senior
year!
                                                            
                       RYAN
Hasn't been easy, Shit besides you
and this guy Jim I just
met...(catches himself)
                                                            
Ryan nervously massages the back of his neck.
                                                            
                       KELLY
Besides Me and Jim what?
                                                            

53.

                       RYAN
Nothing it's stupid, just forget
it.
                                                            
                       KELLY
      (HUGE SMILE)
No really don't be embarrassed,
tell me!
                                                            
                       RYAN
It's nothing. Your just the only
friends I've made in a long time.
                                                            
Kelly grabs Ryan's hand locking index fingers, briefly
staring in each others innocent eyes with passion &
curiosity.
                                                            
                       KELLY
      (smiles)
Do you want some more?
                                                            
Ryan is lost in Kelly's beautiful green eyes.
                                                            
                       RYAN
More what?
                                                            
                       KELLY
      (chuckles)
Water silly.
                                                            
                       RYAN
No, no thank you.
                                                            
Ryan fumbles through his pockets for a pack of bubble gum
offering Kelly a piece nervously.
                                                            
                       KELLY
Are you nervous?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Maybe a little.
                                                            
                       KELLY
Why?
                                                            
                       RYAN
I can't describe it, the feeling I
get when I'm with you.
                                                            
                       KELLY
You don't have to, (smiles) I feel
it too.
                                                            

54.

The romantic teens lean in to kiss, but a guest barges in
the kitchen ruining the moment.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Mind if I use your restroom?
                                                            
                       KELLY
No, go up the stairs and the
bathroom is the first door on the
right. Would you like me to show
you?
                                                            
                       RYAN
I'll be okay, thanks.
                                                            
                       KELLY
Okay, I'll be here...waiting.
                                                            
Ryan exits the kitchen.
                                                            
 
INT. KELLY'S LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Ryan squeezes his way through the party to the steps.
                                                            
He walks the spiral steps to the restroom.


He checks the handle, it's locked.


So he slides his back down the wall sitting patiently for
his turn.
                                                            
The door opens, Ryan stands & is shocked at who comes out of
the bathroom.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
What the fuck are you doing in my
house faggot fuck?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Kelly invited me.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
I'm not going to tell you this
again, Stay the fuck away from my
sister DORK!
                                                            
Ellery grabs Ryan by the back of the neck forcing him into
the bathroom, then shutting the door behind them.
                                                            
 

55.

INT. KELLY'S BATHROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Ryan is pinned with his legs up against the tub,
Ellery throws a whizzing overhand right busting
Ryan's nose open, he tumbles in the large empty
container, taking down the shower curtain with
him.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (baneful)
Nice clothes, YOU FUCKING SCUMMY
ASS ARAB!
                                                            
Ellery exits bathroom.
                                                            
Ryan holding back his tears gets up & washes
his nose in sink, trying to stop the blood from
streaming down his mouth and chin.
                                                            
 
INT. KELLY'S KITCHEN - NIGHT
                                                            
Ryan walks into kitchen with his nose plugged with tissue,
head tilted back, and shirt covered in blood.
                                                            
Kelly is blown away and races over to Ryan's aid.
                                                            
                       KELLY
OH MY GOD! WHAT HAPPENED TO YOU?
                                                            
Ryan grows angry slapping a coaster off the counter, sending
it flying across the kitchen.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (had enough)
Your god damn brother happened to
me! Your god damn brother and his
kung fu fighting friends have been
happening to me since I got here!
Why didn't you tell me that morbid
maniac was your brother? LOOK AT
ME, THIS IS BULLSHIT!
                                                            
                       KELLY
      (YELLING TO OTHER
       ROOM)
M- -OM, DAD!
                                                            
Kelly opens the freezer grabbing a ice tray.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Just forget it! Why didn't you
tell me! huh?
                                                            

56.

                       KELLY
I would have told you, If I
thought the two of you knew each
other. But you sit by yourself,
eat lunch alone, and never talk to
anyone? How could I have known?
                                                            
Kelly empties an ice tray into dish rag, then placing it on
his nose.
                                                            
                       RYAN
So WHAT? You invited me here
because you feel sorry for me?
cause thats what I'M hearing!
                                                            
                       KELLY
No, I didn't say that...Your
mixing up my words.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I'm out of here! Thanks for the
water.
                                                            
Dropping the rag of ice into sink as he passes.
                                                            
Ryan exits house.
                                                            
 
INT. RYAN'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
                                                            
Ryan takes his blood stained shirt off throwing it in the
trash.
                                                            
He sits down at the computer shirtless turning it on,
logs on to check his email, it's full of death threats
by anonymous senders.
                                                            
His eyes tear up, he suddenly picks up the monitor,
smashing it on the ground.
                                                            
His mom comes hauling ass into the room.
                                                            
                       GAIL
WHAT THE HELL HAS GOTTEN INTO YOU!
DO YOU REALIZE HOW MUCH MONEY THAT
COMPUTER COST ME RYAN?
RYAN, I'M TALKING TO YOU! ANSWER
THE QUESTION!
                                                            
Ryan crosses his arms on the table, resting his head tightly
inside. (HIDING HIS NOSE).
                                                            

57.

                       RYAN
LOOK!(sighs) I'm sorry ma.
                                                            
                       GAIL
      (pissed off!)
What happened to your nose, Did
those boys assult you again?
                                                            
                       RYAN
No mom, it must be my allergies
acting up or something.
                                                            
She can see right through her sons lie, but doesn't mention
it out of respect for his privacy.
                                                            
                       GAIL
There's some benadryl in the
medicine cabinet.
                                                            
                                         KNOCK AT THE DOOR
(S.O.)
                                                            
Gail makes her way to the door, opening it.
                                                            
                       KELLY
Hi is Ryan home?
                                                            
                       GAIL
      (PLEASANTLY
       SURPRISED)
Well yes he is young lady, please
come in, come in. I'm Gail, and
you are?
                                                            
Ryan's mom shuts the door behind Kelly.
                                                            
                       KELLY
I'm Kelly Marrol. Ryan and I go to
school together --
                                                            
Ryan jumps from his seat.
                                                            
                       RYAN
--WHAT DO YOU WANT!?!
                                                            
                       GAIL
That's no way to talk to a guest!
Where are your manners son? If the
two of you need anything I'll be
in my room.
                                                            

58.

As his mother passes, she can hardly hold back her
smile of excitement for her son, giving him a very
discreet thumbs up.
                                                            
                       KELLY
Your mom seems nice.
                                                            
Kelly walks over and sits down on the couch patting the
cushion with her open hand. (signaling Ryan over)
                                                            
                       RYAN
Yah, she's great!
                                                            
Ryan walks over, and stands in front of Kelly.
                                                            
                       KELLY
I came over to say I was sorry.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Well you did...now you can go!
                                                            
                       KELLY
My folks wanted me to have you
back over for dinner so they could
apologize themselves.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Not necessary...I'm sorry too! I
shouldn't have taken it out on
you.
                                                            
Kelly signals Ryan to sit, this time he does.
                                                            
                       KELLY
He's such a violent dick some
times!
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (beat)
More like all the time.
                                                            
Kelly takes Ryan by the hand, with her other she puts her
finger over his lips in a flirtatious way.
                                                            
They gaze into each others eyes, she leans in, and they kiss
gently and genuinely.
                                                            
It starts to get passionate, she pulls back.
                                                            
Kelly stands still holding his hand, then slowly moves
toward the door.
                                                            

59.

                       KELLY
Well...I gotta get going, I'll see
you soon. (smitten) Maybe in the
library at lunch?
                                                            
Ryan can't believe what just happened.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Ya..Yeah.
                                                            
Kelly blows him a kiss then exits the apartment.
                                                            
Ryan for a brief moment looks over his head and knows Ellery
will kill him over this.
                                                            
But his feelings for her overcome the fear.
                                                            
Pumps his fist.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (PROUD!)
YES!
                                                            
 
INT. EISENHOWER HIGH SCHOOL - HALLWAY - DAY
                                                            
The hallways are empty. Cash, Ellery, and Jeremy are
at Ryan's locker an hour before school begins. Cash is
brushing a clear liquid all over Ryan's lock and handle.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (vicious)
Tell me again what this is going
to do to the fucking dune coon?
                                                            
Cash is dipping brush into a pickle jar filled with juice,
then brushing.
                                                            
                       CASH
IT'S HABANERO JUICE BRO! THE
HOTTEST PEPPER IN THE WORLD
DAWG!(LAUGHTER) Faggot ass is
gonna get this shit on his hands
with out knowing, at some point in
the fucking day, that motha'
fucka's gonna have to either rub
his eyes, put his finger up his
gay ass nose, or in his dick
lickin' mouth!
                                                            

60.

                       JEREMY
      (AMUSED)
This is gonna be classic fucking
shit man!
                                                            
The three stand in the distance waiting for Ryan to arrive
to his locker.
                                                            
                                         LAUGHING! (S.O.)
                                                            
The three laugh watching Ryan open his pad lock, then
lifting up on the handle, putting his coat inside, taking
his books out, then re-shutting the door by lifting up on
handle and locking the habanero covered lock in place.
                                                            
 
INT. EISENHOWER HIGH SCHOOL HISTORY CLASS - DAY
                                                            
Ryan and thirty other teens sit at their desk taking a test,
Ryan raises his hand.
                                                            
                       MRS. WASHINGTON
Yes Ryan?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Can I use the restroom?
                                                            
                       MRS. WASHINGTON
Of course.
                                                            
Mrs. Washington hands Ryan a hall pass.
                                                            
Ryan exits the class.
                                                            
 
INT. EISENHOWER HIGH SCHOOL RESTROOM - DAY
                                                            
Ryan unzips his jeans as he makes his way to the urinal.
                                                            
He stares strait ahead at the wall in front of him, opens
his legs, reaches his fingers into his open fly pulling out
his penis and urinating.
                                                            
The Habanero juice is all over his hands, now his penis.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (SERIOUS PAIN)
Uhh!OW!OW!OW!OHh!AAH!
                                                            
Ryan races over to the sink turning on the water, thrusting
his penis into the water scrubbing it with hand soap.
(Crying!)
                                                            

61.

The wall in big black bold marker reads;
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (surprised reading
       out loud)
"RYAN MOHAMMAD SUCKS COCK!" ---
What the fuck?
                                                            
He wets his shirt in the sink, then tries to scrub off the
magic marker.
                                                            
 
INT. JIM'S GYM - DAY
                                                            
Ryan walks down the steps. Jim, Coach Evens, and Tommy are
bench pressing.
                                                            
They get up, and walk over to Ryan, Tommy nods to Ryan.
                                                            
Ryan slips off his shoes, Jim stands next to Coach and
Tommy.
                                                            
                       JIM
Kid, you know Coach Evens and
Tommy Gibson. They're going to be
Helping us out with the ground
game. So lets go ahead and get
started on cardio.(SERIOUS)
3rounds of jump roping,3more of
lateral movement,and 3more in the
mirror.
                                                            
Jim crouches down unrolling the wrestling mats.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
Then we'll go over some basic
ground techniques.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (Stretching)
Yes sir.
                                                            
Tommy takes his mouth piece out placing it behind his ear.
                                                            
                       TOMMY
Don't think we've been formally
introduced. Thanks for helping out
(chuckles) You know with that
whole Ellery thing.
                                                            
Puts his hand out, they shake firmly.
                                                            

62.

                       RYAN
      (hesitates)
How's your arm?
                                                            
                       TOMMY
It's A'ight dawg, Doc said six
weeks (Pondering) been almost
eight...Just lucky my dome wasn't
cracked like we thought.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Dome?
                                                            
Tommy playfully smacks Ryan on the head.
                                                            
                       TOMMY
      (chuckles)
My head fool.
                                                            
Ryan and Tommy do some warm up stretches together.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I guess you & Coach just being
here to help is thanks enough.
                                                            
                       TOMMY
You really gonna fight'em?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Don't really have much of a
choice, either way he's gonna kick
my ass.
                                                            
Looks at Ryan and smiles.
                                                            
                       TOMMY
You're one crazy ass white boy.
                                                            
                       RYAN
That whole thing, was really about
you winning state?
                                                            
They start jumping rope.
                                                            
                       TOMMY
Naw, (chuckles) He was pissed
cause I asked his sister to the
home coming dance.
                                                            
Ryan's heart drops. He stops his jump rope looks at Tommy
hard.
                                                            

63.

