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GUYS WILL BE GUYS PART 1
by Jeffrey A. Angus (jangus64@gmail.com)

Rated: PG   Genre: Comedy   User Review: **1/2
A short comedy script showing why men drive women nuts. Three men in a basement being guys. Guys Will Be Guys pokes a little fun at us. Read and relate and enjoy.


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FADE IN:

INT. REC.ROOM/BASEMENT - DAY
                                                            
SCENE: INTERIOR OF A BASEMENT RECREATION TYPE ROOM WITH A
TV, A COUCH AND A CHAIR, A COUPLE END TABLES, A FEW LAMPS ON
THE END TABLES. ALSO HERE ARE TV TRAYS, NEXT TO THE CHAIR
AND A COFFEE TABLE IN FRONT OF THE 3 MEN SITTING IN THE
AREA. TOM SITS IN The CHAIR - JOE AND MIKE ARE ON THE COUCH.
                                                            
                       MIKE
Have to love these Pampered Chef
parties every few months.
                                                            
                       JOE
      (laughing)
Sure do! Gives us our
male-bonding time.
                                                            
                       TOM
Yup.
                                                            
Takes a swig of his drink
                                                            
                       TOM (cont'd)
As long as Mindy's not in reach of
her purse.
                                                            
He holds it up and swings the purse on his fingers
                                                            
                       TOM
      (smiles)
It's a good night.
                                                            
                       MIKE
      (laughing)
That's a nice look for you Tom
                                                            
                       JOE
      (laughing)
Goes perfect with that crap
Buffalo Bills shirt you have on
                                                            
Mike and Joe clink drinks and Laugh
                                                            
                       MIKE
      (smirking)
You just need to learn to tell
them who's boss Tommy-boy.
                                                            
They all nod and drink
                                                            

2.

                       CINDY (os)
Mike, can you run outside and get
my purse from the mini-van?
                                                            
                       MIKE
      (sighs)
In a minute Cindy. I am trying to
catch the scores.
                                                            
                       CINDY (os)
I need it now please. I want to
show the girls the pictures we
took of the kids.
                                                            
                       MIKE
Okay, okay. On my way.
                                                            
                       CINDY (os)
Also, please try to remember to
lock the van back up this time so
we don't have another
mall-incident.
                                                            
Tom and Joe look at Mike with curious faces.
                                                            
Mike shakes his head as he stands up.
                                                            
                       JOE
Mall incident?
                                                            
                       MIKE
I'll tell you guys another time.
It's no big deal.
                                                            
                       CINDY (os)
Mike, can you also get me the bag
in the backseat?
                                                            
                       MIKE
      (almost a whisper)
Yeah, yeah, yeah.
                                                            
                       CINDY (os)
What was that honey?
                                                            
                       MIKE
On my way.
                                                            
Tom and Joe laugh
                                                            
                       TOM
That's showing her who's boss
                                                            

3.

                       JOE
That's wearing the pants.
                                                            
                       MIKE
BITE ME!
                                                            
As Mike walks out the door Tom and Joe laugh and high five.
                                                            
                       JOE
So Tommy-boy, you see Jeter hit
that homer the other day? He is a
gem, ain't he?
                                                            
                       TOM
The Spankmees are just a bunch of
dollar signs in pin-striped
uniforms.
                                                            
                       JOE
Whatever. What would you know.
You're a Buffalo Bills Fan.
                                                            
                       TOM
Pin-stripes are perfect. It's
like jailhouse clothing. you sell
your soul to George and you're his
prisoner. Your vice - the
almighty dollar.
                                                            
                       JOE
How can you be a sports fan if you
don't like baseball?
                                                            
                       TOM
I like baseball. I just can't
stand the No-Salary-Cap thing. You
can spend as much as you want to
buy your players! No limit.
                                                            
                       JOE
Like I have sai and will continue
to say, the Yankees are the best
team ever.
                                                            
                       TOM
Well, I just don't understand all
this baseball crap. The more
money they make, the more they
whine.
                                                            

4.

