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by zudayyah alamin (isis200902@live.com)
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Genre: Family
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When a sister visits her hometown to find closure, she finds something else instead.
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FADE IN:
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EXT. POPULAR AVENUE - LATER - DAY |
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LISA RAE, walks slowly up to the white cottage house. She
taps lightly on the old dilapitated front door. |
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An older LADY, pokes her head from behind it. |
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LADY
You looking for somebody? |
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LISA RAE
I-I'm in town looking for a family
who lived here over thirty years
ago. |
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Lady steps outside the door and gestures to Lisa Rae to sit
down on the stoop. |
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LADY
...and what's your name? |
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LISA RAE
Lisa Rae...
You know them? |
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LISA RAE
The folks I'm looking for. |
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Lisa Rae stands, gazes across the street. She points to both
houses. |
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LISA RAE
My friend Patty used to live here,
and I lived across the street.
She moved away shortly after her
older sister (28) passed away. |
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EXT. POPLAR AVE - PORCH - DAY |
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LISA RAE
I stood there on my porch and
watch the paramedics rush her off
to the hospital.
A Beat
She never came back home. |
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EXT. POPLAR AVE - PORCH - DAY |
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LISA RAE
This may sound a little bizarre,
but, have you seen any ghosts
here? |
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The lady eyes are fixed momentarily at Lisa Rae. She turns
away. |
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Lisa Rae's cell phone rings, she shuts it off. |
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LISA RAE
I've gotta run. We can talk next
week ok. |
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The lady smiles and gestures for Lisa Rae to go on. |
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Lisa Rae hurries to her vehicle. She turns her head to wave.
The lady disappears. |
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EXT. LISA RAY'S APARTMENT - DAY |
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Unlocks the door. |
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INT. LISA RAE'S APARTMENT - DAY |
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Hurriedly kicks off her shoes, throws her purse and coat on
the sofa, while she grabs the phone from the coffee table. |
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Dials some numbers, split screen of Lisa Rae and her niece,
Mariam. |
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LISA RAE
I met a nice lady at the old house
today, we talked for awhile. |
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MARYAM (os)
So what! Why can't you just let my
mom rest in peace. |
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LISA RAE
She was my sister. I won't rest
til I find closure. |
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MARYAM
You always dive deep, don't cha?
You my auntie, but, you just a
little off the chain for me.
A Beat
Quit while you still have some
marbles left. |
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LISA RAE
Good Byeee Maryam! |
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EXT. POPULAR AVENUE - FRONT DOOR OF LADY'S HOUSE. - DAY |
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Lisa Rae taps lightly at the door. The lady opens the door
and inches out...shuts the door behind her.
She gestures to Lisa Rae to have a seat on the stoop. |
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LADY
I'm glad you're back. |
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She hands the lady a long stem fresh red rose. |
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LADY
Thank you! What a kind gesture. |
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LISA RAE
Truth is, I lived here not my
friend Patty. It was my sister who
died.
All these years. I still miss her.
I need to let her go.
I believe you can help me. |
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EXT. POPULAR AVENUE - STOOP - DAY |
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LISA RAE
She was very ill in the bedroom
there. |
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Pointing to the front left bedroom. |
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LISA RAE (vo)
The paramedics rushed out the
house with her in the vehicle. |
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LISA RAE
The weight loss, the foul odor of
death stayed with me for a lonnnng
time. |
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Tears wells up in her eyes. |
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LADY
WOW!, what a story. I'm so sorry
for what happened to your sister, |
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LISA RAE
Me and my family can live in peace
knowing that her spirit
...no longer haunts this old
house. |
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Lisa Rae looks up at the old house. |
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LADY
Why did you say your sister spirit
haunts this house? |
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LISA RAE
Shortly after my sister's death, I
was home one day alone, sitting on
my living room sofa.
The door bell rang. I opened the
door wide and no one was there. I
went outside, looked around both
sides of the house, then the back
of the house.
