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Date.com
by Jon Lawson (actingizeverything@yahoo.com)

Rated: PG-13   Genre: Miscellaneous   User Review: ***
Determined to find love through the internet, a man finds that love is staring him in the face the whole time.(short to be made into feature film)


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FADE IN:

INT. STEVE'S APARTMENT - DAY
                                                            
THE CLOSET DOORS ARE CLOSED. ITS PITCH BLACK. CREDITS FLOW
                                                            
THE PHONE RINGS
                                                            
                       STEVE
Hello?
                                                            
                       DAD
What is this I hear about you
opening a comic book shop!
                                                            
                       STEVE
      (sigh)
Dad where did you hear that?
                                                            
                       DAD
Your mother told me
                                                            
                       STEVE
... she wasn't suppose to tell
you...
                                                            
                       DAD
Well, she did and NO SON OF MINE
with a PHD is going to open some
meaningless comic book shop!
                                                            
                       STEVE
I payed my way through college
Dad, I've been making the
decisions in my life.Besides, the
shop is already payed for and it's
making its Grand-opening tomorrow
morning. Don't worry I know what
I'm --
                                                            
                       DAD
You majored in finances and
business, you would make an
excellent financial advisor or an
accountant or-or-or somthing!
                                                            
DOORBELL RINGS
                                                            
                       STEVE
Yeah -- Dad, can I call you back.
I've got to go.
                                                            
 

2.

INT. STEVE' S APARTMENT-LIVING ROOM - DAY
                                                            
                       STEVE
I'm coming!
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
Do you need any help?
                                                            
                       STEVE
For the shop?
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
No for your house cleaning.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Why would I, there's NOTHING wrong
with this place.
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
What this place needs is a little
bit of shazaam!
                                                            
                       STEVE
Say that again?
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
What? Shazaam?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Captain Marvel to the rescue!
                                                            
                       STEVE
"Shazaam" its Captain Marvels'
magical phrase.
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
Why?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Well..he's just a little kid, but
when trouble arises, all he has to
do is say shazaam! and he
instantly becomes a sexy man beast
for all the women to adore
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
Whatever. So what are you doing
tonight?
                                                            
                       STEVE
I'm going over to the shop to
finish up, you wanna join me?
                                                            

3.

                       CHRISTINA
As much fun as that sounds,Pete
and I acually have something
planned.
                                                            
                       PETE
That's right, you 'bout ready hun?
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
Well i guess we better get out of
here. Good luck tomorrow, I might
stop by to see how things are
going.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Alright then, you two love birds
have fun.
                                                            
 
EXT. STEVE'S APARTMENT - DAY
                                                            
Everything is black in the trunk of the car, until the lid
pops open and Steve gently places one of the boxes inside.
He closes the lid of the trunk and inserts the key to his
car, unlocks it. Opens the door, jumps in and drives off.
                                                            
 
EXT. STREETS - DAY
                                                            
Get a view of the city as Steve drives to the comic shop.
(More credits flow).Steve pulls over at --
                                                            
 
EXT. COMIC BOOK SHOP - DAY
                                                            
Steve picks up some of the boxes and heads for the entrance.
                                                            
 
INT. COMIC BOOK SHOP - DAY
                                                            
A box is set on the ground. Pan up inside the opened box,
there's a huge mass of comic books. Steve pulls some out and
starts placing them onto the shelves. People outside keep
looking inside.
                                                            
A box is set on the ground. Pan up inside the open box,
there's a huge mass of comic books. Steve pulls some out and
starts placing them onto the shelves. People outside are
looking through the window to see what is going on. Time
blurrs.
                                                            
 

4.

