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The Clantons
by Brett (golfnotom@hotmail.com)

Rated: PG-13   Genre: Comedy   User Review: ***1/2
An episode of Two and a half men


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From Frank D. Antonacci Date 6/16/2011 ***1/2
Good job ! Good premise ! Some of the dialog is not true to the characters but overall, a GOOD episode !

From John Thompson Date 4/21/2010 ****
This was very funny.It kept me entertained.Thanks.Keep up the great work.

From maribel Date 4/15/2010 ***1/2
has a couple typos. but its great.

From Robert Kent Date 4/11/2010 *1/2
This screenplay has some resemblance to the TV show, but I feel that there are certain things that are just out of place with regards to the characters. While sex is a constant theme in the show, it also has jokes about other things; this screenplay is just about sex. Also, Charlie would never tell Alan that his sex life is over simply because he's having dreams about Berta. He would try to find other solutions first to these weird dreams, but he would never give up sex. And he would never identify a Queen song. And Evelyn would never be so blunt as to tell Charlie, "How long is it gonna take for you to get off your ass and open the door." Evelyn is very catty but in a very subtle way. Why is Greta the witch at a Malibu mall? It seems like the wrong venue for her. And why is Alan asking for a hex on Charlie? Did Charlie say or do something to him that morning to make him want to seek revenge? Alan is continually disgusted by Charlie's behavior, but he wouldn't just seek revenge unless his brother actually did something reprehensible to him. And why would Charlie want to punish Alan once he learns of the witch's "spell"? Charlie would be the least likely to believe that such a thing could possibly work. Alan might, but Charlie wouldn't.

From frances small Date 3/17/2010 ****
I liked this, really had the feel of the TV show. Some extremely slight tweaks and you have a winner!


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