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by Eric Goldfarb

Rated: PG-13   Genre: Drama   User Review: **


This screenplay is copyrighted to its author. All rights reserved. This screenplay may not be used or reproduced without the express written permission of the author.



FADE IN:

INT. HOME - AFTERNOON
                                                            
We open with RRBECCA entering the house and walking into the
dining room. She then sees MOM. MOM is sitting and working
on a laptop.
                                                            
                       MOM
      (behind the laptop
       screen)
Hey Rebecca, how was your day?
                                                            
                       REBECCA
My day was fine.
                                                            
                       MOM
Good for you; how much homework do
you have today.
                                                            
                       REBECCA
A lot.
                                                            
                       MOM
Oh, then you'd better get to work.
                                                            
REBECCA exits the room.
                                                            
 
INT. REBECCA'S ROOM - CONTINUOUS
                                                            
We see REBECCA enter the room and sit on her bed. She opens
here bag and removes some of her books. She takes out her
phone to see the time; it is 3:20. She opens her book,
hesitates, and puts the book down. She takes out her phone
and starts texting her phone and relaxing.
                                                            
 
INT. REBECCA'S ROOM - LATER
                                                            
Rebecca is busy on her phone. She is busy texting her freind
when she receives the text"So, how r u doing with your hw".
After looking at the text, she quickly responds with "fine".
After this, she looks at the time: it is 5:45. She swears
and then quickly gets out he book to do homework.
                                                            
                       MOM (OS)
How are you doing with your work?
                                                            
                       REBECCA
Fine
                                                            

2.

                       REBECCA
Good for you
                                                            
                       MOM (OS)
Ok
                                                            
Rebecca then starts her homework.
                                                            
 
INT. REBECCA'S ROOM - LATER
                                                            
We see Rebecca enter her room and go on her phone: the clock
says 3:30.
We are then shown a short montage of scenes of Rebeca
reacting to the time she was on her phone. Times flash from
6:00, 6:45, 7:30, 8:00, 8:25, and 9:00. We then see Rebecca
reacting with shock and leaves her room.
                                                            
 
INT. KITCHEN - NIGHT
                                                            
We see Rebecca enter the kitchen. She walks into a cabinet
and takes out a mug. She then opens another cabinet and
takes out a coffee cup. She then puts the materials in and
turns on the coffee machine. As she removes sweetener from
the fridge, her father enters the room.
                                                            
                       FATHER
Hey Sweetie
                                                            
                       REBECCA
      (a bit annoyed)
Hey, Dad
                                                            
                       FATHER
How are you doing?
                                                            
                       REBECCA
      (a bit more
       annoyed)
I'm doing fine.
                                                            
                       FATHER
You don't have to be so annoyed.
What's the coffee for?
                                                            
                       REBECCA
I want to drink it.
                                                            
                       FATHER
But it's in the evening; you
shouldn't be drinking caffeine.
                                                            

3.

                       REBECCA
But I am drinking it.
                                                            
The coffee finishes being made. Rebeca takes it out, puts
the milk in, and leaves angrily.
                                                            
                       FATHER
She could at least try to be nice.
                                                            
 
INT. HIGH SCHOOL HALLWAY - DAY
                                                            
We see Rebecca leave a classroom angrily and open up her
locker. She goes and takes a book out and slams the locker
door shut. At that point, her friend walks up to her.
                                                            
                       FRIEND
How are you doing?
                                                            
                       REBECCA
Please leave me alone.
                                                            
                       FRIEND
How was the test?
                                                            
                       REBECCA
It was fine, it doesn't matter.
                                                            
                       FRIEND
How bad did you do, Rebecca.
                                                            
                       REBECCA
I did perfectly fine and-
                                                            
                       FRIEND
I know you and you don't get this
upset when you pass a test.
                                                            
                       REBECCA
It wasn't my fault,I couldn't
study for the test.
                                                            
                       FRIEND
She gave out a lot of study
materials and extra credit; I'm
actually surprised you did badly.
                                                            
                       REBECCA
It doesn't matter
                                                            
Rebecca moves away from her friend.
                                                            

4.