INT. COMIC BOOK SHOP - NIGHT
                                                            
Before long, light isn't shining through the windows anymore
and the store is completely lit by the the shops lights. All
the comics are in perfect order. Steve smiles at his
creation. He looks at his watch and it's 1:00 am. He rubs
his eyes and sits down for a moment. He takes out a note pad
and starts writing inventory information on it.
                                                            
                                         FADE TO
                                                            
 
INT. COMIC BOOK SHOP - DAY
                                                            
DING! (Sound from the door) Steve wakes up, evrything
quickly snaps into focus and he looks a little surprised. A
teen is standing midway through the door entrance.
                                                            
                       TEEN
      (looks around)
This place IS open right?
                                                            
                       STEVE
What time is it?
                                                            
                       TEEN
      (looks at his
       watch)
um.. 9:06 am.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Yeah... we're open.
                                                            
Steve stands at the counter with a smile on his face.The
teen is walking through the isles slowly.Everything is
pretty quiet.Steve turns the radio on and music plays
troughout the store.It feels like an uncomfortable silence
so he walks up to the teen.
                                                            
                       STEVE
*ahem* can...can I help you find
anything?
                                                            
                       TEEN
Well...do you have anything cool?
                                                            
                       STEVE
      (he smiles)
That depends on what you think
cool is.
                                                            
                       TEEN
What do you like?
                                                            

5.

                       STEVE
Jim Lee does some pretty good work
these days,but I don't think you
can beat his old stuff like The
Wildcats.
                                                            
                       TEEN
...Havent heard of em.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Jim Lee or The Wildcats?
                                                            
                       TEEN
Neither.What are The Wildcats? Its
nothing sissy like Sailor Moon is
it?
                                                            
                       STEVE
No...think X-men on steroids.
                                                            
                       TEEN
Sweet!!
                                                            
Steve grabs a Wildcats book and hands it to the kid. The
teen opens it up and starts to read it.
                                                            
                       STEVE
You...uh..thinkin' about buying
it?
                                                            
                       TEEN
I'll know when I read it.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Well,thats cool and all, but the
more something is read the greater
depreciation value the comic
has.This means that if a collector
wants tobuy it,he will be
dissapointed because the value has
been tarnished.
                                                            
                       TEEN
Well...I'll let you know what I
think when Im done.
                                                            
                       STEVE
      (sighs)
alright, whatever.
                                                            
A man and a woman walk into the store.the immediately point
at the Archie comic books and laugh.
                                                            

6.

                       GIRL #1
Hey,do you have Sin City?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Sure.This way.
                                                            
Steve walks down the asile and grabs the comic off the shelf
and hands it to her.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Here it is.
                                                            
He hands her the first issue.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Are you a big fan of Frank Miller?
                                                            
                       GIRL #1
Who?
                                                            
                       STEVE
The author of Sin City.
                                                            
                       GIRL #1
No...we actually like the art.
                                                            
                       STEVE
I don't really hear that about
Frank Miller very often.
                                                            
                       GIRL #1
We like the artist.
                                                            
                       STEVE
It's the same guy. Frank Miller.
He was the only guy who both wrote
and drew Sin City.
                                                            
                       MAN #1
You study this stuff?
                                                            
                       STEVE
No..but I've read them ever since
was a kid.
                                                            
                       MAN #1
Whatever..we'll take this
                                                            
                       STEVE
Ok.. but can I recommend this as
well?
                                                            

7.

He picks up an issue of Dark Knights. The man flips through
it and gives it back to Steve.
                                                            
                       MAN #1
The art sucks.
                                                            
                       STEVE
But it's the same artist and the
same style as Sin City.
                                                            
                       MAN #1
It's not Sin City though and the
artwork STILL sucks.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Ok. but thats just one issue.
There's entire volumes.
                                                            
                       GIRL #1
And how much would it be for the
books you're pointin' at?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Well, the price is on them but if
I had to guess,I'd say $100.
                                                            
                       MAN #1
A hundred dollars!
                                                            
                       STEVE
Yes sir, but thats for the entire
volume of Sin City.
                                                            
                       MAN #1
Well thats too pricey for us we'll
take juts one copy.
                                                            
Steve goes and checks the couple out at the counter
                                                            
                       STEVE
You guys have a nice day.
                                                            
The man and woman leave.
                                                            
Steve walks over to the teen and he's still into the comic.
                                                            
                       STEVE
So what do you think?
                                                            
                       TEEN
      (jumps in shock)
Oh, um yeah its prety cool. I'll
take it.
                                                            

8.

