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The Necklace
by albert capehart (libertystars2012@yahoo.com)

Rated: PG-13   Genre: Drama   User Review: *


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FADE IN:

INT. GOODBYES - AFTERNOON
                                                            
Allen and Eve was sitting on a log by the lake,and in Allen
hands was two heart ship nicklace.
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (LOOK DEEP IN EVE
       EYES)
come on!!! it's not goodbye. by
the way. i will always be right
next to you. all you have to do is
hold this and think about me. and
i will be doing the same.
                                                            
turning her face from him with a sad look on her
face.holding the necklace from him and with a watering
eyes.holding him like it was no tomorrow
                                                            
                       EVE
      (sad)
but why nigerian army? why can't
you just still here in liberia
with us.its just the same army
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (pull away still
       holding her by
       the showers)
Eve i know its the same army but
the pay is more in nigera
                                                            
                       EVE
how long will you be gone for than
                                                            
                       ALLEN
i don't know yet but am leaving
tomorrow. will you be there to see
me off?
                                                            
                       EVE
i will try my best to make it.i
will be going to the USA soon with
my family
                                                            
                       ALLEN
i got a brother out there. my
older brother. i have not seen him
for long now. if he was here
everything will be ok
                                                            

2.

                       EVE
i will miss you Allen
                                                            
                       ALLEN
i will miss you too. make sure you
never lose this chain, i will find
you one day. i love you
                                                            
                       EVE
i love you to
                                                            
in saying goodbyes with a kiss on the lips. holding each
other like there is no tomorrow.
                                                            
 
INT. 20 YEARS WHEN BY --USA - MORNING
                                                            
Eve has grown up and got marry to Allen brother in the U.S
not knowing it was his brother
that morning Eve and her husband Jimmy was at the dinner
table eating breakfast.some eggs and tea with toast. Jimmy
was ready for work and Eve was ready for he everyday turn
around the house.at the table holding his cup in his heans.
Jimmy said
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
      (happy)
honey thanks for the food it was
good.
                                                            
                       EVE
      (happy)
you are welcome my love
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
i don't want to be leat for work
today so i better be going now.
which the new boss they got
everybody has to be on time
                                                            
                       EVE
let me get your bag
                                                            
getting out chair and leaving the dinner table.she walked to
the leaving room where his bag was siting on the chair.
                                                            
was standing by the door waiting for Eve she came head him
the bag kissed him and said her goodbyes
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
love you
                                                            

3.

                       EVE
love you more
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
i will call you when i get to
work, have a good day babe
                                                            
walking out the front door Jimmy got into his car and pulled
out the parking
Eve when back into the house,made sure she cleaned the
house,got in her car
                                                            
 
INT. SCARLET AND STEVE HOUSE - MORNING
                                                            
Steve in the shower singing, and Scarlet in the birthroom
standing by the door putting on her make up.
                                                            
                       SCARLET
are going to still in there all
day?
                                                            
                       STEVE
am taking a shower, what now
                                                            
                       SCARLET
all your friends are at work and
what are you doing taking shower.
what kind of man are you Steve?
                                                            
                       STEVE
what are you talking about.i do
work. is it not my money that pays
the bill?
                                                            
                       SCARLET
get a job a real job.
                                                            
rolling her eyes and walking out the birthroom
                                                            
steve getting out the shower with no cloths on walking and
room. standing in front of scarlet, she looking at him up
and down
                                                            
                       STEVE
now what where you saying?
                                                            
                       SCARLET
if its was not because of your sex
I will be gone
                                                            

4.

                       STEVE
you got that right.. now get dress
because you have to drop me off..
                                                            
walking away from in front of her. she looking at his butt
                                                            
 
INT. JIMMIE OFFICE - AFTERNOON
                                                            
Jimmie sitting in his office working on the computer. when
Scarlet walked in his office and sitting on the table.
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
what are you doing? this is the
office
                                                            
                       SCARLET
      (sexy)
what make this day any diff from
all the other times you had me
right on this table?
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
what if my wife shows up her? and
see you like this
                                                            
                       SCARLET
don't you want me? yes or no?
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
I do. but we can't keep doing
this.lets go to the hotel
                                                            
                       SCARLET
I like it right here. its more
                                                            
Jimmie started kissing all over nick
                                                            
after they got done doing something he got the phone to call
his wife. Scarlet putting on her cloths and leaving the
office. giving him air kiss
                                                            
 
INT. GYM - LATER
                                                            
after her day to day time at the gym. she got back to the
house took a shower. looking for her ring,the chain from
long ago that Allen had given to her fall on the floor.she
got down holding in her hends. she had a look back into the
pass,to the moment when Allen said i will always be with
you.
after she put it back on her nick and when on with her
business in the living room. siting in the living room her

5.

cell phone was ringing it was Jimmy calling from work.she
took the phone off the table answer
                                                            
                       EVE
hey honey. How's work going?
                                                            
Jimmy in the office
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
      (on phone)
work is same old same old.how is
your day going?
                                                            
                       EVE
just got out the shower babe.
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
what do you got on?
                                                            
                       EVE
wait til you get home big boy
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
don;t forget after work i will
come get you. you know we have to
go get my brother from the
airport, he is coming in today.
                                                            
                       EVE
how can i forget that.i hope he
likes me
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
this is his first time in the U.S
after the war the army had no use
for them so they send him her
                                                            
                       EVE
: i will be ready babe.
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
i got to get back to work will see
you. Bye I love you
                                                            
                       EVE
love you to.
                                                            
 
INT. STEVE AT WORK AT THE AIRPORT - MOMENTS LATER
                                                            
Allen walking to get his bag, steve seen him walk up to him
                                                            

6.

                       STEVE
you in the army brother?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
yes I was but not anymore,
                                                            
                       STEVE
you just got in?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
yes, do you know where I can find
my bag?
                                                            
                       STEVE
come on I can show you,by the way
thanks.
                                                            
                       ALLEN
for?
                                                            
                       STEVE
if it not for you boys in the
army. than I got to go to war. its
a good thing your doing out there
                                                            
                       ALLEN
you welcome
                                                            
                       STEVE
just go right over there and wait
your bag will come on that thing
                                                            
                       ALLEN
thanks.
                                                            
                       STEVE
by the way here is my number call
me sometimes if you need anything
                                                            
                       ALLEN
thanks
                                                            
walking away
                                                            
 
INT. AIRPORT - LATER
                                                            
In the car Eve and Jimmy got to the airport parked the car
and when in to find Allen.
Allen was standing in the airport with his army cloths on.
Looking like he was lost.
When he saw his brother. They had a happy time together.
Huge each other with faces laugh.
                                                            

7.

