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First Period
by Jason Presutti (kingofsherwood@yahoo.com)

Rated: R   Genre: Comedy   User Review: *
This is a pilot episode to an untitled series I am writing. If anyone has any feedback or wants to contact me, email me at kingofsherwood@yahoo.com. Thanks.


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FADE IN:

INT. HALLWAY - DAY
                                                            
Mike is walking down the main hallway. There are students
going through their lockers, getting ready for the first day
of school.
                                                            
                       MIKE
Another summer has come to an end.
Back to school for another fun
filled year of learning. At least
that is what they will try and
have you believe, but we all know
different! High school isn't
about all the stuff you learn in
the classroom. It is about you
and what you do. Here in good old
Lyndhurst High School we have all
kinds of students. You have your
jocks, your nerds, your
cheerleaders, your musicians, your
freaks, and so on. Now it is time
for you to meet a group of
students just doing what they do.
                                                            
Mike walks past Larry. Larry is looking into his locker.
There are students walking back and forth throughout the
hallway. Eric, walks up to Larry.
                                                            
                       ERIC
Hey man, what's up?
                                                            
Eric extends his hand to shake Larry's hand. They do a
secret handshake.
                                                            
                       LARRY
What's going on?
                                                            
Larry closes his locker, turns and faces Eric, and leans his
body on his locker.
                                                            
                       ERIC
I can't believe the summer is over
already. I feel like we just left
this place.
      (Pauses and looks
       around.)
Next week I'll get my license and
pick you up in the morning.
                                                            

2.

                       LARRY
That beats walking. Ya know dude,
if you took some time off from
work in the summer, you just might
have enjoyed it yo.
                                                            
Rich walks over and stops to talk.
                                                            
                       RICH
Enjoy what?
                                                            
Rich does the secret handshake with Eric, then with Larry.
                                                            
                       LARRY
Nothing. Why'd you miss practice
yesterday dude?
                                                            
                       RICH
I had to go to the doctor. I told
Coach the other day.
                                                            
                       LARRY
Do you have a note from your
Mommy?
                                                            
                       RICH
No, I have one from yours. With a
thank you note saying she never
had it so good.
                                                            
                       LARRY
Anyway, we ran our asses off
yesteday.
                                                            
                       RICH
The cycle?
                                                            
                       LARRY
Yeah.
                                                            
                       RICH
A damn good practice to miss.
                                                            
                       LARRY
You aint kiddng, yo.
                                                            
                       ERIC
What's the cycle?
                                                            
                       RICH
You run until you can't run
anymore.
                                                            

3.

                       LARRY
Then you run another mile or two.
We ran so much yesterday he gave
us today off from practice.
                                                            
Brenda is standing at her locker, five lockers down on the
other side of the hallway. She turns and sees Megan walking
past Eric, Rich and Larry.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Megan. Wait up.
                                                            
Megan stops and Brenda catches up to her. They continue to
walk down the hallway.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Hey B. What's going on?
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Not much. How was your Labor Day
weekend?
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Good. I didn't want to come back.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Another Jersey shore romance?
                                                            
                       MEGAN
No. Just, like, another friend,
that if he lived closer, you never
know.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
How did you meet him?
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I was laying on the beach, trying
to enjoy, like, the last rays of
the summer, when a volleyball
comes over to me. I picked it up
and a hottie came up to get it. We
spent, like, pretty much the rest
of the weekend together talking.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
And nothing happened?
                                                            
                       MEGAN
No, just alot of talking.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Not even one kiss?
                                                            

4.

                       MEGAN
There was no chance. We were
never really alone enough. He was
down there with his buds.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
You could always hook up down the
shore again.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Doubt it, but you never know. It
was Labor Day weekend, the end of
the summer. Besides, he is from
Philly or somewhere around there.
Too far for anything to really
happen.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
What about John?
                                                            
                       MEGAN
What about him? We are only,
like, seeing each other. It
isn't anything serious, at least
not yet.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Oh. Are you sure he feels the
same way?
                                                            
                       MEGAN
We never talked about not seeing
other people, so as far as I am
concerned I can both still see
other guys.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
I didn't get that from him when
him and Chip stopped over the
other night.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Really? Hmm. He told me that
Chip made him take him to see you.
So what's the deal with you and
Chip?
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Nothing yet.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
      (acting surprised)
Yet?
                                                            

5.

                       BRENDA
Yeah yet. Like, I think something
is gonna happen, but we haven't
had the chance to be alone
together yet. Maybe if the four
of us hang out and you two go off
somewhere, like, you never know.
                                                            
Megan opens the door to the Band Room. The Band Room is set
up with the concert band rehearsal area set up with chairs
and music stands when you walk into the band room. Past
that is choir risers. There are two rooms off of that main
room. The first room is the Mr. Capella's office and the
second room is a lounge area that has all of the
instruments, uniforms and couches for the band members to
sit on.
                                                            
IN THE BAND ROOM
                                                            
Matt and Bob are standing talking to each other in front of
the choir risers.
                                                            
                       BOB
What time is the party going to
start?
                                                            
                       MATT
Whenever people show up. My
parents are going away Saturday
morning and won't be home until
Sunday afternoon or night.
                                                            
                       BOB
I'll be there.
                                                            
Kate walks up to Bob and Matt.
                                                            
                       KATE
Hey Bob, can I talk to you?
                                                            
                       BOB
Yeah.
      (He looks to Matt.)
I'll talk to you later.
                                                            
                       MATT
Alright bro. Later.
                                                            
Matt walks into the lounge area.
                                                            
                       BOB
What's up?
                                                            

6.

                       KATE
I think Tony is cheating on me.
                                                            
                       BOB
He hasn't even been gone for a
week yet.
                                                            
                       KATE
Yeah, but still.
                                                            
                       BOB
You need to relax. You have to
trust him alittle.
                                                            
                       KATE
I wouldn't worry so much if I had
someone watching him, like he has
you watching me.
                                                            
                       BOB
Still I wouldn't worry about it.
                                                            
The bell rings. Mr. Capella walk in the rehearsal area from
his office.
                                                            
                       MR. CAPELLA
Hello everyone. Sit in your seat.
I hope you all enjoyed your
summer, because now it is time to
work.
                                                            
 
INT. COMPUTER CLASS - DAY
                                                            
Bob walks into a classroom. The classroom has tables with
computers on top of them. The tables go in the direction
from the door to the window. There are four rows of
tables. There is one row against each wall and two back to
back in the center of the classroom. Each row is made up of
two tables. Each table has three computers on it. Bob
walks down between the center row and the row against the
left wall. He sits in the last seat in the center row, by
the windows. Megan walks in and sits opposite of Bob.
                                                            
                       BOB
      (Awkwardly.)
Hey.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Hi.
                                                            
Neil comes and sits next to Bob.
                                                            

7.

