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a walk in the not so safe park
by Kit (raykat12@gmail.com)

Rated: PG   Genre: Comedy   User Review: **
Tom wants a normal day and a normal walk in the park... Well until people start to beat him up for no reason and a Weird kid keeeps shouting at him.... what else could go wrong


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A WALK IN THE NOT SO SAFE PARK

FADE IN:

EXT. PARK - DAY
                                                            
Tom enters
                                                            
                       TOM
      (smiling)
What a lovely day in the Park
                                                            
Than a small girl comes up
                                                            
                       TOM
      (still smiling)
Why hello there-
                                                            
place camra behind the girl so you only see him and her back
                                                            
Girl kicks his shins
                                                            
camra shows him falling in pain and goes to her
                                                            
                       SMALL GIRL
      (yelling)
Stranger
                                                            
girl walks away. Jayson enter
                                                            
camrea getts a side view of him walking in and closes him on
the face
                                                            
                       JAYSON
      (shouts)
DON'T GO TOWARDS THE LIGHT!
                                                            
Jayson exits
Tom gets up
                                                            
                       TOM
      (getting up)
Ow! That hurt! Who was that kid?
                                                            
Starts walking when a BIG GUY walks up
                                                            
                       TOM
      (staring at him)
Uh.... Hi
                                                            
BIG GUY knees him in the gut
                                                            

2.

                       BIG GUY
      (glaring at Tom)
Jerk
                                                            
BIG GUY walks away
Jayson enters
                                                            
                       JAYSON
      (Yelling)
DON'T GO TOWARDS THE LIGHT!
                                                            
JAYSON exits
                                                            
                       TOM
      (getting up)
What is with this place.
                                                            
SOME GUY walks up an holds out his hand
                                                            
                       TOM
      (screaming)
AHHH! he is going to slap me!
                                                            
                       SOME GUY
      (conused)
No, High five!
                                                            
                       TOM
      (high fiveing hm)
I knew that
                                                            
Some guy exits confused
Jayson enters
                                                            
                       JAYSON
      (calmly)
Don't go towards the light.
                                                            
he exits
                                                            
                       TOM
      (calling off stage)
Who are you?
                                                            
A girl walks up
                                                            
                       TOM
      (holds out his
       hand)
Hi!
                                                            

3.

                       GIRL 1
      (stomps on foot)
Leave me alone!
                                                            
she exits
                                                            
                       TOM
      (holding smushed
       foot)
what did I do?
                                                            
                       JAYSON
      (walks in)
DON'T GO TOWARDS THE LIGHT!
                                                            
EXITS
                                                            
                       TOM
      (looking in the
       direction jayson
       left)
I DON'T EVEN KNOW YOU!
                                                            
3 GIRLS WALK IN
                                                            
                       TOM
      (looking at the
       girls)
Hello there ladies!
                                                            
                       GIRL 2
      (slaps him)
Creep
                                                            
                       GIRL 3
      (slaps him twice)
creepy creep
                                                            
                       GIRL 4
      (flips him)
creepy Jerk
                                                            
they exit
                                                            
                       TOM
      (crying)
what did I do to desirve this?!
                                                            
jayson enters
                                                            

4.

                       JAYSON
      (looking at TOM)
dude.....DON'T GO TOWARDS THE
LIGHT!
                                                            
EXITS
                                                            
                       TOM
      (getting up)
Is that guy stalking me?
                                                            
Starts to walk and finds him self in a judo class and a
whole bunch of kids watching
                                                            
                       TOM
      (looks scared)
oh no
                                                            
sensei looks at him
                                                            
                       TOM
      (waves nervously)
Uhhhhh....Hi?
                                                            
                       SENSEI
      (POINTS)
ATTACK!
                                                            
                       KIDS
      (SCREAMS)
                                                            
                       TOM
      (screams and runs)
What did I DOOOOOOO?!
                                                            
kids starts to chase him and he runs off screen
                                                            
Camrea fallows him across feild and kids chaseing him
                                                            
 
INT. LATER - DAY
                                                            
                       TOM
      (panting and
       hideing behind a
       tree)
I think I lost them
                                                            
                       JAYSON
      (suddenly next to
       Tom)
I think so too
                                                            

5.

                       TOM
      (jumping and
       shouting in
       surpise)
AH... Who are you? Are you a
stalker?
                                                            
                       JAYSON
      (looking at him)
Jayson and I am not a stalker
                                                            
                       TOM
      (grabbing his head
       in frustration)
What is with tis place?
                                                            
                       JAYSON
      (Laughts)
It is a hoilday
                                                            
                       TOM
      (confused)
Huh?
                                                            
                       JAYSON
      (looks dramatic)
do you REALLY want to know?
                                                            
                       TOM
      (nodds)
yes!
                                                            
                       JAYSON
      (smiles)
It is beat up who ever greets you
day!
                                                            


THE END


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From Christian Mitchell Date 2/8/2011 **
The idea of beat up whoever greets you is sort of funny in itself, but it definitely isn't enough to stand on its own for more than five minutes. Still, this seems like this could be a funny scene within a larger comedy, as long as there the context is provided.

From Joshua Date 1/27/2011 **
This reminds me of the kind of humor that would be on a kid's tv show. This is sort of repetitive, leading to a strange punchline. While it is very interesting, the idea of beat-up-who-ever-greets-you-day seems a little bit far-fetched, made worse by the fact that no one seems to know about the holiday. Otherwise it frankly seems like he's a bit of a psychopath, though that's sort of the point.


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