                       JIMMIE
      (joy)
wow look at my brother, you all
grown up now wow.is this really
you?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
wow brother you also got big. Look
at your hair and what do they call
that?
                                                            
Eve standing there with a smile on her face
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
      (smile)
sorry. Brother I want you to meet
someone, Eve come meet my brother
Gus.Gus meet my wife Eve
                                                            
                       ALLEN
she is beauty full brother. You
did well for yourself. It's nice
to meet you.
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
let's go we got more time to talk.
Let me help you with your bag
brother
                                                            
                       ALLEN
it's been long.25 years now. So
this is the powerful US everybody
keep talking about here?
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
this is just one part there is
more to see, we are going to have
so much fun now you are here
                                                            
                       EVE
just make sure your save some of
the fun for me now
                                                            
They all smile together
They got in the car leaving the airport.
                                                            
 
INT. JIMMIE AND EVE HOUSE - LATER
                                                            
They pull up in the drive way
Allen was like
                                                            

8.

                       ALLEN
      (wow)
this is your house?
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
yes, home sweet home brother, you
are going to love it here,
                                                            
                       ALLEN
what I want, is some of African
food your got here
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
you came to the right house than,
Eve makes the best African food
around here
                                                            
Siting in the back
                                                            
                       EVE
anything you want I can make it
for you.
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
just make sure you make some for
me to.
                                                            
                       ALLEN
you don't have to worry brother
when am done there will be no food
lift for you
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
I believe you. Honey don't see
this guy like this oh he can eat
                                                            
Parking in the drive way they got out the car, took the bags
from the back Eve when and open the door.
They walked in the house Allen took one look at the inside
of the house and when
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (wow)
wow. You did do well for yourself
brother,
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
together brother we can make it
better, am so happy you are home
now. Eve will show you to your
room, I got some work to do in the
office.
                                                            

9.

                       ALLEN
I just got here, and you leaving
man you never change
                                                            
Jimmy and Allen huge each other and.
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
Eve will take good care of you; we
still got the weekend to have fun
together
                                                            
                       ALLEN
ok than
                                                            
                       EVE
don't worry Gus I will be nice
                                                            
Jimmy kisses Eve and walked to the door, opening the door
saying
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
I will see you guys tonight around
seven
                                                            
                       ALLEN
ok
                                                            
                       EVE
let me take you to your room.
                                                            
Walking up to the room she opens the door putting the bags
down,
                                                            
                       EVE
hope its ok for you I did my best
in setting it up
                                                            
                       ALLEN
it's better than what I had back
in the army
                                                            
                       EVE
than its set than. I will be down
if you need anything feel free to
call me
                                                            
                       ALLEN
thanks for my brother
                                                            
                       EVE
anytime
                                                            

10.

Than Eve walked out the room and close the door, standing in
the room Allen looked around the room, he took a sit on the
bed. Falling back on his back
                                                            
 
INT. JIMMIE AND EVE HOUSE - EVENING
                                                            
It was around seven that evening Jimmy pulls in the drive
way getting out the car opening the door to his house.
That night Jimmy and Eve were getting ready for bed walking
to the bed getting in it
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
so how did he like the room?
                                                            
                       EVE
I think he loves it, he been
sleeping the whole day, the army
was hard on him
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
yes it was, a kid his age in the
army was hard at the time, having
to leave all you know was hard
                                                            
                       EVE
wow that's sad, I hope he likes
the new life here all that is over
he can start over
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
      (Turning to Eve
       Jimmy kiss her
       and said his good
       night)
good night babe
                                                            
                       EVE
good night
                                                            
 
INT. SCARLET HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
                                                            
scarlet and steve in bed scarlet got her phone and start to
dal Jimmie number
                                                            
                       STEVE
who are you calling at this time
of night?
                                                            
                       SCARLET
get a job like a real man than I
can answer you
                                                            

11.

steve looking her like she was out of her mind
                                                            
BACK IN JIMMIE AND EVE HOUSE
                                                            
Jimmie phone starts to ring over and over again
                                                            
                       EVE
but honey answer your phone.
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
      (looking at the
       phone)
its no body. just the job calling.
thats how they get you, when I
answer this phone right now its
more work
                                                            
back in scarlet house she keep calling but no answer, she
got mad and got out the bed
                                                            
                       STEVE
so what did he not answer?
                                                            
                       SCARLET
pls don't start with me tonight or
you will sleep outside
                                                            
                       STEVE
so that why you don't want to get
marry.to be calling your friends
them husband at night, let me go
to sleep. just make sure he pays
you this time
                                                            
scarlet walking out the room.
                                                            
 
INT. KITCHEN - MORNING
                                                            
It was morning that Eve enter the kitchen put some tea on
the stove, and set up the table with some tea cups and
apples and orange making breakfast.in making breakfast that
morning Jimmy walked in the kitchen ready for work. He
walked to Eve kissing her on the lips saying
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
morning babe. How was your night?
                                                            
                       EVE
wonderful honey, how did you
sleep?
                                                            

12.

                       JIMMIE
I feel like a baby
                                                            
Eve looked at him and laugh, Jimmy when and took a sit at
the table, taking morning newspapers to read.
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
: is Allen still sleeping?
                                                            
                       EVE
I don't think so; I can hear the
shower running
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
go try and call him down for
breakfast
                                                            
                       EVE
ok, help yourself to some tea
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
ok
                                                            
Eve lift the kitchen, when she got in front of Allen she
knock the door three times. But there was no answer.so she
decided to open the door to let him know in the shower.
right when she open the door Allen had just got out the
shower and was coming to open the door in his (t).right when
she walked in she was shy, taking a look at his body with
the water running down his body.so she put her head down.
Pulling away.
                                                            
                       EVE
      (wow)
am so sorry I knock but there was
no answer, wanted to let you know
that your breakfast is ready
                                                            
                       ALLEN
its ok, I was in the shower just
got out, as you can see
                                                            
Keeping her head down Eve turned around and walked at the
room closing the door. And standing in front of the door
taking in a deep breath.
                                                            
                       EVE
wow
                                                            
Five minutes later Allen came walking into the kitchen,
Jimmy and Eve was sitting around the table eating breakfast.
                                                            

13.