                       NEAL
Hey there little brother.
                                                            
                       BOB
      (Embarrassed)
Hi Neal.
                                                            
                       NEAL
Who are you talking to over there?
                                                            
                       BOB
Neal, this is Megan. Megan, my
twin brother Neal.
                                                            
Megan extends her hand to shake Neal's hand. He takes her
hand and kisses it.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Nice to meet you.
                                                            
                       NEAL
The pleasure is all mine.
                                                            
                       BOB
I didn't know you were in this
class. Why didn't Mom tell me?
                                                            
                       NEAL
      (Smacks Bob in the
       back of the head.)
Because I am not in this class,
dumbass. I was passing by and saw
you in here and wanted to bust
your balls, stupid. Gotta go now.
Bye Megan.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Bye.
                                                            
Neal gets up and walks out of the room.
                                                            
                       BOB
Sorry about that.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
He seems nice. (Slight pause.) I
never realized that you two were
brothers, let alone twins.
                                                            
                       BOB
Yeah. Well, we are fraternal
twins, not identical, so I can see
why you would think that.
                                                            

8.

                       MEGAN
Your names are weird though.
                                                            
                       BOB
Weird? How?
                                                            
                       MEGAN
You know, Neal and Bob. Well,
sounds kind of funny.
                                                            
                       BOB
Oh yeah. Well, my Dad said that
is what my Mom should have done
and they wouldn't have had us. He
only says that when we fight or
piss him off.
      (Megan laughs.)
It took me so long to get what he
meant.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
How long has he been saying that?
                                                            
                       BOB
As long as I can remember.
                                                            
The bell rings and Mr. Hudson walks in.
                                                            
 
INT. GYM CLASS - DAY
                                                            
Matt, Kate, Bob and Larry sitting together in the bleachers.
Mike is sitting on the opposite side of the bleachers.
There are many other students sitting around in the gym
bleachers. The gym teachers are standing on the gym floor.
There is one male and one female gym teacher. The male
teacher's name is Mr. Johnson. He is dressed in a school
sweatshirt and sweat pants. The female gym teacher is Miss
Gibson. She is dressed in a blouse and long skirt. They
start calling out their attendance roster. As they call
each name, the corresponding student walks down the
bleachers and lines up in rows on the gym floor.
                                                            
                       KATE
I hate gym class.
                                                            
                       LARRY
Why?
                                                            

9.

                       KATE
I don't like having to change into
my gym clothes, having to run
around and get all sweaty for
nothing.
                                                            
                       MR. JOHNSON (O.C.)
Michael Ullnick
                                                            
                       BOB
I'd rather do this than go to
class.
                                                            
                       KATE
I'd rather just go home and like
watch TV.
                                                            
                       MATT
Dude, I just want to start
changing in your locker room.
                                                            
                       KATE
I bet you would. It's not what
you imagine it to be.
                                                            
                       MATT
Maybe, but I wouldn't mind finding
out.
                                                            
                       MISS GIBSON (O.C.)
Caitlin Smith
                                                            
                       LARRY
Yeah, I hear that, dude.
                                                            
                       MATT
Are you guys coming to my party
Saturday night.
                                                            
                       LARRY
You know it. Your parties are
sick as hell.
                                                            
                       KATE
Yeah I'll be there.
                                                            
                       MR. JOHNSON
Kate Johnson
                                                            
                       KATE
That's me.
                                                            

10.

Kate gets up and walks down the bleachers and goes into her
row. The gym teachers continue to call out student's names.
                                                            
                       MATT
      (When Kate gets to
       the bottom of the
       bleachers. Turns
       to Bob and Larry.)
Man, What I would do to her.
                                                            
                       BOB
She's spoken for dude.
                                                            
                       LARRY
Yeah, she's still with Tony.
                                                            
                       MATT
So what bro. She's here and he's
there. Besides, we all know Tony,
do you really think he is gonna be
faithful to her being so far away?
None of that matters anyway. You
have to remember one thing that I
have going for me and he doesn't
have.
                                                            
                       LARRY
What's that?
                                                            
                       MATT
I'm Matt (slight pause) O'Brien.
                                                            
                       MR. JOHNSON
Robert Leonardo.
                                                            
                       BOB
Later.
                                                            
Bob gets up and walks down the bleachers to his spot on the
floor.
                                                            
                       MATT
      (To Larry after
       Bob gets to his
       spot.)
Dude what's his problem? She's
gonna do what she's gonna do.
                                                            
                       LARRY
Yeah, but Tony did ask him to keep
an eye on her for him.
                                                            

11.

                       MATT
So what.
                                                            
                       MISS GIBSON
Matt O'Brien.
                                                            
Matt gets up and starts to walk down the bleachers. As he
gets down to the bottom of the bleachers he trips on the
last step. As he is falling, he puts his hands out to brace
his fall, and touches Miss Gibson by her hips, grabbing and
pulling down her skirt and underwear. Miss Gibson stands
there in shock for a moment. He looks up and his head is
even with her crotch. He notices what is in front of him
and sticks out his tounge and shakes it up and down.
                                                            
                       MATT
LLLLLL.
                                                            
Most of the students are laughing. She then pulls up her
skirt and underwear.
                                                            
                       MISS GIBSON
I hope you enjoyed the show
O'Brien. Now get up and get in
line.
                                                            
                       MATT
Clean shaven, I like that. Anytime
you need help shaving, you know
where to find Matt (slight pause)
O'Brien.
                                                            
Matt gets up and starts walking to his spot on the floor.
                                                            
                       MR. JOHNSON
That's it! O'Brien go to the
office.
                                                            
Matt walks out of the gym.
                                                            
 
INT. HISTORY CLASS - DAY
                                                            
Larry, Rich, Brenda, Mike, Scott and Paul are in this class.
They are sitting towards the back of the classroom in the
two rows furthest away from the windows. Brenda is sitting
in front of Larry. Scott is sitting behind Larry. Rich is
sittin in the row next to Larry in the seat. Paul is
sitting behind Rich. Joey is sitting in the front row,
right in front of the Mr. Doyle's desk.
                                                            

12.

                       MR. DOYLE
Are there any questions? (slight
pause) Then, you may have the
rest of the period to yourselves.
                                                            
Mr. Doyle sits down at his desk.
                                                            
                       PAUL
Did you hear that O'Brien felt up
Miss Gibson in front of the whole
gym class?
                                                            
                       RICH
That's not what I heard bro. I
heard he went down on her until
Mr. Johnson threw him out.
                                                            
                       SCOTT
Yeah, only O'Brien could get
suspended on the first day of
school. I wish I was there to see
him do that to that dyke.
                                                            
                       LARRY
Dude I was there, and he didn't
touch her anywhere, except for her
skirt when he fell.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
      (Turns around.)
Did you say that O'Brien got
suspended already?
                                                            
                       SCOTT
Yeah, it's a school record.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
      (Laughing. She
       then looks at
       Larry.)
You are in this class too.
      (She ten looks at
       Paul.)
You too? What are you guys like
stalking me or something?
                                                            
                       PAUL
Please, like I want to be in any
class with you.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Who are you again?
                                                            

13.