                       RYAN
      (sneaky)
Oh WOW!...What did she say?
                                                            
                       TOMMY
      (thrown off)
Do what?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Ah, nothing...hey, does Jim kinda
remind you of a drill sergeant?
                                                            
                       TOMMY
      (laughs)
                                                            
Tommy skipping at a rapid rate just shakes his head.
                                                            
                       RYAN
What's so funny?
                                                            
Ryans P.O.V.;
Jim takes out his wallet handing Coach some cash.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
      (Directed at Tommy)
Hey, lets hit the road!
                                                            
                       TOMMY
(Directed at
Coach)A'ight!(Directed at Ryan)
Good luck dawg!
                                                            
Tommy and Coach Evens disappear up the stairs.
                                                            
Ryan and Jim work out together.
                                                            
                       JIM
AWARENESS IS THE KEY TO SELF
DEFENSE WITHOUT IT, THE ABILITY TO
DEFEND OURSELVES IS WASTED!
                                                            
The two work the jump ropes.
                                                            
                       JIM
ALERTNESS IS A HEIGHTENED STATE OF
AWARENESS. DO YOU KNOW THE
DIFFERENCE IN ALERT & AWARE?
                                                            
Ryan is trying to jump rope and listen to Jim at the same
time, having trouble with the rope.
                                                            

64.

                       RYAN
      (Distracted)
No sir.
                                                            
Jim stands in front of a blanked faced, struggling Ryan
grabbing his full attention.
                                                            
                       JIM
BEING AWARE & ALERT WILL ALLOW YOU
TO AVOID & ANTICIPATE ANY
SITUATION BEFORE IT IS TOO LATE &
IT WILL GIVE YOU THE OPPORTUNITY
TO USE THE PROPER ACTION!
                                                            
The two work lateral movement.
                                                            
                       JIM
PUMP THE JAB.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (MORE)
THE FIGHTER WITH DAILY DEDICATION
& PRACTICE CAN TRUST THEIR
INSTINCT & ACT WITH THE CORRECT
RESPONSE!
                                                            
The two shadow box in mirror, Ryan pushing himself to get
the combinations just right for Jim.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (INSTRUCTING)
Jab, jab, now double it up. Good!
Now one, two, hook.
                                                            
Ryan throws an awkward, ugly hook.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (sighs)
No! What are you doing? After that
strait right, You bring the left
out, twisting then shifting ALL
your weight in that arm to your
back foot. Now try again like I
showed ya.
                                                            
Ryan attempts combination, almost getting it.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Like that?
                                                            
                       JIM
Better.
                                                            

65.

Jim slowly demonstrates one step at a time, how to work the
speed bag.
                                                            
                       JIM
Watch it & hear the bag kid, it
will tell you when to hit it.
Listen 1click-2click-3click!
(smiles at Ryan) You hear it kid?
                                                            
Ryan mimics Jim, struggling a bit,and frustrated but never
giving up.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (smiles)
Yeah!
                                                            
Tommy & Coach walk down the steps hands full with bags of
gatorade. They put the bags on the floor & make their way to
the ring.
                                                            
Ryan thirsty, can't take his eyes off the beverages never
says a word just reluctantly goes over to the ring with
Tommy and Coach.
                                                            
                                         CUTT TO RING
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
First, I'm gonna break you down,
simply to show you that balance is
the most important thing in
grappling. In wrestling you use
your center of gravity to use your
opponents weight against him. That
will take technique not strength,
combined with conditioning, YOU
WILL OUT LAST YOUR OPPONENT!
                                                            
Coach & Tommy teach Ryan take down defense, He practices
with Tommy repetition after repetition struggling against a
superior opponent.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
FIRST YOU WILL BECOME FRUSTRATED,
NEXT YOU WILL BECOME DESPERATE,
THEN YOU WILL START THINKING
CLEARLY, & FINALLY IT WILL BECOME
INSTINCT.
NOW, There are many ways to avoid
a take down, YOU WILL USE THREE.
                                                            
The two begin to roll in the ring, practicing the training
exercise.
                                                            

66.

                       COACH EVENS
      (background)
(MORE) 1.SPRAWL BACK USING BALANCE
& YOUR OPPONENTS WEIGHT AGAINST
HIMSELF. 2. UNDER HOOKS, BY
WRAPPING YOUR OPPONENT UNDERNEATH
HIS ARMS YOUR CENTER OF GRAVITY
WILL BE LOWER THAN HIS, MAKING IT
MORE DIFFICULT FOR HIM TO GET ANY
LOWER TO TAKE YOU DOWN. & 3.
SIMPLY GET THE HELL OUT OF THE
WAY, BY SIDE STEPPING OR AS JIM
LIKES TO CALL IT LATERAL MOVEMENT.
                                                            
Tommy still a bit sore from being attacked, rotates his arm
in a circle multiple times.

He carefully begins stretching his arm behind his head,
trying to get it warmed up.
                                                            
Tommy shows Ryan as many training tricks as he knows, while
repeating the moves multiple times. Ryan legs tire, getting
up a little slower after every repetition.
                                                            
Tommy gets Ryan in a triangle choke, Ryan struggles.
                                                            
                       JIM (V.O.)
      (Yelling from
       outside the ring)
JUST CAUSE YOU GUYS AREN'T GOIN'
FAST, DOESN'T MEAN YOU CAN'T WORK
HARD! TOMMY YOU BETTER WORK THAT
BOY TILL HIS LEGS FALL OFF, YOU
HEAR ME!
                                                            
                       TOMMY
      (Applying pressure)
Go ahead get out of it.
                                                            
Ryan's oxygen is cut off, he can't breath and his face is
beet-red.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (Gargles)
                                                            
Ryan quickly taps the mat before losing consciousness.
                                                            
Tommy scoops up Ryan, holding him firmly around the thighs,
body pointing strait up in the air, Ryan tries bracing
himself, Tommy slams Ryan down hard on his back, then
controls Ryan on the ground.
                                                            

67.

                       TOMMY
      (wrestling)
You know how I do it Jim!
                                                            
Tommy gets behind Ryan locking him in a rear naked choke,
Ryan struggles.
                                                            
                       TOMMY
      (Applying pressure)
Go 'head get out of it.
                                                            
Ryan taps
                                                            
Ryan's oxygen is cut off, he can't breath and his face is
beet-red.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (Gargles)
                                                            
Next they teach Ryan how to take down the opponent. He
practices with Tommy repetition after repetition.
                                                            
Ryan lunges in taking Tommy to his butt, Tommy traps Ryan's
head in a guillotine lock, wrapping his muscular arm around
Ryan's neck. Tommy's hands are clasped, Pressure is applied
restricting blood flow to the brain causing near
unconsciousness.
                                                            
                       TOMMY
      (Applying pressure)
Tap out stupid!
                                                            
Ryan taps just before passing out. Tommy lets go, Ryan
desperately gasp for air!
                                                            
                       RYAN (S.O.)
      (Coughing)
                                                            
Ryan struggles to catch his breath, while Tommy laughs.
                                                            
                       TOMMY
      (laughing)
How you supposed to learn, if
you're passed out?
                                                            
                       RYAN
You tell me.
                                                            
CUT TO OUTSIDE THE RING
                                                            
Coach takes Jim to the side.
                                                            

68.

                       COACH EVENS
All due respect Jim, I think what
you're doing for this boy is
fantastic, but Ellery took apart
Tommy! I'm afraid Ryan going to
get his god damn brains bashed in!
                                                            
Jim is blindsided by Coach's opinion.
                                                            
                       JIM
OK! RYAN, TOMMY COME ON OVER HERE
FOR A MINUTE, THERE'S SOMETHING I
HAVE TO CLEAR UP.
                                                            
                                         CUT TO WRESTLING MAT
                                                            
The two walk over to Jim and Coach, they sit on the ground.
                                                            
Tommy takes out his mouthpiece resting it behind his ear.
                                                            
Ryan does the same.
                                                            
                       JIM
Tommy.
                                                            
                       TOMMY
Whud up?
                                                            
                       JIM
Ellery used a self defense
technique better known as
Senshido. It was designed for
WOMEN and the ELDERLY to protect
themselves against muggers,
rapist, kid nappers, and even
murderers! If a Woman or Senior
Citizen can inflict enough pain on
an attacker and be effective using
these techniques, imagine the
outcome when a trained fighter
uses them. (directed at Tommy &
Coach) ELLERY CAUGHT YOU OFF GUARD
WITH THESE MOVES! HE KNEW YOUR
FIRST INSTINCTS WOULD BE TO
WRESTLE, AND HE WAS RIGHT! THAT IS
THE ONLY REASON IT WAS SO
EFFECTIVE! It was well planned,
Nothing more.
                                                            
 

69.

INT. BURGER KING - NIGHT
                                                            
Ryan & Kelly sit in a booth enjoying a meal together.
Ryan takes a huge bite from his burger, Kelly laughs & wipes
ketchup from his chin as she drinks from her straw.
                                                            
 
EXT. BURGER KING - NIGHT
                                                            
A tricked out red convertible drives slowly passed the well
lit restaurant with a psychotic looking Ellery watching the
two together as they pass.
                                                            
 
INT. JIM'S GYM - NIGHT
                                                            
More Take down defense.
More Take down offense.
More jump rope.
More shadow boxing.
More weight training.
More speed bag.
                                                            
 
INT. EISENHOWER HIGH SCHOOL HALL WAY - DAY
                                                            
Ryan & Kelly are holding hands walking the halls.
                                                            
Ellery, Jeremy, & Cash are just ahead when they notice the
two together. Ellery is furious as they pass, Cash puts his
foot out tripping Ryan as he goes crashing to the floor!
                                                            
                                         (S.O.) LAUGHS!
                                                            
Ryan gets up fast with a mixture of fear and revenge written
all over his face, he's headed strait for Cash anyway.
                                                            
Tommy comes flying out of no where tackling Cash to the
floor.
                                                            
Pumped up school mates circle the action as a bigger
stronger Cash starts to get the upper hand. Kelly is
standing between her brother & boyfriend when Jeremy jumps
over her sucker punching Ryan on the cheek.
                                                            
Coach Evens & other staff members rip Cash off of a bloodied
but pissed off Tommy. Ellery proudly grabs Jeremy pulling
him away from trouble, & congratulating him as they make
their way from action. Kelly is crying but stays strong
enough to calm Ryan convincing him to stay put.
                                                            
 

70.

INT. JIM'S GYM - NIGHT
                                                            
Over a series of weeks Ryan progressively gets better.
Montage of Jim, Coach Evens, and Tommy training him;

Speed bag purrs fast in a perfect figure eight.

Jump rope hums quickly around him.

Shadow boxing amazes himself in his own reflection.

Weight training.

Ground game solid and strong.

Back to speed bag.

Back to jump rope.

Back to shadow boxing.

Back to ground game.

Back to weights.
                                                            
Ryan is lean cut, and muscular from conditioning.
                                                            
                       JIM
How do you feel?
                                                            
                       RYAN
I feel great!
                                                            
Jim wraps his arm around Ryan's neck.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (crack up)
Then I guess it's time to start
training. Mitts, Kicks, Sparring,
DEFENSE AND OFFENSE FROM YOUR
BACK! And ping pong kid!
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (snickers)
Ping pong? Is that some kind of
wax on wax off karate trick or
something?
                                                            
Jim walks off.
                                                            
                       JIM
No, it's called fun kid, you do
remember what fun is don't you.
                                                            
 

71.

INT. JIM'S LIVING ROOM. - NIGHT
                                                            
Jim sits on the edge of his seat, drinking a beer next to
Ryan in a fold out chair, examining old video footage of
Ellery at tournaments competing.
                                                            
They watch paying close attention for mistakes and Tells.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Damn he's good! Anyone ever beat
him?
                                                            
                       JIM
No.
                                                            
                       RYAN
So what's the game plan then?
                                                            
Jim pauses the action on the T.V.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (certain)
You make him bring the fight to
you. Stick with our game plan,in a
unpredictable pattern, stay away
from him, counter punch
effectively, smother his punches,
get him frustrated and remember
our lessons. We're gonna beat'em
kid. Every thing he knows I taught
him, and now I'm teaching you how
to defend it kid.
                                                            
                       RYAN
You really think I can win?
                                                            
Ryan can see the growing confidence in his friends eyes.
                                                            
Jim points at the paused T.V. showing Ellery's left hand
clearly at his waist while his right is extended.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (challenged)
(points at T.V.) He drops his
left, when he throws his right
asking to be punished. And he
loves to throw back foot high
kicks leaving his lead foot with
out balance, just asking for
someone to shoot the boot! Do I
think you can win?
                                                            

72.