                       JOE
I can't think of a better way to
keep the players motivated than
the pay-for-performance concept.
                                                            
Joe stands up and moves over to the end of the couch, grabs
a couch pillow and toss's it at Tom.
                                                            
                       JOE (cont'd)
The Yankees are the best team
ever. Even a no-baseball-liking
Buffalo Bills fan can see that.
                                                            
                       TOM
Like I said, they're the best team
money can buy.
                                                            
                       JOE
You have to be kidding me! Jeter,
A-Rod, Damon, Sheffield, The
best of the best. The all-time
best Yankee team if you ask me.
And that Matsoui guy from Japan?
What a find!
                                                            
                       TOM
You're telling me that you think
the money munchers of today are
better than Ruth, Marris and
Berra? Now they were players! Not
money-grubbing pretty-boys.
                                                            
                       JOE
Wrong as always. You no nothing
of baseball anyways.
                                                            
                       NANCY (os)
Joe, what's the names of your
cousin Jimmy's kids?
                                                            
                       JOE
Gertrude and Oswald?
                                                            
                       NANCY (os)
I'm serious Joe!
                                                            
                       JOE
How do I know? You expect me to
remember all the names of the dang
kids? I'm lucky to know ours.
                                                            

5.

                       NANCY (os)
What do you mean you don't know?
You're over at his house three
days a week watching a game or
whatever you guys do.
                                                            
                       NANCY (os)
Well, I am surprised you can walk
and talk at the same time.
                                                            
Tom spits the mouth full of his drink out and starts to
laugh.
                                                            
                       JOE
Janice and Tim.
                                                            
                       NANCY (os)
That's right, thank you dear.
                                                            
Tom sees a tee shirt in the laundry next to him and grabs it
and wipes himself off.
                                                            
                       JOE
      (whispering to
       himself)
I think it's Janice and Tim. Or
is it Janet and Tom?
                                                            
Joe shrugs and looks at Tom.
                                                            
Spotting Tom using the tee-shirt to wipe his drink up. Joe
toss's another pillow at him.
                                                            
Tom smiles and toss's the shirt back in the laundry.
                                                            
                       TOM
      (laughing)
It'd be easier if it were Bert and
Ernie. That's what I'm going to
do. Name my kids after something
like that so I can't forget.
                                                            
They clink the drinks together and laugh.
                                                            
                       TOM
How many kids your brother got now
anyway?
                                                            
                       JOE
      (smirks)
Two or three...I forget.
                                                            

6.

Mike comes walking through with a very pink and fuzzy purse
on his arm heading towards the kitchen.
                                                            
                       TOM
      (Sarcastically)
Looks like you found your bag. It
goes so well with your outfit.
                                                            
Joe and Tom Laugh
                                                            
                       JOE
Now what was I teaching you?
                                                            
                       TOM
Teaching?
                                                            
                       JOE
yeah, ok now I remember.
                                                            
Joe gets his drink and gets comfortable again.
                                                            
                       JOE (cont'd)
As I was saying that Jeter is
something. Do you know in High
School he hit .508 - 30 of 59 -
with 4 Homeruns, 21 Base on Balls
and 1 Strike Out in 23 games as a
Senior, was 12-for-12 in stolen
base attempts, had a .831
percentage and a .637 on-base
percentage, hit .557 with 7
Homeruns as a junior and was named
High School Player-of-the-Year by
the American Baseball Coaches
Association.
                                                            
                       NANCY (os)
Joe, when's your Mother's birthday
again?
                                                            
                       JOE
I have no idea. You expect me to
remember things like that? Jeez.
                                                            
                       TOM
Women just don't get it do they.
                                                            
                       JOE
They can remember every store and
cost of every shoe they ever
bought but not a birthday. It's
like asking my brother's kid
Janet...
                                                            

7.

                       TOM
Janice...
                                                            
                       JOE
Whatever. It's like asking a kid
if they did their homework. They
don't recall or just don't want
to.
                                                            
                       TOM
      (confused look)
HUH?
                                                            
                       JOE
I'm trying to say they just don't
get it.
                                                            
                       TOM
      (smirking)
I hear you sister.
                                                            
Joe looks at Tom and shakes his head.
                                                            
Mike walks back into the room with flour on his pants and in
his hair.
                                                            
                       JOE
Hey look! It's the Pillsbury
Dough Boy.
                                                            
                       MIKE
It's a dang chicken coop in there.
I'm surprised I made it out alive.
They're making cherry tarts or
some dang thing.
                                                            
Mike does his best to wipe the flour off his pants.
                                                            
                       MIKE (cont'd)
It's like a bomb went off.
                                                            
Tom reach's over and grabs the t-shirt from the laundry and
toss's it to him. Mike wipes off more flour.
                                                            
                       JOE
Hey! Knock it off! That's my
t-shirt.
                                                            
                       TOM
Calm down Joe. It's dirty anyway.
                                                            
Mike looks at the t-shirt with a surprised look.
                                                            

8.