                       PAUL
Your worst nightmare.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
No serously, I don't know who you
are.
                                                            
                       LARRY
That is Paul. I thought having
you in gym class the last few
years was bad enough. Now I have
to see your face all day but gym.
Another fucking reason to hate
school this year.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Feeling's mutual.
                                                            
                       SCOTT
I hope O'Brien's party is still on
this weekend.
                                                            
                       RICH
It's Matt (slight pause) O'Brien,
the party will still be on.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
When is O'Brien having a party?
                                                            
                       RICH
Saturday night. Why you wanna go?
                                                            
                       BRENDA
I might stop by. I've heard about
O'Brien's parties, but never been
to one.
                                                            
                       SCOTT
You should go. It'll be a good
time.
                                                            
                       RICH
Yeah. You should go Bren.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Ok. Maybe I will.
                                                            
 
INT. BAND ROOM AFTER SCHOOL - DAY
                                                            

14.

IN MR. CAPELLA'S OFFICE
                                                            
Mr. Capella is sitting at his desk in his office. He is
leaning back in his chair and has his feet on his desk. Kate
and Eric are sitting in chairs facing Mr. Capella.
                                                            
                       MR. CAPELLA
Now you two are seniors. I
remember when you two first
started out as freshmen. Boy have
you two come along way.
                                                            
                       ERIC
Yeah. Seems like so long ago.
                                                            
                       KATE
But it also seems just like
yesterday.
                                                            
                       MR. CAPELLA
      (Takes his legs
       off of his desk
       and sits up in
       his chair.)
You guys remember how awkward it
was when you started here and had
to learn how to march and get used
to how we do things here?
                                                            
                       KATE
Yeah. Like it was rough in the
beginning, but I was able to
adjust quickly.
                                                            
                       MR. CAPELLA
Why do you think that was?
                                                            
                       KATE
I don't know. You don't make a
big deal about marching. But Jane
was a big help, she made me feel
comfortable. I knew I didn't have
to be perfect, but just try my
best. That, like, made it easier
for me to feel comfortable. The
next thing you knew I was doing
just as well as everyone else.
                                                            
                       ERIC
Yeah, Dave helped me out with that
too.
                                                            

15.

                       MR. CAPELLA
Yeah. That was a great senior
class. Anyway, I hope that you
two can help out the freshmen and
eighth graders this year like Jane
and Dave helped you.
                                                            
                       ERIC
No problem Mr. C. I think it is
something that we already do.
                                                            
                       KATE
Yeah. I'll do it.
                                                            
                       ERIC
      (Turns around and
       looks at the
       clock behind him.)
I gotta go. I don't want to be
late for work.
                                                            
                       MR. CAPELLA
Ok. See ya.
                                                            
                       ERIC
Later.
                                                            
Eric gets up and walks out of Mr. Capella's office into the
band room.
                                                            
                       MR. CAPELLA
Do you have anything else that you
want to talk about?
                                                            
                       KATE
No. I'm just waiting for Bob. I
told him I would give him a ride
home from school.
                                                            
                       MR. CAPELLA
Leonardo?
                                                            
                       KATE
Yeah.
                                                            
                       MR. CAPELLA
I didn't know you two were going
out.
                                                            
                       KATE
We're not. We're just friends.
                                                            

16.

                       MR. CAPELLA
Do you want to take out your
clarinet and practice?
                                                            
                       KATE
      (The bell rings.)
I would but Bob should be coming
in at any minute.
                                                            
                       MR. CAPELLA
Ok. No problem.
                                                            
                       KATE
See you tomorrow Mr. C.
                                                            
Kate gets up and walks into the rehearsal part of the
bandroom.
                                                            
IN THE REHEARSAL PART OF THE BAND ROOM
                                                            
                       MR. CAPELLA (O.C.)
See ya.
                                                            
Rich and Bob walk into the band room.
                                                            
                       RICH
What time do you want to start
dude?
                                                            
                       BOB
I think Scott and Larry will be
there about 3:30.
                                                            
                       RICH
      (As they get to
       Kate.)
I'll be there at 3:30 then.
                                                            
                       KATE
Where are you going?
                                                            
                       BOB
We got a stickball game today.
                                                            
                       KATE
Can I come?
                                                            
                       RICH
I don't see why not. It is gonna
be like us, Scott and Larry.
                                                            
                       BOB
We are playing at Columbus School.
                                                            

17.

                       KATE
I guess it is a good thing I got a
car.
                                                            
Megan walks into the band room.
                                                            
                       BOB
      (To Megan)
Hey.
                                                            
Megan looks up at Bob and walks into a music stand, which
falls down and knocks over a row of music stands. The last
one falls and Bob catches it.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
      (Embarrassed. She
       picks up the
       music stands that
       hit the floor.)
Hi. Sorry about that.
                                                            
                       BOB
      (He helps Megan
       pick up the music
       stands.)
No harm done.
                                                            
                       RICH
Can you give me a ride home too,
Kate?
                                                            
                       KATE
Yeah let's go.
                                                            
                       BOB
See you tomorrow.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Bye.
                                                            
Megan walks into Mr. Capella's office, while Rich, Bob and
Kate walk out of the band room.
                                                            

18.

IN MR. CAPELLA'S OFFICE
                                                            
                       MR. CAPELLA
      (On the phone.
       Puts his hand
       over the mouth
       part of the
       phone.)
Megan. I'm glad you could make
it. Give me a minute. Sit down.
      (He points to the
       chair in front of
       his desk with the
       hand that was
       over the
       receiver. Megan
       sits down.)
Ok. I've gotta go. See ya.
      (He hangs up the
       phone.)
Sorry about that.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
It's ok.
                                                            
                       MR. CAPELLA
I just wanted to talk to you about
what you are in for by doing both
the color guard, on the field, and
playing with the band, in the
bleachers.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I can do it. I've done color
guard for a year, so now I just
have to play in the stnads instead
of just sitting with the girls.
                                                            
                       MR. CAPELLA
I'm not worried about durring the
games. I know you will do fine.
But you have to remember to bring
your instrument and your flag.
Also, you will still need to be at
every color guard practice after
school, even though you are lining
up with the band every morining
while they practice.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I know. I figure I should learn
the routine quicker by being at
both practices.
                                                            

19.