The teen buys the comic and leaves.
                                                            
 
INT. BAR - NIGHT
                                                            
STEVE IS SITTING AT THE BAR WITH PETE
                                                            
                       PETE
      (takes a drink)
So how are things at the shop?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Oh..its different than I thought
it was going to be.
                                                            
                       PETE
In what ways?
                                                            
                       STEVE
It's just frustrating to hve to
repeat things to the same customer
several times.I think I should put
up signs saying that the comics
are collector's items,you can't
just throw them around.
                                                            
                       PETE
Why did you open a COMIC book shop
anyway?
                                                            
                       STEVE
I don't know,its just what I've
always wanted to do.
                                                            
                       PETE
There's a cute girl over there,
why don't you go over and talk to
her?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Where did that come from?
                                                            
                       PETE
      (takes another
       drink)
Where did what come from?
                                                            
                       STEVE
One minute were talkin about my
shop and the next were talking
about flirting with some girl.
                                                            

9.

                       PETE
Well.. she is cute isnt she?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Yeah but...
                                                            
                       PETE
Yeah but nothin'.Look,guy meets
girl it happens all the time.You
don't have to hide the fact that
you're trying to get her number or
email or whatever,she has it
happen all the time.What matters
is how you do it.
                                                            
                       STEVE
What I say?
                                                            
                       PETE
No.how you say it,is all in the
body language
                                                            
                       STEVE
I'm just not good at this
stuff.Don't women find it isulting
that most men approach them
because of their looks?
                                                            
                       PETE
Well how in the world are you
suppose to approach them for their
personality if you don't even know
them.Why else do you think they
dress themselves up to look all
desirable and stuff? So the guys
will approach them.So they'll look
good.It's just how the world
works.They do their part now you
go do yours and go talk to her.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Why don't you go introduce
yourself to her?
                                                            
                       PETE
Uh.. for one I'm engaged to
Christina.
                                                            
                       STEVE
I didn't mean it like that.I
meant,why don't you be my wingman?
                                                            

10.

                       PETE
Don't think so buddy.Look.Its not
that hard,either she's interested
or not interested,just go!
                                                            
                       STEVE
What are we suppse to talk about?
                                                            
                       PETE
I don't know,comic books?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Yeah--thats sexy.
                                                            
                       PETE
You'd be suprised.You just need to
mention the right ones to the
right girls...Look,you don't have
to impress her,just be be same
person you are with me and she'll
see it immediatly.Don't think that
since she's a girl and ou don't
know her that you have to change
and be someone else.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Well,I'm not quite ready,maybe
some other time I gotta work
tomorrow.
                                                            
Steve gets up and leaves the bar.Pete pays the tab and
watches the tv posted in the corner of the room.
                                                            
 
EXT. BAR - NIGHT
                                                            
Steve is walking to his car and out of nowhere he runs into
a woman.Most of the stuff fall out of her purse.
                                                            
                       STEVE
      (reaches down to
       pick things up)
Oh,I'm so sorry miss,here let me
help.
                                                            
                       DIANA
It's ok.It was my fault.I wasnt
paying attention.
                                                            
Steve picks up everything he can.They both get to their feet
and he hands her all of her things.
                                                            

11.

                       DIANA
Thank you so much.
                                                            
Steve feels to make sure he still has his wallet.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Oh..it's all good.Don't worry
about it.What's your name?
                                                            
                       DIANA
Diana.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Nice to meet you,I'm Steve.
                                                            
                       DIANA
Nice to meet you too
                                                            
                       STEVE
Hey I acually live in this area
and I kow of a really nice
cafe,could I get your number?
                                                            
                       DIANA
Sure.
                                                            
Steve pulls out is cell phone.
                                                            
                       DIANA
Its 826-7859.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Got it.Well,I guess I'll Catch ya
later.
                                                            
                       DIANA
Bye!
                                                            
Suddenly Pete runs up to catch Steve.
                                                            
                       PETE
I think I know a solution to all
your problems.
                                                            
                       STEVE
What?
                                                            
                       PETE
Why don't you sign up for an
online dating service!
                                                            
                       STEVE
What are you talking about?
                                                            

12.