                       JOE
Well, it was clean before
Tommy-boy spit up all over the
place and used it as a dish cloth.
                                                            
Mike holds the t-shirt up and it is a nasty, hole filled,
grease and food stained mess.
                                                            
                       MIKE
This was clean?
                                                            
                       JOE
Well I only wore it one time, for
like an hour or so.
                                                            
                       TOM
What did you do? Fall in the
dumpster behind the fast-food
joint down the road?
                                                            
                       JOE
No. It's my favorite shirt. It's
been with me since college.
                                                            
Mike shrugs and tosses it back into the laundry bin, on top
of the clean clothes.
                                                            
Tom smirks, Joe didn't seem to notice.
                                                            
                       JOE (cont'd)
As I was saying, the last few
years we've had a good team.
                                                            
                       TOM
I'll give you that much. Too bad
it can't last forever.
                                                            
                       MIKE
Is he spouting off about the
Spankmee's again?
                                                            
Tom nods and smirks as he drinks
                                                            
                       JOE
OOH and you never talk about the
Mets
                                                            
                       MIKE
Well at least they are worth
talking about.
                                                            

9.

                       JOE
What ever!
                                                            
all three suddenly let out a big cheer and are transfixed on
the T.V.
                                                            
                       TOM
Holy crap did you see that - he
ran into the Metal fence- now
That's guts.
                                                            
                       JOE
Wow look at his face, it hit hard
                                                            
                       MIKE
He hung on to the ball, now that's
a player.
                                                            
They clink the drinks together and sit back down.
                                                            
                       JOE
here - here - even if he is a
Phillie.
                                                            
They all clink drinks again and sit down
                                                            
                       CINDY (os)
Mike, what's your parents new
address
                                                            
                       MIKE
Um, not sure - do you need it now?
                                                            
                       CINDY (os)
Well I guess not!
                                                            
                       MIKE
Anyway now if you want to talk
about the Mets.
                                                            
Joe sighs and rolls his eyes
                                                            
                       JOE
      (under his breath)
Here we go
                                                            

10.

                       MIKE
well you have to admit that
Beltran and Wright are doing very
well this year, and that Millege
kid also.
                                                            
                       JOE
Beltran - hah - He's no Jeter
                                                            
                       MIKE
WHAT!! He is hitting great and
driving in runs and is Wright, and
for a guy not making Jeter Money
that's pretty darn good.
                                                            
                       CINDY (os)
Ok you don't know her address, but
do you have your mothers phone
number? You are on the phone with
her almost every day.
                                                            
                       MIKE
I have it on speed dial, I don't
know , can we get it later
please? I am working on something
with the guys.
                                                            
                       TOM
Amazing on what they think we can
remember - we aren't computers you
know.
                                                            
                       JOE
Like we have everything they need
locked in our brains.
                                                            
                       MIKE
SO tom, you have to be getting
your diaper in a knot over all the
football talk that's going on with
T.O missing the Cowboys voluntary
training camps.
                                                            
                       TOM
Ok,this is what gets me, How can
everyone make a big deal of T.O.
not being at the volunteer
training session for the Cowboys.
For God sakes he play's better
            (MORE)

11.

                       TOM (cont'd)
when he doesn't train, He is one
of the biggest talents in the NFL.
                                                            
                       MIKE
He is impressive as heck, When a
guy is that talented he needs no
extra work outs.
                                                            
                       JOE
To bad his mouth runs as fast as
he does.
                                                            
They all nod in agreement
                                                            
                       TOM
I have him on my fantasy league
team - As long as his numbers stay
the same or better - baring injury
I think I am set.

                                                            
                       MIKE
As long as he stays out of the
coach's dog house. In Dallas thats
hard to do.
                                                            
                       TOM
He will be with Terry Glenn this
year - I can see him racking up
like 10 TD easy this year - better
then the 6 tds and 763 receiving
yards from last year for sure.
                                                            
                       JOE
I don't know, Terry Glen had 1136
yards and 7 tds, it may cut into
his performance- and with Bledsoe
tossing the rock who knows what is
going to happen.
                                                            
                       NANCY (os)
Joe, can you please get the extra
flour from the pantry and bring it
out to us please.
                                                            
                       JOE
Sure in a second.
                                                            

12.