Jim reaches out with a smile placing his hand on Ryan's
shoulder.
                                                            
                       JIM
When the fist start to fly, the
crowd roars and he starts making
all the same mistakes, I can
direct you, but it's your heart
and sheer guts that will be tested
kid!
                                                            
Ryan silently nods his head with a look of pride in his
eyes.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (challenged)
I think you're five foot eight but
have the heart of a gladiator
every bit of six foot nine, But if
you take your eye off the prize
for even a second kid, he'll make
you pay the price.
                                                            
Jim starts up the video and stares at the tube.
                                                            
He pauses again pointing at Ellery in mid-stride of a back
foot high kick.
                                                            
Ryan starts to realize Jim knows exactly what he's talking
about. That he is taking this as seriously as anyone ever
could.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I understand. (pauses) Jim I just
want to say I appreciate
everything you're doing.
                                                            
Takes a sip of his beer.
                                                            
                       JIM
I know you do kid. In a lot of
ways, it's given me the strength
to get back up from the canvas
too.
                                                            
 
INT. RYAN'S APARTMENT. - DAY
                                                            
Ryan snoozes in his bed when the startling sound of the
alarm goes off, he stretches over turning it off. The clock
reads 5:00AM, He throws on a sweatsuit, gym shoes, then
straps leg weights around both ankles.
                                                            

73.

He strolls into the kitchen for a drink, His Mother is at
the table still in her pajamas having a cup of coffee,
reading the morning newspaper.
                                                            
                       GAIL
Morning sweetheart. What are you
doing up so early?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Going for a run.
                                                            
His mother gets the eggs out of the refrigerator and begins
cracking them into the frying pan.
                                                            
                       GAIL
You really think using your fist
is the best way to deal with your
problems?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Mom, I think other people using
their fist on me is my problem!
                                                            
                       GAIL
I just don't want you to get hurt.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I'll be fine.
                                                            
Scrabbling the eggs.
                                                            
                       GAIL
      (skeptical)
We don't even know this guy, he
could be some kind of child
molester for all we know?
                                                            
                       RYAN
WHAT? (LAUGHS) Jim's a great guy!
He's not only teaching the
physical side of Cuong Nhu but
spiritual, mental, and
philosophical.
                                                            
Ryan roams to the front door, opening it.
                                                            
                       GAIL
I'm just glad to see you happy
again Ryan!(relieved) At least
have some breakfast first.
                                                            

74.

                       RYAN
Can't right now, maybe after the
run (smiles) gotta go, Love you.
                                                            
Ryan slips away from the apartment.
                                                            
                       GAIL
      (smiles)
I LOVE YOU!!! AND BE CAREFUL THIS
IS DETROIT!
                                                            
 
EXT. STREETS OF DETROIT - AM - DAY
                                                            
Ryan runs for miles in knee high fluffy, intense blustery
snow conditions, beating even the sun rise, training in the
magnificent moonlight that illuminates the snow covered
ghost-town. Other than street bums, hookers, and drug
dealers Ryan is the only soul in sight for miles ahead.
                                                            
His breath is coiling and rising into the sky.
                                                            
The only vehicle on the road is a snow plow, with its orange
lights flashing.
                                                            
He finishes his run just in time to shower, and get ready
for school.
                                                            
 
EXT. KELLY'S FRONT YARD - NIGHT
                                                            
Ryan walks Kelly up the porch holding her hand, they stop
short of the front door.
                                                            
Ellery's face appears in the window.
                                                            
Ryan is dumbstruck, he can't keep his eyes off her.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (Stares hard into
       her eyes)
So I'll see you later then.
                                                            
                       KELLY
      (sighs and smiles.)
I'll be looking forward to it.
                                                            
The front door opens, catching Ryan off guard. It's Ellery.
Red-Faced with fury, Ryan glances in his direction then
kisses Kelly and jogs off.
                                                            
 

75.

INT. JIM'S GYM - DAY
                                                            
Ryan and Jim are standing in front of the heavy bag.
                                                            
Jim circles Ryan hovering of him, and flailing his fist all
about.
                                                            
                       JIM
There are five controls for self
defense kid. Control your area by
awareness, control yourself and
any fear or anger, control your
attacker with a strategy, control
the situation by being patient,
and control the consequences by
being wiser. Now, kicking isn't
any different than punching,they
have the same basic principles you
want to stay balanced, shift your
weight, and always protect your
self by keeping up your guard.
                                                            
Jim crouches down in his guard and slowly demonstrates a
front kick, then slowly brings his leg back into his
fighting guard.
                                                            
                       JIM
That's a front kick, its powerful
and can be effective if you snap
your kick, maintain your distance
shift your weight and stay
balanced at the same time.
                                                            
Ryan attempts the same kick struggling to get it right.
                                                            
                       JIM
You have to be extra careful with
kicks, You leave yourself wide
open for your opponent to shoot
the boot.
                                                            
Another kick.
                                                            
                       JIM
Not bad. Try again, snap the kick
this time.
                                                            
Another kick.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (kicking)
Shoot the boot?
                                                            

76.

                       JIM
(scuffs)It's when your kick is
extended fully out, and he shoots
underneath your kick grabbing your
planted leg or foot for a take
down. "SHOOT THE BOOT"...That is
why I want you to practice all of
your kicks from your back.
                                                            
                       RYAN
From my back?
                                                            
Jim lies on his back.
                                                            
                       JIM
Yes, from your back.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Isn't the object of fighting to
stay off your back?
                                                            
                       JIM
Not everything works out the way
you plan them.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Don't I know.
                                                            
From his back he demonstrates multiple kicks.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (demonstrates)
A great tool in kicking is
learning how to throw them from
the floor up. Most students only
practice kicks standing, and that
means on one leg. Their balance is
an issue and development is
limited. From the laying down
position ON YOUR BACK I will first
teach you the front snap and front
thrust kick, then roundhouse,
crescent, and heel kicks! When I
SAY YOU'RE READY we will move on
to you laying on your side,
practicing side kicks with your
reaction leg, then move on to the
other side.
                                                            
Ryan gets down on his back and mimics his teachings.
                                                            

77.

                       RYAN
      (BREATHING HEAVY &
       KICKING)
I still really don't fully
understand why exactly
I'm kicking from my back?
I've never seen this on T.V.?
                                                            
Jim springs to his feet standing over Ryan, he reaches down
towards Ryan's face but can't get past the kicks. Jim gives
him a look of "see I told you so". Ryan has a understanding
smile on his face.
                                                            
                       JIM
This way you can extend the kick,
extend your hips. This will lift
your hips off the ground and time
the extension of the hips with the
extension of the weapon surface of
the kick. THIS WILL GIVE YOU AN
OPPORTUNITY TO HAVE MASSIVE REPS
FROM THE GROUND, USING YOUR HIPS
AT FULL CAPACITY! Then WHEN I SAY
you're ready we go to standing
kicks giving you standing reps!
Then heavy bag, focus mitts, and
sparing. This technique on your
back will also help develop great
ground work, keeping your opponent
a safe distance from you, while on
your back...This application will
also help you develop awesome
scissors kicks!
                                                            
Jim jumps in the air throwing a relentless scissor kick
plastering his leg against the leather heavy bag, it swings
wild & all over the place. Jim bearhugs the bag stopping
it's movements.
                                                            
Ryan strenuously works hard on continuous repetitions
pushing himself with every kick from his back.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (BREATHING HEAVY &
       KICKING)
Like this?
                                                            
                       JIM
Yeah that's good! You ever been to
GraceLand kid?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Wha? No sir, why?
                                                            

78.

Jim picks up a water bottle spraying his head and neck then
takes a drink.
                                                            
                       JIM
I was there a few months back, and
I just can't get over the fact
that the guy was considered by
most as "The King". Yet when he
died, they buried his ass in the
back yard like a god damn dead
dog?
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (chuckles)
                                                            
Jim playfully squirts Ryan with water catching him off
guard,startling him for a moment as it's hitting his face.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (outbursting in
       laughter)
STAY FOCUSED KID!
                                                            
Ryan covers his face with his open hands.
                                                            
                       JIM
ATTITUDE DETERMINES ALTITUDE
and holding on to anger is like
grasping a hot coal with only the
intent of throwing it at someone
else, YOU'RE THE ONE WHO GETS
BURNED. Understand?
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (joking with Jim)
Not really grasshopper...I got it,
I understand.
                                                            
Tommy and Coach Evens walk down the steps entering the gym.
                                                            
                       JIM
Alright Ryan that's enough for the
night. Coach, you get the tickets?
                                                            
Coach pulls a fist full of tickets from his back pocket,
spreading them out like a fan, waving them at Jim.
                                                            
                       JIM
GREAT! (directed at Tommy & Ryan)
You guys ready for a field trip?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Field trip where?
                                                            

79.

                       JIM
The fights!
                                                            
They pile up in Jim car and venture off.
                                                            
 
INT. JIM'S CAR - NIGHT
                                                            
Jim drives down a four lane snow covered highway, with
Ryan and Tommy in the back seats, and Coach Evens sitting
shotgun.
                                                            
Ryan reaches between the two front seats turning the radio
off, then resting his hands on the back of both head rest
in front of him.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Tell me again why we're going to
watch these Psycho bastards again?
                                                            
Jim adjust his rear view mirror pointing it at Ryan.
                                                            
                       JIM
Sometimes it's more important to
see how a fighter loses and not
how he wins.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I've already seen these guys win,
one to many times.
                                                            
Coach turns his head half way looking at both boys.
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
No, he's right. It's no different
then when I go scout other
wrestling teams, It's part of the
process.
                                                            
                       TOMMY
What makes you so sure this cat
will lose anyway?
                                                            
Tilts the rear view mirror at Tommy.
                                                            
                       JIM
Look, there are two categories of
fighters. Some guys need to fight
every week for practice, and then
there's guys like Ellery, who
fight to satisfy their thirst! He
has to fight, for him it's in his
blood, it runs through his veins,
it's an addictive adrenaline rush,
            (MORE)

80.

                       JIM (cont'd)
that he has to have, like a junkie
getting their fix.(sighs) Most
people with this addiction end up
fighting behind bars not in a
cage. He's too arrogant to not
make mistakes, were gonna find his
flaws and use them against him
later on.
                                                            
Jim pulls the car to the side of the highway, hitting a snow
drift, putting the shifter in park, and turns facing Ryan.
                                                            
                       JIM
The only way you'll get a fair
shake at pummeling this guy, is if
you fight with rules, a referee,
judges, and rounds with your team
in your corner helping you along.
                                                            
Ryan nervously massages the back of his neck.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Wait? You expect me to fight a kid
who you yourself just said was a
psychopath violent vampire with a
thirst for blood, locked in cage?
                                                            
                       JIM
If you prefer outside the school,
you against HIM AND HIS FRIENDS
with no rules stomping you and
ending the fight when they feel
like you've had enough. It's up to
you kid, this way is much safer
and less painful.
                                                            
Jim turns back around and continues driving, Ryan's face
turns pale white with fear.
                                                            
 
INT. ARENA SCOUTING - NIGHT
                                                            
Smoke filled arena inside of a flea market, spectators sit
placing bets and screaming taunting criticism's and heckling
at the fighters, drinking beer, eating popcorn and enjoying
the action. Ryan, Jim, Tommy, and coach sit in the back
seats under a general admission sign.
                                                            
The announcer introduces both gladiators individually.
                                                            
Cash enters the cage dressed in black and silver shorts
taped ankles and an old Fighting Wolves T-shirt. He pulls

81.

the shirt over his head throwing it to a member of his team.
His opponent stands a head taller across the cage with a
fierce evil eye, his face has murder written all over it,
razor shaved head, and Nazi swastika tattoo's on each sides
of his chest. The two meet in the middle of the octagon
shake hands, then back to their respected corner for last
minute words of encouragement,tips, and advice.
                                                            
The referee signals the two to fight.
                                                            
                       REFEREE
LET'S GET IT ON BOYS, FIGHT!
                                                            
The two heavyweight's go straight at each other engaging in
battle standing toe to toe fearlessly exchanging swooping
wild hooks both head hunting with banging shots without
accuracy looking for that big knock out punch.
                                                            
                                         (V.O. FAN) GET THAT
NIGGA, PORKCHOP!
                                                            
The loud thuds from every connecting shot can be heard over
the crowd.
                                                            
                       JIM
These boys pack a wallop! At least
you don't have to worry about this
guy kid.
                                                            
                       RYAN
What, Why?
                                                            
Keeping an eye on the action.
                                                            
                       JIM
He's out of you're weight class,
unless you plan on plumping up
40pounds over the next few months.
                                                            
The skin head drives forward throwing a high kick to the
side of Cash's already bloody face.
                                                            
Cash lands on his ass. The skin head lunges forward diving
down on top of a struggling Cash.
                                                            
Jim jumps to his feet.
                                                            
The crowd explodes wanting more blood!
                                                            
The skin head throws multiple hammer fist down on Cash's
face. A defenseless Cash is trying to cover his head, Shot
after Shot smashes down landing.
                                                            

82.