                       JIMMIE
I hope you like eggs brother,
because she killed this one
                                                            
                       EVE
stop playing
                                                            
                       ALLEN
all this for me? Its gonna take me
some time to get use to all this
                                                            
                       EVE
so Gus how was the army like?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
the army can do things to a man,
he will never forgets,
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
who woulden like to travel the
world.if I was back home I will
had enter into the army to.
                                                            
                       EVE
honey the was you like life, you
can not make it in the army
                                                            
And they all laugh out loud
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
anyways I got to get going see you
guys after work, and Allen Eve
will show you around today.
tomorrow my day off for the
weekend so we can have some fun
together.
                                                            
                       ALLEN
will hold you on to that
                                                            
Kissing his wife goodbye Jimmy walked out the door.
                                                            
 
INT. ALLEN SITTING IN THE KITCHEN - MORNING
                                                            
It was morning Allen was sitting in the kitchen at the table
drinking some tea,when Eve walked into the kitchen all
dressed up ready for the market. she when up to him standing
by the door way.
                                                            
                       EVE
good morning
                                                            

14.

                       ALLEN
      (Then Allen looked
       up at her and
       said)
good morning
                                                            
                       EVE
am going to the market to get some
food, will you like to come with?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
I will love to.it was will nice to
get out for a change
                                                            
                       EVE
I will be waiting in the car
outside
                                                            
                       ALLEN
ok let me put on some closth
                                                            
Eve walked to the door open it got in the car, after three
to four mins Allen came walking out the door locking it and
getting in the car.
Driving on the way to the market In the car
                                                            
                       EVE
so how do you like it so far?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
its ok,I can tell you its better
than where I was, that's for sure
                                                            
                       EVE
why did you get into the army if I
may ask?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
at the time I was all long back in
Africa when my brother lift to
come to the states. the only
parson I had was my good friend,
who I have not seen for years
                                                            
                       EVE
I once use to love someone back
than but he when off to the army
too and that was it
                                                            
                       ALLEN
she was everything to me we did
everything together
                                                            

15.

                       EVE
wow but what happen?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
the army that's what happen
                                                            
                       EVE
whats her name I may know her
                                                            
Just when eve said that a car came crossing in front of them
taking her away from the conversayion. In a loud voice
                                                            
                       EVE
what the hell man, don't you
fucking know how to drive.
                                                            
                       EVE
      (Than she turned
       to Allen and said)
are you ok?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
am fin, are you ok?
                                                            
                       EVE
sorry people just don't know to
drive any more
                                                            
Allen looked at Eve
                                                            
                       EVE
There we go.
                                                            
 
INT. IN THE MARKET - CONTINUOUS
                                                            
allen and eve in the market walking around when Scarlet seen
them coming and called out to eve
                                                            
                       SCARLET
eve..eve.
                                                            
Eve turn around
                                                            
they ran to each other
                                                            
                       EVE
hi girl, how are you
                                                            
                       SCARLET
am ok, long time no see
                                                            

16.

                       EVE
hows everything with you and
Steve?
                                                            
                       SCARLET
its ok, you know how it is when
you loving to men who don't want
to grown up..so who is this?
                                                            
                       EVE
oh sorry, Scarlet meet Allen my
husband brother
                                                            
                       SCARLET
how are you?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
good. nice to meet you
                                                            
                       SCARLET
so Eve hows your husband. what's
his name again?
                                                            
                       EVE
he's good he is at work right now
                                                            
                       SCARLET
I say that's how its should be,
                                                            
                       EVE
what are you talking about again
girl
                                                            
                       SCARLET
all steve do is walking around
doing notting..I got to do
everything in the house
                                                            
                       EVE
talk to him
                                                            
                       SCARLET
everyday talking and talking, by
the way I got to go,, see you some
other time. nice to have met you
Allen
                                                            
                       ALLEN
you to
                                                            
                       EVE
bye girl
                                                            

17.

walking away
                                                            
 
INT. ALLEN IN THE GMY WORKING OUT - EVENING
                                                            
 
INT. JIMMIE AND EVE HOUSE IN FRONT - AFTERNOON
                                                            
Scarlet walking out the door and Jimmie standing to the door
kissing her bye.
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
do you have to leave so soon?
                                                            
                       SCARLET
yes,but i will be back,you know us
girls got to look good.its just my
nails,before you open your eyes i
will be back
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
what time because i don't know
when Eve is gonna be back
                                                            
                       SCARLET
i will call first ok
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
ok see you,love you
                                                            
they kissed.walking away to her car getting in and driving
away
                                                            
 
INT. NAIL SHOP - DAY
                                                            
Siting in the nail shop Eve got a call on her cell phone
Eve answer the phone, it was her best friend Roxy
                                                            
                       EVE
Hello
                                                            
ROXY HOUSE
                                                            
In her house taking a shower
                                                            
                       ROXY
hey girl, how you doing?
                                                            
                       EVE
am doing good. How about you?
                                                            

18.

                       ROXY
girl you will not beleave what
happen to me yesterday girl
                                                            
                       EVE
tell me pls I want to know
                                                            
                       ROXY
: do you know that this man was
sleeping with his sister boyfriend
in our bed when I got home.
                                                            
                       EVE
what the hell. How did you find
out?
                                                            
                       ROXY
it when like this girl I came home
thinking this shit is home so I
can get mu fucking on, when to the
room open the door, and he all up
in this man ass, I was feeling so
stupid
                                                            
                       EVE
      (with a loud voice)
what the fuck rock-c
                                                            
Woman doing Eve nail look at her and said
                                                            
                       NAIL WOMAN
keep it down pls
                                                            
                       EVE
sorry
                                                            
                       ROXY
who was that?
                                                            
                       EVE
am at the nail shop, I feel so
sorry for you. You need to find
yourself a good man, someone to
love you for you
                                                            
                       ROXY
so tell me how is he?
                                                            
                       EVE
he who?
                                                            

19.