                       NANCY (os)
We need it to finish up the tarts
we are working on.
                                                            
                       JOE
I will be out with it in a second
dear.
                                                            
                       NANCY (os)
Not your seconds, but my seconds
please.
                                                            
                       JOE
On my way dear.
                                                            
Joe stands up and goes to the pantry grabs the Flour and
walks towards the kitchen entrance.
                                                            
                       MIKE
Watch out for Aunt Helen - it is
like she is possessed with that
rolling pin - I think the Tasmania
Devil would make less of a mess.
                                                            
                       JOE (os)
Thanks for the tip.
                                                            
                       AUNT HELEN (os)
I heard that Michael Eugene, I am
still your Aunt so watch it.
                                                            
                       MIKE
      (snickering silent)
Crap now I am in trouble
                                                            
                       JOE (os)
Yes Eugene - Bee- Have
                                                            
Mike shakes his head and smirks
                                                            
                       MIKE
He went for the Money - The NFL
has a salary cap but you see more
guys moving every year for that
Dollar.
                                                            
                       TOM
Can you believe EDJ went to the
Cardinals - How can Indy give up a
back that gave them 1500 yards
rushing and 337 receiving yards
            (MORE)

13.

                       TOM (cont'd)
last year.
                                                            
                       MIKE
Just a shame - not like when Bart
Star and Johnny U had been in the
game. I bet Lombardi rolls over in
his grave when he sees the stuff
that is going on in the NFL.
                                                            
Joe Enters back in and is covered with flour.
                                                            
Mike and Tom look stunned
                                                            
                       TOM
Um, I think the place is haunted.
                                                            
                       MIKE
I see dead people.
                                                            
Mike and Tom laugh and point at him. Joe heads to the back
of the room near the laundry basket. He stops, looks at the
tee shirt and starts to use it to clean himself off.
                                                            
                       MIKE
      (sarcastically)
What are you doing, that's your
favorite shirt.
                                                            
                       JOE
You already ruined it anyway.
                                                            
                       TOM
I think it was in bad shape before
we ever got to it.
                                                            
They all laugh and Joe continues to wipe himself off.
                                                            
                       JOE
I was attacked by a gaggle of
rolling pin wielding white devils.
That's my story and I'm sticking
to it.
                                                            
                       MIKE
I told you, I was not kidding with
whats going on out in the kitchen.
                                                            
                       TOM
He tried to warn you, he did.
                                                            

14.

Joe finishes cleaning off the best he can and toss the shirt
near the Laundry.
                                                            
                       JOE
Well, hey, as long as you guys
are here, can you help me figure
out what I did wrong with this
birdhouse, I am making it for the
Boy Scout auction. It came in a
kit.
                                                            
Joe walks off to get the project.
                                                            
                       MIKE
      (whispering)
I bet this will be interesting.
                                                            
                       TOM
      (whispering)
What do you mean?
                                                            
                       MIKE
      (whispering)
I can't wait to see this, he's not
real good with tools that's for
sure.
                                                            
                       TOM
      (whispering)
Be nice, he is trying to help the
scouts out at least.
                                                            
Joe enters back with the project and sits it on the coffee
table.
                                                            
                       MIKE
What is this? A bird feeder?
                                                            
                       TOM
A birdhouse he said. See the hole
for the birds to go in and nest?
                                                            
Joe Shrugs and Nods, Mike and Tom look at each other and the
object again.

                                                            
                       MIKE
If you say so.
                                                            
Cindy walks in and looks at them and the object
                                                            

15.

                       CINDY
Um, What's that a shoe scrapper
or something?
                                                            
                       JOE
Well it's a birdhouse, In
progress , I am still working on
it.
                                                            
                       CINDY
Hmm, Does it look like the picture
in the directions?
                                                            
The three men smile and look at each other and in unison
look at Cindy.
                                                            
                       JOE/MIKE/TOM
Directions, we don't need no
stinking directions.
                                                            
Cindy Shakes her head and walks back out
                                                            
The guys all laugh and smile
                                                            
                       JOE
Well I can always add to it later.
It may take a little more sanding
and paint but I will get it done.
                                                            
                       TOM
Yeah I am sure you can figure it
out.
                                                            
Joe takes the project and puts it away.
                                                            
                       MIKE
Looks like sports center is
starting over.
                                                            
                       JOE
Yeah , Did you all catch what we
needed the first three times. I
will change it.
                                                            
Joe starts looking for the remote
                                                            
                       MIKE
I think a good show on the History
channel called Men and Machines is
on
                                                            

16.