                       COACH EVENS
      (Directed at Tommy)
Different God Damn story when he
takes on someone his own size.
                                                            
                       TOMMY
      (strait faced)
(Glances at Coach then back at
Cash) He ain't shit.
                                                            
Jim back hands Ryan in the chest then points at the action.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (Directed at Ryan)
Ohhh! This Cash is all brawn and
no brain!
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (directed at Jim)
At least make an effort to get out
of the way.
                                                            
The referee tackles the skinhead off of Cash, holding him
with one hand and waving the other in the air signifying
the fight is over, and the skin head is victorious.
                                                            
Ryan stands and cheers.
                                                            
Tommy couldn't be happier, laughing & jumping for joy in
reference to his scuffle in school with Cash.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (smiles and claps)
What little brains that asshole
had was damaged after tonight.
                                                            
Coach Evens and Tommy are going berserk, wildly screaming
and yelling, heckling the fighters.
                                                            
Ryan and Jim sit enjoy themselves sharing popcorn while
watching several other matches together.
                                                            
NEXT FIGHT - JEREMY SAPP VS OPPONENT
                                                            
Jeremy enters the cage in a fit of rage, dancing on his
toes, punching himself in the jaw multiple times. He
practically runs to the center of the cage for the referee's
instructions, Jeremy edges closer and closer to his
opponents face. The referee tries to make more distance
between the two by placing his hands in between them, but
Jeremy's anger and eagerness is uncontrollable, his face is
purple, and veins are protruding from his neck. The referee
is struggling to keep him back.
                                                            

83.

Jeremy pushes the man's face with an open hand, snapping his
head back.
                                                            
                       JEREMY
YOU'RE FUCKING DEAD PUSSY!
HAHAHAH!
                                                            
                       REFEREE
      (directed at
       Jeremy)
One more stunt like that and
you're disqualified, DO YOU
UNDERSTAND ME?
                                                            
Jeremy smiles and nods never taking his eyes off his
opponent, as he walks backwards to his corner man.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I'm convinced!
                                                            
                       TOMMY
Bout what?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Jeremy's Certifiably INSANE!
                                                            
The Referee signals the boys to fight.
                                                            
                       REFEREE
FIGHT!
                                                            
                       JIM
What do you know about this kid
Coach?
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
This Jeremy was on my wrestling
squad for two years, he wasn't
squat! He came back the next year
a new man. He improved his ground
game over that summer, weight
training on his own. The
transformation was unbelievable.
                                                            
                       TOMMY
Na Coach, he came back on juice!
And by the looks of this Lil sissy
fit, some things haven't changed.
                                                            
                       JIM
Self improved often leads to self
destruction. -- the best offense
is a good defense Ryan, and if
this screwball can't hit you,
            (MORE)

84.

                       JIM (cont'd)
he'll push the button him self.
Wouldn't worry too much about this
nut. Wait and see, he'll implode.
                                                            
Jeremy heads strait at his opponent shooting for his legs,
then out powering him effortlessly by lifting him off the
ground on one shoulder, running across the cage with his
opponent in his arms then slamming the man to the canvas!
                                                            
                       JIM
He gets you down like that you
work your kicks from the ground to
maintain a safe distance until you
can get back to your feet.
                                                            
Jeremy takes side control,his opponent struggles to get up
from his back with Jeremy throwing vicious knees to his rib
cage.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I'll try.
                                                            
The opponent rolls over to his stomach with one hand on the
mat pushing himself up to try to escape, MORE KNEES, the
opponent desperately pulls one foot up planting it on the
ground. Jeremy moves in for the kill, jumping on his
opponents exposed back, wrapping his legs around opponent
waist, then placing his huge bicep under the opponents chin
and around the neck like a python locking in a rear naked
choke.
                                                            
The crowds BOOING REACHES TORNADO INTENSITY as the Referee
watches on closely.
                                                            
Jeremy squeezes his opponent neck with incredible power, his
opponent turning blue with tear filled eyes is in and out of
consciousness taps the mat surrendering.
                                                            
Jeremy climbs the cage screaming, then walks back to the
dressing room victorious.
                                                            
ELLERY VS FIGHTER #1
                                                            
The announcer introduces fighters.
                                                            
Fighter #1 looks scared, sedated, very lethargic, and calm
as he glares across the cage at Ellery.
                                                            
Ellery black and silver shorts, with a body that looks
carved out of wood, laterally circles the cage on his bare
toes, then stops in the center of the cage, tilts his head

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all the way back, bends knees forward, arches his back, and
howls like a wolf.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (BLOOD CURLED
       SCREAM)
HA-HA-HA-HOWLLLLL!
                                                            
Two meet in center of cage, Referee gives instructions and
signals the two to fight.
                                                            
The two move in with their hands up, Ellery feints a punch,
Fighter #1 moves in bobbing and weaving his head in a
peekaboo fight style, Ellery lands a lightning quick 3
punch, 2 kick combination sending fighter # 1 to his back,
he slowly gets up, Ellery smiles circling like a shark
taunting the crowd, Fighter # 1 moves forward, tap, tap,
tap, Ellery lands a triple jab, followed by a front kick to
the solar plexus, sending Fighter # 1 to his knees.
                                                            
Ryan looks on with absolute terror.
                                                            
Ellery circles Fighter#1 like a shark.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (directed at Jim)
What is he doing, Why isn't he
finishing him?
                                                            
                       JIM
He knows he already has kid.
                                                            
Fighter#1 makes it to his feet,and attempts to swing. Ellery
bum rushes him, jumps high into the air throwing a flying
round house kick landing perfectly to the chin, blood red
liquid shoots out of his mouth, he hits the mat face first.
Ellery looks out into the crowd making direct eye contact
with Ryan, Ellery has a demonic sinister smile of perversion
on his face.
                                                            
Coach Evens and Tommy just eyeball Ryan and Jim in
disbelief.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I've seen enough.
                                                            
The crowd is chanting Ellery's name over and over again.
                                                            
They all exit.
                                                            
 

86.

INT. EISENHOWER HIGH SCHOOL HALLWAY - DAY
                                                            
Hall jam packed with students elbow to elbow, Ryan is
walking alone holding a book under his arm headed for his
next class.
                                                            
He stays aware of his suroundings being caught with Kelly
could get him hurt, but he is blinded love and hormones.
                                                            
Cash, Jeremy, and Ellery are following just behind teasing
Ryan.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
HEY HOMO!
                                                            
                       JEREMY
WE'RE TALKING TO YOU FAGGOT! WHAT
ARE YOU DEAF AND RETARDED!
                                                            
                       CASH
      (directed at
       Ellery)
Watch this. (smiles)
                                                            
Cash pulls a huge wad of wet gum from his mouth, speeds up
his pace, grabs the front of Ryan's forehead with his right
hand pulling him backwards, with his left hand he smears the
gum into Ryan's hair.
                                                            
Ryan runs his fingers through the back of his hair,
discovering the chewing gum.
                                                            
A group of girls witness the event, they point and laughs at
Ryan.
                                                            
                       JEREMY
WHAT THE FUCK ARE YOU GONNA DO
ABOUT IT BITCH!
                                                            
The bullies laugh and go the other direction.
                                                            
Ryan glances over at the boys.
                                                            
                       JEREMY
DON'T YOU EYE BALL ME YOU BITCH
ASS MOTHER FUCKER! YOU WANT YOUR
NECK BROKEN, KEEP WALKIN' HOMO!
                                                            
 
INT. RYAN'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
                                                            
Ryan is in the bathroom sitting on the toilet while his mom
carefully shaves the gum from his hair.
                                                            

87.

                       GAIL
Ryan, you can't keep protecting
these guys! They're never going to
stop until you tell someone.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I'm Okay! I don't even know how it
happened.
                                                            
She knows her son isn't being truthful.
                                                            
 
INT. ADVANCED PHYSICS - DAY
                                                            
Ryan can't take his eyes off her, a ball of paper hits him
in the back of the head. Ryan pauses looking at Kelly, then
reaches to the floor picking up the paper.
                                                            
He turns around and whips it at the kid to the bully's
surprise it hits him in the face. The kid just looks at Ryan
in disbelief! Ryan turns back around with a huge smile. Mr.
Jacobs at his desk just gives Ryan a small nod of approval.
                                                            
 
INT. JIM'S GYM - NIGHT
                                                            
Jim is working the heavy bag unpacking a series of powerful
hooks and kicks.
                                                            
Ryan and Kelly come down the stairs holding hands with love
written all over their faces.
                                                            
Jim looks noticing Kelly out of the corner of his eye, he
stops and cheerfully comes over to greet her.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (PLEASANTLY
       SURPRISED)
LITTLE KELL BELL? GET OVER HERE
AND GIVE HUG GIRL!
                                                            
                       KELLY
      (VIBRANT)
HI!
                                                            
Jim bear hugs her, jerking her up off the ground spinning
her in a circle, then putting her down.
                                                            
                       JIM
WOW, you're all grown up? It's
been? What at least a few years
now.
                                                            

88.

                       KELLY
Yeah. How have you been?
                                                            
                       JIM
Ryan never mentioned he was
bringing you over. I would have
bought some ice cream. Superman
right, your favorite?
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (Teasing)
KELL BELL!?
                                                            
Ryan gives her a playful poke to the ribs.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (directed at Ryan)
Yeah kid, back in the stone ages
before technology, we used a stop
watch and a actual boxing bell.
Kelly was little and loved ringing
the bell. KELL - BELL.
                                                            
                       KELLY
Yep! It's a little weird though,
you training my BOYFRIEND to fight
my brother?
                                                            
Jim pauses not sure how to reply.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (word boyfriend
       surprises him)
I thought I did? I guess it just
slipped my mind that the two of
you knew one another.
                                                            
The look of excitement, triumph, and surprise is written all
over his face and body language.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (Directed at Kelly)
I KNOW RIGHT! You should show Ryan
your side kick, I'm sure he'd be
impressed
                                                            
                       RYAN
Actually, we stopped by to see if
you wanted to go get a bite to eat
with us. Get you out of the house,
for once.
                                                            

89.

                       JIM
      (directed at Ryan)
No, no, you two go, have fun enjoy
your selves. Kell-Bell, you stop
by any time with Ryan okay?
                                                            
She smiles and nods, gives him a hug good night.
                                                            
Jim notices Ryan limping away.
                                                            
                       JIM
Ryan.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Yeah?
                                                            
                       JIM
What's up with your leg man?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Not sure, a little tender I guess.
                                                            
                       JIM
Well are you hurt? Or are you
injured?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Umm? Hurt I guess. Why?
                                                            
                       JIM
If you're hurt you can still
fight, if you're injured that's a
different story. Remember we all
have lingering injuries we fight
through.
                                                            
They exit up the stairs.
                                                            
 
INT. JIM'S HOUSE. - DAY
                                                            
Ryan and Kelly wearing mask, and rubber gloves, working
diligently,removing unwanted substances, mopping, vacuuming,
scrubbing, shining windows, dusting, dishes, and laundry.
                                                            
They compile multiple trash bags full of garbage stacking
them on top of each other on back porch.
                                                            
The two drenched in sweat and exhausted stand with a look of
accomplishment, the house is finally clean.
                                                            
Kelly walks just behind Jim, covering his eyes then
revealing the freshly cleaned home.
                                                            

90.