No living soul was in sight. I
went back inside and dismissed it
as being nothing.
I thought nothing more of it.
After an hour, my friend came over
and the door-bell had its usual
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LISA RAE (cont'd)
ring to it.
I told her what had just happened,
she didn't believe me...said I was
crazy. |
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LADY
Omg! interesting story. So, what
happened after that. Did your
sister ever ring the bell again? |
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LISA RAE (VO)
The bell did ring again.
I knew it was her and I was
relieved to know she was still
hanging around...
She would ring only once each time
she visited.
Shortly after, we eventually
packed up and moved away. |
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EXT. POPLAR AVE - NIGHT |
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We see the house from a distance, in the background we see
bolts of lighting as it strikes across the black sky. |
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INT. LISA RAE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT |
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Camera scans the house and Lisa Rae's bedroom while she
sleeps. Hangs above her bed is a dream catcher. She turns on
her right side, and her left side as she throws the covers
from her body. |
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EXT. POPULAR AVENUE - DAY |
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LISA RAE
Lady, Lady, anybody home.
H-e-l-l-o. anybody home. |
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She pushes open the door and goes inside. She walks around
the house and wipes built up dust and cob webs from the
window sill. We see the withered long stem red rose lying on
the floor. Lisa bends down to pick it up.
She stops to think, then runs out the house to the
neighbors. |
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LISA RAE (panting)
Have you seen the Lady
I visited every week at that
house?
pointing next door.
Did she move? no one's there, the
house has been totally emptied. |
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NEIGHBOR
You must be crazy.
No one has lived in that house for
the past fifteen years. Rumor has
it that it's haunted. |
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LISA RAE
Well, what about me and the lady
sitting on the stoop. you spoke to
us the other day... remember?!! |
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NEIGHBOR
I spoke to you one day, there was
no one sitting on that stoop every
week but you...that's it!!
go get some help. good bye!!!
she slams the door in Lisa Rae's
face. |
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Lisa Rae lights up a cigarette and walks briskly away from
the neighbor's house, She gets into her car, and drives
away. |
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EXT. POPULAR AVENUE - DAY |
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Lisa Rae stands in front of the house.
She stares at the door.
A man and woman appears from inside the house.
The couple stops to stare, they draw closer to her. |
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COUPLE
You ok...
looks like you just seen a ghost. |
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Walks towards her car. |
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LISA RAE
No... just wanted to have a last
look. |
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COUPLE
We recently bought this house and
we plan to build a bigger house on
the lot. |
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LISA RAE
That's nice. Nice meeting you. |
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Lisa Rae waves good-bye to the couple and speeds off. |
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INT. LISA RAE'S APARTMENT - LIVING ROOM - NIGHT |
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She falls alseep on the sofa with the TV on. |
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INT. POPLAR AVE - DREAM - DAY |
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We see the Lady MOUTH to Lisa Rae "Thank You"! |
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INT. LISA RAE'S LIVING ROOM - NIGHT |
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Lisa Rae wakes up, turns off the TV, goes into the bedroom,
crawls into the bed and turns off the light. |
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EXT. AMTRAK TRAIN - DAY |
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We see the train as it travels slowly, then swiftly down the
tracks. |
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FADE OUT. |
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| Feedback |
| From Daniel |
Date 1/31/2007 |
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| Need to improve on not detailing it on certain spots because if your gonna detail the introduction but not the main part of the story then its just weird. Be consistent with detailing your work to get more viewers and one more thing. a horror movie is not considered a horror if its rated PG...things like that don't attract readers because they dont expect things from a PG rated horror movie. |
| From Boris Novak |
Date 1/31/2007 |
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| Not bad at all. The montage sequence should be formatted as action/direction, not as dialogue. Big no-no there. Also, narration dialogue needs to either be separated or shortened. Take out the long-winded narrative and keep the story progressively paced.
With these corrections, this could be verrry nice. Great effort! |
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