                       MR. CAPELLA
I was just gonna say that.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Great minds think alike.
                                                            
                       MR. CAPELLA
Well if you have any problems,
just let me know. Ok. Let's get
to practice.
                                                            
Mr. Capella and Megan get up from their seats and walk out
of Mr. Capella's office.
                                                            
 
INT. PRACTICE FIELD - DAY
                                                            
A group of football players are standing on the practice
field talking to each other.
                                                            
                       JASON
Do you think any of us will play
JV or Varsity?
                                                            
                       PETE
You might, at least JV. Probably
backup QB if not start there.
                                                            
                       DANNY
Coach asked me to try out for
kicker and punter.
                                                            
                       MARC
When are you supposed to do that?
                                                            
                       DANNY
Today or tomorrow.
                                                            
Mr. Johnson walks over.
                                                            
                       MR. JOHNSON
We have been scouting you freshman
for a few years now. Many of you
will only play with the freshman
team. Some of you will play with
the freshman and JV team. You are
the future of this program. Work
your asses off and hopefully you
will be able to help out in the
future. Mc Mullin come with me,
the rest of you stay here and wait
for your coaches.
                                                            

20.

Mr. Johnson and Danny leave the rest.
                                                            
                       MR. JOHNSON
Are you ready Mc Mullin?
                                                            
                       DANNY
I guess Coach.
                                                            
                       MR. JOHNSON
If you want to play varsity, you
better be.
                                                            
 
INT. BRENDA'S ROOM - DAY
                                                            
Her bed if facing the televison. She has a desk with a
computer on it right next to her closet door, next to her
bed. Brenda is sitting at her desk looking at the computer
monitor. She is on Myspace.com. The phone is on her desk
with her cellphone right next to it. The phone rings. She
picks up the phone her cellphone and looks at the caller ID,
and the phone still rings. She then puts down the cellphone
and picks up the regular phone. The screen splits when
Brenda picks up the phone. Brenda is on one side and Megan
is on the other side.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Hello.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Hi B. What are you doing?
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Nothing. Just checking myspace.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I didn't see you in the band room
after school today.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Yeah. Umm. I was so pissed. It
seemed like every class I had
today, damn Larry Stone was in,
and some other kid too. I can't
remember his name.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Oh. What's wrong with them?
                                                            

21.

                       BRENDA
Larry is so annoying. Like no one
really likes him. I don't know
the other kid, but I was just so
pissed.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Why would Larry be in the band
room anyway? He isn't in band.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
I know, but sometimes he is there
with Bob, Rich and Eric. I wish I
had more classes with Rich,
instead of Larry.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Why?
                                                            
                       BRENDA
He isn't so annoying and is easier
on the eyes.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Yeah, he's ok.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
I hooked up with him last year.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
You did? I don't remember you two
going out.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
It was at a party. We were both
drinking a little, well at least I
was. He was sitting on the couch,
watching TV, and I sat next to
him. I forget what was on, but
anyway, we were sitting there
right next to each other in the
middle of the couch. I moved over
a tiny bit, and he moved closer to
me. The next thing I knew, we
were kissing.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Wow. I am surprised you never
told me that.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Well, that was before we really
started talking. I don't know.
                                                            

22.

                       MEGAN
So what else happened?
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Nothing. Friggin Bob came and got
Rich, and they left. Nothing
happened after that. We talked on
the phone a few times, but never
really hung out or anything. I
really hadn't even thought that
much about it today, until I had
Rich in a few of my classes.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Bob who?
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Leonardo. You know him. He's in
band.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Oh yeah. He is in a few of my
classes this year. He is cute.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
He's ok, I guess. Never really
thought of him like that.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I didn't know his brother was Neal
Leonardo. I never would have
guessed they were brothers, let
alone twins. I mean they look
like they could be related, but
Neal is so popular, and Bob, well
isn't.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Yeah, well Bob is in band and Neal
is on the football team. Not
there is anything wrong with being
in band, but just not as popular
as the football team. But I like
Bob, he is cool.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I don't know him that well, but he
seems like a nice guy.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
He will be at O'Brien's party
Saturday night.
                                                            

23.

                       MEGAN
O'Brien is having a party on
Saturday night?
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Yeah, do you want to go? Rich and
Larry were telling me about it
today.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Sounds like it should be fun.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
I have never been to one of
O'Brien's parties. I hear they
are hot.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Sounds like fun. The only problem
is that my curfew is ten.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
You should sleep over and we can
go to the party?
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Sounds like a plan.
      (Megan has another
       call beep in.)
Hold on. I have another call.
                                                            
The screen now splits into three sections. One is Brenda,
and that fades alittle. One is Megan. The third is John.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Hello.
                                                            
                       JOHN
Hey Babe. What's up?
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Not much, just talking to Brenda.
How was your day?
                                                            
                       JOHN
Ok. Something's come up and I
gotta work on Friday night.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
But we were supposed to go out
Friday night.
                                                            

24.

                       JOHN
Yeah, I know, but Manny has to go
to a wake on Friday night and said
he would work Saturday night for
me, if I worked Friday night for
him.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
      (Disappointed)
Oh.
                                                            
                       JOHN
I'm sorry. (Slight pause.) We
can go out Saturday night.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I just made plans with B to go to
a party Saturday night.
                                                            
                       JOHN
I'm sorry. I really wanted to
hang out this weekend.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
It isn't my fault you are breaking
the plans we had.
                                                            
                       JOHN
I know. Maybe I can go to the
party with you and Brenda.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
      (Sarcastically.)
That wouldn't be too awkward for
her.
                                                            
                       JOHN
Yeah. I can see if Chip wants to
go.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
That could work. Hold on, I will
ask Brenda.
                                                            
Megan clicks over to Brenda. Brenda's part of the screen
gets light again and John's part of the screen goes dark.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I'm back.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
I'm here. Who was it?
                                                            

25.

                       MEGAN
It was John. I still have him on
hold.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Oh.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
We were supposed to go out on
Friday night, but he switched at
work, so he wants to go out on
Saturday now.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
But I thought we were going to go
to the party?
                                                            
                       MEGAN
We are. I told him about the
party and he said he would see if
Chip wanted to go and the four of
us can go together.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Sounds good to me.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Ok. Hold on. Let me tell him, so
he can call Chip. Hold on.
                                                            
Megan switches back to John. As she does that, the darkness
shifts back to Brena and away from John.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Hi.
                                                            
                       JOHN
Well?
                                                            
                       MEGAN
She said it's cool.
                                                            
                       JOHN
Great. Let me call Chip, then
call you back.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Ok.
                                                            
                       JOHN
Bye.
                                                            

26.