                       KELLY
SURPRISE!
                                                            
                       JIM
      (sarcastic)
Where the hell is all my stuff? I
had every thing where I needed it,
how I am supposed to find any
thing kid?
                                                            
Ryan blind sided by this comment pretends to choke Jim,
giving him a shake.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I was wrong.
                                                            
                       JIM
About what kid?
                                                            
                       RYAN
About the maid, She must have died
somewhere else.
                                                            
The three laugh.
                                                            
 
INT. RYAN'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
                                                            
Ryan very focused is sitting at the kitchen table with a
stack of school books sitting in front of him, while he
studies endlessly through the night.
                                                            
 
INT. PHYSICAL EDUCATION LOCKER ROOM - DAY
                                                            
All the teens are showering off all foul sweat and odor,
some are finishing up and getting dressed. Ryan walks into
shower room in a towel.
Jeremy and three other boys explore his locker.
                                                            
Boy#1 pulls out a plastic bag filled with Human Feces from
his gym bag, Boy#2 wearing rubber gloves reaches in the
plastic bag, grabbing a hand full.
                                                            
Ryan is rinsing shampoo from his hair.
                                                            
Jeremy pulls Ryan's shoes from his locker.
                                                            
Boy#2 filling tightly the insides of the shoes up near the
toe area with the shit.
                                                            
Jeremy puts the shoes back into the locker where he found
them, shutting the door. The entire locker room holds back

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their laughs, standing casually in anticipation waiting for
Ryan to discover he is the the victim of another hurtful
joke at his expense.
                                                            
Ryan drys off, puts his cloths on then slips his feet into
his shit filled shoes, he notices something wrong instantly
pulling his shoes off to find his socks covered in shit and
the insides of his shoes ruined.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (directed at
       everyone)
VERY FUNNY GUYS! YOU RUINED MY
SHOES! SOMEONE IS GOING TO BUY ME
A NEW PAIR!
                                                            
A sudden burst of laughter from fellow classmates at Ryan's
expense.
                                                            
Ryan finds Coach Evens and Silently making his shoes visible
in shame, never saying a word he takes his socks off washes
his feet in the sink, throws away his shoes, and wears a
pair of old football cleats the rest of the day.
                                                            
 
INT. JIM'S LIVING ROOM. - DAY
                                                            
Jim walks over to his closet reaching in and grabbing a pair
of shoes handing them to Ryan.
                                                            
                       JIM
Coach told me what happened to
your shoes. Your a size ten right?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Yeah. You don't have to --
                                                            
Ryan tries on the shoes while listening to Jim.
                                                            
                       JIM
-- It's OK I wanted to. Just take
the damn shoes kid, it's not like
I'm giving you the cure to cancer!
Just a way to keep your feet
warm...Besides Kell-Bell don't
need to be seen around town with
some kid wearing football cleats,
especially one that don't even
play football.
                                                            
 

92.

INT. TRAINING GOING WELL - DAY
                                                            
                                         INSIDE RING
                                                            
Ryan is in tip top shape, He is in the ring sparring full
contact with Tommy. Ryan is slippery and almost impossible
to hit, keeping a safe distance, he springs in then counter
punches Tommy, then slips out of striking distance, waits
patiently for Tommy to throw again, Ryan is Touching,
turning, knocking him back, and nailing him repeatedly.Tommy
shoots for Ryan's legs taking him to his back, Ryan slides
his legs around Tommy's head trapping his arm under his
chin, putting him in a triangle choke, Ryan applies
pressure making Tommy tap out.
                                                            
Jim looks on impressed.
                                                            
 
INT. JIM'S GYM - DAY
                                                            
MONTAGE OF TRAINING
                                                            
More weights.

More jump rope.

More shadow boxing.

More lateral movement.

More take down offense.

More take down defense.

More kicking from back & side.

More speed bag.

More running.

More Mitts.

More rolling & sparring.

Practicing and learning elbow and knee strikes, ground and
pound.
                                                            
Working on standing kicks and flying knees.
                                                            
Ryan stays focused, while listening to Jim in the back
ground.
                                                            

93.

                       JIM (V.O.)
Remember it takes more energy to
miss a shot then it does to land
one! Stay accurate and make him
miss!
                                                            
Ryan picks up a towel from the mat, then wipes the sweat
from his face and head.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I'll keep that in mind.
                                                            
                       JIM (V.O.)
YOU GOTTA THINK SIMPLER RYAN!
THINK FASTER!
THINK BETTER!
THINK DEEPER!
THINK WISER!
                                                            
Ryan slips his hands in a pair of boxing gloves one at a
time, then uses his mouth to tighten the Velcro.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (smiling)
So Ryan, this Blonde walks into a
Chinese dry cleaner, hands her
blue dress to the Asian woman
behind the counter, then turns
around and walks away, as the
Blonde is walking out the door the
Asian yells "come again" the
Blonde stops dead in her tracks,
turns, looks at the Asian woman
and says "no this time it's
yogurt!" (drum noise) BA- BOMP-
CHING!
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (chuckles)
Not bad, not bad.
                                                            
 
INT. JIM'S GYM - NIGHT
                                                            
                                         HEAVY BAG
                                                            
Jim holds the back of the heavy bag, while listening Ryan
throws combinations of kicks and punches. From sheer power,
the bag is jerking all over the place, Jim is having a hard
time holding on.
                                                            

94.

                       JIM
      (Struggling to
       keep the bag
       still)
Many people say only fighting will
give you true development. There
is no substitution for fighting as
far as experience is concerned.
But true development is all about
the approach.
                                                            
Ryan begins throwing powerful swooping hooks.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Approach I thought you said
technique is key?
                                                            
More kicks, knees & elbows.
                                                            
                       JIM
How often do professional football
players go full speed outside of
game day? Technique is what it's
all about.
                                                            
Ryan catches his second wind, attacking the bag with pure
vengence in mind.
                                                            
                       JIM (cont'd)
Add that to natural ability and
hard work and you have a champion.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (Winded)
What if you're just out classed?
                                                            
The two move away from the heavy bag facing each other in
fighting stance.
                                                            
                       JIM
If they overwhelm you with their
hands, take out their legs.
                                                            
Jim throws a half speed leg kick connecting just hard enough
to get Ryan's attention.
                                                            
                       JIM
If they kick strong, get inside
and neutralize their legs.
                                                            
Jim grabs Ryan behind the knees taking him to his back.
                                                            

95.

                       JIM
You want to move like water, using
the path of least resistance.
                                                            
Ryan struggles to get off his back with Jim shifting his
weight in every direction Ryan moves keeping him grounded.
                                                            
                       JIM
Never underestimate a technique,
know your best technique, and how
to beat it. Understand your
weakness, and how to overcome it.
                                                            
Jim puts Ryan in a armbar.

Ryan quickly taps.
                                                            
                       JIM
Be ready for the un-expected.
                                                            
Ryan goes to get to his feet when Jim traps his leg putting
Ryan in a heel hook leg lock and sending him back to the mat
and tapping all over again.
                                                            
The two stand but Ryan seems a bit fidgety not knowing if
the lesson is over or not.
                                                            
                       JIM
Expose yourself in training as
often as possible, do not get
comfortable.
                                                            
Jim fakes a kick.

Ryan fades back.
                                                            
                       JIM
NEVER be over confident, and take
no prisoners kid!
                                                            
 
INT. JIM'S GYM - NIGHT
                                                            
Jim is taking down all the photo's of Ellery and himself off
the walls putting them in boxes.
                                                            
He puts the last one in a full card board box, taping it up.
                                                            
Jim hangs a snapshot of Ryan and Jim together, next to
photos of Osensei Ngo Dong.
                                                            
Then photographs of the rest of the team.
                                                            

96.

Ryan walks down entering the gym.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (glazed eyes)
What's all this?
                                                            
                       JIM
      (embarrassed to be
       proud)
Just thought is was time to
redecorate kid. You're not gonna
get all chick like on me are ya? I
mean you better not start cryin'
like some kind of sissy!
                                                            
Ryan wraps his arms around a stiff Jim playfully giving him
a unwanted hug.
                                                            
 
INT. JIM'S GYM - NIGHT
                                                            
                                         CUT TO MATS
                                                            
Jim and Ryan are rolling around on the mats practicing
reversals, jujitsu moves, techniques, submissions, take
downs, arm locks, choke locks, and leg locks.
                                                            
Jim attempts to mount Ryan but his kicks from the ground up
technique is too strong for Jim to get through.
                                                            
                       JIM
Alright I'm gonna try to get on
top of you and mount you, you use
your ground kicks to keep me off,
allowing you time to out think
your opponent and giving you room
to get to your feet and react.
                                                            
Jim and Ryan go at the drill endlessly, Ryan effectively
uses his feet to keep Jim away.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (DURING DRILL)
WHY IS MARTIAL ARTS CALLED
SELF-DEFENSE AND NOT SELF-OFFENSE
KID?
                                                            
Kicking.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (DURING DRILL)
BECAUSE THE BEST OFFENSE IS A GOOD
DEFENSE.
                                                            

97.

                                         CUT TO HEAVYBAG
                                                            
Ryan is practicing kicks on heavy bag from the standing
position he is drenched in sweat, his face is beet red, like
he's been at it for hours.
                                                            
                       JIM
That's right! Okay, give me
5minutes of all out balls to the
wall!
                                                            
Ryan hits his second wind!
                                                            
                                         CUT TO MITTS
                                                            
Ryan throws combinations as fast and as hard as he can for
the last 30 seconds of the round. Red-faced with sweat
flying in every direction he swings and swings.
                                                            
BELL SOUNDS!(S.O.)
                                                            
                       JIM
EXCELLENT! THAT'S THE WAY TO
FINISH IT KID!
                                                            
Jim takes off his mitts setting them on the ground, then
placing his hand on Ryan's left shoulder.
                                                            
                       JIM
Good job today kid. You're
improving fast.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Thanks. You have anything to eat?
I'm starving.
                                                            
Ryan slides his sweaty hands out from his gloves.
                                                            
                       JIM
Yeah, I think I have some
microwave pizza in the freezer.
                                                            
                       RYAN
That's cool.
                                                            
                       JIM
Yeah, free food is always cool.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Hey Jim I heard eighty percent of
all fights end up going to the
ground. Do you think we should be
working more on the ground game?
                                                            

98.

                       JIM
Just remember this, one hundred
percent of them start standing
up.(smiles) Now lets go eat.
                                                            
The two put their gear away and head upstairs for the
kitchen.
                                                            
 
INT. JIM'S KITCHEN - NIGHT
                                                            
Ryan is sitting at the kitchen table while Jim is slicing up
the hot pizza, and placing it on paper plates.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (silly)
A man is sitting in a bar, and
every so often he pours a little
beer on his hand...The guy next to
him ask "What are you doing?"...So
he says "I'm getting my date
drunk!" (Laughs)
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (excited)
(Chuckles)
Man Jim, sometimes I just day
dream for hours about different
ways to kick the crap out of
Ellery!
                                                            
Jim takes his seat, they begin their dinner.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (Stares hard)
You'll discover one day, that it's
not always about winning.(offers a
tiny smile) It's about accepting
yourself, and being comfortable in
your own skin.
                                                            
Takes a huge bite.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I figure once we take down the big
bad wolf, my problem will be
solved.
                                                            
                       JIM
I got news for you kid, the world
is one big endless line of guys
like Ellery, just waiting to kick
you in the ass!
                                                            

99.

                       RYAN
Then I'll just block it and kick
back!
                                                            
Ryan smiles and takes a bite of pizza.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (talking with his
       mouth full)
I wish it was that simple. You
gotta brush it off and remain
positive about the things you do
have. Remember, negativity and
weakness are like magnets. It's
force sucks in, and recruits other
personalities everyday dragging
them down with the ship!
                                                            
 
INT. FIGHTING WOLF DEN MIXED MARTIAL ARTS GYM - NIGHT
                                                            
State of the art gym full of students drenched in sweat
and exhausted working combinations on the heavy bags,
concentrating hard and working the speed bags. The loud
sounds of grunting and students breathing heavy, pride and
determination written on their faces pushing themselves on
the mat, well organized grappling techniques, machine like
students rolling and perfecting their ground game. Just
above on the second floor of the Olympic size dojo are
students shadow boxing and sparring in and out of the ring.
Ellery is punishing his opponents, putting one down after
another as they climb out of the ring just as fast as they
climb in, all running from the pain Ellery is dishing out.
                                                            
The far left wall reads;
"Who Ever! When Ever! Where Ever! 4 Ever!"