                       TOM
Yeah, its about cannons or
something.
                                                            
                       JOE
Sounds good, but I can't find the
remote
                                                            
They all start to tear the couch and chair apart to find the
remote Joe finds change, Tom - finds a cheese curl ( he
sneaks it into his mouth) and Mike finds a Sports
Illustrated.- he sits and starts reading
                                                            
                       TOM
Well boys, guess we watch sports
center some more.
                                                            
They all nod and sink lower in the seats.
                                                            
                       MIKE
Hey lets play a bit of the shooter
video game. You have that multi -
paddle system thing?
                                                            
                       TOM
Sounds good to me.
                                                            
                       JOE
I have the multi-player connection
and rumble pads.
                                                            
                       MIKE/TOM
      (in unison)
Cool, lets rock.
                                                            
Joe see's that the controller is just out of his reach. He
reaches under the couch and pulls a golf ball retriever out
from under the couch. The retriever has been modified to
have a hook on the end. Joe reaches for the controller hooks
it and then drags the game system to him.
                                                            
                       MIKE
He may not be great with wood
working and that stuff, but when
it comes to gadgets to help relax,
he is number one in my book.
                                                            
Joe holds the retriever up with two hands and smirks.
                                                            

17.

                       TOM
I have to agree, but with the golf
ball retriever he has always been
a master. Its his favorite club in
the bag when we golf also.
                                                            
They all laugh
                                                            
                       JOE
Who is the one who is always
asking for golf balls. I have tons
thanks to my arsenal of extendable
arms.
                                                            
                       TOM
You got me on that one Joe.
                                                            
They all laugh.
                                                            
                       MIKE
Can we play that shooter game, I
will own all you.
                                                            
                       JOE
Not this time Pinky, I will be
able to see you from a mile away
with the pink furry purse.
                                                            
                       MIKE
Between that purse and your
birdhouse-bootscraper-birdfeeder,
I still think the purse would win
out and hold together better.
                                                            
                       TOM
That's what you can call it Joe,
it's a swiss-army wood project.
                                                            
They all laugh
                                                            
Joe takes his retriever and hits a button on the T.V to swap
it over so they can play the game.
                                                            
                       MIKE
Lets get refills and we can begin
the on-slaught.
                                                            
                       JOE
Should be a few left.
                                                            

18.

                       MIKE/TOM
      (in unison)
Not It.
                                                            
Mike and Tom smirk.
                                                            
                       JOE
Boys, I will get this round. One
of you have to get the next.
                                                            
                       MIKE
Deal
                                                            
Tom nods
                                                            
                       JOE
Mike you said deal so you will get
the next round.
                                                            
                       MIKE
Fine by me.
                                                            
                       JOE
Which will be in the kitchen.
                                                            
Mike groans and Joe and Tom laugh.
                                                            
                       TOM
He got you on that one.
                                                            
Joe takes his stick and drags a cooler from behind the
chair.
                                                            
                       MIKE
The master of the retriever.
                                                            
                       JOE
      (in his best
       German voice)
Its not a retriever now, its
called the get-a-nator
                                                            
Joe opens the cooler and pulls out three drinks. He pauses
and then reaches in and pulls out the remote to the tv.
Looking at the wet remote he Shrugs and wipes it on his
shirt and sets it on the table. Joe gets a funny look on his
face as he reaches into the cooler again and pulls out a
piece of paper with huge letters that read "birdhouse
directions - ages 8-14" Joe puts the directions on the
table and sets the drinks on them.
                                                            

19.

                       JOE (cont'd)
Here we are.
                                                            
                       TOM
Shall we?
                                                            
They start to play the game and are into it furious - they
are cranking on the controllers and getting into it.
                                                            
                       JOE
How do you do that Mike?
                                                            
                       MIKE
X-O-O-O-X- up - down -
left-left-X-O
                                                            
                       JOE
X-O-O-O-X-up-down- Left-left-X-O
                                                            
                       TOM
Very good Joe, Poly want a Cracker
                                                            
Joe smirks.
                                                            
                       JOE
No
                                                            
Joe makes a move on the paddle and grins
                                                            
                       JOE (cont'd)
But you may want to wipe your self
off the wall now I just owned you.
                                                            
                       TOM
Drops the controller, dang-it.
                                                            
Mike laughs at Tom. Stops laughing and looks at Joe.
                                                            
                       MIKE
How in the world did you...
                                                            
                       JOE
I think your new name will be
spiked.
                                                            
                       MIKE
You cheat anyway, we will just
have to hunt you down now.
                                                            

20.