John hangs up. The screen goes back to two halves as Megan
switches back to Brenda and the darkness goes away.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Ok. He's gonna call me back after
he calls Chip.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
I just thought of something.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
What?
                                                            
                       BRENDA
What if I want to hook up with
someone else at the party? I
mean, I like Chip, but what if
something can happen with someone
else?
                                                            
                       MEGAN
You two are going to the party as
friends. There is no pressure on
you two hooking up.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
True. But hooking up with him
isn't a bad thing.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
You need to make up your mind
girl. (Brenda laughs.) Besides,
how do you know he is gonna want
to hook up with you? He might see
someone there that he might want
to hook up with instead of you.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I never thought of that.
                                                            
There is a knock on Brenda's door. Right after the knock
you hear Brenda's mom's voice.
                                                            
                       BRENDA'S MOM (O.C.)
Dinner's done.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
      (To her mom.)
I'll be right there.
      (To Megan.)
I gotta go and eat dinner.
                                                            

27.

                       MEGAN
Ok. Do you want me to say
anything to John or Chip?
                                                            
                       BRENDA
No. Don't say anything. Let's
see how things work out. I'll
talk to you later. Bye.
                                                            
Brenda hangs up the phone.
                                                            
 
INT. O'BRIEN'S PARTY - NIGHT
                                                            
Matt is standing in his living room talking to two girls.
There are a bunch of other kids all around Matt's house
sitting and standing around eating, drinking and smoking.
There are a few tables set up in the kitchen that have some
food and chips on it. There are two big coolers up against
the stairs. Next to the coolers is a small table set up
with plastic cups and different bottles of alcohol on it.
The doorbell rings and Matt goes and opens the door. When
the door opens Eric, Paul, Larry and Rich are on the other
side.
                                                            
                       MATT
      (As he opens the
       door.)
Gentlemen. Welcome one and all to
Matt O'Brien's Back to School
Party.
                                                            
                       LARRY
Missed you in school these last
couple of days.
                                                            
                       PAUL
      (Laughing.)
You must be the only person to
ever get suspended on the first
day of school.
                                                            
                       MATT
Hey. That's me. I'm (slight
pause) Matt O'Brien.
                                                            
                       RICH
Yeah. Jerk off.
                                                            
                       PAUL
He doesn't have to do that, he has
Miss Johnson for that.
      (They all laugh.)
                                                            

28.

                       RICH
Ah, you're still a jerk off.
                                                            
                       LARRY
Are you gonna let us in, or are we
gonna have to stand out here for
the whole fucking party?
                                                            
                       MATT
Sorry.
                                                            
Matt moves over and they all walk into the house. Paul
walks through the door first. Then Rich and Larry walks
through, then Rich. Then Eric turns sideways to go through
the door.
                                                            
                       LARRY
So how did Miss Johnson look?
                                                            
                       MATT
She looked good. After I fell, I
saw two wood floors.
                                                            
                       PAUL
That's messed up.
                                                            
                       MATT
You think that is messed up? I'm
telling you she enjoyed it.
                                                            
                       ERIC
How do you know?
                                                            
                       MATT
My nose never lies. Besides, why
wouldn't she? I'm (slight pause)
Matt O'Brien.
                                                            
Bob and Kate walk in the open door and walk up to Matt,
Eric, Paul, Larry and Rich.
                                                            
                       BOB
Hey.
                                                            
                       MATT
Welcome.
                                                            
                       KATE
Glad to see you survived your
suspension.
                                                            

29.

                       MATT
Yeah. Well, I'm going to go
mingle. Help yourself to any food
or drink that you want.
                                                            
Matt walks away and starts talking to Ann and Caitlin.
                                                            
                       ERIC
I'm gonna get something to eat.
Anybody want to come with me?
                                                            
                       RICH
I'll go with you.
                                                            
Rich and Eric walk over to the table that has the food on
it.
                                                            
                       LARRY
      (After Rich and
       Eric walk away.)
When isn't Eric hungry? He
probably needs Rich to go and hold
another plate for him. I can't
believe he works at the
supermarket.
                                                            
                       KATE
I know. If I owned the store, I
would be afraid that he'd eat me
out of business.
                                                            
                       BOB
Say that a little louder and he
will come and eat you.
                                                            
                       LARRY
He would love to eat her in more
ways than one.
                                                            
                       BOB
I'm gonna go and get a drink.
                                                            
They all start walking towards the coolers.
                                                            
                       LARRY
Sounds like a good idea.
                                                            
                       KATE
Yeah a buzz will do me some good
about now.
                                                            
They get to the coolers. One cooler has "beer" written on

30.

it and the other has "not beer" written on it. Bob opens
the "beer" cooler and grabs one and hands it to Larry. He
opens it and taks a drink. Bob then grabs one and gives it
to Kate. She opens it and takes a drink. He grabs another
one and goes to hand it to Paul.
                                                            
                       PAUL
None for me.
                                                            
Paul reaches into the "not beer" cooler and pulls out a
soda. Bob stands up and opens the beer and takes a sip out
of it.
                                                            
                       LARRY
      (To Paul.)
Why, you're not driving?
                                                            
                       PAUL
I just don't want to.
                                                            
                       BOB
Ok. More for us.
                                                            
Kate starts to hang on Bob. Matt walks up to Bob, Kate,
Paul and Larry.
                                                            
                       MATT
Hey, does anyone want to play some
strip poker?
                                                            
                       KATE
I'll play.
                                                            
                       BOB
Yeah, me too.
                                                            
                       PAUL
No, I'll just watch.
                                                            
                       LARRY
Yeah, me too.
                                                            
                       MATT
Cool. That makes six players.
                                                            
                       BOB
Who else is playing?
                                                            
                       MATT
Me, you, Kate, Scott, Caitlin and
Ann.
                                                            
                       BOB
Cool
                                                            

31.

They go and sit at a round table. Bob sits next to Kate,
who sits next to Matt, who sits next to Ann, who sits next
to Scott, who sits next to Caitlin, who sits next to Bob.
The camera focuses on Ann's face and pauses as wrting
appears on the bottom of the screen.
                                                            
                       SCOTT
Ok. Here are the rules. The one
with the weakest hand has to
remove a piece of clothing. We
will play five card draw.
                                                            
                       MATT
We should play seven card stud.
Stud, like me, (slight pause) Matt
O'Brien.
                                                            
                       SCOTT
Seven card stud is annoying. It
is just luck of the draw.
                                                            
                       KATE
Who cares? Let's just play five
card stud.
                                                            
                       SCOTT
Ok. Whatever. Any other
questions? (Slight pause.) Ok.
                                                            
Throughout the scene, they are all drinking beer. Caitlin
and Scott smoke cigarettes while playing cards. Scott now
shuffles the deck of cards and deals them. They all look at
their cards.
                                                            
                       SCOTT
All right. Let's see what
everyone's got.
      (They all lay down
       their cards.)
Caitlin has a pair of deuces. Bob
has ace high. Kate has a pair of
kings. Matt has seven high. Ann
has three fives. I have a pair of
tens. So that means that O'Brien
is the loser. Strip stud.
                                                            
                       MATT
Here you go.
                                                            
Matt takes off his hat.
                                                            
                       KATE
That's not a piece of clothing.
                                                            

32.

