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by jason afzali (jafzali2003@yahoo.com)

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Genre: Science Fiction/Fantasy User Review:

kid gets a prank pulled on from his class.

FADE IN:

EXT. SCHOOL MORNING - DAY

you see Gio,walking to school,he is late! he is talking on
his cell phone.

he is talking to someone and the person on the other end of
the phone says aren't you late. you hear him say don't
worry, i got film class.

MR.D
YOU HAVE TO WRITE ALL TALKING AS
DIALOG. DO NOT USE THE WORD "YOU"

INT. SCHOOL HALL - DAY

you see giovanni walking in hall slowly taking his time. he
opens the door to his film class.

INT. FILM ROOM - DAY

giovanni walks in the classroom and sees classroom's clothes
laid out as if they were evaporated. he thinks no way this
can never happen. he walks around the classroom in confusion
and comes across a kid in ripped clothing in the corner
under the desk.

            GIO
      (to the kid in
       confusion)
what is going on?

            KID
      (not knowing he
       screams)
they they they

            KID
      (scared to
       giovanni)
...they tried to get me also. i
wouldn't let them get me, they
tried.

GIO
(a little scared)
...who?

KID
(screaming)
those things,their like aliens
they were

the kid gets up,pushing gio on the way and screams as he
runs out of the class. and screams out they're here on his
way out.

gio is now scared and a terrified but is thinking aliens
impossible.

MR.D
THIS IS A SCREENPLAY. TELL US WHAT
WE SEE AND HEAR.IF YOU'RE NOT
GOING TO COME TO CLASS AT LEAST
READ THE BOOK AND LEARN THE
FORMAT.

INT. SCHOOL HALL - DAY

gio runs out of the class,and a bit scared he looks to the
other classes and coincidentally those classes are in the
library. their are some kids in the class sleeping and he
mistakes them for being dead at a quick glance.

MR.D
THAT SEEM BELIEVABLE TO YOU?

GIO
(taking to himself)
oh my god,holy moly,it can't... no
it can't be.

he has like like flashbacks of the kid running out saying
their here and the kid in the corner.

INT. 2ND FILM ROOM. - DAY

the class is pulling a prank on gio, they are in the second
film room and have live webcams and are watching his
reactions in the other room on the tv. they are laughing and
enjoying seeing him being scared.

#1
(to the class)
oh my gosh,i can't believe this
idiot bought it. for a moment i
thought the plan wasn't going to
work.

            #2
      (to herself
       outloud)
how emberessing? i cant believe
this is actually working!!

INT. SCHOOL HALL - DAY

you see gio sprinting out of the classroom and he is on the
way to the principal's office hopefully to see some adults
or supervisors on the way.

INT. SCHOOL AREA - DAY

on the way to the principal office. we see some kids in torn
up clothes,the reason they have their clothes torn up, it is
old clothes day at school and gio doesn't know and mistakes
it for the aliens trying to attack them.

MR.D
HOW COULD THE AUDIENCE KNOW THAT?
YOU NEED TO REWRITE THIS WITH SOME
REAL EFFORT. FOLLOW THE CORRECT
FORMAT, AND PROOFREAD. READ SOME
EXAMPLES ON SCRIPTBUDDY.

INT. PRINCIPAL'S OFFICE - DAY

we see gio bullit into the office and is out of breath.

DR.SALTER
(angrily)
stop running, what are you doing?+

GIO
(to salter)
...no time,their are aliens and
they took over my school hall and
took some kids around the school.
THEY TRIED TO GET THIS KID IN MY
CLASS AND SOME OTHER AROUND THE
HALLS.

DR.SALTER
(to walkey talkie)
i need the cop over here
immediately linda, i have a
student here who is on drugs.

GIO
(mad)
no no their are aliens their look.
my class is gone,just their
clothes are their. i'm serious if
i'm lieing you can...you can
suspend me or give me detention
for a year.

INT. 2ND FILM ROOM. - DAY

we see the kids in the classroom laughing and wondering
where gio went, he is taking long and kind of worried. the
teacher hopes he didn't get other people involved so he
won't get in trouble for this prank.