                       ROXY
Jimmie brother the one who came
back from the army
                                                            
                       EVE
girl that man do not want you
                                                            
                       ROXY
now did I say I wanted him, all I
ask was how is he?
                                                            
                       EVE
how is he in what way now?
                                                            
                       ROXY
have getting marry made you slow.
Is he good looking
                                                            
                       EVE
what I don't be looking at him
like that pls his my husband
brother
                                                            
                       ROXY
tell me
                                                            
                       EVE
he kind of good looking it runs in
the family
                                                            
                       ROXY
I want to see him
                                                            
                       EVE
why, I am not letting you around
this man pls
                                                            
                       ROXY
I don't care am coming over now
                                                            
                       EVE
am not home
                                                            
                       ROXY
when you get home call me let me
know pls I got to see this man
                                                            
                       EVE
bye
                                                            
                       ROXY
see you girl
                                                            

20.

scarlet walked into the nail shop not seeing Eve. when she
pass
                                                            
                       EVE
hi girl
                                                            
                       SCARLET
whats up, you come here to?
                                                            
                       EVE
yes,wow they way am seeing you i
hope its good luck oh
                                                            
                       SCARLET
i know right.its nice seeing you
again
                                                            
                       EVE
ok. am done. make sure you call me
so we can make up old time
                                                            
                       SCARLET
ok. i sure will
                                                            
scarlet walked to one of the chair and took a sit
                                                            
                       LOVE
my girl,so what can i do for you
today
                                                            
                       SCARLET
your own done act you don't know
what i like.
                                                            
                       LOVE
times change girl.but don't worry
i got you.
                                                            
 
INT. JIMMIE AND EVE HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
                                                            
After working out Allen back to the house standing in the
kitchen getting something to drink, when he look up Roxy was
standing right over him, he grub her by the nick and put her
on the wall.
                                                            
                       ALLEN
who are you what do you want?
                                                            
                       EVE
      (Eve came running
       in the kitchen)
let her go she is my friend
                                                            

21.

                       ROXY
yes am her friend
                                                            
                       ALLEN
oh am soo sorry,did I hurt you
                                                            
                       ROXY
don't worry about it that's the
last time I come up on somebody
like that
                                                            
                       EVE
      (lol)
                                                            
                       ALLEN
pls forgive me for that, how can I
make it up to you
                                                            
                       EVE
its ok allen you don't have to
                                                            
                       ALLEN
are you sure?
                                                            
                       ROXY
was he talking to you? Yes you can
pay Me back
                                                            
                       ALLEN
come again pls
                                                            
                       ROXY
you can pay me back by taking me
out to eat tonight
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (Allen looked at
       Eve)
sure if that's ok.
                                                            
After saying that allen walked out the kitchen
Walking away Roxy was looking him up and down
                                                            
                       ROXY
girl you did not tell me that's
how good looking he is
                                                            
                       EVE
just leave that man alone, you
just got hurt two days ago
                                                            

22.

                       ROXY
oh my god you starting to sound
like my mother
                                                            
                       EVE
you don't know anything about this
guy, I myself is just getting to
know him
                                                            
                       ROXY
I like him pls just talk to him
for me pls
                                                            
                       EVE
ok.. ok I will lets just go clean
this house before my husband comes
home
                                                            
 
INT. ALLEN ROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Allen sleeping and dreaming about the war, people got him on
a table cutting into him and pulling out his guts.
And he got up with a loud voice
                                                            
 
INT. ROXY HOUSE - EVENING
                                                            
Allen when to peak Roxy up for the date.he pull in front the
drive way got out the car walked to the door. And rink the
door ball. Two times. Rock-c came outside with a red sexy
dress on with a happy look on her face, standing by the door
allen looked her in the face and said
                                                            
                       ALLEN
you look nice
                                                            
                       ROXY
you look nice yourself,
                                                            
Allen turned around and started walking to the car with
rock-c right by his side. they got to the car Allen opened
the door for Rock-c
                                                            
                       ROXY
thank you
                                                            
Driving in the car rock-c was giving Allen the eye the whole
time
                                                            
                       ROXY
so tell me, do you have a
girlfriend?
                                                            

23.

                       ALLEN
no
                                                            
                       ROXY
are you talking to anyone at the
time?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
no
                                                            
                       ROXY
whats the army like for guys like
you?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
the army is always the same
killing killing and killing all
over
                                                            
                       ROXY
ok.. where are you taking me
tonight if I may ask?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
am new to this town, so its up to
you. The night is all yours
                                                            
                       ROXY
if its ok with you always wanted
to go walking in the park at
night,you don't have to if you
don't want to
                                                            
                       ALLEN
am a man of my words, what ever
you want to do am all yours
                                                            
Walking in the park it started to get clod and ROXY did have
any coat on
                                                            
                       ROXY
its kind of clod out here tonight
                                                            
Just when she said that Allen took of his coat and put it on
her,when he did that Roxy starts to cry
                                                            
                       ROXY
      (SAD)
                                                            
                       ALLEN
what did I do something wrong?
                                                            

24.

                       ROXY
      (sad voice)
no
                                                            
                       ALLEN
than whats wrong, did someone die
from you, do you want to go back
home?
                                                            
                       ROXY
No nothing like that
                                                            
                       ALLEN
than whats wrong, why are you
crying for
                                                            
                       ROXY
its just that nobody ever did that
for me before
                                                            
                       ALLEN
did what?
                                                            
                       ROXY
give me their coat before, you see
all the men I been around always
made me feel like shit, its always
about the sex than its bye.
                                                            
                       ALLEN
I see. its ok rock-c you don't
have to worry about anything,
sometimes you just have to beleave
in yourself rock-c, don't let men
play you for a fool. You are a
beautiful woman, and you got a lot
to give, but one thing you should
always know, that in love always
know where you come from. So stop
crying everything will be ok
                                                            
Looking dead into rock-c eyes and holding her face, Roxy
looked up at him, the both eyes when off and they start
kissing,when they stoped, allen hold her head and they
started walking again.
                                                            
 
INT. WEDDING DAY AT CHURCH - AFTERNOON
                                                            
Jimmie was standing knoking the door with a suit on black
and white, Allen was inside the room looking at himself
holding a chine with heart locket having a day dream into
his pass with his lost lover.
                                                            

25.