                       PETE
No,see you got all this pent up
frustration inside you when you
meet women in person. An online
dating service completley
eleminates that. You get to know
them a little on the net and then
you meet.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Some of those women are crazy.
                                                            
                       PETE
So you take them out for a cup of
tea,if they're interesting,take
them around town and do somthing
fun and unique like taking
pictures of old buildings or
something. But if they're creepy
just treat the cup of tea as the
date and leave.
                                                            
                       STEVE
That's actually a good idea.
                                                            
                       PETE
Of course it's a good idea.
                                                            
 
INT. COMIC BOOK SHOP - DAY
                                                            
Steve sits at the computer at the counter.On the computer
screen is his profile.His picture already posted and he's
trying to figure out what to type in his profile.As he
speaks,he types it down.
                                                            
                       STEVE
I'm a unique
individual.Self-employed and have
fun with life...nah...Hi-- my name
is Steve.I like to...what? read
comic books,c'mon Steve!
                                                            
                       CUSTOMER
Excuse me,how much is this?
                                                            
Steve looks at the price tag then back at the customer a few
times.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Fifteen dollars.
                                                            

13.

                       CUSTOMER
Ok,I'll take it.
                                                            
Steve makes the transaction and the customer leaves.
                                                            
 
INT. STEVE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
                                                            
Steves gets on the computer to check his email.There is a
message about his profile From a woman named Jenna,it
reads...
                                                            
                       EMAIL FROM JENNA
Hey there! I was just browsing and
I came across your profile and you
seem pretty cool.How would you
like to get together sometime?
                                                            
Pete walks in the door with a case of beer in hand.
                                                            
                       PETE
How's it goin' man?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Ok I guess.
                                                            
                       PETE
So you took my advice and signed
up for that site I told you about
huh?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Yep.
                                                            
                       PETE
Oh you got an email too.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Yeah its from a girl named
Jenna.She said she wants to meet
up somewhere.
                                                            
                       PETE
What are you gonna write back?
                                                            
                       STEVE
I don't know she didn't write
much.
                                                            
                       PETE
Ok,so just comment on stuff on her
profile but don't talk about it
too much.Keep your emails
short.And she said that she wants
            (MORE)

14.

                       PETE (cont'd)
to meet you,thats good.Tell her
that you have to meet somewhere
public,some place nice,like a cafe
for some tea.
                                                            
                       STEVE
You're really into the whole tea
thing.Whats goin on,why not
starbucks?
                                                            
                       PETE
Because coffee and tea are
different.
                                                            
                       STEVE
      (laughing)
Like what? One's more
suffisticated?
                                                            
                       PETE
Yeah,one makes your breath all
fresh and one makes your mouth
feel like junk.
                                                            
                       STEVE
You're weird.
                                                            
                       PETE
No--I'm suffisticated.
                                                            
he then shovels some food into his mouth in a non
suffisticated way.
                                                            
                       PETE
Hey me and Christina are going out
pretty soon I'll catch ya later.
                                                            
                       STEVE
What are you guys gonna do?
                                                            
                       PETE
Ok,this sounds stupid but I have a
friend who works in construction
and he's gonna give me the keys to
the forklift.
                                                            
                       STEVE
And?
                                                            
                       PETE
I'll let her drive it.
                                                            

15.

                       STEVE
Thats it?
                                                            
                       PETE
Well...after I dazzle her with my
creativity we'll be able to do
something alittle more
traditional.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Thats just weird.
                                                            
                       PETE
She'll love it.Girls like to do
something they've never done
before,even if it's alittle
weird.It's ok to be
unconventional,just so long as you
get to know each other better in
the end.
                                                            
                       STEVE
...whatever..I'll try to be
creative.
                                                            
                       PETE
Don't say anything to a girl
trying to impress her.Sure be
friendly,but tease her a bit like
anybody else and have fun with
it.Don't say anything waiting for
approval.Just say them for
conversation or a joke.Just write
the email and write it with
confidence.It's not like you know
her,whats she going to say,no? ooh
scary.Well 've been talkin to
muchI gotta get ready for this
date I'll see you later.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Yeah-- see ya.
                                                            
Pete leaves,Steve starts writing an email back to Jenna.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Hey-- I'd like to mmet sometime
soon.How about tomorrow at 6pm.Why
don't we meet up at the little
cafe on Anderson street.I know its
a bit short notice but I'll be
over in that area anyway so it
would be cool if you can make it.
                                                            
 

16.

