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Days of a Pilot (animation series) Episode 1 (short) -- (very short)
by Tom Nieuwveld

Rated: G   Genre: Animation   User Review: *
A plane, flying to Tennant Creek Airport, runs low on fuel in mid-air. Will he make it to the airport?


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FADE IN:

EXT. THE CLOUDS - DAY
                                                            
A Cessna-like AEROPLANE with a FACE, EYES and a NOSE GLIDES
THROUGH the CLOUDS.
                                                            
                       PLANE
      (whistling)
Dum-dee-dum-dum, doo-doo,
dah-da-doo-dee...
                                                            
He suddenly GRUNTS IN PAIN.
                                                            
                       PLANE
      (yells)
AAAAARGH! OY! YOU WITH THE MOBILE
PHONE! QUIT TALKING! TURN IT OFF!
      (quietens down)
Uggh! God almighty!
                                                            
After his outburst, the plane GIVES an ANNOUNCMENT to his
PASSENGERS.
                                                            
                       PLANE
Okay peoples, we're flying over
complete DESERT right now.
                                                            
                       PASSENGER
      (cutting in)
Yeah, that's SO hard to recognize,
"Captain Obvious".
      (yelling)
WHAT NEXT?!
                                                            
                       PLANE
      (resuming his
       interrupted
       speech)
This means that we should be
flying over Tennant Creek soon.
      (on radio, to
       GROUND CONTROL)
Come in, TCK airport, code
1-3-6-3-2-7-3-5-6-8-niner-4, do
you read?
                                                            
                       GROUND CONTROL (V.O.)
Affirmative, we read -- we request
a TLF.
                                                            
"TLF" stands for "TIME-LOCATION-FUEL PERCENT".
                                                            

2.

                       PLANE
      (after a LONG
       PAUSE)
Ohhh, THAT TLF. Affirmative. 1730
hours. Flying over the Outback --
approximately 20 nautical miles
out of TCK airport at a height of
10,000 feet. 15% fuel and
counting.
                                                            
 
INT. GROUNT CONTROL TENNANT CREEK - DAY
                                                            
                       GROUND CONTROL
Well, if you're 20 nautical miles
out of Tennant, you might as well
not panic.
      (yelling)
Ow!
                                                            
The YOUNG MEMBER of Ground Control who just gave this
response has been nudged in a "You stupid idiot!" manner by
an older member.
                                                            
                       GROUND CONTROL
      (uncertainly)
Errr...I mean...uh...RUN -- I MEAN
FLY -- FOR YOUR LIFE -- UH, I MEAN
ENGINE!
                                                            
 
EXT. THE CLOUDS - DAY
                                                            
                       PLANE
      (calmly)
Oh. Okay then.
      (panicking like
       hell)
RUN -- FOR -- YOUR -- LIVES!
                                                            
Great move, plane. There's suddenly COMPLETE FRENZY on the
plane. People RUN from END TO END of the plane screaming
"MUMMY! MUMMY!". Two JUMP OUT OF THE PLANE and land on the
sand.
                                                            
TO BE CONTINUED...
                                                            
                                         THE END.
                                                            


FADE OUT.


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From Kelsey Date 1/11/2008 0 stars
This is making no sense whatsoever. What is the point? Why is everybody suddenly running for their lives? This could have been way better...perhaps with even remotely something resembling a storyline.

From Tom Date 2/15/2007 1/2
I think that you need to re-read you script, it looks like you have just rushed through with no thought. there are a lot of wholes in the storys if this was a real film it would be very hard to understand. re-read, re-write and generally work on it, you could maybe focus on the characters more even focus on the characters that have jumped into the desert.

From Jennifer Goss Date 12/7/2006 1/2
How big is this plane? Usually the passengers have no communication with the pilot on big planes, and in small planes I doubt anyone would be running through the aisles. Anyway, this is very wierd and disjointed. It might be an ok concept, but you need to flesh it out more and have the people act in a believable manner.

From Adam Stiglich Date 12/7/2006 ***1/2
Wasn't to bad, I think if you write more to it, the story would be stronger.

From Darren Kalado Date 12/4/2006 0 stars
Confusing, choppy, idiotic. Sorry, not for me thanks.

From Zach Shevich Date 12/2/2006 0 stars
That was stupid. Other than showing some basic knowledge (which you might have faked) of air control lingo, you basically did nothing. I doubt this would entertain somebody, even little kids. But thinking of little kids...rated G? This is not rated G.


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