                       JIMMIE
open the door man, what are you
doing everybody is waiting for you
man, you are gething marry this no
time to be playing around man. If
you don't get out here now I will
kick this dam door down.on the 5,
1 2 3
                                                            
In the room Allen took the chin not knowing where to put it
just put it down on the chair opening the door.
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
what were you doing in there?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (Looking at his
       brother face)
nothing
                                                            
                       ALLEN
am gething marry Jimmie
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
you can say that again,my own
brother time do fly, and to think
just yesterday you was a baby than
you all grown up.and gething marry
                                                            
                       ALLEN
lets do this bro
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
am happy for you brother.
                                                            
They walked into the church there where 10 people in the
church setting waiting for the wedding to start. They walked
to the front where the paster where standing
                                                            
 
INT. IN THE OTHER ROOM EVE,ANTONIA, BEACTY WHERE HAP - CONTINUOUS
                                                            
                       ANTONIA
you look just right girl
                                                            
                       BEACTY
don't worry about a thing we will
hook you up, today is your day
babe
                                                            

26.

                       EVE
where is the top, I had it
somewhere here and now I can't
find
                                                            
                       ROXY
find what?
                                                            
                       BEACTY
just sit down and lets do this
hair, go look in the guys room I
think your husband took it in
there,
                                                            
Eve ran out the room. Walking up and down in the church,
when she open the door the top was on top of the table. she
ran to it, just when she was about to walk out the room
She seen the chine on the chair, she walked up to it peak it
up hold it in her hand. and had her first day dream about
her pass. When she looked in her cloths and took out her
chine to, to see if it's the same as the one she was hold.
it was the same chine every line was in line. she started
crying.
                                                            
 
INT. HOUSBAND AND WIFE - CONTINUOUS
                                                            
Allen standing in the church with his brother Jimmie
standing right next to him dress in black and white suits.
The song starts to play to welcome in his new wife Roxy,
walking down Eve had a sad look on her face, a worry look,
                                                            
                       ALLEN
is something wrong with Eve?
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
: I think so, come to think about
it she do look a little bit down
                                                            
                       ALLEN
wow am getting marry
                                                            
When Eve and Roxy got to the front standing in front of the
pastor, with Allen look into Roxy eyes, with a happy look on
his face, the whole time Eve face was sad and looking back
and back at Allen, Jimmie got worry he looked back at his
wife Eve, and she looked back.
                                                            
                       PASTOR
today we join two lifes to be one,
Allen Ngozi and Roxy banks, so
today I ask the church who in here
give this woman to this man to be
            (MORE)

27.

                       PASTOR (cont'd)
marry
                                                            
                       MOTHER
I did
                                                            
                       PASTOR
do you Allen Ngozi take Roxy banks
as your wife? To love and to keep
till death do your part?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (Looking into Roxy
       eyes)
I do
                                                            
                       PASTOR
and do you Rock-c banks take Allen
Ngozi as your husband to death do
your part?
                                                            
                       ROXY
I do
                                                            
                       PASTOR
by the power given to me by the
state of Minnesota you are now
husband and wife, you can now kill
your new god found wife Allen
                                                            
And than they killed. Everynody was happy for them, they
walked out the church
                                                            
 
INT. HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
In the hotel room in the brethroom Roxy: was standing
looking at her ring in the marrow,than Allen came from the
back holding her showder
                                                            
                       ALLEN
so how do it feel to be marry?
                                                            
                       ROXY
happy
                                                            
                       ALLEN
is that all you feel girl
                                                            
                       ROXY
you know what am trying to say
                                                            

28.

                       ALLEN
now you don't have anything to
worry about, am gonna love you for
the end of time
                                                            
                       ROXY
you sure about that? I can be a
hand full
                                                            
                       ALLEN
I marry you right
                                                            
                       ROXY
yes
                                                            
And they started kissed
                                                            
in the morning at the hotel Roxy got up and when out to try
to get a drink of water. but when she open her door she seen
Jimmie entering a room not too far she and Allen room.she
junp back so he can not she her. than she when back into her
room standing at the door. thinking.
                                                            
 
INT. JIMMIE AND EVE HOUSE - NIGHT
                                                            
Sitting in the room Jimmie and Eve getting ready for bed,
looking out the window Eve had a sad look on her face.
Holding the nicknis thinking
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
whats wrong honey? Is something
worrying you?
                                                            
                       EVE
no nothing
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
then come to bed
                                                            
                       EVE
give me a min sweet heart I will
be with you
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
good night
                                                            
                       EVE
good night I love you
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
love u too
                                                            
 

29.

INT. JIMMIE AND EVE HOUSE - AFTERNOON
                                                            
That afternoon Jimmie and Allen was sitting on the patio at
Jimmie's house. drinking and talking about life and the old
days.
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
Allen life here is no diffiend
from the one we had back in
Liberia, the only good is the job
and the women we have in our life.
                                                            
                       ALLEN
you can say that again brother
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
by the way how's your wife doing?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
everything so far is nice
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
      (LOL)
nice that's all it is just nice?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (LOL)
yes, what
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
don't tell me you got a beautiful
woman as your wife and you saying
everything is nice
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (LOL)
what do u want me to say?that's
the only word that comes to my
head for now,
                                                            
In that moment Jimmie remanber putting his hand in his
pocket and taking out the chain giving it to Allen
                                                            
                       ALLEN
where did you get this? I been
looking all over for it. I lost it
at the wedding
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
Eve found it in the dressing room
and asked me to give it to you.
The funny thing is my wife has the
same chain on here nick
                                                            

30.

                       ALLEN
only two people in this world I
know who have a chain like this,
and that's the very first girl I
ever loved. But when I joined the
army I losted here info
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
      (lol)
maybe Eve is the girl now
                                                            
Then they looked at each other and (lol) Eve walked on the
patio just coming from out. Walking to her husband kissing
him. And turning to Allen with a worry face, when she when
over to say hey to Allen the chain she had on here nick
showed just before she had the time to put it back in her
cloth Allen had seen it and out came his drink in his mouth.
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
man what is wrong with you? Why
did you do that?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
am so sorry pls let me help you
with that am soo sorry Eve
                                                            
                       EVE
its ok I got it, its ok I got it
                                                            
Still trying to help Eve clean her cloths. Jimmie house
phone starts to ring in the house he got up and said
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
      (He got up when in
       the house peak up
       the house phone)
so clean this shit up I got to go,
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
hello
                                                            
And he started (lol) back on the patio Eve and Allen was
still trying to clean up the mess allen made.Eve was about
to walk back in the house when allen hold her by the hands
looking at her in the face saying
                                                            
                       EVE
what
                                                            
                       ALLEN
where did you get that chain?
                                                            

31.