                       TOM
Your toast now Joe.
                                                            
                       JOE
Better get another friend, you two
are not worthy.
                                                            
Nancy walks in with a jar of cherry filling. She stands
behind the couch watching for a minute.
                                                            
                       NANCY
Joe do you remember where the jar
opener device is we got at the
last party we had?
                                                            
                       JOE
Where ever you put it last.
                                                            
Nancy swats him in the back of the head. Joe gets beat in
the game by Tom.
                                                            
                       JOE (cont'd)
What was that for and look you
made me get beat up. We are trying
to play a game here.
                                                            
                       NANCY
Do you have any idea where the jar
opening device I asked you to
mount in the kitchen near the sink
is? The same one that had sat for
a week on the counter and you told
me you would get it done today
before the party.
                                                            
Mike and Tom shrink back from Nancy seeing she is starting
to wind up.
                                                            
                       JOE
I'm sorry, I can't remember where
I put it. I'll look for it and get
it put up for you. I think it is
under the sink.
                                                            
                       NANCY
Thanks!!
                                                            
Nancy walks back to the kitchen.
                                                            
The guys continue to play, moans and laughter erupt as they
beat each other in the game.
                                                            

21.

                       NANCY (os)
Joe I need you to open this Jar
for us. We need it to finish the
tarts.
                                                            
                       JOE
Bring it in dear we will get it
open for you.
                                                            
Nancy brings the Jar in.
                                                            
Joe plays the game a bit less intense.
                                                            
                       JOE
Tom can you get that top. I will
not be able to, my hand is bad
from work.
                                                            
                       TOM
      (confused look)
Well , sure.
                                                            
Joe winks at Tom.
                                                            
Tom puts the paddle down and opens the Jar.
                                                            
                       NANCY
Thanks Tom.
                                                            
Tom smiles and nods as Nancy walks back to the kitchen.
                                                            
                       MIKE
      (laughing)
Got you good that time Tommy boy.
                                                            
                       TOM
Aw man, I was helping Nancy.
                                                            
Joe and Mike laugh.
                                                            
Nancy arrives with another jar.
                                                            
                       NANCY
One more Tom then I will leave you
boys alone to your precious video
game.
                                                            
                       TOM
Sure no problem anytime.
                                                            

22.

                       MIKE
      (smirking)
Should have had Aunt Helen open
it. She has hands like a lumber
jack.
                                                            
                       NANCY
I will let her know that.
                                                            
                       MIKE
      (smirking)
Just kidding, yikes.
                                                            
Nancy smirks and walks out
                                                            
                       TOM
Again Mike, come on that's not
right, cheap shot artist.
                                                            
                       MIKE
      (laughing)
You snooze you lose.
                                                            
Tom shrugs and sits back in his chair to wait for the next
match.
                                                            
                       CINDY (os)
Ok Boys come try the tarts we just
made.
                                                            
Mike and Joe stand up and scramble towards the kitchen
falling over each other to get to the tarts.
                                                            
                       TOM
Calm down animals, the zoo has
plenty of feed.
                                                            
                       MIKE
Tell me that when you are stuck
eating Aunt Helen's creation.
                                                            
                       JOE
You snooze you lose Tommy boy, you
snooze you lose.
                                                            
Tom stands up and starts to head for the kitchen. Tom pauses
and he sits back down and grabs his paddle. He starts to
smirk as he finds where Joe and Mikes game guy is and takes
them out.
                                                            
                       CINDY (os)
You coming Tom?
                                                            

23.

                       TOM
      (laughing)
On my way Nancy.
                                                            
Tom heads for the kitchen.
                                                            


FADE OUT.


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From Bruce Date 7/15/2006 ***
I can relate with the members of the cast. You have stuffed all the strange quirks of guys in a short one scene act. It would be nice to see this on a stage or film to see how the actors take the roles and run with them. A little more work on dialogue and I feel it would be very-very good. I feel this would appeal more to east coast folks then anyone do to the NY teams. Any team and or player could be in that part of the dialogue and it could be done any place in the US. Overall good job.

From James Date 7/15/2006 ***
I can see you what you are working for. One act comedy short, almost a scene from a sitcom maybe. I can relate with some of the going ons.

From earl Date 6/29/2006 *1/2
Needs lots of work. It's just one big scene that goes nowhere.


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