The far right wall reads;
"Death Before DisHonor"

The wall facing the entrance door reads;
"Bone Breakers Life Takers"
                                                            
A long white bearded, little old man, who looks like a
skeleton dipped in yellow wax and swallowed by his over
sized Karate Gi slowly approaches Jim.
                                                            
Jim slips off his shoes and meets the tiny man half way.
                                                            
Jim bows as a form of respect.
                                                            

100.

                       JIM
Sensei, can we talk in private for
a minute?
                                                            
                       SENSEI OOKAMI
I know you?
                                                            
                       JIM
No sir, here to discuss a problem
with a couple of your students. I
think we can sit and resolve the
matter together.
                                                            
                       SENSEI OOKAMI
Problem huh? Follow me to my
office, Young man.
                                                            
                       JIM
Jim.
                                                            
Jim follows just behind the little old to his office.
                                                            
                       SENSEI OOKAMI
Of course, right this way Jim.
                                                            
Sensei OoKAMI opens the door, holding it open for Jim.
                                                            
                       SENSEI OOKAMI
Please, after you.
                                                            
 
INT. SENSEI OOKAMI'S OFFICE - NIGHT
                                                            
Office's giant plate glass window overlooks the gym,the
walls are covered with ancient black and white photos of
different martial artist and samurai in a variety of
different dojos, just behind his desk is a Japanese flag, to
the left and right of the flag are Japanese scrolls, above
them are swords.
                                                            
Jim sits at a chair facing Sensei OoKAMI'S desk, Sensei
OoKAMI pulls out his roller chair and sits down.
                                                            
Sensei OoKAMI points at the scrolls one then the other.
                                                            
But Jim isn't there for any history lesson, he half
heartedly listens to the old man waiting for his turn to
speak.
                                                            
                       SENSEI OOKAMI
The scrolls you study, is secret
to Japanese Samurai. Karate is
actually a Japanese word, meaning
empty hand.
            (MORE)

101.

                       SENSEI OOKAMI (cont'd)
It's true. The original word for
Japanese martial arts is bujutsu,
meaning art of military.
                                                            
Crosses his arms.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (Not interested)
Yeah, well I don't want to take up
a whole lot of your time, so I'll
get right to it.
                                                            
Jim points out the glass window of the office to the dojo.
                                                            
                       JIM
A couple of your students have
been bullying my student, and put
another in the hospital. I feel
that the only solution to this
problem would be to match them up,
and let 'em get it out of their
systems in the cage rather than in
the streets.
                                                            
                       SENSEI OOKAMI
What student of mine brings you so
much concern?
                                                            
                       JIM
Ellery.
                                                            
Brushes his fingers through is long white beard reading
Jim's sanity.
                                                            
                       SENSEI OOKAMI
Ellery is my top student, he is a
perfect 14-0 in competition. What
is your students record?
                                                            
                       JIM
      (provoking)
Record? That has no relevance
given the serious situation.
Fighters are measured by heart and
soul not wins and losses Sensei.
                                                            
A very unconvinced Sensei rest his elbow on the desk,
putting his hand over his mouth.
                                                            
                       SENSEI OOKAMI
Please call me Paul, I
insist.(Smiles) The match doesn't
fit, your request is just too
            (MORE)

102.

                       SENSEI OOKAMI (cont'd)
unrealistic! (Shaking his head
No)I can't put my top combat
artist in the cage with a inferior
opponent. Too high of risk no
reward! This is a business and it
just wouldn't look good on his
resume---
                                                            
A poker faced Jim is expressionless, but is desperatley
holding back a smile knowing everything is going exactly as
he planned.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (blackmail)
(BEAT) Yeah, well neither would
jail time PAUL! Ellery used
senshido against the school's
finest wrestler practically
blinding the kid. His hands and
feet are registered lethal
weapons. He can't just go around
hitting who he wants...You follow
Paul?
                                                            
This quickly grabs Sensei's attention. With an alarming look
on his face he still plays hardball.
                                                            
 
INT. FIGHTING WOLVES DOJO - NIGHT
                                                            
Jeremy and Ellery stand in the ring looking on through the
office glass window.
                                                            
                       JEREMY
WHAT THE FUCK IS HE DOING HERE!
You don't think he's telling
Sensei about what happened with
that little FAGGOT do you?
                                                            
Ellery takes off his gloves and head gear.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (sighs)
Calm down nut bag, I'll handle
this.
                                                            
Ellery makes his way toward the office.
                                                            
 
INT. SENSEI OOKAMI'S OFFICE - NIGHT
                                                            
Ellery walks in the office with a arrogant expression.
                                                            

103.

Puts his hand up and attempts to slap Jim five.

Jim doesn't accept his offer.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
Jim, what's up bro? Good to see
Ya! Finally looking to get into
coaching M.M.A. huh? You should
have told me, I could have put in
a good word ahead of time bro.
                                                            
                       JIM
I'm - -
                                                            
Jim pretends to be visibly frustrated so his plan doesn't
fall apart .
                                                            
                       SENSEI OOKAMI
- -Ellery to my surprise, Jim here
was just telling me he wants his
number one student to match up
against YOU.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (Blown away)
Top student? Who that queer!
                                                            
Jim suddenly realizes something: This isn't the boy he spent
countless hours mentoring. Confirming what a real asshole
Ellery has become.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (Taunting)
His name is Ryan, and the last I
checked he was dating your sister.
                                                            
Ellery becomes stiff and ready to fight at that very moment.
Sensei silently watching Ellery with an expression of pride.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
I got no problem with that! It
would be a nice little warm up
before a real fight.
                                                            
Jim doesn't know whether to react with laughter or anger. He
lets the two work it out knowing Ellery is too cocky to back
down from a challenge with or without his sensei.
                                                            
                       SENSEI OOKAMI
Sorry we regretfully pass. Thanks
for the offer though, maybe after
your inexperienced young warrior
gets a few wins under his belt.
Who knows in a couple of years
            (MORE)

104.

                       SENSEI OOKAMI (cont'd)
they can meet up in the
professional ranks.
                                                            
This isn't the response he was waiting to hear.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (Beat)
I WANT THIS FIGHT SENSEI!
                                                            
                       JIM
      (Beat)
(Illustrates his point) Why spiral
the long winding mountain road,
when we can just climb strait up
to the top. What if Ryan defeats
Jeremy? Will you match Ellery
against him then?
                                                            
Ellery begins shivering and convulsing with anger.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (directed at Jim)
(Beat)THIS IS BULLSHIT! Jeremy
will take this kid apart with his
eyes closed! Where's that leave
me?
                                                            
Ellery's confidence is convincing enough. Sensei puzzled by
this offer that seems like pure stupidity on Jim's part.
Jim knows this...
                                                            
                       SENSEI OOKAMI
      (Chuckles)
Two very different fighters with
completely different styles Jim.
                                                            
                       JIM
I'm well aware of the difference
between the two.
                                                            
Jim acts insulted by Sensei's laughter but still very
confident in Ryan, is pleased to make the deal.
                                                            
                       SENSEI OOKAMI
Are you sure your scrapper can
handle it? Your talking about my
top two students.
                                                            

105.

                       JIM
      (Beat)
He can handle it. You seem like a
honorable man, just have Ellery in
tip top after we beat Jeremy.
                                                            
Ellery stands fit to fight.
                                                            
Jim bows to Sensei OoKAMI, Smiles at a visibly angry Ellery
patting him on the back as he exits the office.
                                                            
 
INT. PHYSICAL EDUCATION - GYM - DAY
                                                            
The entire class participates in volleyball except Jeremy
who sits watching on from the bleachers.
                                                            
Ryan walks over to Coach Evens with a huge smile.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I gotta hand it to you Coach,
having Jeremy sit all this time
instead of running laps was a
brilliant strategy for the fight!
                                                            
                       COACH EVENS
The God damn fool doesn't have a
clue does he?
                                                            
                       RYAN
He will when he can't breathe on
fight day!
                                                            
 
INT. KELLY'S HOUSE - DAY
                                                            
Ryan and Kelly are on the couch watching Curb Your
Enthusiasm on the giant plasma television set.
                                                            
Ryan looks over a Kelly seated next to him, leans over into
her ear.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (whispers)
Did I tell you how much I loved
you today?
                                                            
He gently pecks her behind the ear.
                                                            
This is the first time she's heard this, it's a pleasant
surprise. Long pause as they gaze into each others eyes.
                                                            

106.

                       KELLY
      (excited)
I love you too.
                                                            
Ellery, Cash, and Jeremy casually come walking in the front
door. Jeremy smiles, stopping Ellery in his tracks as he
notices Ryan stroking the back of her hair. Ellery is
furious, but Cash beats him into the living room.
                                                            
Cash smacks Ryan in the back of the head.

Ryan jumps up from the couch on fire.

He feels safe with Kelly, so he becomes very cocky.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (Brave)
What's your problem fat ass?!
                                                            
                       CASH
Hey Ellery the mixed martial TART
thinks he's a tough guy now
                                                            
                       ELLERY
Don't make me laugh FAG-BOY!
                                                            
Kelly jumps up pushing them out of the room.
                                                            
Ryan is relieved she saved him.
                                                            
                       JEREMY
      (Insane)
You're lucky I don't snap your
neck now you fucking arab bitch!
                                                            
                       RYAN
Yeah, (hesitates) You'll get your
chance soon enough (pause) Fucker!
                                                            
Suddenly a BMW pulls into the driveway. It's Kelly and
Ellery's dad & mom. Ellery notices, grabs his fired up
friends and retreats up the stairs to his bedroom.
                                                            
 
INT. FIGHT NIGHT ARENA LOCKER ROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Jim tapes Ryan's hands, then helps him with his gloves.
                                                            
                       JIM
A boy comes to me with a spark of
interest,
I feed that spark and it becomes a
flame,
I feed the flame and it becomes a
            (MORE)

107.

                       JIM (cont'd)
fire,
I feed that fire and it becomes a
roaring blaze,
But if the roaring blaze doesn't
learn to control itself, that fire
will become wild and only burn
itself out.
So out think this hot head and let
him burn himself out,
THEN YOU RELOAD AND EXPLODE!
                                                            
The two warm up on mitts, then practice breathing
techniques.
                                                            
 
INT. ARENA FIGHT NIGHT - DAY
                                                            
The crowd is pumped, and rhythmically chanting Jeremy's
name.
                                                            
The two fighters stand across the cage waiting, Jeremy is
visibly pissed off and focused on hurting a nervous looking
Ryan.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (from outside cage)
Remember fighting is a state of
mind kid, a place where you can
lose yourself and find yourself at
the same time! It's 80% mental and
20% physical! So stay away from
him and out think him!
                                                            
Jeremy comes strait at Ryan practically sprinting, as pissed
as a pit bull, with his head down and arms out shooting for
a double leg take down.
                                                            
Ryan waits patiently timing Jeremy, then lunges forward
leaping with a fierce flying knee landing perfectly at the
same moment Jeremy shoots with all his force smashing his
face against Ryan's knee knocking him unconscious, his body
goes limp and he lands flat on his stomach.
                                                            
The out spoken arena dulls down to a shocking mute.
                                                            
Slobber rolls down his cheek onto the mat.
He is snoring like a baby.
                                                            
The referee runs over waving his hand in the air signifying
the fight is over. Jim sprints over to Ryan hoisting him on
his shoulders in celebration of such a quick victory.
                                                            

108.

                       JIM
      (proud)
God damn kid, you could have at
least broke a sweat!
                                                            
                       RYAN
You said to out think'em, well he
ain't too smart! (chuckles)
                                                            
Ellery and Ryan are having a staring match.
Kelly runs over to Ryan giving him a giant
kiss on the lips. Ryan never breaks eye contact
with her brother, presenting a taunting grin.
                                                            
                       KELLY
      (directed at Ryan)
You did it!
                                                            
Another kiss.
                                                            
 
INT. JIM'S GYM - NIGHT
                                                            
Jim and Ryan playing ping pong, both laughing, having fun,
lost in competition.
                                                            
Back and forth the ball goes over the net hitting the table
then smacking the paddle time after time.
                                                            
                       JIM
Mike Tyson was bullied as a kid,
picked on for being overweight and
shy. A bully tore the head off one
of his pigeons in front of him.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Tyson bite his head off or what?
                                                            
Both sweating like they've been at it for days.
                                                            
                       JIM
Then the scared little boy took up
boxing, met legendary coach Cus
D'amato who trained Tyson to be
who he became, the youngest
HeavyWeight Champion in History.
                                                            
Jim hammers down on the ball hard.
                                                            
The ball flies past Ryan scoring a point.