                       EVE
from the store, why u ask?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
noting sorry, I most be wrong
                                                            
                       EVE
just say what u want to say I got
to go
                                                            
                       ALLEN
it's ok
                                                            
                       EVE
ok if you say so
                                                            
Eve walked off the patio into the house going right to the
brithroom standing in the marrow looking at the chain
holding it and thinking
                                                            
                       EVE
oh my God it is him, what am I
gonna do,tell him or tell my
husband, what amn I talking about
he is my husband brother, what
will people think about me if they
found out?
I will just wait and see how it
all plays out, I don't think he
knows about it yet,I will just
keep it to myself for now.
                                                            
 
INT. CLOTH SHOP - AFTERNOON
                                                            
It was 2 o clock Roxy and Eve decide to go do some shoping.
while distant it looks like something was troubling her.
                                                            
                       ROXY
is everything ok Eve? Because ever
since after the wedding you been
acting a little strange
                                                            
                       EVE
: it's nothing, just have a lot on
my head
                                                            
                       ROXY
what can you be thinking so much
that you are not taking advantage
of this nice day
                                                            

32.

                       EVE
how is Allen doing?
                                                            
                       ROXY
no need to worry about Allen
that's my job, all you need to
worry about is helping me pay for
this dress.
                                                            
                       EVE
      (Holding the dress
       in her hand in
       the air)
lets go I don't feel like being in
here. i got to go
                                                            
Putting the cloths down Eve walked out the store very
quickly, while Roxy scoot there in a shock for a minute
running after her out the store. Standing by the car crying
                                                            
                       ROXY
what is wrong girl? Why are you
crying. Did I do something wrong,
tell me you can talk to me about
anything
                                                            
                       EVE
its notting I just need some time
to myself, that's all
                                                            
                       ROXY
ok if you say lets just go home,
give me your keys am gonna drive
They got in the car and lift the
store parking lot
                                                            
 
INT. ALLEN AND ROXY HOUSE - NIGHT
                                                            
Roxy and Allen in the room getting ready for bed Allen
laying down on the bed with his hands folded looking up to
the ceiling , Roxy lay in the bed reading a book
                                                            
                       ROXY
honey today Eve was behaving
strange in the store,what do you
think is wrong with her
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (Allen was deep
       into his thinking
       that he could not
       hear her,
       flashbacking into
            (MORE)

33.

                       ALLEN (cont'd)
       his pass to when
       he and eve was
       lovers calling
       his name over and
       over again)
                                                            
                       ROXY
honey honey allen, allen
                                                            
                       ALLEN
am sorry, what was you saying
again honey
                                                            
                       ROXY
forget it lets just go to sleep,
goodnight
                                                            
                       ALLEN
good night
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (Turning his back
       to the wall.)
                                                            
 
INT. JIMMIE AND EVE HOUSE - AFTERNOON
                                                            
that morning Allen decided to pay eve a visit at her house
when he got there no one was home.so he had a sit in front
of the house waiting for her in his car, waiting there for
about an hour falling at sleep, Eve pull up in the drive way
with a friend in the car
                                                            
                       EVE
what is he doing here?
                                                            
                       SHELLY
how will I know? Is that not your
brother inlaw?
                                                            
                       EVE
wait here I will go see what he
wants
                                                            
When allen heard the car door cloths closing he get up, got
out the car
                                                            
                       EVE
hey allen. Is something wrong?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
we need to talk
                                                            

34.

                       EVE
talk about what allen?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
can we pls go inside and talk pls?
                                                            
                       EVE
: I came with a friend I don't
hive time right now Very busy
                                                            
                       ALLEN
pls its just going to take five
minute pls
                                                            
                       EVE
not now allen, I don't have time
for
                                                            
Walking away from allen opening her house door entering the
house. Allen when in after here,Standing in the living
room,Allen pull her towards him and started kissing her
Just in that time when they was kissing eve friend from the
car came walking in the house looking for eve because she
forgot her keys to the room in the car, when the friend saw
them kissing she stoped at the door with a surprise look on
her face, closing the door back walking back to the car
                                                            
                       ALLEN
I knew it were you
                                                            
                       EVE
we cant do this any more. Am your
brothers wife
                                                            
                       ALLEN
I never stoped loving you Eve,
                                                            
                       EVE
I have moved on allen. When you
brother find out about this he is
going to kill us
                                                            
                       ALLEN
did not think I was going to see
you again, many nights I cryed the
only thing that keeped me alive
was this.
                                                            
                       EVE
I love your brother allen we can't
do this pls I don't want no
trouble pls
                                                            

35.

                       ALLEN
we can run away together. Just me
and you eve and start this over
                                                            
                       EVE
why are you doing this, you life a
long time ago and forgot about me.
You said you were coming back for
me what happen allen?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
I try many times but they will
just not let me leave
I love you eve
                                                            
                       EVE
I love you too
                                                            
And they started kissing again walking out the door together
(but not knowing Jimmie was listening in the kitchen he was
shock sitting at the dinner table)
                                                            
 
INT. JIMMIE AND EVE HOUSE - NIGHT
                                                            
jimmie siting in the living room with the tv on.
                                                            
Eve pulled up in the drive way, looked at her face in the
marrow.got out the car open the door to the house,stoped by
the door and took in a deep breath.
                                                            
                       EVE
      (surprise)
hi honey
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
      (sad/mad)
where are you coming from?
                                                            
                       EVE
when out with Roxy
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
why were your phone turn off?
i called you about 10 times
                                                            
                       EVE
sorry,my phone has not been
working very well for some time
now
                                                            
Jimmie got up and walked away from the living room.
                                                            
 

36.

INT. GIRL AND BAR - MORNING
                                                            
Eve siting at a table. when Allen came walking in
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (happy/kissing her)
what was it you needed to talk
about so bad?
                                                            
                       EVE
      (sad)
Allen i love you,i always love
you,we can't do this anymore pls.i
don't want to hurt my husband.
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (surprise)
after 20 years of waiting this is
what you got to tell me Eve.don't
you think i know you got a
husband,and the thing is he is my
brother.
                                                            
                       EVE
thats all the reason for us not to
do this. he is your brother,and i
love him
                                                            
                       ALLEN
Eve think about it pls. don't do
this ,you all i got right now.
                                                            
                       EVE
Allen i can't its not right.
                                                            
eve got up to leave,
                                                            
                       EVE
      (looked back)
am sorry but this my goodbye
allen, here you can have this
back.
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (sad/mad/surprise)
Eve,eve,eve
                                                            
Eve walked away
                                                            
 

37.