                       MATT
Yes it is. I can understand you
want to see more.
                                                            
                       SCOTT
Yeah it does count.
                                                            
                       KATE
That's bullshit. No one else is
wearing a hat.
                                                            
                       SCOTT
But he was (emphasizing the word)
WEARING a hat.
                                                            
                       KATE
Whatever.
                                                            
                       MATT
Caitlin, your deal.
                                                            
Matt collects the cards and gives them to Caitlin.
                                                            
                       CAITLIN
I can't shuffle.
                                                            
                       MATT
I'll shuffle for you.
                                                            
Matt takes the cards back and shuffles them. He then hands
the cards back to Catitlin. She deals the cards out.
                                                            
                       SCOTT
Ok, let's see what we have.
      (Everyone puts
       down their cards.)
Bob has a full house, kings over
queens.
                                                            
                       BOB
If only we were playing for money.
                                                            
                       SCOTT
Kate has Jack high. Matt has a
pair of fours. Ann has ten high.
I have a pair of aces. And
Catilin has a pair of threes. Ann
take it off.
                                                            
                       ANN
Ok.
                                                            
Ann bends down under the table.
                                                            

33.

                       MATT
Oh yeah. Take off your pants.
                                                            
Bob gives Matt a high five. Ann sits back up with her shoes
in her hands.
                                                            
                       ANN
There you go.
                                                            
                       MATT
What is that. You have to be
kidding me.
                                                            
                       KATE
If you can take off your hat, she
can take off her shoes.
                                                            
                       MATT
Ok. Ok. Bob, your deal. Do you
need me to shuffle them for you
too.
                                                            
                       BOB
I can handle it thanks.
                                                            
Bob picks up the cards and shuffles them. Then he deals
them.
                                                            
                       SCOTT
Ok. Let's see what we have this
time.
                                                            
They all put down their cards.
                                                            
                       SCOTT
Kate has a Jack high. Matt has a
Jack high. Ann has a Jack high.
Damn Bob, you can't shuffle for
shit. I have, guess what, a Jack
high. Caitlin has an eight high.
And last but not least Bob has a
pair of deuces. So Caitlin, this
means it is your turn to take
something off.
                                                            
                       CAITLIN
I know this is what you have been
waiting to see for a long time
Scott, so I wouldn't want to
disappoint you. I'm going to take
off my top.
                                                            

34.

                       MATT
Now that's what I'm talking about
it.
                                                            
Caitlin starts to lift her shirt slowly. As she does, a
flesh color is appering from where she lifts. As she gets
to her breasts, everyone can tell she is wearing a flesh
colored sleeveless shirt under the shirt she is taking off.
Everyone at the table starts to laugh, except for Scott.
                                                            
                       SCOTT
Very funny. Ok. Kate's turn to
deal.
      (Scott gathers the
       cards and hands
       them to Kate. She
       shuffles them and
       deals them.)
Ok. Who has what? That is the
question. Let's get the answer.
      (They all show
       their cards.)
O'Brien has a pair of deuces. Ann
has a pair of threes. I have
three kings. Caitlin has a pair
of queens, how fitting. Bob has a
pair of five. O'Brien strip.
                                                            
                       MATT
Damn you.
      (He bends down and
       comes back up and
       has his shoes in
       this hand.)
There you go. My deal.
                                                            
Matt takes the cards, shuffles them, then deals them.
                                                            
                       SCOTT
What do we have now?
      (Everyone shows
       their cards.)
Ann has an ace high. I have a
pair of fours. Caitlin has a jack
high. Bob has a king high. And
Kate has a pair of kings. Caitlin,
take it off.
                                                            
                       CAITLIN
Ok.
      (She puts her feet
       on the table and
       kicks off her
            (MORE)

35.

                       CAITLIN (cont'd)
       shoes, one at a
       time.)
There.
                                                            
She grabs her shoes and put them on the floor. Neal walks
over.
                                                            
                       NEAL
What are you guys up to?
                                                            
                       MATT
Playing strip poker.
                                                            
                       BOB
      (Finishes his
       beer.)
I'll be right back. I need
another beer.
                                                            
                       KATE
I need another one too.
                                                            
                       MATT
Why don't you just bring one back
for everyone.
                                                            
                       BOB
Ok.
      (He gets up and
       starts to walk
       away.)
                                                            
                       NEAL
      (Sits down in
       Bob's seat.)
I will play your hand until you
get back.
                                                            
The door opens and Brenda, Megan, John and Chip walk in.
                                                            
                       CHIP
We finally made it.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
If John had listened to me, we
would have been here five minutes
ago.
                                                            
                       JOHN
We would have been here earlier if
we didn't have to wait so fucking
long for you to get ready.
                                                            

36.

                       MEGAN
Enough already. John, can you get
me a drink?
                                                            
                       JOHN
Ok.
                                                            
                       CHIP
I'll go with you.
                                                            
Chip and John walk over to the coolers.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Let's go and sit on the couch.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Ok.
                                                            
Brenda turns around and starts walking. As she takes her
first step, she walks into Larry, who was walking in her
direction, but had his head turned toward the strip poker
game. At the game Caitlin had taken off her shirt and is
sitting in her bra.


                                                            
                       LARRY
      (Not realizing who
       he bumped into.)
Excuse me. I'm sor
      (He looks to see
       if was Brenda he
       bumped into. He
       sits up.)
ry.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
I'm sorry too. I'll have to be
more careful.
                                                            
Rich walks over and helps Brenda get up.
                                                            
                       RICH
Are you ok?
                                                            
                       BRENDA
I am now. You gotta watch where
you are going Stone.
                                                            
                       LARRY
You too.
                                                            

37.

Larry gets up and walks away. Brenda hugs Rich.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Thanks for coming to my rescue
Rich.
                                                            
                       RICH
Anytime.
                                                            
John and Chip come back. Each is carrying two drinks.
                                                            
Chip hands a drink to Brenda as she releases from Rich's
hug. John hands a drink to Megan.
                                                            
                       CHIP
That was messed up. At least you
didn't hit your head or something.
                                                            
                       JOHN
It would have taken you forever to
pick what hospital to go to.
                                                            
Megan takes Brenda's hand.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Stop. Come on Brenda, let's go
and sit on the couch.
                                                            
Megan and Brenda walk over to the couch. Eric is sitting on
the right side of the couch eating and drinking. Brenda
sits to his left and Megan sits to the left of Brenda. There
isn't enough room for anyone else to sit. John and Chip
start to drink their beers. Bob passes by with two hands
full of beer bottles. When he gets back, Neal is sitting in
his place playing for him. Neal is only in a pair of
boxers. O'Brien has on only his pants. Caitlin is wearing
her bra and pants. Kate is fully dressed except for her
shoes. Scott and Ann are sitting with no shoes or socks on.
Bob hands everyone a beer.
                                                            
                       BOB
Ok Neal, I'm back.
                                                            
Neal picks up the cards and shuffles and deals them.
                                                            
                       NEAL
So, I'm playing now. You will
have to wait your turn little
brother.
                                                            
                       SCOTT
Ok. Let's see what everyone has.
Kate has queens over tens. Matty
            (MORE)

38.