INT. CAFE - DAY
                                                            
Steve is sitting at the table The waiter hands him some
food.He looks at his watch,he pokes his food alittle
bit.Jenna suddenly shows up.She looks like she has been
going a hundred miles an hour.Shetakes her purse and puts it
on the table.
                                                            
                       JENNA
Sorry,sorry,oh shoot...I meant to
be here earlier,I'm sorry I just
um,well you know how it is.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Yeah,its alright.
                                                            
they shake hands.she has diferent types of bracelets on her
wrist.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Hmm...whats with the bracelets?
                                                            
                       JENNA
Oh.Yeah,I made them.They're
symbolic of different things that
have happened in my life.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Oh,thats cool.
                                                            
Steve waves the waiter over.
                                                            
                       WAITER
May I be of service?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Yes.Could you bring us some
tea,and you can bring the lady
here the same dish I'm having.
                                                            
                       WAITER
Coming right up!
                                                            
                       STEVE
Sorry I ordered for you but this
is pretty good,you'll love it.
                                                            
                       JENNA
Thats fine.I'm not a very picky
eater.
                                                            
                       JENNA
So..what do you do for a living?
                                                            

17.

                       STEVE
You don't wanna know.
                                                            
                       JENNA
Now I HAVE to know,are you kidding
me!
                                                            
                       STEVE
Ok,well I own a comic book
store.I'm a dork.
                                                            
                       JENNA
Why do you think that?
                                                            
                       STEVE
People who are into comics aren't
thought of as sexy.
                                                            
                       JENNA
Everyone is sexy in their own way.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Is that your version of the
"eveyone's beautiful song"?
                                                            
                       JENNA
      (laughing)
I guess...so what got you to make
a business out of comic books?
                                                            
                       STEVE
I did it mostly to impress this
girl back in college,and I was
stupid enough to think that by
being self-employed,she would go
out with me.
                                                            
                       JENNA
Really? Well,self-employment IS
impressive.But what's with that
girl? Sounds like you went through
all that trouble for nothing.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Yeah.I've known this girl ever
since before college.I asked her
out when we were in college and
she of course said no and wound up
with my roommate Pete.So like the
genius I am,I thought I could win
her back with my own comic book
store.
                                                            

18.

                       JENNA
Yeah,that's weird.
                                                            
                       STEVE
In a good way right?
                                                            
                       JENNA
Of course.
                                                            
The waiter comes back and serves her the small dish of food
and gives her some tea.Steve smiles at her while she' eating
her food.Its obvious her likes her,shes just so bouncy.
                                                            
                       JENNA
So,what are we doing after this?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Well,I thought I would head on
back to my house and dye my hair
black.
                                                            
                       JENNA
      (gets excited)
Ooh! Can I do it?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Um... well ok if you want to.
                                                            
                       JENNA
Great!
                                                            
 
INT. STEVE'S APARTMENT-BATHROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Steve and Jenna are in the bathroom. Steve holdds up the
hair dye.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Here's the dye.
                                                            
                       JENNA
Cool.
                                                            
She flops the toilet seat down
                                                            
                       JENNA
Sit.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Oh I see how it is. A bossy woman
                                                            
                       JENNA
Damn skippy.
                                                            

19.

Steve takes a seat. Jenna pulls the dye out and starts to
put it on his head.
                                                            
 
INT. STEVE'S APARTMENT-BEDROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
They're sitting on his bed watching TV. He's got black hair
dye on and a plastic bag on his head. She slowly rests her
head on his shoulder and sighs. He smiles.
                                                            
 
INT. STEVE'S APARTMENT-BATHROOM - NIGHT
                                                            
Steve finishes washing out the dye from his hair. His hair
is now black.
                                                            
                       STEVE
How do I look?
                                                            
                       JENNA
Sexy as hell.
                                                            
She grabs him by the collar, pulls him forcefully into the
bathroom and starts making out with him.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Do you usually make out with guys
in the bathroom?
                                                            
                       JENNA
Shut up.
                                                            
They continue making out
                                                            
NEXT DAY
                                                            
 
INT. COMIC SHOP - DAY
                                                            
Not alot of people in the store Steve is on the computer
doing inventory and Pete walks in.
                                                            
                       PETE
Whats goin' on man?
                                                            
                       STEVE
      (looks up)
Oh hey dude nothing much.
                                                            
                       PETE
Are you and Jenna still an item?
                                                            

20.