INT. ROXY AND ALLEN HOUSE - AFTERNOON
                                                            
Allen walked in the house.Roxy is seting up the table for
lunch.
                                                            
                       ROXY
      (happy)
honey where have you been? your
food is ready
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (sad)
just when you take a walk.
                                                            
                       ROXY
well lets eat.hope you like
it,this my first time making
african food
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (opens the bow put
       a spoon in his
       mouth and got mad)
what the hell is this? are you
trying to kill me?i can't eat this
                                                            
                       ROXY
      (surprise)
whats wrong with it?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
just get this shit from my side
now
                                                            
                       ROXY
why are you acting like this?
                                                            
Allen got up from the table and when to the bed room
                                                            
Roxy cleaning up the table starts to cry
                                                            
Allen siting on the bed, having fash back.
                                                            
Roxy walked in the room
                                                            
                       ROXY
Allen i don't know what i did, but
am sorry.next time i will be
careful.
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (looked up at
       her.she turned to
       eve before his
            (MORE)

38.

                       ALLEN (cont'd)
       eyes)
am sorry about the way i acted
before.come here
                                                            
holding his wife thinking about another woman.they made
love.
                                                            
 
INT. JIMMIE AND EVE HOUSE - EVENING
                                                            
Allen and scarlet drove to Jimmie house,
                                                            
jimmie and Eve siting in the living room having so family
time when the door bell starts ringing.
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
who is it at this time of day? is
anyone coming to see you?
                                                            
                       EVE
no. not that i know off
                                                            
Jimmie got up to open the door, it was Allen and scarlet
standing at the door.Jimmie looked her up and down.wondering
what the hell she was doing there with allen
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
      (surprise)
whats up
                                                            
                       SCARLET
hello jimmie
                                                            
                       ALLEN
was in the area just stoping by to
say hi, are you gonna let me in or
what
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
come in, we were just lying down
family time
                                                            
                       EVE
honey who is it?
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
it's Allen babe
                                                            
                       EVE
is that roxy i hear?
                                                            

39.

                       JIMMIE
no it's Allen babe and your friend
Scarlet
                                                            
                       EVE
      (surprise)
                                                            
                       SCARLET
      (surprise)
what a surprise. you again
                                                            
they all siting in the living room.eve siting next to
jimmie,Scarlet looking at jimmie under eye.
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
your want something to drink?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
sure
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
what will you like scarlet?
                                                            
                       SCARLET
you know.
                                                            
                       EVE
am i missing something. do you two
know each other?
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
no honey, why will you even ask
that?
                                                            
                       SCARLET
no girl,anything will do ok
                                                            
                       ALLEN
anything
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
      (turned to eve)
babe pls get him something to
drink pls.
                                                            
eve geting up,Allen looking at her hard
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
so hows Roxy doing?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
she is doing ok
                                                            

40.

                       JIMMIE
you don't seem yourself,whats
wrong?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
noting can i use the restroom
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
you know where it is help
yourself. but use the up one.
                                                            
Allen walked up to Eve who trying to get some water from the
tap.holding her and kissing her on the nick
                                                            
scarlet got up when to sit next to jimmie
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
what are you doing here?
                                                            
                       SCARLET
when are you going leave her, so
we can get marry?
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
i don't know,its not that easy
like you can say it.
                                                            
                       SCARLET
if you don't do it soon.i will do
it for you
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
can we talk about this some other
time pls.
                                                            
                       EVE
      (surprise)
what are you doing. are you
stupid. or something.your brother
is right here. you need to stop.if
jimmie find out. he is gonna kill
US
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (deep in her eyes)
why you acting like you don't want
it.
                                                            
                       EVE
      (pulling away)
pls stop this. i told you i can't
do this pls
                                                            

41.

                       ALLEN
      (trying to put his
       hand up her dress)
stop it.don't you love me?
                                                            
                       EVE
don't do this allen pls. stop
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (kissing her)
i miss you
                                                            
                       EVE
      (trying to get
       away)
pls stop
                                                            
jimmie siting thinking whats taking Eve soo long
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
HONEY,HONEY
                                                            
                       EVE
PUSH HIM AWAY,YES HONEY COMING
                                                            
jimmie and scarlet walking up the stairs
                                                            
Eve came walking to meet him
                                                            
                       ALLEN
something came up, sorry i got to
go.
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
so soon?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
yes, maybe next time
                                                            
                       SCARLET
bye girl see you
                                                            
walking out the door
                                                            
                       EVE
ok take care, nice to meet you
Jimmie
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
      (looking at his
       wife)
hum,turning around and walking
back down stairs
                                                            

42.

camera moves in to Eve face
                                                            
 
INT. HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Allen is lying down on the bed,when there were a call at the
door it was Eve standing at the door.
                                                            
                       ALLEN
you came
                                                            
                       EVE
the only reason i came here is to
put an end to this Allen
                                                            
walking pass him entering the room and standing by the bed
                                                            
                       ALLEN
what do i have to do, to show you
that we are ment to be together
                                                            
                       EVE
maybe you didnt get it the first
time. i said it.this is over. it
has been for years.
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (mad)
this can never be over
                                                            
Holding Eve by the arm,in a rude way
                                                            
                       EVE
can you stop,if you think this is
how to win me its not gonna work.
                                                            
                       ALLEN
do you love him?
                                                            
                       EVE
what kind of a question is that?
all i can ever be to you is your
friend Allen.what we had is over
so if you don't have anything
better to do am leaving
                                                            
                       ALLEN
this is not over yet?
                                                            
Eve walked out the room leaving Allen siting on the bed
                                                            
 

43.