                       SCOTT (cont'd)
boy has a pair of jacks. Ann has
a queen high. I have a ten high.
Caitlin almost has a straight, but
not quite
      (Caitlin has a
       2,3,4,5 and 7.)
a seven high. And Neal has a pair
of deuces. Sooooo. That means
Miss Caitlin, STRIP!!!
                                                            
Caitlin stands up and takes off her pants. Now she is just
in her bra and panties.
                                                            
                       CAITLIN
I bet you like what you see.
                                                            
                       NEAL
      (He takes a big
       swig of his beer.)
Yes I do little lady.
                                                            
                       CAITLIN
      (She takes a swig
       of her beer.)
Yeah, well you're not looking too
bad yourself.
                                                            
                       NEAL
Really. You think?
                                                            
                       CAITLIN
Yeah.
                                                            
                       NEAL
Maybe we should do something about
this mutual likeness?
                                                            
                       CAITLIN
Maybe we should.
                                                            
                       NEAL
Let's go upstairs then.
                                                            
                       CAITLIN
Ok.
                                                            
Caitlin grabs her clothes and starts walking toward the
stairs. Neal gets up and follows Caitlin upstairs.
                                                            
                       MATT
Don't make a mess upstairs. I
guess that ends this game.
                                                            

39.

Everyone at the table starts to put their clothes back on.
John and Chip, who are getting more drinks at the coolers.
They each grab a beer, open it and start drinking, and
walking back toward the girls.
                                                            
                       JOHN
This party is pretty cool.
                                                            
                       CHIP
Yeah, I'm starting to feel really
good, and besides there were girls
taking off their clothes. But you
know if this party ahd been in
Oakville, more girls would be
showing some skin.
                                                            
                       JOHN
No doubt.
                                                            
                       CHIP
So what's going on with you and
Megan?
                                                            
                       JOHN
We are having fun for now, nothing
serious yet.
                                                            
                       CHIP
Oh ok. I got ya.
                                                            
John and Chip get to the couch.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Chip, why didn't you bring me back
a beer?
                                                            
                       CHIP
You didn't ask.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Oh yeah.
      (She giggles.)
Rich, will you get me a drink?
                                                            
                       RICH
Yeah, sure. I need a fresh one
anyway.
                                                            
Rich walks to the coolers.
                                                            
                       JOHN
Does anyone know where the
bathroom is?
                                                            

40.

                       ERIC
Upstairs.
      (He takes a
       mouthful of food
       and he mumbles.)
Third door on the
      (He swallows his
       food.)
right.
                                                            
                       JOHN
Ok. Thanks.
                                                            
John starts to walk toward the stairs. Chip sees John go
and follows him.
                                                            
                       CHIP
I gotta take a leak too. Hold on.
                                                            
John and Chip start walking up the stairs.
                                                            
                       JOHN
Can you believe how much that guy
can eat?
                                                            
                       CHIP
I know. Well, look at him. What
door on the left did he say?
                                                            
They get to the top of the stairs.
                                                            
                       JOHN
I don't know. I couldn't
understand him. Let's check them
all.
                                                            
John opens the first door on the left. It is dark inside
the room. You can hear Caitlin moaning.
                                                            
                       NEAL (O.C)
      (Voice coming from
       the dark room.)
Shut the fucking door, you pervs.
                                                            
John shuts the door.
                                                            
                       JOHN
Someone is getting lucky tonight.
                                                            
                       CHIP
Yeah. Let's try this door.
                                                            

41.

Chip opens the next door on the left. When the door opens a
whole bunch of smoke comes out of the room.
                                                            
                       STONER VOICE (O.C.)
Duuuuuuuuude, like close the door,
man!
                                                            
Chip closes the door.
                                                            
                       CHIP
They are getting fucked up in
there.
                                                            
                       JOHN
It has to be this door.
                                                            
John opens the third door on the left. As he opens the
door, Paul walks out.
                                                            
                       PAUL
It is gonna stink in here for a
while.
                                                            
John walks fast past Paul into the bathroom.
                                                            
                       JOHN
I gotta go too bad to wait.
                                                            
John closes the door behind him. Chip stays in the hallway
with Paul.
                                                            
                       PAUL
Sorry man.
                                                            
                       CHIP
Don't sweat it man, when you gotta
go, you gotta go.
                                                            
John comes out of the bathroom.
                                                            
                       JOHN
That room smells like ass.
                                                            
                       CHIP
Get out of my way or I am gonna
piss on you. Damn that fucking
room stinks. You weren't kidding.
                                                            
John moves out of the way and Chip walks into the bathroom.
He closes the door behind him, then he opens the door and
steps into the hallway for a second and takes a deep breath
then goes back into the bathroom. John looks at Paul.
                                                            

42.

                       JOHN
      (Extending his
       hand.)
How's it going? I'm John.
                                                            
                       PAUL
I would shake your hand, but I was
didn't get to wash my hands. My
name is Paul. You don't go to
Lyndhurst, do you?
                                                            
                       JOHN
No. I go to Oakville. I'm here
with Megan Light.
                                                            
                       PAUL
Oh. I don't know her.
                                                            
Chip comes out of the bathroom.
                                                            
                       JOHN
Paul this is Chip. He goes to
Oakville too.
                                                            
                       CHIP
      (Extends his hand.)
Hey. What's up?
                                                            
                       PAUL
I gotta wash my hands.
                                                            
                       CHIP
Yeah, you better after you did
what you did in there.
                                                            
Paul walks into the bathroom and closes the door. Chip and
John start walking back toward the stairs. They stop as the
come to the second door.
                                                            
                       CHIP
I'm going in for a little bit.
                                                            
                       JOHN
Yeah, let's go.
                                                            
Chip opens the door and smoke comes out again. They both
walk in.
                                                            
                       STONER VOICE (O.C.)
Shut the door, man.
                                                            
John closes the door.
                                                            

43.

