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Suspiciously Perfect Girl (short)
by Justin (jmllr89@yahoo.com)

Rated: PG-13   Genre: Drama   User Review: *1/2
A young man finds a girl at work to be almost too much of a perfect match for him. So perfect she just might not exist. This is my first script I have ever written and it was for a contest. So the more comments the better


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FADE IN:

INT. SHOPPING MALL PARKING LOT - DAY
                                                            
A young man, approximately 18 years of age steps out of his
car in an almost empty parking lot. BOB'S ENTERTAINMENT
MEMORABILIA is stitched on his uniform.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Another day, another dollar.
                                                            
He reaches in his pocket and jingles his keys, then closes
the door to his car.
                                                            
MICHEAL slowly makes his way towards the mall entrance.
                                                            
 
INT. BOB’S ENTERTAINMENT MEMORABLIA - DAY
                                                            
Michael walks through the entrance to see a man cleaning the
glass on display cases.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
So, how's Eugene today.
                                                            
The man turns slowly to look at Michael.
                                                            
                       EUGENE
Eugene is doing fine today. I have
someone here you should meet.
                                                            
EUGENE points towards the cash register, where a startlingly
good looking woman stands arranging the miscellaneous items
on the counter.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Hello
                                                            
                       WOMAN
Hi, nice to meet you. I'm Megan.
                                                            
                       EUGENE
Well, now that you've met your new
co-worker. You should find
something to do and stop standing
around.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
You know you are not a very
intimidating person, right?
                                                            
MEGAN laughs.
                                                            

2.

                       EUGENE
Shut up and just find something to
do.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
      (whispers)
Like your mom.
                                                            
                       EUGENE
What did you just say? Didn't I
tell you if you said a your mother
joke again, it would be your job.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I believe he said, this job is the
bomb.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Thank you Megan.
                                                            
Michael walks over to the counter.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
My name is Micheal by the way.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I know Eugene told me already.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Oh..Ok
                                                            
Micheal makes his way toward the back of the store
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
It's a yo momma joke, anyways.
                                                            
 
INT. STORE ROOM - DAY
                                                            
Micheal and Megan are both arranging boxes.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
So are you like obsessed with
movies as much as I am.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I don't think you can even compare
yourself with me in that area.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Oh, really. I beg to differ, but
whatever floats your boat.
                                                            

3.

                       MICHAEL
That's right, it does float my
boat.
                                                            
They both laugh.
                                                            
Micheal pulls a poster out of a box. He opens it up and
reveals a movie from the late fifties. Causually he rolls it
back up and places it back into the bow; and pulls out
another poster.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
You see this.
      (Unravels poster)
I have seen pretty much every
movie we carry posters for, and
that's a lot.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
What about the first one.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
What do you mean.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Why didn't you say that holding
the first one up.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Oh, just didn't feel like it.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Right.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
OK you got me. It's not my fault I
wasn't born like sixty years ago.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I've seen that movie
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Well good for you.
                                                            
They both laugh, and smile at each other.
                                                            
 
INT. MICHEALS TELIVISON ROOM - DAY
                                                            
Micheal is sitting on the couch with two his two best
friends. They are playing video games and relaxing.
                                                            

4.

                       MICHAEL
There was a new girl at work
today.
                                                            
                       GREGG
Was she hot.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Yeah but that's not important
                                                            
                       ADAM
What! Yeah it is, numb nuts.
                                                            
                       GREGG
I knew you were gay.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I'm not gay you fag.
                                                            
They all laugh and continue playing the game.
                                                            
Micheal beats both of his friends and they get upset.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Anyways, we have like everything
in common. We spent the whole day
talking.
                                                            
                       GREGG
If she likes the same things as
you she has to look like and ape.
                                                            
                       ADAM
Is that a racial slur.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
What, that doesn't even make
sense? Anyways, I think I'm going
to see if she wants to go out for
diner sometime.
                                                            
                       ADAM
UH OH. A date.
                                                            
                       GREGG
Good luck with that.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Well, I don't know what could go
wrong.
                                                            
 

5.

INT. BOB’S ENTERTAINMENT MEMORABILIA - DAY
                                                            
The store is almost empty with customers, and Micheal and
Megan stand by a rack of CD's stocking them.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
So…by any chance do you want to go
get something to eat after work
today.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Yeah, I'm already hungry. Were do
you want to go.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Anywhere is fine with me.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
How about that new Chinese
restaruant.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Hell yeah, Chinese food is my
favorite.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Mine too.
                                                            
 
EXT. OUTSIDE CHINESE RESTRAUNT - NIGHT
                                                            
Micheal and Megan walk into the restraunt.
                                                            
 
INT. CHINESE RESTRAUNT - NIGHT
                                                            
Micheal and Megan sit in the extravagant new restraunt.
                                                            
They both eat their diner's and have a good time laughing
and playing around.
                                                            
 
EXT. CHINESE RESTRAUNT - NIGHT
                                                            
The doors open to the restraunt and a group of people come
out. Bringing up the end Micheal and Megan exit the
building, and break from the crowd heading their own way.
                                                            
They are alone walking to their cars.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Isnt it weird how we're like
twins. I mean we both have the
same first letter in our name and
            (MORE)

6.