INT. ALLEN AND ROXY HOUSE - AFTERNOON
                                                            
Allen is getting into his car,Roxy is standing to the window
looking at Allen get in the car.when Allen drove off Roxy
got in her car and follow him.Allen pulled up to Jimmie
house parking five houses down waiting for Eve to come
out.not knowing that his wife Roxy was park in the drive way
of the house next to Jimmie and Eve house.
                                                            
Allen phone starts to ring. it was Roxy calling him
                                                            
                       ALLEN
      (phone on other
       sit)
hey babe
                                                            
                       ROXY
babe when are you gonna be back?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
i will be back soon.just trying to
get some work at the office.
                                                            
                       ROXY
what do you want me to make you
for dinner?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
babe babe .whats wrong with your
phone..
                                                            
putting the phone down on his wife,
                                                            
                       ROXY
you will get whats coming to you
Allen.you played the wrong bitsh
                                                            
Eve came outside got in her car and drove off,being follow
by Allen in his car.
                                                            
 
INT. JIMMIE JOB - CONTINUOUS
                                                            
Jimmie showing of a hotel at his job to some people. when
walking out not looking
                                                            
Eve breaks on her car when off.
                                                            
                       EVE
oh my god whats going on,my breaks
its not working.
                                                            
she got her phone to call jimmie
                                                            

44.

                       JIMMIE
hello, babe whats wrong i can't
hear you
                                                            
                       EVE
my breaks babe, i can't stop
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
your what? your breaks
                                                            
                       EVE
yes,its not working.
                                                            
                       JIMMIE
i can't hear you let me go outside
so i can hear you better.
                                                            
walking outside not looking around.Eve when of the road and
hit jimmie down.
                                                            
                       EVE
oh my God i hit something.pls let
it just be a dog or something.pls
don't let it be a parson
                                                            
Allen who was in his car and Roxy who was in her car
follower him. they pass by seeing notthing. not stoping at
all
                                                            
when eve got out the car, and when to see, it was jimmie
dieing under the car, when she seen this she past out.
                                                            
 
INT. AT THE ER - NIGHT
                                                            
jimmie in bed not moving or talking.with eve by his bed side
crying holding his hand.
                                                            
                       EVE
babe am sorry.pls don't die babe
pls don't die
                                                            
the DR walk din the room. holding a paper in his hands
                                                            
                       EVE
any news on my husband DR
                                                            
                       DR
am sorry but it looks like he is
going to need some blood. or he is
going to die,
                                                            

45.

                       EVE
oh my God
                                                            
                       DR
do he have brother or siters?
                                                            
                       EVE
yes his brother is here, i will
call him
                                                            
                       DR
ok that will be good the sooner
the better. but for now ms Scarlet
will get him ready for the test.
                                                            
scarlet walked in the door
                                                            
and there were a look on Eve face she never had before.
                                                            
                       EVE
what are you doing her?
                                                            
                       SCARLET
i work her
                                                            
                       EVE
pls make sure you take good care
of him for me
                                                            
                       SCARLET
don't worry about anything i will
take good care of him.
                                                            
                       EVE
thank you
                                                            
                       SCARLET
by the way what happen?
                                                            
                       EVE
he was hit by a car.my car my
breaks was out. and i know i just
changed it to. i don't know why it
happen
                                                            
                       SCARLET
by a car, you don't say.
                                                            
                       EVE
who will want to do something like
this?
                                                            

46.

                       SCARLET
me
                                                            
                       EVE
sorry i don't understand what u
trying to say
                                                            
                       SCARLET
are you that stupid or what.i did
it.it should had been you.than by
now me and jimmie can be together.
                                                            
in saying that eve jumped on scarlet and they started
frighting,scarlet pulled a gun out her packet and when she
pulled it shoot.just in that time Allen and Roxy walked in.
the gun when off and hit Roxy and she die.lying on the
floor.after doing so it was too much for her she put the gun
to her head and pulled it. killing herself.leaving
AlleN,JIMMIE AND EVE IN THE ROOM.
                                                            
the DR came runing in room.
                                                            
                       DR
whats going on here? oh my God
somebody help.
                                                            
allen standing there holding eve in his arm, eve crying.
                                                            
                       EVE
DR what about the test.whats wrong
with that
                                                            
                       DR
what?
                                                            
                       EVE
my husband blood test
                                                            
                       DR
WE DON'T HAVE TO USE HIS BROTHER
BLOOD ANYMORE.WE CAN USE YOURS
                                                            
                       EVE
WHAT HOW IS THAT?
                                                            
                       ALLEN
yes DR how is that?
                                                            
                       DR
she id your sister is she
not.because your DNA and blood are
the same.
                                                            

47.

eve and allen looked at each other shock
                                                            
                       DR
one more thing the thing that
saved him was this necklace find
inside his body. for some reason
its stopd him from losing even
more blood doing the hit
                                                            
eve talking the necklace from the Dr looking at
                                                            


THE END


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From Zachary Murdock Date 5/10/2014 **
I completely agree with the other reviewer to a point. This is such a heartfelt screenplay and I adore it for that. this must have taken a lot out of you and I applaud you for writing it. What I was able to discern was heartbreaking material. IT REALLY IS DIFFICULT TO UNDERSTAND WHAT'S GOING ON THOUGH. Just a quick re-write could fix this and I look forward to reading it.

From John H. Date 4/29/2014 1/2
I'm no grammar nazi but this script could definitely use some proofreading for for spelling errors. It wouldn't be a bad idea to refresh yourself on the structure of a script while you're at it. All of the spelling errors made this script very difficult to read. A screenplay follows a structure not to be 'square' or boring, but to help the reader make sense of the story. The complete lack of structure made it hard for to tell what was actually going on. The plot has escaped me. I have virtually no idea what's going on here. What I have been able to garner from the story is very poor and uneven. Everything here needs work. The dialog, the plotting, the spelling and, most importantly, the structure. And please don't include things like 'LOL' and 'pls' during dialog or in the action. Most of all, you need to make sure that you communicate your creativity in a coherent way. This almost reads like your own private personal notes for a script, not something that is even ready to be deemed a first draft worthy of publication and feedback. Some positive notes: You seem to have a very deep understanding of the characters, this comes across in your work. This piece feels intimate and personal, and I wish I could be privy to the things you were feeling but it is just so incoherent that I can't make a circle from a triangle out of it. But intimacy, as a writer, is such a hard thing to capture. You do this effortlessly. I can tell this story means a lot to you. I just want it to mean a lot to me as well. So go brush this puppy up. Get it some new clothes and take care of it. I can't wait to leave you a glowing review. I know you can fix this script.


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