INT. PRINCIPAL'S OFFICE - DAY

DR.SALTER
i have seen lots of crazy things
in my life and heard crazy things
but not even crazy things from my
little kids. ok i will go with you
just so i can give you detention
for the rest of the year so i
won't have to see you or hear your
nonsense.

DR.SALTER
(to gio)
LETS GO

DR.SALTER
(to assistiant)
i'll be back in one minute,and
linda get my detentions
ready,enough for the rest of the
year.

INT. SCHOOL AREA - DAY

their walking near the classes,their almost there.

GIO
(confused)
i swear they were here,their were
like 5kids.

            DR.SALTER
      (to gio in
       sarcastic tone.)
i hope you have a long book for
detention.

GIO
ok,you'll see lets go to my class
and the hall. you'll see.

INT. 2ND FILM ROOM. - DAY

the teacher tells the class, he might be on his way back,and
to get back in the classroom as if nothing happened and get
rid of the clothes.

MR.D
GO GO GO hurry

INT. FILM ROOM - DAY

salter walks in classroonm./

DR.SALTER
(to mr.devaney)
hello Brian. sorry to interupt
you. Gio told me something silly,
that i'm emberresed to even say i
came here because of it.

GIO
(confused)
what the...

MR.D
(to salter)
silly! how silly can it be? i hear
his excuses and other stuff all
the time like how he was late
because someone stole his car or
how his car was runover from a
truck.

DR.SALTER
(to devaney)
he said that their was no one here
and just their clothes and
something about aliens, we'll it's
nothing,i'm sorry to interrupt.

the kid in the corner earlier is in his normal clothes.

            GIO
      (to kid who was in
       corner)
hey, you're clothes were ripped up
and you ran out of here.

KID
(to gio)
what ever you ate for breakfast
don't eat it again.

GIO
(to salter)
well what about the other
classrooms,lets go look there.

DR.SALTER
(to gio)
fine you got 1min.

INT. SCHOOL HALL - DAY

gio goes to the other once empty class,the class is their
lights on this time.

GIO
(to teacher 2)
what happened,you guys are here,
where were you before?

TEACHER 2
(paranoid)
what is the meaning of this? we
were in the library. dr.salter why
is this kid interrupting my class!

DR.SALTER
(to gio)
thats it, i hear the last of you.
LETS GO

DR.SALTER
(to gio)
detention for a year.

dr.salter walks out of the classhall with gio and a zoom in
on salter's face shows his eyes light up in bright red. he
does an evil laugh?

GIO
(confused)
what's so funny?

DR.SALTER
(to gio)
oh nothing, just the thought of
aliens,so made up,it's funny.

FADE OUT.

Feedback

From Alan	Date 2/28/2007	0 stars
I see too many beginning diolougue with no caps, characters names need to be in full caps when they are mentioned in the scene direction. Such as "gio goes to the other once empty class,the class is their lights on this time." should be "GIO goes to the other once empty class,the class is their lights on this time." -In addition you summerize some of the scenes, don't summerize! Such as the first scene, how can we see he is late? does he look at his watch? Hear the late bell ring in school?

From Brad Smith	Date 2/8/2007
This may be the greatest piece of writing I've ever seen. This is right up there next to Quentin Tarantino's stuff. Get this seen and it WILL become a hit.

From Zach Shevich	Date 1/24/2007	0 stars
This must be a joke. There appeared to be no effort at all and it is full of errors. The story makes little sense and the parts that do make sense are uninteresting.

From Zach Aro	Date 1/24/2007
this movie needs more improment on the spelling and grammer and it needs to make some sence.

From Rob	Date 1/23/2007
Wow and not in a good way. Wheres the grammar or spelling. Come on. ANd to have a live feed? A whole class watching tohats so fake. but it could be pretty goo if you work on it.

From Christopher	Date 1/21/2007
I couldn't follow this script at all, the spelling and grammar is horrendus, the whole thing makes no sense, and you have no clue what's going on half the time....

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