                       MEGAN (cont'd)
everything. I mean were like the
exact person.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Yeah it is weird. You know what
would be even more weird…if you
were like not even real. Like a
figment of my imagination.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I have to admit, that would be
pretty sweet.
                                                            
Both carry on laughing as the approach their cars.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
We need to do this more often
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Really, that would awesome
                                                            
                       MEGAN
I'll email you or something
tomorrow
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Sounds good to me.
                                                            
 
INT. MICHAELS ROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Micheal is alone in his room on his laptop.
He searches for split personality disorder. He clicks on a
link describing the symptoms of the disease.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Depression…well I guess I could
have that. Amnesia…I do have
trouble sleeping at night.
                                                            
Micheal leans in closer to the computer
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Headaches or other pains…oh my
god, I think Im freaking tripping
out man.
                                                            
Micheal clicks the mouse
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
What about Schizophrenia, what's
the symptoms for that.
                                                            

7.

Michael stays up all through the night on his computer.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL (VO)
Eugene talked to her though. But I
guess that could have just been
imagined. Have I ever seen anyone
look at her before. Man I'm losing
it.
                                                            
 
INT. BOB’S ENTERTAINMENT STORE - DAY
                                                            
Michael walks up to Megan after helping the only customer in
the store.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Hey, let's go bug Eugene.
                                                            
Megan puts down a roll of tape.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
OK sounds like fun.
                                                            
Both of them walk over to the storeroom door.
Eugene walks out of it.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Hey! Eugene how's it hangin.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
And you know what he means by that
don't you.
                                                            
                       EUGENE
That's none of your business.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
None of my business or…
                                                            
Michael looks over at Megan.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
OH…so am I not here or something
                                                            
                       EUGENE
You kids need to find something to
do, before I fire you for creeping
me out.
                                                            
                       MEGAN
Sounds like a plan.
                                                            

8.

                       MICHAEL
Stan.
                                                            
                       EUGENE
What?
                                                            
                       MEGAN
That's right.
                                                            
Eugene walks back into the store room slowly.
                                                            
Michael and Megan both laugh and carry on working.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
      (whispers)
Well that solves that problem, now
I know I'm not crazy.
                                                            
 
EXT. OUTSIDE MALL - DAY
                                                            
Michael gets out of his car. Spinning his keys on his
finger.
                                                            
He shuts the door to his car.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
I love work.
                                                            
Michael continues happily into the mall.
                                                            
 
INT. BOB’S ENTERTAINMENT MEMORABILIA - DAY
                                                            
Michael walks up to the opening of the store, and stands
there.
                                                            
Eugene and Megan are in the same places they were the first
day he met Megan.
                                                            
                       MICHAEL
Hello, everyone.
                                                            
No one responds.
                                                            
We change to Megan's P.O.V. and glance over to where Micheal
was standing. He is no longer there.
                                                            
We then change to Eugene's P.O.V. as he glance over and
looks at both Michael and Megan.
                                                            

9.

BANG. A shot rings out through the mall. A man dressed in a
black trench coat walks by the store opening. He raises his
gun.
                                                            
 
INT. HOSPITAL - DAY
                                                            
The noise of life support machines can be heard as we watch
an all white screen.
                                                            
Slowly the room comes into focus, and a hospital room can be
made out.
                                                            
                       WOMAN
You're awake, I knew you would
someday.
                                                            
We look down to see an older person's arms, lying across a
plump stomach. One hand is raised and looked at curiously.
                                                            
                       WOMAN
What are you doing Eugene.
                                                            
                       EUGENE
What? Who am I.
                                                            
The woman is immediately overcome with sadness.
                                                            
                       EUGENE
Michael?
                                                            
                       WOMAN
He's…he's dead honey. So is Megan,
they passed during the shooting.
                                                            
We look at Eugene in his hospital bed with his head wrapped
in gauze and a blank confused face
                                                            
                       WOMAN
Poor girl. Her first day of work,
and Micheal always was your
favorite.
                                                            


FADE OUT.


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From Alex Ash Date 1/26/2009 *1/2
I liked the idea, but I got really confused around the middle to the end. The ending was really unexpected, which I liked but it didn't seem to fit in with the story.

From Fish Stark Date 4/5/2008 1/2
It made little sense. I really didn't understand what was going on. Also, please remember that there is something called a 'question mark', that normally comes after a question. You might want to try using it once in a while.

From Josh A. Echevarria Date 3/31/2008 **
It was a really interesting concept. The end was really great because it was totally unexpected. But the ending was very confusing. The script needs more work. It should be a lot longer. You need alot more time to develop the characters and ideas. It is really unrealistic that a guy would think he has something wrong with him after only a few days of meeting a girl who is very similar to him. It is a good first attempt but there is no such thing as a perfect script in the first try. Your always going to need to revise and re-edit till you reach perfection.


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