He retreives the ball, then serves.
                                                            

109.

                       JIM
When Cus died, Tyson became the
biggest bully of all time! The
very thing he feared most!
                                                            
Ryan uses backhand sending the ball back on Jims side of the
table.
                                                            
                       RYAN
Me and my dad used to watch Tyson
smash peoples heads all the time.
                                                            
                       JIM
He won those bouts due to fear, He
got inside his opponents head
psychologically before ever even
stepping foot in the ring!
                                                            
                       RYAN
Can you blame 'em? The guy was a
animal.
                                                            
Jim uses top spin sending the ball back to Ryan.
                                                            
                       JIM
A animal until a 40 to 1 underdog
decided giving it everything he
had, and sticking to his game plan
was bigger then the cost of
losing.
                                                            
Ryan spikes the ball scoring a point.
                                                            
                       RYAN
How'd he do it?
                                                            
Jim serves the ball sending it floating over the net.
                                                            
                       JIM (cont'd)
      (focuses)
He stayed out side circling The
Champ, peppering him with jabs,
his confidence grew as Tyson's
shrunk, giving Iron Mike a
terrible beating! Until the big
bad bully just gave up. (Smiles)
                                                            
Their paddles are moving so fast they can barely see the
ball.
                                                            
                       JIM
That day my friend, Buster
designed the blueprints on how to
beat the bully, never stop, keep
            (MORE)

110.

                       JIM (cont'd)
comin' at 'em and he'll quit, and
he did!
                                                            
The two appear to get very competitive during their game of
table tennis.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (focused on the
       game)
Did he nail him as bad as I'm
whipping you now!
                                                            
                       JIM
      (bait)
Did you know ping pong improves
hand eye coordination, reflexes,
and speed kid...Can you say wax
on, wax off!
                                                            
Ryan just shakes his head and laughs as the ball whizzes
past him.
                                                            
 
INT. FIGHT NIGHT ARENA LOCKER ROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Jim puts tape on Ryan's hands, then slips his gloves over
top, then taping the glove to the wrist.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (skittish)
I gotta be crazy!
                                                            
                       JIM
      (tantalizing)
Question is are you crazy enough?
                                                            
                       JIM
YOU PISSED? YOU WANT REVENGE ON
THIS GUY RIGHT?
                                                            
Working the mitts.
                                                            
                       RYAN
YEAH!
                                                            
Jim drops the mitts and gestures for Ryan to have a seat, he
does, Jim sits next to him.
                                                            
                       JIM
WRONG! Those two things are
excellent motivation tools but if
you take them in a fight they will
cloud your vision and judgment and
            (MORE)

111.

                       JIM (cont'd)
you will self destruct! If you
make smart decisions, and out
think'em you're gonna beat'em!
Even if you walk out of there with
his hand raised, if you give it
your all, you still get the
victory.
                                                            
Jim stands over his friend with a glimmer of hope that he
has taken in more than just the fighting aspect of mixed
martial arts, and understands the importance behind the
philosophical teachings as well.
                                                            
                       RYAN
How do you figure that?
                                                            
                       JIM
To learn to lose is to learn to
liberate yourself from the
hardships of being yourself.
Everything I've taught you has
been about finding yourself
through martial arts and being
able to be who you are, is a hard
enough thing without the pressure
of winning or putting on a show.
You're here fighting so tomorrow
you can be you and that is what
makes you a winner, from here on
out no matter what the out come!
                                                            
Dressing room door opens.
                                                            
                       SOME GUY
It's time guys.
                                                            
Jim puts his hand out helping Ryan get up, and they make
their way to the cage.
                                                            
 
INT. ARENA FIGHT NIGHT - NIGHT
                                                            
The auditorium is full capacity to overflowing with fans,
vendors, and spectators eager to witness their golden boy
"Karates Bad Boy". The herd chanting his name together at a
thunderous volume. Gail and Kelly sit uneasy in the front
row.
                                                            
Ryan stands in the cage looking very stiff, and tense, with
an overwhelmed expression on his face.

He is wearing a long bright red silk robe, with the hood

112.

over his face.

Jim, Coach, and Tommy stand just behind.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (directed at Ryan)
Remember, make him bring the fight
to you, stay away from him, and
smother his punches.
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (Nods and smiles)
MmHmmm. (exhales)
                                                            
                       JIM
You gotta loosen up kid! Relax and
just breathe. You're ready, trust
me.
                                                            
On the other side of the arena, Ellery is walking out of the
dressing room in black and silver Fighting Wolves trunks
with a huge entourage a griming look of a smile, with a
athletic build that looks chiseled out of stone.
                                                            
The crowd is cheering at a low level that begins to build
up, a referee (40's) average height with a muscular build
stops Ellery just short of the cage door, checking his tiny
4oz gloves for illegal contraband, then initials the tape on
his wrist with a marker allowing him to continue his way
into the open cage door.
                                                            
The crowd leaps to their feet, the cheers are deafening.
                                                            
                       ELLERY
      (directed at Ryan)
(MENACING SMILE) It's go time
faggot!
                                                            
Once in, Ellery circles the octagon with his hand raised to
the ceiling, he howls like a wolf with a smile of confidence
thrilling the audience, who then cry out their approvals at
an electric level. He stops at his stool and sits, Sensei
OoKAMI whispers in his ear while Cash and Jeremy smears
Vaseline all over Ellery's face and chest.
                                                            
Ryan's eyes grow more horrified as he edges closer.
                                                            
Jim takes Ryan's robe off from behind.

Hands it to Tommy who drapes it over his arm.
                                                            
Jeremy screams from across the cage.
                                                            

113.

                       JEREMY
IT'S PAYBACK TIME POLOCK!
(LAUGHTER!)
                                                            
The Announcer (60's) clean shaven, wearing a all black
tuxedo and tie.
He stands in the middle of the cage, a microphone is lowered
from the cieling into his hand.

He is holding the microphone with his right hand.
                                                            
                       ANNOUNCER
      (Very Deep Voice)
AND NOW...IT'S TIME!
INTRODUCING FIRST - -
                                                            
With his left hand he points in the direction of Ryan.
                                                            
                       ANNOUNCER (cont'd)
THE CHALLENGER, FIGHTING OUT OF
THE GREEN CORNER, THIS MAN IS A
CUONG Nhu KARATE STYLE FIGHTER. HE
STANDS FIVE FOOT EIGHT INCHES
TALL, AT ONE HUNDRED EIGHTY-FIVE
POUNDS.
WITH A RECORD OF ONE WIN ZERO
LOSSES WITH HIS ONE VICTORY COMING
BY WAY OF KNOCK-OUT!
FIGHTING OUT OF JIM'S CUNG Nhu
MOTOR CITY COBRAS GYM...
RYAN "THE PHYSICIST" MO--HAMMAD!
                                                            
Ryan raises his hand.

Ellery and his friends laugh in a cocky manner.

Even Sensei OoKami cracks a smile.
                                                            
The Announcer points to the other corner at Ellery.
                                                            
                       ANNOUNCER (cont'd)
AND NOW IN THE BLACK CORNER,
INTRODUCING...(SMILES) THE ONE
YOU'VE ALL BEEN WAITING FOR! THIS
MAN IS A MIXED MARTIAL ARTIST, HE
STANDS SIX FOOT THREE INCHES TALL,
AT ONE HUNDRED EIGHTY-FIVE POUNDS.
WITH A COMBINED RECORD OF FOURTEEN
WINS, NO LOSSES ALL COMING BY WAY
OF FIRST ROUND KNOCK-OUT! FIGHTING
OUT OF DETROIT MICHIGAN, FOR THE
FIGHTING WOLVES MIXED MARTIAL ARTS
DOJO!
ELLERY
            (MORE)

114.

                       ANNOUNCER (cont'd)
"THE BIG BAD WOLF"
MAR--ROL!
                                                            
Ellery raises his hands feeding off the crowds electric
energy.

He then points at Ryan with murder in his eyes.
                                                            
                       ANNOUNCER (cont'd)
AND WHEN THE ACTION BEGINS OUR
REFEREE IN CHARGE OF THE ACTION IS
GEORGE HULL!
                                                            
The two rivals meet in the center of the cage, the referee
gives his instructions and signals the two gladiators to
fight.
                                                            
Ellery comes stalking in, Ryan circles the cage, Ellery is
cutting off the ring, stalking, more stalking, Ryan is
backing up.
                                                            
Ellery lands a high kick to Ryan's face.
                                                            
Then another, and another.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (FROM CORNER)
GET OUT OF THERE! WORK YOUR JAB
KID!
                                                            
THE CROWD JUMPS TO THEIR FEET CHEERING!(S.O.)
                                                            
Ellery fires a flurry of punches landing an uppercut to
Ryan's jaw. His knees buckle, he beats back the attack with
jabs, then side steps out of danger.
                                                            
Ellery drops his guard, going strait at Ryan.
                                                            
(V.O.) JIM SCREAMING!
WORK THE JAB!
                                                            
Ryan slides forward landing multiple leg kicks, sneaking in
a strait right to Ellery's cheek snapping his head back,
then circling back out of striking distance.
                                                            
                                         CROWD CHEERS
DEAFENING !
                                                            
Ellery dashes forward lunging with a flying round house kick
to the chest, knocking Ryan's back pinned up against the
cage. Ellery goes after Ryan fast relentlessly clinching the

115.

back of Ryan's neck with both hands, nailing him with an
explosion of vicious rotating knees to the midsection.
                                                            
FANS APPLAUD WILDLY!(S.O.)
                                                            
BELL SOUNDS. (S.O.)
                                                            
Ryan gasping for air, staggers to his corner, drenched in
sweat, overwhelmed, and confused, dropping down on his
stool, looking across the cage at Ellery and his corner
laughing, chattering, and cheering. Jim slams a wet sponge
sponge down on Ryan's head.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (focused)
YOU GOTTA STAY AWAY, HE'S KILLING
YOU WITH THOSE HIGH KICKS! HE
THROWS ANOTHER HIGH KICK, YOU
SHOOT THE GOD DAMN BOOT ON HIS
ASS!- You're doing good, listen
he's frustrated and stupid
dropping his hands like that! He
does it again you out think him
and pepper the shit out of him,
then get the hell out of there!
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (justify)
HE'S TOO FAST, HE'S -
                                                            
                       JIM
ANTICIPATE THEN SMOTHER HIS DAMN
PUNCHES KID!
AND DON'T BE AFRAID TO PUT YOUR
GUARD UP! DON'T YOU GIVE UP UNTIL
THAT THIRD BELL SOUNDS OR I SAY
YOUR DONE! GOT IT KID!
                                                            
                       RYAN
      (standing up)
I GOT IT!
                                                            
ROUND 2
                                                            
Ryan stands with his guard up circling the cage, Ellery is
cutting off the ring, Ryan changes direction, same thing cut
off, Ellery moves in edging closer.
                                                            
The fighters circle trading jabs, Ellery springs off a high
kick, and unpacks a powerful double hook.
                                                            

116.