                       FRIEND
If you need any help, I'll be here
for you.
                                                            
                       REBECCA
      (coldly)
I don't need help
                                                            
 
INT. REBECCA'S ROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
We see Rebecca sitting in her room with a mug of coffee in
her hand. Her hair is a mess, her clothes aren't on quite
right, and she is surrounded by a bunch of coffee mugs
around her. She checks her phone; the time is 12:30. She
then hears a knocking on the door. Rebecca ignores the
knocking. After some more knocking, her father enters the
room.
                                                            
                       FATHER
Rebecca, what are you still doing
up?
                                                            
                       REBECCA
Nothing that matters to you.
                                                            
                       FATHER
Yes, this does matter; you are my
daughter.
                                                            
                       REBECCA
      (muttering)
Unfortunately
                                                            
The father doesn't hear that.
                                                            
                       FATHER
Why do you have so many cups of
coffee in your room.
                                                            
                       REBECCA
I like to drink coffee.
                                                            
                       FATHER
Not since a few weeks ago.
                                                            
                       REBECCA
Does it make a difference.
                                                            
                       FATHER
It does make a difference. You
can't just drink and drink;; that
isn't safe.
                                                            

5.

                       REBECCA
It is to me.
                                                            
                       REBECCA
It itsn't
                                                            
                       FATHER
Don't expect to drink any more
coffee.
                                                            
The Dad leaves the room. Rebecca groans in frustration. She
takes out her phone and calls someone.
                                                            
                       REBECCA
Hello... Pretty terrible... Yeah,
he did... That would be fine... If
it would be as good as the
coffee... Thanks.
                                                            
She exits the room.
                                                            
 
INT. BATHROOM - DAY
                                                            
We see Rebecca enter the bathroom. She opens a medical
cabinet and reaches into it. She takes out a pill bottle and
places it on the counter. She put her hand on the bottle,
hesitates, and then opens the pill bottle and puts a pill in
the mouth. She runs out of the room.
                                                            
 
INT. HIGH SCHOOL HALLWAY - DAY
                                                            
We see a disheveled Rebecca exit a classroom. She walks away
from the classroom and walks away with a calm expression.
Her friend heads to her.
                                                            
                       FRIEND
Rebecca, Rebecca, are you okay?
                                                            
                       REBECCA
I'm fine
                                                            
                       FRIEND
You clearly aren't fine, you need
some help-
                                                            
                       REBECCA
      (suddenly angry)
I don't need any help, and
certainly not any from you!
                                                            
She takes a small breath
                                                            

6.

                       REBECCA
I just want you to leave me alone.
                                                            
                       FRIEND
I want to help you; just let me
know-
                                                            
                       REBECCA
You don't want to help me; nobody
here wants to help me! Everyone
wants to ruin me; nobody wants me.
So you know what, I don't care
what you think, JUST STAY AS FAR
WAYS FROM ME AS POSSIBLE!!!
                                                            
                       FRIEND
I just wanted to help...
                                                            
The friend leaves, heartbroken.
                                                            
 
INT. REBECCA'S ROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
We see Rebecca lie down at her bed She goes and grabs the
pill bottle from the cabinet. She inserts a few into her
mouth. After that she grabs her phone and starts typing
stuff on it. We see that the stuff is completely
unintelligible and garbled. She eventually jumps up, grabs
her stuff and runs into the basement.
                                                            
 
INT. BASEMENT - DAY
                                                            
We see Rebecca run into the basement and sit at a chair. She
grabs a laptop and begins to type fast. She is seemingly
continuing the same type of writing she was typing before.
As the montage of time continues, she types faster and
faster and she begins to shake an shiver. She eventually
passes out and lies down so her head is lying in between the
laptop screen and keyboard. We then hear Rebecca's friend
runs down the basement stairs.
                                                            
                       FRIEND
Rebecca; Rebecca!
                                                            
She sees that she is unconscious.
                                                            
                       FRIEND
MICHAEL, CALL 911 NOW! What do I
do; what do I do,...
                                                            
She sees the bottle of pills.
                                                            

7.

                       REBECCA
No, no, no, no, no, no, no. Please
tell me she didn't...
                                                            
She sinks to the floor in tears.
                                                            


FADE OUT.


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From Nick Hanks Date 6/6/2016 *1/2
Couldn't get passed the big chunks of text in the beginning. You actually need less detail, if you inundate your script with exhaustive detail then you're not respecting your audience. To a large extent they can connect the dots, they aren't children. Try to learn a bit more about subheadings and their respective uses such as "CUT TO:", "CLOSE ON", "SUPER" etc. If used correctly the industry finds these very useful in determining what you are trying to get across. I will give you one and a half stars for a good effort.

From aislinn Date 5/20/2016 ***
need more deatail


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