                       STEVE
Yeah.
                                                            
                       PETE
That makes about 6 months right?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Yeah she's a really cool girl. I'm
thinking about proposing to her.
                                                            
                       PETE
Wow dude thats a huge step, are
you sure about this? You've only
known her for 6 months
                                                            
                       STEVE
Yeah I know but I really think
she's the one. I mean we have so
much in common. She even likes the
same comics.
                                                            
                       PETE
      (laughing)
Ok. Whatever makes you happy man,
I got your back.
                                                            
                       PETE
I guess I'll head on out, me and
Christina are going out to eat.
I'll catch ya later.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Alright see ya.
                                                            
Pete leaves.
                                                            
 
INT. PARK - NIGHT
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
How's life?
                                                            
                       STEVE
I've seen better days.
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
What do you mean?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Oh, It's Jenna.. She's been
cheating on me. Ever since I found
out, I can't stand looking at her.
                                                            

21.

                       CHRISTINA
I take it the marriage is off.
                                                            
                       STEVE
..I don't know..
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
So you're not even sure if the
wedding is off yet?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Well- mariage is suppose to be
that FOREVER kind of love...
right?
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
Well..I 've never been married but
I know what you mean. Yeah I guess
it is.
                                                            
                       STEVE
How can I honestly say that I love
her if I can't forgive her and
work things out... I mean.. Maybe
I'm the jerk.. you know.. How am I
suppose to be marriage material if
I can't forgive?
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
Well, you're trying right?
                                                            
                       STEVE
Yeah.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Sometimes I don't even go home, I
just sleep at the shop.
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
That sucks.
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
I don't know why you think YOU'RE
the one being a jerk. She's the
one who betrayed your trust. Maybe
SHE'S not marriage material,
because she was willing to screw
everything up before the wedding.
                                                            
                       STEVE
...Yeah...I.. I don't know what
I'm gonna do.
                                                            

22.

                       CHRISTINA
Sounds like she caused the problem
in the first place.
                                                            
                       STEVE
But she wants to work things out.
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
Sounds like you are too - but
trust is important you know.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Yeah you're right.
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
It's ultimately up to you, if
she's willing to rattle the
relationship before it really
takes off it's really shady of
her.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Maybe I'll give her a second
chance.
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
Why? It IS because of
her you're having to live in your
little shop.
                                                            
                       STEVE
I can't keep circling my wagons
forever. I have to do something.
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
You're good looking --
attractive. Why don't you go after
someone more worth your time?
                                                            
Steve looks at Christina as if SHE'S the girl worth his time
and she picks right up on the body language.
                                                            
                       STEVE
All the girls worth my time seem
to reject me, or they're never
avaliable.
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
Uh... I never knew you had so many
issues.
                                                            
There's intense body language. Steve gets a little closer to
her and she's responding VERY aroused.
                                                            

23.

                       STEVE
I just wish things were different.
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
Well.. I... sometimes... Girls get
a little mixed up.
                                                            
Steve pulls away right before they even begin to get close
enough to do more thinking about kissing. Steve understands
that he's being a little sudden. So that's
why he ultimately pulled away.
                                                            
                       STEVE
... Yeah.
                                                            
Shelly lets out a really long breath.
                                                            
                       CHRISTINA
Maybe you should give yourself
more time -- circle the wagons a
little longer. Wait... until
things aren't so confusing... wait
until the smoke clears before you
shoot out in all these unseen
directions.
                                                            
                       STEVE
Maybe I should call the engagement
off, but still give Jenna another
chance... maybe things will clear
up better that way.
                                                            


FADE OUT.


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From Larry White Date 7/23/2007 ****
its funny, i like it, but im very confused as to were this is going. do u know everything already, or are u just making it up as u go? but im interested in finishing this.

From Corinne Date 7/21/2007 **
The ending could use work. I don't really see any plot points to keep the reader interested. There is no conflict at all. It will be a great feature film if you put more work into it and develop the characters more. What if Steve goes out to dinner with Jenna and he really likes her, but Diana, the girl from the bar, could call him up and want to go out. I sense a great love triangle!!


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