Ryan blocks, dodges, and counter punches, catching Ellery
hard with strait right, left hook, leg kick, then dancing
away.
                                                            
Ellery staggers back, then shoots for a double leg take
down.
                                                            
Ryan side steps out of the way, landing a left uppercut,
hook combo to his opponents nose. Ellery offers a tiny smile
with bloody slobber spilling from his nose and mouth, goes
after Ryan catching him hard with a high kick, landing a
goodnight hook to the ribcage, followed by a whirl wind of
front, side, and roundhouse kicks.
                                                            
THE CROWD GROWS WILD AND CRAZY MOSTLY BOOING!(S.O.)
                                                            
                       SENSEI OOKAMI
      (ANXIOUS SCREAMS)
HE'S FINISHED! DON'T LET HIM TO
HIS FEET, MOUNT HIM!
                                                            
Ryan goes crashing to the ground, Ellery circles him like a
shark looking for an opening to mount, Ryan uses kicks from
his back and side to fend off Ellery giving himself enough
time and distance to make it back up to his feet, never
taking his eyes off Ellery for a second.
                                                            
AN EERIE SILENCE FROM SHOCKED SPECTATORS.(S.O.)
                                                            
Ellery fires a powerful high kick at Ryan's head. He slips
underneath the big kick and shoots the boot taking Ellery
down hard to his back.
                                                            
Some begin to applaud Ryan's efforts. (S.O.)
                                                            
BELL SOUNDS. (S.O.)
                                                            
Ryan's stool.
                                                            
                       JIM
      (serious)
YOU'RE DOING GREAT KID! YOU WON
THAT ROUND, IT'S TIED UP. YOU TAKE
THIS ONE, YOU GOT'EM! NOW HAVE YOU
DONE EVERYTHING YOU CAME HERE TO
DO?
                                                            
                       RYAN
Not quite.
                                                            
                       JIM
OKAY! FULL SPEED, GIVE ME 5MINUTES
OF ALL OUT, BALLS TO THE WALL KID!
THE BIG BAD WOLF IS KNOCKING AT
            (MORE)

117.

                       JIM (cont'd)
YOUR DOOR, NOW GET OUT THERE AND
KICK HIS ASS!
                                                            
FINAL ROUND.
                                                            
Ryan looks across the cage waving Ellery to come over and
fight.
                                                            
The two scrappers go right at each other in the center of
the cage with an explosion of heart, guts, honor and
determination, giving one another a terrible beating,
exchanging blow for blow, catching the gladiator in front of
him with hard stunning rights, devastating lefts, powerful
kicks, trading shots, both martial artist coming strong,
landing solidly, digging hooks, effective combinations,
throwing a barrage of thumping kicks, sliding forward, and
back, pivoting, and moving, slipping, ducking, dodging,
running from the pain, the two battlers nearly collapsing
from exhaustion after mastering the courage, heart, and
strength, both warriors desperately unleashing a last minute
surge of aggressive combinations looking to seal the deal.
                                                            
THE BELL SOUNDS. (S.O.)
                                                            
The two warriors still swinging for the fences, the referee
steps in between peeling them off each other, then
forcefully tearing them apart.
                                                            
The crowd erupts in a blast of clapping, cheering,
whistling, chanting, and screams of fulfillment. (S.O.)
                                                            
The two battered teens meet in the center of the ring for
the announcement, the referee stands in between the bloodied
competitors holding both combatants by a wrist, anxiously
awaiting the outcome of their fate, leaving it all in the
hands of the judges decision.
                                                            
THE CROWD JUMPS TO THEIR FEET CHEERING! (S.O.)
                                                            
The announcer grabs the microphone as it is lowered down
from the top of the cage, in his other hand are score cards.
                                                            
THE DEAFENING SOUNDS GO MUTE IN ANTICIPATION OF
ANNOUNCEMENT.
                                                            
THE ENTIRE ARENA IS AT A STAND STILL. (S.O.)
                                                            
Jim hides his nerves, and looks at his pal with a expression
of pride, and approval. Then giving him a nod of reassurance
that everything is going to be okay.
                                                            

118.

                       RYAN
      (joking with Jim)
Hey it's over, just Relax and
breathe.
                                                            
The announcer blows on the microphone making sure it's on.
(S.O.)
                                                            
                       ANNOUNCER
LADIES & GENTLEMEN WE GO TO YOUR
JUDGES SCORE CARDS AND HAVE A
SPLIT DECISION...JUDGE #1 HAS THE
BOUT 29 TO 30 ELLERY.
JUDGE #2 HAS THE BOUT 29 TO 30
RYAN.
AND JUDGE #3 HAS THE BOUT 29 TO 30
FOR YOUR WINNER!....
                                                            
                                         FADE OUT:
                                                            
 
INT. GRADUATION SPEECH - DAY
                                                            
Thousands of parents, friends, and faculty pile the
gymnasium dressed in their finest suits and dresses,
programs in hand elbow to elbow on wooden bleachers for the
graduation ceremony of hundreds of senior students class of
2010, all dressed proudly in cap and gown as they pass by
Principal Whitley greeting them for the last time as a
student with a firm hand shake and a copy of their diploma,
they then go to their steel fold out seats awaiting the
speech.
                                                            
                       GAIL
Look at you, you look so handsome.
                                                            
                       RYAN
I've never been so nervous in my
entire life.
                                                            
Jim slaps Ryan on the back.
                                                            
                       JIM
You'll be great, just another day.
                                                            
Ryan walks up to the podium.
                                                            
She gets her camera ready taking a few quick shots.
                                                            
                       GAIL
I can't believe my baby is all
grown up, I was so surprised when
he told me he was valedictorian.
You know, he's the first one in
            (MORE)

119.

                       GAIL (cont'd)
our family to go to college.
                                                            
                       JIM
I wasn't surprised at all, the
first day we met he had all of his
books with him to study.
                                                            
Ryan clears his throat.
                                                            
She nudges Jim with her elbow, then gives her absolute
attention to her son.
                                                            
                       GAIL
Shhhh...He's starting.
                                                            
                       RYAN
GRADUATION IS A TIME TO THANK
THOSE WHO HELPED YOU MAKE IT
THROUGH THE TOUGH TIMES. YOUR
PARENTS, TEACHERS, SIBLINGS, GIRL
FRIENDS, AND MAYBE EVEN A COACH.
                                                            
Ryan looks at Jim with that same look of gratitude.
                                                            
                       RYAN (cont'd)
BUT MOSTLY YOUR FRIENDS, I'M HERE
TO TELL YOU FIRST HAND THAT BEING
A FRIEND IS THE BEST GIFT YOU CAN
GIVE SOMEONE...
                                                            
Ryan smiles at Jim.
                                                            
                       RYAN (cont'd)
LET ME TELL ALL, ABOUT THE DAY I
MET MY BEST FRIEND. IT WAS A
FRIDAY, AND I PLANNED ON KILLING
MYSELF THAT WEEKEND. I CLEANED OUT
MY ENTIRE LOCKER, SO THAT MY
MOTHER WOULDN'T HAVE TO DO IT
LATER.
                                                            
Ryan looked hard at the man, a single tear fell down the
boy's cheek.
                                                            
Ellery, Cash, and Jeremy slide down their seats brought on
by shame, dishonor, and guilt.
                                                            
Tears spill from Gail's blinking eyes but she remains
silent.
                                                            

120.

                       RYAN (cont'd)
I WAS BEING BEATEN SO BADLY BY A
GROUP OF BULLIES, I COULDN'T WAIT
TO GET HOME IN SHAME TO TAKE MY
OWN LIFE. THAT IS WHEN THIS MAN
SHOWED UP, AND SAVED ME. HE TOOK
THE TIME TO TEACH ME MARTIAL ARTS,
GIVING ME THE KNOWLEDGE TO
EMOTIONALLY DEFEND MYSELF, BUT IT
WAS HIS FRIENDSHIP THAT GAVE ME A
REASON TO GO ON LIVING.
                                                            
Ryan's mom weeps uncontrollably as she stares at the man
sitting next to her.
                                                            
Ryan points at Jim sitting in the front row.
                                                            
                       RYAN (cont'd)
PARENTS, FRIENDS EVEN ONE
TRAUMATIC INSTANCE CAN CRIPPLE A
YOUNG MIND INTO A WALL OF DESPAIR.
500,000 TEENAGERS TRY TO KILL
THEMSELVES EVERY YEAR 5,000
SUCCEED. HOW MANY OF THOSE WERE
DUE TO ENDLESS BULLYING? AND HOW
MANY COULD HAVE BEEN AVOIDED BY
JUST ONE PERSON, MAYBE HELPING
THEM CARRY HOME THEIR BOOKS DURING
CONVERSATION? I WANT YOU ALL TO
KNOW TODAY, THAT NUMBER IS RIGHT
UP THERE WITH CANCER AND HOMICIDE.
LUCKILY FOR ME, FRIENDSHIP WAS ALL
I NEEDED, TO REPAIR MY BROKEN
HEART, AND MIND. AND IT'S ALL
BECAUSE OF THAT MAN, IF IT WASN'T
FOR HIM, I WOULDN'T BE HERE TODAY.
                                                            
Ryan's mom forces Jim to stand.
                                                            
                       RYAN
THANK YOU JIM! AND HAPPY
GRADUATION CLASS OF 2010!
                                                            
There is a long unnerving eerie silence in the crowd.
                                                            
The entire crowd jumps to their feet giving Jim a very
emotional standing ovation.
                                                            
The graduates throw their caps to the sky!
                                                            
                                         DISOLVE TO
FLASHBACK:
                                                            
 

121.

INT. ARENA FIGHT NIGHT - NIGHT
                                                            
The two stand in the center of the cage, bloodied and
beaten. Both awaiting the outcome from the judges score
cards.

The crowd is dead silent in anticipation to the outstanding
too close to call out come.
                                                            
                       ANNOUNCER
LADIES & GENTLEMEN WE GO TO YOUR
JUDGES SCORE CARDS AND HAVE A
SPLIT DECISION...JUDGE #1 HAS THE
BOUT 29 TO 30 ELLERY.
JUDGE #2 HAS THE BOUT 29 TO 30
RYAN.
AND JUDGE #3 HAS THE BOUT 29 TO 30
FOR YOUR WINNER!....
                                                            
Ryan looks at Jim then closes his eyes.
                                                            
                       ANNOUNCER
And still UNDEFEATED!!!!!"THE BIG
BAD WOLF" ELLERY MARROL!
                                                            
The referee jerks Ellery's hand victorious in the air.

Ryan extends his hand to shake.

The crowd applauds Ryans efforts.

Ellery looks long and hard at his hand, before smacking it
away.

The crowd shows their unapreciation of Ellery's poor
sportsmanship by screaming, throwing popcorn buckets,
and beer cups at him.

Ellery responds with a smile and a double middle finger
gesture to the crowd.

Ryan turns to be happily greeted by Jim, Coach, Tommy, Gail,
and Kelly.

They shower him with pats on the head and back, hugs, kisses
and tears.
                                                            


THE END


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From Tim Dutton Date 12/28/2010 ***1/2
Great characters, great flow, it appears you based it a little on reality or you did a lot of research. I would love to see this as a movie.

From Orbin Walcott Date 12/24/2010 **1/2
As a friend and fellow writer, I'm gonna give my most honest review I've ever given. I thoroughly enjoyed the CONCEPT, but I honestly had a hard time liking the STORY itself. It didn't feel very clear and cohesive for the most part. I will agree with what the first two reviewers said - you do have a talent with scripting the action at hand. I was really able to picture the fights, especially the final one as it seemed so vibrant in my mind's eye. And while there were some great parts going, some of the dialogue seemed a bit forced and unnatural at times. Some things I will point out: A) Ryan seemed to go through a bit of an identity crisis; I swear there were at least two moments where his last name had changed, and I couldn't tell if he was arab or caucasian. Also, it was really hard for me to care for him for the most part because I couldn't picture him as a victim of torment rather than circumstances that I didn't really believe that he wanted to change. Out of the antagonists, Ellery had some of my interest, but the rest were more annoying than anything. HOWEVER your best character was certainly Jim. While most of the main characters seemed a bit cartoony to me, I did invest more of my interest in Jim. A lot of his lessons in the script I feel I could apply to my own life even! I appreciate Ryan's speech at the end - it's something people needed to know. The only thing is that this script wasn't able to hook me in completely until around Page 80 when you were setting up the finale. I can honestly say man that if you go back to the drawing board with this one, and refine it a little more, this has a lot of potential to become a hit for sure!

From Dave Krause Date 12/20/2010 ***1/2
Really liked this script! Great to see a drama, with good dialogue, that also incorporates some MMA/action sequences.

From Brandon Addison Date 12/18/2010 ****
This was a excellent script, I really enjoyed it. You seem to have a natural talent with making your stage action flow equally with your dialogue. The characters you have created, are lifelike and jump off the page to me. Just some side notes with formatting your screenplay, just make sure when you first introduce a character that their name is in all caps, and remember not to use parenthesis when giving a persons exact age, they should be seperated by commas. Your stage action still blows my mind as you have a excellent craft of painting a picture, your screenplay would make like easier for any director or producer like me. Again very good job, and the formatting rules you learn as you go along so don't make a big deal about it, just find materials that will point you in the right direction. Thanks again for sharing this with all of us on scriptbuddy.


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