BACK DOWNSTAIRS
                                                            
Eric is sitting there eating and drinking. Next to him is
Brenda. She is drinking occasioinally. Next to her is
Megan. She is also drinking occasionally. Standing next to
them is Rich. Bob and Kate walk up to them. They both have
a bottle of beer. They are occasionally drinking.
                                                            
                       BOB
My fucking brother always tried to
ruin my good time.
                                                            
                       ERIC
What happened?
                                                            
                       KATE
Neal took Bob's place in the strip
poker game when Bob went to get us
all more beer.
                                                            
                       BOB
And when I got back, he wouldn't
switch again. I knew I shouldn't
have gone for the beer.
                                                            
                       KATE
Then it would have been you
sitting there in your underwear
instead of Neal.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
That would have been interesting,
wouldn't it have been Meg?
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I guess.
                                                            
                       RICH
What happened to the game?
                                                            
                       KATE
Caitlin and Neal went upstairs
when they were both down to their
underwear.
                                                            
                       BOB
See, I would've been upstairs with
Caitlin instead of Neal, if I
wouldn't have gotten the drinks.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
No, you probably would be sitting
over there
            (MORE)

44.

                       BRENDA (cont'd)
      (She points to the
       table they were
       playing poker at.)
and either been in your underwear
or less, while Neal went upstairs
with Caitlin.
                                                            
Larry walks up to the group.
                                                            
                       ERIC
Has anyone tried the dip? It is
really good. I'm gonna go and see
if there is anymore in the
kitchen.
                                                            
Eric gets up and walks towards the kitchen. Rich and Kate
sit down to fill the couch. Rich sits next to Brenda and
Kate sits next to the right arm of the couch.
                                                            
                       KATE
Bob, sit here.
                                                            
Kate wipes off some crumbs from the arm of the chair, then
pats on it. Bob sits on the arm of the chair next to Kate.
She puts her arm around his waist and leans her head on his
hip.
                                                            
                       LARRY
Is anyone surprised that Eric went
to search for some more food?
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Leave him alone. It isn't his
fault that he is as big as he is.
His whole family is that way. It
is in their genes.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Those are some big jeans.
                                                            
                       RICH
Especially if they're for his
whole family.
                                                            
                       LARRY
      (Laughing.)
Yeah. Where is your boyfriend
Brenda? Did he leave you here?
                                                            
                       BRENDA
The guys Meg and I came with are
upstairs. They had to go to the
bathroom.
                                                            

45.

                       LARRY
First Neal and Caitlin go
upstairs, then two guys. Hmmmm.
Very interesting. Nice boyfriend
you have there Brenda.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
He's not my boyfriend. I'm not
going out with anyone. Chip is
just a friend. He goes to school
with John. John and Meg are going
together.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
We aren't going out. We are just
friends.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
You two are alittle more than
friends.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Yeah, I guess but not much more.
Where did they go anyway?
      (She looks at her
       watch.)
It is getting close to my curfew.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
It is too bad you couldn't stay at
my house.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I know. But my mom is a bitch
sometimes.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
We should go find them. Be right
back.
                                                            
Brenda and Megan get up and walk towards the stairs.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Why did you say that?
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Say what?
                                                            
                       MEGAN
About me and John.
                                                            

46.

                       BRENDA
It isn't like I said anything that
isn't true.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I know, but I don't know.
                                                            
They get to the top of the stairs.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Oh relax. Which door is it again?
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I don't remember. They should be
out of the bathroom by now. Right?
Let's try this one.
                                                            
Megan opens the door that Neal and Caitlin are in. It is
dark. They can hear Neal and Caitlin having sex. The bed
stops squeaking and Caitlin stops moaning.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Sorry.
                                                            
                       NEAL (O.C)
We have plenty of room in here if
you want to come in and join.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
No that's ok.
                                                            
                       NEAL (O.C)
We will be in here if you change
your mind.
                                                            
Megan closes the door.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I guess that was the wrong door.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Yeah, I guess so. Let's try this
door.
                                                            
Brenda opens the second door. Smoke comes out of the room.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
John, Chip are you in here?
                                                            
                       STONER VOICE (O.C.)
Thy aint in here. Close the
fucking door.
                                                            

47.

                       MEGAN
Sorry. I guess they went into
this room.
                                                            
Brenda closes the door. Megan opens the third door. It is
the bathroom. Paul comes walking out.
                                                            
                       PAUL
Hey. Just had to wash my hands.
It's all yours.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
Ok. Damn! What is your name
again?
                                                            
John and Chip come out of the second room. Megan turns
around to see John and Chip.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I thought you guys were coming up
here to go to the bathroom.
                                                            
                       JOHN
We did. Right dude. What are you
doing in the bathroom again?
                                                            
                       PAUL
I didn't get to wash my hands, you
rushed me out of here so fast.
                                                            
                       CHIP
Well, just so you know dude. Your
shit stinks man.
                                                            
                       PAUL
Ok. Whatever.
                                                            
Paul walks past them and goes down the stairs.
                                                            
                       BRENDA
So how did you end up in that
room?
                                                            
                       JOHN
We just kind of did.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I gotta get home, I don't want to
be late and deal with my mom's
shit.
                                                            
                       JOHN
Fine then. Let's go.
                                                            

48.

They all walk down the stairs and walk out of the house.
Mike is standing there and they just continue to walk past
him.
                                                            
                       MIKE
This is one of many fun and
exciting times here in the Hurst.
Come back and see us soon.
                                                            
Mike walks into the house.
                                                            
End of Episode.
                                                            


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From Rachel Date 10/23/2005 *
It's great that you have such a clear idea of who you want the characters to be, but you need to show that through their dialogue and actions, not through words on a screen. Maintaining a set of index cards with all that information you had written on the screen and more may help you keep track of what you intended your characters to be without relying on a crutch. Remember, the audience doesn't need to know everything about each character right away. Many if not most things should be revealed as the script and/or series develops. Give the audience just enough to pique their curiosity and keep their interest. I know it's hard to let go of complete artistic control, but unless you plan to produce and direct on your own, it is inevitable the finished product will not match precisely your internal vision as you wrote it. Leave the camera direction to the directors; that's their job, not yours. Similarly, keep parentheticals and exposition to a minimum. I think you need to develop a more distinct conflict/resolution. What happened here? What are you trying to achieve? This looks like an exaggerated stereotype of a day-in-the-life of a high school student, but there is nothing exciting going on to grasp the audience's interest. Think about whether your situations are realistic. For instance, have you ever seen a female gym teacher wear a skirt while teaching? I know I haven't. What age group is this series intended for? Is this age appropriate programming, if you intend it to be watched by the peer group depicted? Dialogue is very important, and shouldn't "sound" the same from character to character. The way a character talks, their choice of words, speech patterns, etc can help tell the audience more about him or her. One thing that may help you with this is to "people watch." Next time you're on the bus, train, or in a public place, just listen to the conversations around you. Can you hear a difference in the way people of different backgrounds speak? Listen in particular to high school aged kids, and see if you can write dialogue the way they actually speak. The biggest hurdle in writing anything is actually sitting down to do it, and you've already crossed that bridge. I think it's time to sit down and do a little more planning, though. Ask yourself if this is something you would want to watch, and if not, why not? Best of luck, SSO


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